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Monday, August 27, 2018
Your best sentence—due Sept 27
Type 150+ words about your best sentence—not including your thesis statement—in your classification essay.
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Postma 1 "Need a place to launch off and pull a 360 no scope on that unsuspecting noob to earn a victory royale and quite a bit of personal satisfaction?" That is my best sentence for multiple reasons. It displays confidence in my writing to be able to ask questions and talk to the audience in the second person all the while making the whole essay just a little more fun and interesting to read. Any Fortnite player knows about all the trick shots top-tier Fortnite streamers try to pull off. It also displays an understanding and knowledge of the type of slang my particular audience uses, such as "noob" and "360 no scope." Every Fortnite player (and, most likely, every gamer) knows what a noob is and what a 360 no scope is. In addition, this sentence is legendary due to the fact that it is preceded by other questions that have one answer: build. It creates a flow in my essay that helps the reader get the point that building in Fortnite (and having an essay outline) helps with anything one would want to do. In addition, the previous questions were short and this last question was significantly longer to provide humor and comedic relief to the audience. I find it hilarious and I am quite proud to call this sentence my own.
In my personal opinion, I think that the best sentences in my essay would be: “Gigantic, fanged felines known as lions are strong and courageous, while being highly territorial and selfish. Blood-sucking, parasitic organisms known as leeches are annoying and feckless, yet occasionally highly beneficial to their ecosystems. Tiny, tough rodents known as lemmings are minuscule and live in a harsh winter environment where they only move when they need to, but often demonstrate a critical role in their own ways.” The reason why I feel like these three sentences are the best sentences in my essay would be the fact that they use great adjectives and other words to grab the reader's attention. I think that these are the best sentences because they all catch the reader's attention and make the first few sentences strong, so the reader wants to read on. The first three sentences not only do not start with a subject but they also help by leading into the next paragraphs, so the reader knows what they are going to be reading about throughout the entire essay. I feel that since these sentences have a strong sentence structure and word structure, these are the best sentences in my whole piece.
In my personal opinion, my best sentence would have to be: “They lollygag the ball around the field, they lollygag in and out of the dugout and around the bases.” I think it provides comic relief to the readers and if they know it, comes from one of the greatest baseball movies of all time: “Bull Durham.” The term, lollygag, is different that what others may use for being lazy and sluggish, and I think it adds uniqueness and creativity to my essay. This sentence in particular is one of the best sentences I’ve written because it starts off my first paragraph for classifying and I think it’s a good one. It helps delay the name, Coquet, for a while so I can describe the group in a little more detail before giving it all away. This sentence also makes a connection to my essay to the “Bull Durham” movie. If people knew and understood the movie, they can make the connection: “Oh, her essay is about baseball or softball.”
Kellogg 7 I think that the best sentence from my essay is "A single person might mention how much homework they have to which the one-upper responds, “You think that’s bad? Try having…!” which will be followed by an excess of chores and homework that they possess, making it seem like they have too big of a life for anyone else to handle". I think that this sentence is the most favored by me because of the trueness in its statement. The sentence describes a person in a classroom setting who is so into their own personal life that they will try and outdo another person even if it’s over something completely and totally unnecessary. This person will one-up in a negative or positive manner, anything that will get them to beat their opponent. The tendency within this group of people is to make their own life seem harder than it truly is, thus upsetting another person by making them feel smaller and unimportant.
Flanigan 1 Up until this point in my Classification essay, I believe my best sentence is, " Incredibly erratic and impossible to trust, these 3 tools account for many of the injuries that presume while one uses a Swiss Army Knife." I am proud of this sentence because I believe it displays an advanced writing style. I believe it suggests the idea that I am a confident writer and am experienced enough to create a sentence that does not begin with the subject. I believe it is also refreshing for a reader to experience different sentence styles, and will overall make them more interested in the work I am creating. I also appreciate this sentence for its overall simplistic message. Though a differing sentence structure, the sentence still only contains one subject and in length is fairly short. I hope that as I continue to write I will be able to incorporate more sentences that I am genuinely proud of, as I believe it boosts my confidence as the writer and makes the experience more enjoyable for the reader!
Ackerman 2 “Waking up daily at or around 7:30 A.M. just to get to that first class period on time can be hectic and sometimes it may just pass your mind to brush your teeth or you might have had to grab that brackish pick-me-up coffee for the day, which results in coffee breath.” I believe is the best sentence in my essay thus far. I think this is my best sentence because it really creates an image for the reader if they’re not in high school and experiencing this time. I think the beginning of my essay is a good place for this sentence because it creates a background for the contents of the essay. I would say this is my best sentence because it then creates a relationship between the reader and the writer and makes the essay as a whole more relatable. I think readers enjoy reading essays that have relatable portions because the feel intrigued and they understand what the writer is thinking while writing.
In my personal opinion, I think that the best sentence in my classification essay would have to be: “Watermelon, Pears, Strawberries, and Pineapple differ in their texture, taste, size, color, and appearance… Jocks, preppy girls, shy people, and nerds differ in their choices of Friday night activities, their priorities on Tuesday nights, their weekend plans, and the clubs or sports they participate in.” This sentence is a very well thought out sentence and lays down the basis of what you will read in my essay. It lets people picture in their mind fruits and then talks about activities that one could do and it will make you wonder how fruits and activities will be connected. It states each of my classifications and it shows how each of them different in what they do. It catches the reader's attention and gives them an idea of what they will be reading about in my essay.
At this point in my classification essay, I believe that my best sentence is “The Geese are less athletic than their starting counterparts, but it does not drive them to bitterness; instead, these teammates are the most fanatic cheerleaders a team can have.” I believe that this is my best sentence because it uses fun word choice and exemplifies what the subject of the sentence truly is. The use of the semicolon to link the two independent clauses is a strong decision and builds the character of the sentence more which makes the overall idea more exciting. The sentence structure is different than most my others so it stands out and makes the overall feel of the paragraph better. The ideas that I was hoping to push to the reader on how a Goose should be characterized is shown with interesting descriptions that can be easily linked to personality traits of the athletes.
I believe the best sentence is my essay at this point is, “The contrasting responses to a single scenario will articulate the attitudes of the Entitled, the Enthusiastic, and the Egotistical further.” By using high-level vocabulary I prove my reliability as an author and create something more interesting than a sentence with common words. This sentence leads into the topic of the paragraph well and introduces what will be analyzed in each group. I feel as though the reason for classification, the main idea of the essay, is well displayed here. Each group’s responses will be described, and this sentence introduces why responses are an influential determinant in classifying the staff. Drawing reader’s in and keeping their attention has to be a top priority when composing an essay. This sentence provokes readers to discover the importance of what has been described and allows them to imagine outcomes before reading on. A lot of techniques and thought went into this one sentence, in order to create a strong sentence structure. It is used as a simple way to introduce ideas, draw the reader’s attention, and show my reliability as an author.
My favorite and best sentence in my essay so far is this, “It seems as if a practical work tool has been transformed into a behemoth of a vehicle, even challenging the enormity of a monster truck.” This sentence describes how a truck owner could take what was to be a standard work truck, and modify it to look like a monster truck. This sentence uses a different form than most in my essay. Description and interesting vocabulary are some of its best features. The sentence creatively and correctly uses words to compare a pickup truck to a monster truck. “A practical work tool”, is one phrase used to describe the average truck on the road. This phrase contrasts greatly to the next, “a behemoth of a vehicle”. This contrast emphasizes the difference modifications can make to a truck. The comparison of a pickup to a monster truck also helps display the effect lifting a truck, making it easier for the reader to see why these trucks are classified as Means. Means are the bigger, more aggressive looking trucks, so this sentence helps summarize this classification.
Ellingson 7 So far in my essay, this sentence is my favorite. In the context of this sentence, I am talking about something as sweet as tea being closely related to a teammate: “Smooth going down, easily settling, and so many different brands and flavors, tea accommodates anyone with a sweet tooth.” I am proud of this sentence because I think it is a good metaphor and describes tea well. It makes the reader think about something as simple as tea or any other sweet refreshment and compare it to themselves or someone on their team. Whether that is in a sport, a band group, in the workforce, or just in life. My sentence starts with three phrases that describe one simple word. I also like this sentence because it shows that I can write a good sentence without starting with a subject. It is a unique way to compose of a sentence and I think that is a good value to have.
In my humble opinion, my best sentence is "Hummingbirds commonly nestle in the confines of a rack, surrounded by a plethora of lifting equipment ranging from dumbbells to medicine balls (imagine a lead-filled basketball)". While this sentence may not be the most complex or elegantly arranged sentence, it strikes me as my favorite sentence because of how well it composes an image. Upon reading the statement, I can practically watch the short film created that this sentence creates in just a few words. The fondness I have for this particular sentence is because of more than just its imagery. The voice and tone of this sentence reminds me of a narrator for a nature documentary, which I really enjoy. The sentence feels alive, but more than that, it just feels natural. I spent quite a while deciding on the right adjectives and nouns to use to compose this sentence; I am very fond of the word plethora being used here. To me, using words like this that many people know, but very rarely implement into their writing, provides the sentence with a vacuum-like tone, almost as if it is asking to be read once or twice to fully extract every bit of imagery that is included.
In my classification essay, I have many exceptional sentences. The most exceptional one in my eyes is in my introduction paragraph. The sentence says, “Our home, our stomping ground, our everything—planet Earth—offers life to 7.6 billion people.” I think this is my best, because I used “The Art of Styling Sentences” to construct it. It is a sentence with an introductory set of appositives. There is dash after a series of nouns, all of which rename another noun in the sentence. The series, “Our home, our stomping ground, our everything” renames the noun “planet Earth.” I think it is cool that I used a different sentence structure than I normally do. It would be very boring to use the same simple sentence structure in every essay. I am glad I learned how to write other kinds of sentences that make my essay sound more intelligent. I think using different styles to compose sentences is very fun.
TeKrony 7 One of my best sentences in my classification essay is “Adding extra information is key; you want to show everyone—especially the teacher—all the work you have put into this project in order to receive the best grade possible.” One reason why I think this is one of my top sentences is because there is a lot of variation in it. This is from The Art of Styling Sentences. This one uses dashes to enhance the sentence and make it more dramatic. For that reason, I added “especially the teacher” in between the dashes to indicate that was the goal of that student, which was important to know. I have multiple sentences that I used from The Art of Styling Sentences, and I really think it helped my essay, and my writing grow. I also liked how I incorporated a semicolon. I never usually use dashes or semicolons, so because I used them both in one sentence, is why I chose this sentence to be my best one.
Kocer 7 In my classification essay, I had many sentences that I could have considered my best. The sentence I chose was “Often times, the Snacker will come prepared with their own bag full of food; and although plenty of delectable grub awaits the consumer, they will not share.” I chose that sentence for various reasons. One reason is that my sentence starts with an introductory phrase, which helps add flow to it and connect it to the sentence before it. A second reason I chose the sentence is because it is a compound-complex sentence, which adds difficulty to the sentence. Another reason is I use descriptive language such as delectable grub instead of food and use the word consumer instead of reusing the word Snacker. All these reasons help make my sentence flow and sound better. Overall, those reasons that make my sentence good help add to the quality of my essay and make me a better writer.
My best sentence in my classification essay has to be this one, “The only animals that frolic in that yard are venomous snakes, hairy spiders, and scary bats that hang in the attic getting in and out from the shattered attic vent.” This is my best sentence in my opinion because I am using great grammar and comma usage listing animals that are in these neighbors yards. Also, I am using adjectives to describe these animals that I cleverly chose to be evil. The adjectives I chose those adjectives to fit the animals that made them scary and dangerous to show how these animals relate to these scary and dangerous neighbors. I chose these animals to be evil because of the neighbors that I was classifying in that paragraph. I am hoping to create many many more sentences that are just this good and better to enhance my essay to the very next level.
Bickley Pd.5 The best sentence in my classification essay thus far states the following, “Punishment is their candy, so they are fueled and untouched by the inevitable consequences”. The context of this sentence is the attempt at describing the category of students fittingly named the Beasts. This is a compound sentence that depicts the reason behind these students’ behaviors and why they continue to act this way. In my opinion, this sentence helps the reader better understand who the Beasts are. I compare punishment to candy in the sense that it is sweet, but it can have negative side effects. However, in this case, the Beasts do not care what those consequences might be. Their inappropriate behavior is punished by the teachers, yet they find pleasure in being chastised. Also, this sentence uses the verbs “fueled” and “untouched”. I think these verbs are effective because they are some of the more uncommon verbs. Rarely do people use these verbs, so it enriches the effectiveness of them.
My favorite sentence that I have included within my essay is, “The most exemplary night starts with you getting ready in the most fashionable dress with excessive amounts of full-coverage foundation and sweet-smelling perfume; you are eager for your date’s arrival.” The reason why this sentence is my favorite that I have written so far is it uses a lot of adjectives to describe the most ideal night. In my first paragraph I wanted to put a picture into the reader's mind. This will allow my essay to be more relatable for the reader, knowing that a lot of girls have thought about this. I feel that this sentence, as long with others showcase this tactic I am using in my writing. I also like the use of the dash and the semicolon. This can be unique to see in writing at times and I feel like it adds interest in my writing. I hope to continue my writing in this way with sentences like this to add variety to my essay.
My best sentence, in my opinion, is, "Every seat filled with perspiring students, some looking like they got no sleep and other totally prepared for the significant exam that awaits." This sentence is placed at the very beginning of my essay. As the second sentence, its purpose is to grab attention and hook the reader. This is my best sentence because it creates an image that draws the reader into my topic and hopefully the rest of my essay. This sentence uses many adjective to describe the scenario for the reader and allow them to picture themselves in the moment. Italicizing "the" adds emphasis the the degree of the test and the impact it may or may not have on a student. I believe the sentences that follow this one continue to use imagery and adjectives to draw the reader and create an inquiry about the groups of people. I hope that this sentence and others like it add to my essay and bring out the best in it.
Reading through my essay, I don’t think any of the sentences I used really stand out from the rest; however, I picked the first sentence of my conclusion paragraph to be my best one. The sentence I picked is, “Summer goes by so quickly; it is important for high school students to spend the little time they have doing what they want.”. This sentence is very important to my essay because of how it connects to the reader. Everyone can relate to the feeling of summer ending when it feels like it just started. Another thought this sentence may provoke is what the reader does every summer, and how they spend it. This sentence could also encourage them to change how they spend all their free time and make them realize what they are really passionate about and what they really enjoy doing. Overall this sentence seems to be the best in my essay because of how it gets the reader involved and thinking about the topic.
Oren 1 I think that the best sentence in my classification essay would have to be: "Music will outlast us all; at the end of time there will be those who withered away with eternity and the timeless pieces left behind by those that, in life, donned the title musician." I think that this is my strongest sentence. I really like the sentence structure, and I think that this is my longest sentence. I am also proud that I used a semicolon, which I wouldn't normally use, and I believe that I used it correctly on top of that! I believe that this is a great sentence to have at the beginning of my essay. I think that this will set up the expectations for what writing is going to come throughout my essay. I think that I could possibly spice up my sentence by switching around the sentence structure in order to make it seem a bit more refined.
In my essay, I am classifying the different types of people at concerts. I categorize them into the trash, flashy, bashy, and bashful. The Trashy being the people that are constantly drunk or showing far to much PDA. The flashy being the die-hard fans. The people that do not really want to be there are the bashy. Then finally the bashful, the bashful really want to be there and love the music, but are too shy to sing and dance. In my opinion, the best sentence in my essay is, "All four groups of people bring something to the table, but it seems the trashy always bring the most, not always in the best way." This is my very first sentence in my paragraph focused on the trashy, it is my transition sentence. I think it is my best sentence because it has a little bit of humor in it, so it kind of lightens the mood, and it also is completely true. I think it is a good way to pull the reader in and feel like they can relate because they too have seen these types of people at concerts.
DeWitt 1 The best sentence in my essay so far is, "Trustworthy, selfless, encouraging—Ceiling fans have been fans since day one and they will stay fans until the very end." I believe this is my best sentence because it is one I normally wouldn't include in anything I would write. I stepped out of my comfort zone and decided to add a new final exam item to spruce up my essay. I am very proud of how this sentence turned out and the flow that this sentence brings between the sentence before it and the sentence after it. This essay has had me striving to make my essays better and the final exam items are helping me to do that. The final exam items are showing me different sentence styles that I can use to make my sentences sound less boring and more refined. Overall, this sentence style makes me feel smarter and encourages me to write essays with the best techniques and improvements that I can.
I believe that my best sentence so far is "Either way you slice it, may your week be an extraordinary week filled with many opportunities." This is actually the last sentence of my essay. I believe that this is my best sentence because it has a good catch to it. My entire essay is dealing with pizza and how it relates to the days of the week. I thought it was really clever to say "either way you slice it" since we are talking about pizza. I think this is a great way to end my story. I also like how I used the word extraordinary. It is a great descriptive word to use in essays. I would advise others to add descriptive words in their essay. It is a great way to enhance it and it is a great way to make your essay more appealing to the readers.
Christensen 1 So far, I think that one of the best sentences in my essay is "Diverse, happy, and beautiful — this ending will leave you beaming and filled with joy." One of the reasons that I think that this is one of my best sentences so far is because it is very descriptive. This sentence gives the readers a chance to really visualize what a Sunny ending is. It also helps the reader have a clear picture in their head. Another reason that I think this sentence is the best is that it shows that I have the ability to use different types of sentences in my writing. Using more complicated types of sentences shows the readers that I am knowledgeable about the subject. This also shows that I am serious about my writing and it will help the readers to take my essay seriously. Overall, I believe that the sentence is my best sentence because it really shows that I am capable of writing in different ways and that I can really get the message and visualizations out to my audience.
Knutson 2 Out of all the sentences that I have written so far, there is one that stuck out to me and which I feel is my best sentence. The sentence entails, “Dawdlers are like little ducklings waddling around taking their time to cross the daring road”. In the simplest form, the Dawdlers can be defined by the word procrastination. Within this sentence, I am trying to explain the mindset of the Dawdler people. They realize that it could be dangerous if they procrastinated. But they still mosey around and take their time. The Dawdlers relate to ducks in which both of their actions can cause harm to themselves. Using the simile in this sentence helps to add more detail to the paragraph describing the Dawdler people. Although it may look like a simple smile, it makes a big difference. It helps to describe the Dawdler people more by giving the reader a different way to look at it. But overall it shows how the Dawdlers like to wait till the last possible minute to get their homework done even though it can end up hurting themselves. Just like the little ducklings like to wait till the last possible minute, when it seems most dangerous, to cross the dangerous road.
Popp 1 So far, I believe that the best sentence in my essay is "These intelligent and instinctual four-legged helpers can help a variety of those in need, from the blind to the deaf, the diabetic to the anxious, from those with PTSD to those who even struggle to cope with themselves." This line highlight the importance and diversity of service dogs from many different backgrounds. Humans love the loyalty and obedience that dogs provide, and service dogs are the epitome of obedience and service. In my essay, I compared service dogs to periods, which share an importance and function. You must stop for periods and respect their authority, much like a service dog doing its job. Everyone knows what to do when they encounter a period, but not many people feel comfortable around a service dog. My essay will hopefully help readers with this problem. This is the main reason for writing my essay.
Geringer 1 People are just like cupcakes; cupcakes may look sweet and tasty on the outside, but they could be dry and burnt on the inside. I believe that is my best sentence because you can tell by that sentence what my entire essay will be about. From one small sentence, you can learn so much. That’s the beauty of sentences. Just one simple sentence can open up your brain and make you realize so many things you didn’t know or realize before. Some of the most important documents in the world are made up of single sentences that don’t make any sense on their own, but together they make up our country. Even though the sentence I chose can stand on its own, there are many other sentences in my essay that wouldn’t make any sense on their own. Some sentences can tell a whole story, but others need other sentences to lean on.
Bunker 1 The best sentence I have written in my classification essay up to this point states, "The Curveball is the kid who smiles and gives their parents the sincerest hugs and kisses before they leave—but as soon as the parents step out the door, an invisible switch is flipped." This displays that I can write compound-complex sentences. I believe that this sentence demonstrates that I am a confident writer and know how to create other sentences besides simple. I think that this is sentence creates a vivid image of the kind of child I am trying to explain. I ended this sentence with a little bit of a cliffhanger. Creating a sentence with a cliffhanger at the end makes the reader excited to read further and become more engaged in my essay. Also, adding a dash to this sentence breaks it up and helps the sentence flow smoothly as you read it.
Olivier 1 Currently, my best sentence is, "Whether you are out on Lake Poinsett in South Dakota, or on the vast Lake Erie, you will need to know what type of fishing buddies to bring and how to classify them." This is my favorite sentence for many reasons, I enjoy including examples into my writing. For example, I added Lake Poinsett and Lake Erie as fishing lakes. I also like this sentence because it opens up my essay and gives my writing a purpose. Before this sentence, there was no purpose and I was writing with no guideline. My best sentence leads my writing into the classifications of all the types of fishermen. I describe their fishing styles, their mood, and why they are in the group that they are in. I am very proud of this sentence because I didn't use any guidelines and it shows the reader the main reason that I am writing my essay.
I would have to say that my best sentence in my essay so far is, “Fast, aggressive, and courageous -- these adjectives describe Lions, who are known as the “kings” of the roadway”. In my writing i tend to not be very good at mixing up my sentence structure. After a month in this class though it is getting better progressively. I am actually learning and understanding different types of sentences and their structure between term tuesdays and just Mr. C teaching. This sentence that I chose as my best I just added into my essay after the most recent term tuesday. The sentence has an introductory set of appositives to start off the sentence. I liked this because it switches the normal sentence structure around and really grabs the reader's attention right off the bat. It throw three descriptive adjectives for your subject, right at you. It grabs your attention way better than your normal noun verb repetitive structure. I really hope I can continue to add variety to my sentence structure to when I write.
At this point in my classification essay, I think that my best sentence happens to be my very first sentence. It states “would you like a cup of coffee?” I know that this sentence is very simple and that it does not have very many fancy words or big comparisons but without this sentence, my essay would not be where it is at right now. This sentence sets up what the entire rest of my essay will be about: Coffee. I could without-a-doubt find more complex sentences in my essay but I don’t think they would be considered the best because no amount of fancy words or grammatical phrases could start my essay any better. I also like how I start my essay with this because it is a question. Personally, I think starting a paper with a question is a great way to go about starting an essay because it pushes the reader to want to read more and gets them eager about reading.
“You have the players who wear their socks to their knees, socks barely above their shin guards, untucked jerseys and tucked jerseys, pre-wrap or no pre-wrap, sock cleats or normal cleats, wrists taped or no tape at all, you get the point.” I truly believe that this is my best sentence at the point I am at with writing my essay. It is my best sentence based on the fact that it creates an image and is very descriptive. I think that anyone who reads it, whether they know soccer or not, can visually imagine some of it, if not all. Having a sentence that can do that is very powerful because it relates the essay to people and things and really connects the reader to the passage. I think the usage of all the commas and all the different descriptive words really bring the reader in but also creates a strong thought and a strong image.
The best sentence that I wrote in my essay is: “If the innovative, creative minds that are interconnected online did not exist, then the dark circles and sleep deprivation would not either.” This sentence includes a lot of imagery and humor for the audience to read. I think that it keeps the audience members enticed and interested to continue reading onward. This sentence is taken from the third paragraph in my essay. Since my essay is classifying different types of personalities with social media, it is comparing funny people with Twitter. At the beginning of my paragraph, I mention that Vine used to be the app that includes memes and hilarious six-second videos; however, the company deleted the app. Now, Twitter is the replacement and I wanted to include how social media can affect an individual. Therefore, I included a couple of side effects in a sentence, and I think that it is one of the most creative sentences throughout my essay.
Thompson 2 I believe that one of my best sentences is one that happens in my introduction. This sentence is "Only the players know the feelings of adrenaline and excitement and nervousness that happen during the warmups before a game. Even the fans watching the game do not see the shoving, elbowing--and sometimes pinching--that happens while sprinting to get to the ball." These sentences are the best because it relates to most people as they are competing and how they feel before a game, match, or event. People know the excitement of going into a championship game. In the second sentence, the dashes add and give emphasis to how physical playing soccer can be. The dashes also add a different pace while reading, so people are not just reading words but have characters and spaces in between. After this sentence I started my thesis, so I think that it gives a good preparation into the thesis and has foreshadowing for the attitudes of the classification types.
My personal favorite sentence in my essay would have to be, "In a world where seemingly everyone has built an online resume, showing off their hobbies, interests, and relationships, it is very easy to choose to look someone up without them knowing and peek into the very essence of their being rather than trying to get all of the same results through a taxing and only sometimes rewarding personal relationship." I think that this is my best sentence because it is the most complex of all of the sentences in my paper; however, it is not the complexity alone that makes it superior. Anyone can write a long sentence but to be able to make it cohesive and pertinent to the topic at hand can be a challenge in itself. I like how I used the term, "peek into the very essence of their being" because it makes the act of looking up someone on social media feel different than what people normally think of when they are the ones doing it. I think the sentence reveals a very real and common action but it demonstrates the act from a new and hopefully different perspective.
Reinschmidt 2 Do you often find yourself wishing that the “cool dad” was your dad, or that stud of an athlete is your brother, or the smartest girl in the class was your sister? I believe that this is my best sentence thus far in my classification essay. I think that it is a good start to my essay as it compares and classifies how this world is. We are constantly looking for the next best thing in order to replace or outdo what we already have. I think it helps us to visualize what we think and come to grasp that we all do this. We are all guilty of doing this at some point in our lives whether it is with our family, friends, or the newest gadget on the market; that is why I put it in my essay. It makes it relatable to everyone and is a strong start to my sentence that catches the reader’s attention and makes them think. As my essay goes on I hope that I can outdo this sentence and have many more sentences that are more descriptive, visual, and complex.
Kuehn 2 “Similar to a hermit crab in its’ shell, these are the neighbors that never leave their house.” I believe this is my best sentence for many reasons. First off this sentence really explains the comparison I am making for this person. The Hermit is like a hermit crab. It shows the relationship between the two. The Hermit person hides in their house, and the hermit crab hides in their shell. It also used a comma after a dependent clause that started the sentence. I like to start sentences with a dependent clause because I believe it adds flair. I use a dependent clause and an independent clause making it a complex sentence. In this situation, a complex sentence was a good choice, because it is around simple sentences in my essay. Overall I believe this is my best sentence because it explains my classification, and it is the right kind of sentence for the situation.
Huntimer 2 I believe my best sentence is: “ Delving further than the woodwinds, strings, brass, or the percussion, musicians create a recipe that bakes into the amazing orchestra that creates beautiful music to the concert goers”. I like the imagery it gives the reader. In that sentence, I imagine the different sections of instruments, the stage, the instruments, the performers, and the listeners. Also, I tried to use a unique way of comparing the individuals in the orchestra to cooking, to obtain more imagery. I also like how the sentence is worded and the different word choices I used. I could have said “the instruments” instead of listing the different sections, or not even include the cooking metaphor, however, I like the overall vibe of the sentence, and how it fits together. This sentence also sets up the thesis and relates to the theme of my essay about the types of people in the orchestra. I like writing sentences that have unique wording that makes it memorable and gives the overall essay a little dash of color.
“The repetitive nature, your inability to change anything, and the thought that you know the other driver is doing it on purpose as a gambit to annoy you, really makes them toxic.” Throughout my essay, this is my best-constructed sentence. In my opinion, it creates a really relatable imagine and something that a lot of people can agree with. The structure of the sentence flows well and I used good vocabulary words like “inability,” “toxic,” and “gambit.” These words allow for a better understanding of the sentence and add more style and technical application within. The way the sentence is structured with commas allowed me to add many ideas into the sentence. These ideas describe the situation very well and create a good image. Overall this sentence fits well in my essay because of its flow and word choice. Because of this, it is my best sentence so far.
My essay is about how taekwondo is similar to a recipe. All of the different parts of a typical taekwondo class are just like the steps to complete a recipe. My favorite sentence so far is, “[a]n instructor will easily be able to recognize a wrong move—for example, a side kick from a round kick—just as a grandma would know if the wrong spice was used in her signature pie.” I still have a lot to add to my essay, but I like how this sentence brings together a lot of aspects of my analogy. It mentions kicking and compares it to spices in a pie. This goes along with my analogy of each taekwondo move being like a different ingredient. I also like how this includes an appositive within a set of dashes. It brings emphasis to this particular sentence and makes it unique. Instructors and grandmas are also compared in this sentence, which is another comparison I make throughout my essay.
I believe that the best essay in my essay would have to be the sentence, "Almost as though a stick was thrown for a canine, the Dutiful Dogs will immediately run to wherever they left their drill charts, retrieve them, and run back to the director as soon as they possibly can." I chose this sentence because first of all, it is a compound-complex sentence, with "as though" acting as the subordination conjunction in the sentence. I also put the dependent clause before the independent clauses to change up my writing a little bit. I think that this is my favourite comparisons to animals in the entire essay as well. The sentence acts as a comparison for the Dogs and canines that most veteran band students will understand, but not someone new to the band. I have realised, however, that I need to add a little more variety to my essay in the forms of phrasing and wording. It will be something that I need to continue working on throughout the year.
"Regulars are the more avid fans of bowling; they find unending passion in the sport and hope to bowl for most of their lives." I believe this to be the best sentence in my classification essay. I believe this is my best because of the fact that I would consider myself a Regular under my system of classification and this is my true opinion of bowling. I have been bowling for over 5 years and I do really hope that I am able to bowl for the remainder of my life simply because I have that unending passion for the sport. Though I have not been bowling for my whole life, I have found immense enjoyment in it throughout the whole time that I have been doing it. I relate to the whole Regular classification within my system, but I relate mostly to the sentence that I pointed out to what I believe is the best because of my experience in the sport.
I think my best sentence I have in my classification essay thus far is “Whether you are taking a walk through a busy city or biking up and down a towering mountain, encountering the different types of car drivers will not be a rarity for you.” I think it is my best sentence because everyone who goes out of their house will see a car, whether it is driving or not. It links to the title since the classification is ramifying different types of drivers and you will see people driving every day. You will be affected by their actions when you are on the road or walking by the road, due to their personalities I explain in my essay. This sentence explains the frequency you will encounter drivers and where you will encounter them. It provides an area that is very common for most people to be and an area that less people are going to visit daily.
“To have a heightened awareness on the first date is vital for any girl; knowing who you are with is vital for any relationship.” I chose this sentence as my best sentence because I used The Art of Styling Sentences guide in this sentence to try to enhance my essay and add variety. I used two topics from the guide, the same word repeated in parallel structure and an infinitive phrase beginning. The word Vital is repeated at the beginning of the sentence and at the end; both times it is used as an adjective. I also chose to start this sentence with an infinitive phase to change the way that my sentence began to differentiate it from the rest of my sentences. In my opinion, this is my best sentence because it has variety, a decent amount of grammar and it clear and to the point. I plan to go back and add more sentences like this in my essay.
Law 2 In my classification essay, I am comparing and classifying friends as different kinds of shoes. As of now, I am talking about the four different styles of shoes and how they relate to the types of friendships we encounter in our lives. The four categories include boots, heels, sneakers, and slides. My favorite sentence comes from the first body paragraph talking about the types of friends that act like the Boots in our closet. The sentence says, “Not only does this wonder of the world make every winter outfit look all the merrier but are very practical by keeping your piggies warm and protected from the murky weather.” This is my favorite sentence thus far in my paragraph because I believe it illustrates a vivid picture in the reader's mind. Not to mention that this sentence also includes one of our vocabulary words which was in the requirements. I’d give myself a pat on the back but I am not entirely sure if I used it correctly. I hope when continuing writing and revising my essay that I will be able to create even better sentences than this one.
The best sentence in my essay is “Without the accelerator, no drive takes place; nothing can happen; nothing can be done.” I like this sentence because, in context, it is not talking about the accelerator of a car at all, but the backs on a football team. When I say there is no drive, it has two meanings, the first is that the car won’t drive without the accelerator. The second is a drive on the football field. Obviously, a drive being an offensive possession. In context, the sentence really just says that without the running backs, you will not have a successful offensive possession and you will not be a powerful team. I like this sentence because it has multiple independent clauses in just one sentence. This makes the sentence a compound sentence. I like the use of semicolons in the sentence which really builds the sentence up and makes it a strong sentence to start the paragraph with.
The best sentence in my essay would have to be, "This is a common misconception with gamers; gamers can come in all different shapes and sizes, a gamer could even be sitting next to you right now." I believe that this is my best sentence because it is both an argument against the misleading idea that gamers are fat, broke, and living with their mothers and it opens up the reader to a whole new perspective on gamers. This sentence shows how much I have grown in my ability to write a clear and cohesive sentence. Before taking this class I wouldn't have even thought about using a semicolon and now I am using them whenever I can. This sentence is also one of the few compound-complex sentences in my essay so I also feel accomplished about that fact. Overall I just hope that in the future I will be able to write more inspiring and eye-catching essays in the near future of college life.
Kirkeby 2 I believe that the best sentence in my classification essay is, "People of all nationalities are able to come together through the common interest of athletics". This sentence gives the reader a taste of what is to come. This one sentence shows that in the essay I will be addressing both athletics of some sort, as well as people from around the world. This sentence stands out as an important building block for my thesis statement. When the reader begins to read, this sentence will linger in the back of the mind, allowing the reader to have a better sense of what is being said. This is not a complex sentence, it is rather simple and to the point. Doing this, the reader is not overwhelmed but will soon build up to more complicated sentences.
Talcott 2 My best sentence that I have written so far is, “After practices concludes, he grouses about how terrible the coach is and the Strobe Light complains that he does not know what he is doing.” I think this is my best sentence because it is very descriptive and uses great wording. Also, this is a great sentence for me because I usually write short sentences that get right to the point. In this sentence, I start out with a dependent phrase describing when the Strobe Light complains. This sentence is also a compound-complex sentence, which is different for me because I usually only use simple sentences. Another thing I am not very good at is adding good wording. In this sentence I used the words concludes and grouses. Last year I would have used ends instead of concludes and complains instead of grouses. Within this first most of senior year, I have discovered that I am better at composing essays than last year.
My best sentence is "Every class has that kid," with "that" in italics. This sentence is my best because it is relatable and funny. My essay is about the different types of students in a classroom, and how these students study. In this sentence, I am talking about the try-hards of the class. The try-hards are the students that ask a bunch of questions and always go in on their own time and ask for help. As I say in my essay, "That" kid is often the student that reminds the teacher about the homework he or she forgot to collect. It's the student that is always several assignments ahead of everybody and spends most nights studying or doing homework. This is a good sentence because it grabs attention. It makes the readers want to know who it is you are going to talk about, and when they do, the readers should be able to relate.
I believe my most creatively efficient sentence in my classification essay right now is, "Sweet, easy, and everyone's delight, she is just like a Hershey's Bar." In the midst of copious details, alliterations, metaphors, and long sentences. This sentence breaks up the long-winded flow with something so simple. The words compliment each other to keep the flow of reading, but also give diversity to the composition. While keeping to the descriptions, this sentence gives the reader the main point of the paragraph in a straightforward manner. The imagery and general assumption connects the reader and let's put the comparison into perspective. At the same time, the sentence itself is reflecting what is being described: "sweet" and "easy". What I enjoy most about this sentence is that I didn't purposefully go back and insert this sentence it just flowed in my mind in the moment of writing, meaning there are most likely others like it that benefit the compositions flow to make it a more aesthetic read.
Sonju 2 I think that my best sentence is “Wonders—aptly named for the sparkle of wonder in their eyes when they enter a Starbucks—will stand and gawk at the menu with puzzled looks on their faces while the barista patiently waits for them to approach the register.” This sentence includes lots of imagery to give the reader a better picture of what a Wonder is truly like. Specifically, the word “gawk” creates a vivid image in my mind and my goal with this sentence is to create that same image for my readers. Instead of choosing a simpler word like “look” or “stare”, I chose a less commonly used word. Since this essay is about classifying things in a way that is logical to me, I want to make it seem logical to everyone; by adding many descriptive words in a sentence, it paints a better picture. This sentence also demonstrates my understanding of one of the final exam terms—dashes.
As I read through my classification essay, the best sentence in my opinion was, “The unnoticed but appreciated accents of notes working to better the quality of their piece, and the sharps working with the other accidentals to harmonize in an unexplainable way.” I decided this was my best sentence not only because of the complexity of it, but the use of descriptive and captivating word choice. When I wrote ‘unnoticed but appreciated accents’ it gave recognition to something that most people that are not musically inclined would notice. If we were to stop using accents in choral pieces the music would become redundant and boring without the dynamics and shapings of phrases. As I went on to recognize ‘the sharps working with other accidentals to harmonize in an unexplainable way’, this brought a light on another easily missed aspect of choral art. In the absence of the accidentals, there is no way someone wouldn’t notice. The piece would sound incomplete and there would be a heavy tone of dissonance. Without accidentals, the piece would go from a pleasant and well put together sound to a barnyard explosion of pure chaos. I believe that was my best sentence because of the descriptiveness and the complexity of the wording.
Johnson 7 I do not have an exact sentence that I can pick out as my best one because I haven’t finished my essay yet. However, I do believe I could maybe decide on one that I think is fairly good in my mind. The best sentence in my mind would be “Smoochers know that no matter how big or small, whatever they are asking for, they are always going to get what they want even if it takes going to extreme lengths of temper tantrums and yelling at mom or dad”, I think this is my best sentence because it is a very complex sentence with many different writing properties all in the one. I think that it is a compound-complex sentence which makes it very interesting. Also, the part in the middle where my two commas are which come after small and before they show that those few words could be taken out if I wanted to but they also add extra clarification which is great for my essay and helps enhance it. I feel, however, that as I progress further into my essay I will write even better sentences with even more writing styles involved in them.
Scherb 5 I believe my best sentence is “Knowing when an Elephant is in the room is by far the simplest to identify, just listen for a loud bang, screech, or the sound of heavy feet running around”. I think this is my best sentence because it starts with a participle. The sentence then continues to be very descriptive allowing the reader to truly picture the way an elephant acts in the classroom. It describes sounds the child themselves can make with their mouth or with their actions. The use of screech is auditory imagery and allows the reader to hear the image. All of the descriptive words add to the idea of the Elephant children that most audiences can relate to or understand. The sentence also from explaining that you can easily identify these children and then tells the reader how creating an all-encompassing statement. All the parts of this sentence work together to not only tie itself together but tie my essay together.
Harvison 5 "Crooks, cons, swindler, and other far worse vulgar names have all been given to carnival workers." This is, in my opinion, the best sentence in my essay not including the thesis. I credit my success to the online thesaurus. Instead of using common words that are overused and banal, I looked up synonyms that sounded unique and showed creativity. I wanted to compare a player to a carnival worker and needed to show how wicked and sly that they were, that's why I believe swindler and con was a good word choice, as well as expanding my belief of trickery by saying "other far worse vulgar names". I plan to use this method for the rest of my essay. In my opinion, the thesis is one of the most underused tools that we have at our disposal. Especially an online one, you just type in your word and it will give you dozens of other options that can spice up the writing.
My favorite sentence in my essay is not my favorite because it is clever. I chose this sentence because it was important to my mother and I. The sentence states, “Doctors may be the brains of operations, but, the Mitochondria do all the work that fulfills the patient's rehabilitation; thus, making the Mitochondria as closely powerful as the Nucleus”. I chose this sentence because my mother is an ER Nurse at Sanford. My mother never gets recognized as important just because she is a nurse and not a doctor. They are seen as this because they are not diagnosing and creating a plan of care. Creating this sentence and pairing the Nurses to Mitochondria shows that nurses are indeed just as important because they do all the work when it comes to the patients. I aspire to be a Nurse Practitioner. I would want my daily hard work to be recognized and not be put down. Tonya (my mother) was very appreciative that they were paired to Mitochondria because she was finally seen as important.
Laabs 5 I think that my best sentence for my classification Essay is, “If you ever come across a Noisemaker you need to do one of two things: turn your volume down or mute them.” It really conveys the theme of comparing gamers to animals. You usually talk about coming across something like an animal and having to respond to the situation a certain way. If you ever come across a brown bear you are supposed to either climb a tree or go in the fetal position and play dead. You come across something that is dangerous and you need to think through your actions. If you mess up with the bear you die, the Noisemaker; you go deaf. It really makes the reader feel like the Noisemaker is an animal that you have to have caution around. When dealing with animals you must use extreme caution because they aren't considered humans.
My favorite sentence in my essay thus far is, “Finesse, knowledge, and persistence — these are the traits of a winning tennis player.” By using an introductory set of appositives, the sentence has more spice and direction. I feel the sentence is very direct and puts emphasis on the three traits that will assure a victorious player. The uncommon structure of this sentence is refreshing when surrounded by typical sentences. By switching up the rhythm of the sentences it energizes the essay by rearranging the structure. I also use powerful, vivid words that will paint a picture in the mind of a reader. The point I am trying to make with this sentence is based on the first three adjectives. By placing them first it focuses on that point that I am trying to prove. I also include the word “winning”. The inclusion of that adjective puts direct purpose in the hands of the three adjectives and completes the sentence.
McKellep 5 While writing my classification essay, I have written several different types and forms of sentences. I think my favorite thus far is, “A sleek, ebony bottle of misty excellence awaits the use for the proper completion of an artist’s makeup look. Setting Spray congeals the canvas you just created into place for the remainder of the day. While engulfing the face with the fragrant haze, closing your eyes is imperative to ensure that all components of the look are touched.” The reason I like this part of my paragraph so much is that I really put a lot of effort into making sure I used more bold words then I normally do. I think that it is really out of my comfort zone which in the end will help me to become a better writer. It also includes different types of sentences from simple to complex which makes it more interesting to read. I will use these as precedents to the rest of my essay and continue to try and go out of my comfort zone
One of my favorite sentences in my essay, aside from my thesis is, “The Happy will always be the server that is bouncing around giving everyone refills on drinks, making sure the food is okay, or just starting up a conversation with a customer”. The reason I enjoy this sentence so much is because it’s organized, well worded and easy to read. I personally don’t enjoy reading sentences that use such large vocabulary that you can’t understand it without a dictionary, or short abrupt sentences that seem to start and stop in the blink of an eye. I also enjoy sentences with lists very much because they appear more organized and are easier to read. I would prefer to read a book full of sentences like this, instead of a book of fragments or complex run on sentences. These sentences are short yet sweet, easy to read and understand, and most importantly a grammatically correct sentence.
In my opinion, the best sentence in my classification essay is “But nobody is perfect, and even the most Poised person in the world has their flaws”. I think this sentence is a great example of a lesson that we can all learn. Although it can be quite banal, the phrase “Nobody’s Perfect” is actually really true. I think it can be easy to get caught up in our mistakes and blame ourselves for being imperfect. But as a child, we have often heard that nobody is perfect. In my essay, I explain how even the most Poised person in the world, someone who keeps their composure under the most difficult circumstance, is not perfect. They make just as many mistakes like everyone else. I compared a rose to being Poised because they have to deal with so much whether being celebrated or thrown into the trash from rejection. They always are sure that they will be the number one selling flower. Everyone has their flaws and nobody is perfect, but that is what makes us human.
I think that the best sentence that I have written in my classification essay is, “They see the pretty, clean set; the beautiful, big costumes; the polished, perfected singing; and the rehearsed, complex choreography.” I view this to be one of my best sentences because of how descriptive and specific it is. If you are in theater you can picture each one of these things. You have a specific memory tied to each. For me I have the memories of squeaky teeter-totters, transforming fairy godmothers, choruses singing as they walk on stage, and Jarin trying her best to teach actors how to dance. If you aren’t in theater this sentence still gives you a good idea of what goes on. You can start to make up shows in your head or imagine shows that you have seen. Whoever you are and whatever you do this sentence can make you imagine which it is why it is one of my best and favorite sentences.
Frantzen 5 In my opinion, all of my sentences in my classification essay are amazing. But, one that sticks out the most and makes my essay very special is one where I use the infamous semicolon. The sentence that I have chosen as the best states, "Watching their child is only one part of the equation; keeping them entertained is the other." This sentence may impact and make my essay 115% better. Sometimes people, including me, struggle with the use of the same word at the beginning of the sentence. I overuse the names of people, they and if at the beginning of sentences but this one is different. By using the semicolon I am able to start my sentence off different than all the others. Also, the semicolon allows me to change the pace and mood of the essay. When I write essays sometimes my sentences have the same rhythm and flow which makes my essay very boring. With the sentence, I switched up the essay and it makes my essay better. Thanks to the semicolon, this is the best sentence in my essay.
Wright 5 “The third genre on the Walmart radio is that of sweet classical music: the oldies but goodies. These type of customers are better known as the pharmacists best friend but also self-checkouts worst enemy.” I think that so far these two sentences together are my most favorite and also best lines. I feel they show my knowledge on the topic and also have very good literary uses like colons. The structure for the second sentence came from The Art of Styling Sentences. It helped me to use parallels in the sentence to stress what I was trying to say to the reader. I also feel these lines provide a light-hearted feel to the essay and are very relatable to the reader. They provide a good image to show exactly the type of customer I am classifying. Together these sentences have a good overall flow and help set the mood I am trying to convey to the reader, thus making them my best sentences.
My favorite sentence in my essay so far is “When a Rocky Road encounters a section to challenging to play, they tend to retreat to a sanctuary of music making, where practicing becomes their life until mastery of the passage is achieved.” I like this sentence so much because I think it paints a nice picture of something they would do. It puts you in a place where you imagine a person taking their instruments and hiding away just practicing again and again until they play it beautifully. I think that painting a picture is important and this sentence does that very well. I feel like this sentence is a sentence that flows very well with the things around it. It also helps to build what is going on in the essay overall. Part of the reason this paints a good picture is that it uses a lot of descriptive words to send a message. I think I need more sentences like this in my essay.
My favorite sentence in my essay so far is, “Punishments are not usually effective; they don’t care if they get in trouble”. This is my favorite sentence because it combines two separate sentences with a semicolon. This sentence makes my essay more interesting to read. I also think it adds emphasis to “they don’t care if they get in trouble”. So far, very few of my sentences are combined with a semicolon. Most of my sentences are very similar to each other. Therefore, this sentence is unique compared to my other sentences. It flows smoothly in the paragraph, yet it stands out in style. I plan on adding more sentences like this style in my essay. I also plan on making every sentence more unique, and not so similar to each other. My favorite sentence will probably change once I’m done editing my essay. But for now, this is my favorite sentence in my essay.
"While taking your seat, an overdressed fan grabs your attention: painted purple and yellow, horns coming out of his head, fully dressed in Vikings attire." This sentence is probably the best in my essay because of the good image it would hopefully bring to the reader's mind. I feel like I put a good description of a fan in the sentence. Also, I use different components to the sentence that I usually do not. I used a colon to put emphasis on the describing words and phrases, before this essay I do not believe I have correctly used a colon before. I also like that I brought a place to the sentence, putting the reader in a position to put themselves in the story. While I enjoy the descriptive words, the colon puts the sentence together nicely and makes this my best sentence.
"While taking your seat, an overdressed fan grabs your attention: painted purple and yellow, horns coming out of his head, fully dressed in Vikings attire." This sentence is probably the best in my essay because of the good image it would hopefully bring to the reader's mind. I feel like I put a good description of a fan in the sentence. Also, I use different components to the sentence that I usually do not. I used a colon to put emphasis on the describing words and phrases, before this essay I do not believe I have correctly used a colon before. I also like that I brought a place to the sentence, putting the reader in a position to put themselves in the story. While I enjoy the descriptive words, the colon puts the sentence together nicely and makes this my best sentence.
Campbell 5 In writing my classification essay I have written many good sentences with different forms and complexities. In this essay is allowed to think not only creatively but maturely in getting ready for college. My sentence is, "I thought long and hard into this and one of the main reasons I can think of is I think that people cheat, is because our school values grades more than students value learning". This is my best sentence or at least in my top. I think it's my best because that sentence makes the reader think for a bit. I totally value that sentence because it's my honest opinion on why many if not certain people cheat in school. This leads to so many points to go off of. This allows me to establish my opinion in my own way that could maybe persuade readers to think in some other point of view. What I mean by this sentence is that our school is too caught up in grades rather than really getting to the full capability of mastering everyone learning abilities.
My best sentence is all about imagery. “They may be the friend that drags you on the dance floor, so far out of your comfort zone you feel like she is asking you to jump off a cliff, or pushing you to ask the cute girl out you have been staring at all night.” Imagery is an important part of an essay. Telling a story helps move the essay along. My sentence helps give a face to the type of person that I am talking about. If you can not pick out a person that would fit the situation, it will help you better understand the type of person I am talking about. Pictures make the essay more fun. Not many people like to sit and read plain research papers. It is more fun to make the essay come alive will imagery. A fun essay means the teacher will enjoy reading it more and you will get a better grade.
With my essay thus far, the best sentence I have is, “ Traveling to NYC for the first time creates such a rush of emotions: excited, emotional, and overwhelmed.” I believe this is my favorite sentence because it uses a creative grammar choice. The colon is quite powerful and is a good way to put an independent and dependent clause together. It also is a pretty good introduction sentence to the paragraph. I want to draw in an audience towards my essay and have them, hopefully, enjoy reading it. Having this sentence in my essay can bring about explanations to describe NYC. Inserting the dependent clause at the end gives more of a spark to my sentence. This also gives some suspense and urges readers to continue reading to see why I put in colon. I could have made two sentences out of this complex sentence. Choosing to put it into one sentence shows intelligence and a unique style toward my essay.
Brummels 5 The sentence I chose from my essay is, “Attitudes change when they are with different people; home life is where they are truly themselves.” This sentence is at the beginning of my essay, in my introductory paragraph chose this sentence because it is very true, for everyone. Whether we are out with our friends, at school, out with family or at home, you act differently at each place. When you are out with a good group of friends, you are outgoing and loud. Although, when you are at home, you can be a little bit more yourself. At school, you are taught to be poised and polite. Same thing when you are out with your family, polite and respectful is how you should act. I think this is fitting for my classification essay because it shows the different sides of people. I hope that this sentence adds to my essay.
My best sentence, in my opinion is, “Tall, big, muscular kids—genetic lottery winners—will push around the shorter, lighter (or fatter) ones and then the bullies will be cruel and mean to the shy ones.” This sentence is placed in the beginning paragraph of my essay. I feel that this sentence is a very good description of the kids I am trying to describe. It also shows the point I am trying to get across about the size of the kids. I feel in this sentence I used great imagery and people will really be able to picture what they look like. Not only did I use descriptive words to describe the physical appearance of the children. I used descriptive words to also describe their different personalities. I believe that this sentence uses great imagery and ties my first paragraph together when doing this. I hope that others get the same idea from this sentence as I was trying to get across when writing it.
I think the best sentence in my essay so far is, “A simple way to identify a Fly cousin is by their disturbing and somewhat frightening laugh; a laugh that represents a house fly’s annoying and obnoxious continuous buzzing.” I believe this sentence is the best one in my essay because it uses interesting word choice to paint a picture in the reader’s head. I feel that this sentence has strong imagery because of the word choice. This draws the reader in because it makes it a more interesting essay for them to read. The use of a semicolon also makes the sentence flow better because it is a good way to link the two independent clauses together. I also think this sentence is a good metaphor between the laugh of one of your cousins and the buzzing sound of a house fly because it relates the two things together well.
The best sentence in my classification essay is “While being a child you learn from the people you spend your daily lives with which is your parents for most kids.” This sentence means that kids are somewhat mirrors. They will copy and do anything the parent says because that is what their instinct is in life. This sentence I feel is the best sentence in my essay because it explains a very good life lesson. Always watch what you are doing and saying at all times because you never know who you may be influencing. Always be extra careful around children because they are like little puppies, puppies learn tricks a lot easier than when they are full grown. In the children’s eyes everything you do and say they think it is okay to do. I know being a parent is hard enough but watching what you say and do doesn’t cost anything.
Olthoff: In writing this essay, I feel that I have written many good sentences with various levels of complexities. This essay has allowed me to think creatively and free in order to give the best classification of my topic. My best sentence is, “Staying away from the Talkers will allow for a much more enjoyable experience at the games because it will allow you to fully experience the roller coaster of emotions that come with athletics.” I believe that this is the best sentence in my essay because I feel that this is my most solid sentence structurally. I think that with this sentence, I do a very good job of attempting to convince the reader to avoid the Talkers of the student section by explaining how much more enjoyable their experience at games would be. I also think that this sentence does a good job of discouraging people from being talkers at games and encouraging them to be Cheerers.
Spencer 7 Each piece of music is carefully selected and delicately put into place as if it were a puzzle piece. This sentence I believe is the best just because of how it describes the process and the job of the music writer. It is true how each piece of music is carefully selected because if it was not the story of the show could not be told. If the next piece of music did not fit perfectly to the first, like a puzzle piece would, the audience would know that there was a gap in the music. I love how the sentence just “works” together, at least it seems that way to me. The real job of the music writer is hard because they also have to create an image in your mind using music, so just like a puzzle, it creates a picture in which all the pieces fit together.
Outland 7 As of now, I believe my best sentence is, “They charted their course decades ago and believe they have reached the zenith of their potential.” This sentence is contained in the third paragraph of my classification essay, in which I discuss the “Senior Sailor” category of musician. Briefly, for your understanding, a Senior Sailor is an old musician who has, in a way, plateaued. I think my sentence encompasses almost all the different aspects of a Senior Sailor, while still managing to be relatively short in length. It’s a good example of a sentence that ‘says a lot without saying much,’ as the saying goes. First, it clarifies their extreme age with the emphasis on the word “decades;” their musical career has spanned a great length of time. Second, I use the word “zenith” to describe their abilities and “potential.” Finally, I carefully chose the word “believe” to describe how they feel about themselves and their progress. Even if they could further their skills and experience, they either “believe” that it is not possible, or they simply do not want to keep striving as they used to.
My best sentence so far has been "Teenagers all go through the same stuff in high school, yet we all have different experiences." This is in my beginning paragraph of my essay. This sentence could not have more truth to it, and that is why I love it so much. Teens may live in the same tow, go to the same school, have the same curriculum, or even live in the same family, but they all still have different experiences in high school. This is because each individual interprets their surroundings, feelings, and thoughts differently. It also depends on what social groups they fall into, and their personality traits. Some teens will say high school was the best days of their lives, while others would the exact opposite. I believe that this sentence can be understood very well by everyone who is currently in high school, or has graduated. This statement is what some kids would love to make to their parents when they say high school for them was a breeze and that they miss those days, where you don't like high school at all and can't wait to be done.
"Through continuous hours of pouring rain and low temperatures, to the point where the lifeguards are in agony freezing in their swimsuits, the dedicated remain unscathed."(Nuss 2) This sentence is my best so far because it displays my intelligence and of course does not have the use of expletives. It has a ton of prep. phrases along with proper used of commas. Instead of creating a long run-on sentence, I chop it up nicely using comma so the reader can breath and understand these ideas or situations go hand in had with one another. If I were to create a shorter less creative sentence without any adjectives, the reader would feel like they were reading a boring report. I want them to be persuaded into believing in my categories so the more I indulge the reader the less detached they will feel. Leaving out detail result in weak supporting arguments/explanations. This sentences put into perspective how crazy cold it is while not having to create multiple sentence just to deliver one idea.
In the making of my essay, I believe my best sentence thus far is, "The whimsically impetuous mammals work together by communicating to direct, lead, and protect each other." This sentence is describing dolphins is my favorite sentence because it uses two very descriptive and visual adjectives that are very fitting for a dolphin's behavior and how it lives in its environment. I used three things that dolphins do such as, directing, leading, and protecting other dolphins to describe a volleyball team. A volleyball team. The strength of the three words that I used, gives the sentence a strong meaning but it also vague enough so that different readers can interpret how the dolphins or volleyball team go about these three words. Even though vagueness in an essay is not exactly favored, I think including it in sentences every now and then adds some fun to the reading. I like to see how other readers interpret things instead of reading something that is straightforward and to the point.
In my own, personal opinion I think that the best sentence I have written in my classification essay so far is, “Farms can be very frenetic with all of the animals trotting around and yowling around the clock.” I think this is my best sentence because it shows a major growth in my vocabulary. I used somewhat advanced vocabulary such as frenetic, trotting, and yowling. These two words build the credibility of my writing because I wrote them in the right way. I could have used crazy instead of frenetic, or running for trotting, but instead, I used better words to make my essay the finest it can be. I also think this sentence shows a higher level of writing. I think it shows a higher level in the fact that I used better vocabulary. A middle-schooler would not be expected to write sentences with that type of vocabulary. This is why I think this sentence is my best sentence. I know later on in my essay, and later on in my life, I will be writing extravagant sentences because of this class.
I believe that my best sentence is "They will try their best to make a typhoon when they only have a pea to throw." I have always read from fictional authors and envied the way they can put incredible images in your head. J.K. Rowling and Orson Scott Card have been my role models growing up. Reading "Harry Potter" has always been my favorite series because I could relive all of the years that Harry lives through in the novel. A large part of that is due to imagery and creativeness of the author. I hope to be close to her level sometime where my sentences will consistently plant a detailed scene or description in my reader's head. I have always been interested in fiction but never tried to create my own. Of course, I scheme and create in my head during the day and night, but have yet to put it to pen and paper. I hope this class will help me create more sentences like the one I chose.
My favorite and best sentence from my essay would have to be: “These are the individuals that go above and beyond to make sure that you—along with anyone else within a one hundred yard radius—know they are the most amazing, spectacular, skilled, fantastic performer on the field.” This sentence is referring to the Cocky type of Drum Corp International (DCI) performers. My goal was to make this as clear as possible to readers who may not know about DCI or what it entails, although I do believe that most people can relate to this sentence on a general, everyday level. I employed the use of dashes to emphasize the level of intensity and cockiness that ensues from this type of person. Along with the dashes, I was able to add a list of adjectives that someone very Cocky might use to describe themselves when talking about their role in this sport.
Betanzo 1 After reading the rough draft of my classification essay, I would say that my best sentence would have to be: "People all across America and other countries tune in every year to watch the Academy Awards, or simply known as the Oscars, to see if their favorite actors, actresses, directors, films, etc. have won a small-dainty-golden statue for the category they were nominated from." This has to be my best sentence, other than my thesis statement because it introduces the metaphor that I will be using throughout the entire essay. In my essay, I have decided to classify and compare co-workers at Target to Oscar categories. The first sentence of my essay perfectly indicates that I will be using Oscar categories as my metaphor. I also used two hyphens in my sentence to help and group a trio of adjectives together before I use the noun “statue.” I am not used to writing with hyphens, so I did it to add more flare to the sentence.
My classification essay is far from being polished but, I think a well written sentences is "It becomes frustrating when you are frantically taking and making orders simultaneously for the endless line of vehicles in the drive thru and when you look over you see an indolent 5’ 7’’ blondie hunched over the counter with her clear brown eyes glued to her phone." I think my sentence needs some assistance with punctuation... Although the punctuation needs some work I think it is a well written sentence because it is very descriptive and I think you could picture the girl I was trying to describe in your head. I tried looking for more expressive and vivid words such as indolent which is a more expressive word for lazy. Another simple example is the word vehicle instead of car or endless instead of long. I think when you change simple words like that it emphasizes your writing and it makes the reader know that you put effort into your work.
Eichelberg 5 From what I have written so far, the best sentences in my classification essay are “Because makeup can be universally appreciated, many people apply it themselves with varying intentions and degrees of success. Some wear makeup due to their own passion for the art, others because they feel it enhances their appearance.” These sentences really set up the topic of my essay and describe the variations that I used to differentiate between my classifications. I use these sentences in my introduction paragraph to set up the rest of my essay and catch the reader’s attention. My careful choice of words shows that I know a lot about the subject I am writing on and establishes me as a reliable and knowledgeable author. This sentence helps transition my introduction into the topics of my main body paragraphs by telling the various factors that I used to create my system of classification and how each category differs from the others.
The best sentence in my essay so far is, “Now, instead of a means of survival, this primordial concept has become more of a sport.” This is the second sentence in my essay. I really like how it flows really nicely. This sentence isn’t the longest or most elaborate, but it sets up what I'm going to talk about for most of my essay. Most of the rest of my writing supports this. It shows how hunters have evolved into more categories allowing me to now classify them into different categories. It shows how people don’t hunt for survival any more. Now they hunt for a good time and for the sport which is shown throughout my essay. It also has one of our vocab words. This takes care of one of the requirements and makes my essay sound more intelligent. I would like to have all my sentence sound as good and flow like this one.
Peyton 7 "The leader of the team has a lot of fire in them to make the team better much like a large firepit." This is my best sentence in my essay by far for multiple reasons. I'm comparing leaders on sports team to firepits. When I say a leader has a lot of fire in them I mean that they have a lot of drive, motivation, and determination. I am comparing them to a firepit because a firepit always has a big flame in it. If it does not have a big flame it is not very effective. Just like if a so-called leader has no fire no one will really listen to them and they will not be a true leader. If you are sitting by a firepit and the flame is small it will not warm you up at all. Just like if a leader had no fire they will not achieve what they want to with the team.
Erck 5 My favorite sentence in my essay is: "Imagine this: at a romantic movie at the local theatre—the characters are opening up, confessing their love to one another, about to kiss, and all of a sudden someone behind you blows their nose and begins sobbing, loudly. " This is my favorite sentence in my essay because of the immense out of imagery that I put into it. When you read a sentence like this, you can often put yourself exactly into that situation or easily imagine what that would be like. This allows the reader to connect with your sentence and essay, and to be able to indulge themselves inside of it. The dash in the sentence also draws more attention and lets the reader know that we're saying is important. Personally, I enjoy the use of the dash the most because I know that it always catches my attention, unlike paratheses, which always seem to draw away from sentences and from the importance of them. I also love writing sentences that contain a lot of imagery because they are much more interesting to read and learn about.
The best sentence in my whole essay, besides my thesis statement, is: "A vast majority of the time, the video game does not live up to the idealistic view of what the players wanted the game to be". I really like the way I worded this sentence first of all. It flows really well in my opinion. Second of all, I feel it embodies the category in which I was speaking. I was speaking of Hyped games which get you excited but eventually end up being disappointing. In the paragraph, I was explaining how the game would seem great and how all the hype would be generated and I then turn around to tell the audience things don't turn out the way the consumer wants. It goes against the expectation of the audience like the game does to the people who want to play it. By doing this the people reading the essay feel the same way as people getting a game from the Hyped category.
I believe the best sentence I have in my classification essay so far is: “The barista world can be a very demanding environment one day, and the next a laid-back day.” This sentence is basically saying you must be prepared for a day that many customers decide to come to the coffee shop, or simply a day where no one decides to come. I worked on a Sunday at Scooters a few weeks ago, and recently I had to work another Sunday. The first Sunday I worked it was not busy at all, so when I worked the last Sunday, I was expecting no customers to come to Scooters. I was wrong! It was so busy we barely had time to think. Customers were flooding in left and right. So you should always be prepared and never assume what kind of a day it is going to be because you could very well be wrong. Always be prepared!
I would say my best sentences—not including my thesis statement—would be “These kinds of things give boys the idea that it is okay just to use a woman as an object, nothing more than a slave of some sort. It teaches young boys to be selfish, caring for only themselves and their needs rather than treating women like a real person.” In these sentences, I was explaining why the classes I chose exist. In order to do this, I had to explain todays unfair standards. I believe they are my best sentences because they are filled with things that I truly believe in. In these sentences you can hear my emotions, and how I feel disgusted about today’s standards. At least that’s what I hope people can feel from reading this. I also think that other people can feel and relate to the ideas and opinions that I am emulating. They use some persuasive methods in them, trying to guilt people (specifically males) into feeling bad about how they think of and treat women today.
Alyssa DeCurtins 7 The best sentence in my essay has not quite yet been written, but I do know the basis of what it will say. My essay is about the different types of voters in America. One of the classified categories is the Gargoyles, people who don't vote at all. In the paragraph describing this group, I am planning on explaining how one of the reasons people say they don't vote, is because the government does not listen. Proceeding this, paraphrased, is, in my opinion, the best sentence of my essay. "Voters say that they don't vote because the government doesn't listen, but why should the government listen when they don't vote." This sentence carries a lot of weight and has much truth to it. Citizens will complain all they want about how the government doesn't care or isn't listening, but the truth of it is why should they? If citizens won't do their part in society to better their own country, then why should they expect officials to care about non-voters' concerns. In my opinion, an eligible voter doesn't have the right to complain about something they had the power to influence. Had they voted for a candidate and aided in their winning, laws/ the government may be run in a slightly different way better suited for citizens. I heard this quote from Mr. Thomas Grode and it really hit home. I hope that this line has the same impact on other individuals to realize that it is important and their duty as a citizen to vote.
Rima 1- I think that my best sentence in my classification essay besides my thesis statement is: Apparent or masked, clingy or distant, affable or querulous—all boyfriends can prosper into the love of your life. I really like the usage of introductory set of appositives. I believe that the use of the dash also brings professionalism into the sentence. This is also the use of a compound sentence. I think that compound sentences are important because they bring together independant ideas that stand better together than on their own. This sentence is saying that no matter what type of person (boyfriend) you are, you can still turn out to be the one that someone spends their life with. There are so many different types of people and my essay as a whole shows that everyone can find their love if they know what they are looking for. With the different independent clauses separated by commas, this also portrays that any combination of them can put together a good boyfriend.
I believe that my best sentence would be “Huge, hulking, and humble—the Gentle Giant is the Juggernaut’s more polite counterpart”. I believe that this is my best for a multitude of reasons. The first would be the use of alliteration multiple times. Huge, hulking, humble is an example as well as Gentle, Giant, Juggernaut. Another reason I believe it is my best sentence is because it shows that I am able to use a dash to modify my sentence and make it flow better. I could have easily said “The Gentle Giant is huge, hulking, and humble. It is the Juggernaut’s more polite counterpart”. The use of the dash and adjectives at the beginning of the sentence practically beg for the attention of the reader and really emphasize what the Gentle Giant is about. Therefore, I believe this is my best sentence because of the use of literary devices, the confidence it displays in my writing, and the use of the dash to modify the subject.
Rau 1 “However, potential is not merely an aspired story of reaching the top of the tree to claim the luscious, crimson apple.” This sentence, to me, has been a strongly inspired piece of advice that I’ve learned from the respected teachings of Hoover’s Martial Arts in Brandon—now called Circuit—. Mr. Green, the main instructor, must be credited for having come up with this metaphor in order to allow younger kids to understand the power of potential that everybody equally is gifted with. His story pertains to the simple, relatable imagery of reaching for an apple in a tall tree, acting as the obstacle in your way from reaching your goals. However, as you climb to obtain the apple, therefore claiming it, there’s always an even greater apple above your head, higher and higher up the tree. The purpose: to prove that satisfaction with your current conditions never exists. Personally, I believe this to be a wonderful lesson to always keep in mind in life, and I tend to stick to this idea of enjoying the journey ahead instead of its destination. The idea of potential in of itself is inspirational, and I like to incorporate this into my writing in order to spread this idea with others that wish to read what I have to say.
I believe that the best sentence in my classification essay thus far would have to be "Cheerleaders and other fans have no effect on the Sitters; they will remain unenthusiastic and uninterested throughout the entire game." I believe that this is my best sentence because of the way it reads. The flow of this sentence is smooth. That may be the case because of the semicolon that connects the two complete thoughts. I also feel like this sentence helps to add a bit of flair to the essay due to the use of the semicolon and also the use of slight alliteration with the words unenthusiastic and uninterested. The sentence also provides sufficient information about the particular type of fan. The sentence clearly shows how the fan remains uninterested throughout the course of the game. I hope that the readers of my essay will appreciate how great I believe this sentence to be. I surely hope that it will envoke the emotions that were intended when the sentence was written
7 Vogel In my opinion, my best sentence is “Close your eyes, when listening to confetti music and all you will imagine is places like Hawaii or Barcelona with vivid colorful buildings that stand out against the horizon when the sun sets, turquoise seas with creamy white ripples in the waves, tan sand with the same texture as exfoliating soaps, smooth soft serve ice cream that melts just as it hits your tongue and all you will be hearing is the gentle crash of the waves beating to the rhythm of the drum line to the song; it seems like the perfect day.” I love this sentence, because it is so easy to picture it. All I imagine in this line is how it felt being in Hawaii with my family my freshman year. It was such an easy week for us. Walk around and do pretty much what we wanted, because there was no schedule. Easy and carefree who wouldn’t want to feel that way. I imagine this week of my life when ever I read this sentence and it brings me joy just hearing it. This is why “Close your eyes, when listening to confetti music and all you will imagine is places like Hawaii or Barcelona with vivid colorful buildings that stand out against the horizon when the sun sets, turquoise seas with creamy white ripples in the waves, tan sand with the same texture as exfoliating soaps, smooth soft serve ice cream that melts just as it hits your tongue and all you will be hearing is the gentle crash of the waves beating to the rhythm of the drum line to the song; it seems like the perfect day.” is my favorite sentence in my essay so far.
Poppenga 7 I believe that my best sentences in my essay would be: “Romantic love is one of the most powerful emotions a person can have. Humans’ brains have been wired to go to extreme lengths to get affection and attention from others. Falling into love or lust gives the human brain a type of high that is comparable to a drug addiction. Focusing on their partner (prominence), yearning for their partner (exigency); feeling a “rush” of exhilaration when seeing their partner (intoxication/euphoria), as well as emotional dependency. As the relationship grows the partners are urgent to interact with each other more (tolerance). If a partner calls off the relationship, the other experiences common signs of drug withdrawal, such as anxiety, insomnia or hypersomnia, binge-eating or loss of appetite, loneliness and irritability. “ My topic for my classification was easy to understand in my mind, but trying to convey it to a reader that might not have the same mindset or thoughts as me was somewhat hard. I felt like I did a good job comparing the feelings of using drugs and falling in love.
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Postma 1
"Need a place to launch off and pull a 360 no scope on that unsuspecting noob to earn a victory royale and quite a bit of personal satisfaction?" That is my best sentence for multiple reasons. It displays confidence in my writing to be able to ask questions and talk to the audience in the second person all the while making the whole essay just a little more fun and interesting to read. Any Fortnite player knows about all the trick shots top-tier Fortnite streamers try to pull off. It also displays an understanding and knowledge of the type of slang my particular audience uses, such as "noob" and "360 no scope." Every Fortnite player (and, most likely, every gamer) knows what a noob is and what a 360 no scope is. In addition, this sentence is legendary due to the fact that it is preceded by other questions that have one answer: build. It creates a flow in my essay that helps the reader get the point that building in Fortnite (and having an essay outline) helps with anything one would want to do. In addition, the previous questions were short and this last question was significantly longer to provide humor and comedic relief to the audience. I find it hilarious and I am quite proud to call this sentence my own.
Ask 5
In my personal opinion, I think that the best sentences in my essay would be: “Gigantic, fanged felines known as lions are strong and courageous, while being highly territorial and selfish. Blood-sucking, parasitic organisms known as leeches are annoying and feckless, yet occasionally highly beneficial to their ecosystems. Tiny, tough rodents known as lemmings are minuscule and live in a harsh winter environment where they only move when they need to, but often demonstrate a critical role in their own ways.” The reason why I feel like these three sentences are the best sentences in my essay would be the fact that they use great adjectives and other words to grab the reader's attention. I think that these are the best sentences because they all catch the reader's attention and make the first few sentences strong, so the reader wants to read on. The first three sentences not only do not start with a subject but they also help by leading into the next paragraphs, so the reader knows what they are going to be reading about throughout the entire essay. I feel that since these sentences have a strong sentence structure and word structure, these are the best sentences in my whole piece.
In my personal opinion, my best sentence would have to be: “They lollygag the ball around the field, they lollygag in and out of the dugout and around the bases.” I think it provides comic relief to the readers and if they know it, comes from one of the greatest baseball movies of all time: “Bull Durham.” The term, lollygag, is different that what others may use for being lazy and sluggish, and I think it adds uniqueness and creativity to my essay. This sentence in particular is one of the best sentences I’ve written because it starts off my first paragraph for classifying and I think it’s a good one. It helps delay the name, Coquet, for a while so I can describe the group in a little more detail before giving it all away. This sentence also makes a connection to my essay to the “Bull Durham” movie. If people knew and understood the movie, they can make the connection: “Oh, her essay is about baseball or softball.”
Kellogg 7
I think that the best sentence from my essay is "A single person might mention how much homework they have to which the one-upper responds, “You think that’s bad? Try having…!” which will be followed by an excess of chores and homework that they possess, making it seem like they have too big of a life for anyone else to handle". I think that this sentence is the most favored by me because of the trueness in its statement. The sentence describes a person in a classroom setting who is so into their own personal life that they will try and outdo another person even if it’s over something completely and totally unnecessary. This person will one-up in a negative or positive manner, anything that will get them to beat their opponent. The tendency within this group of people is to make their own life seem harder than it truly is, thus upsetting another person by making them feel smaller and unimportant.
Flanigan 1
Up until this point in my Classification essay, I believe my best sentence is, " Incredibly erratic and impossible to trust, these 3 tools account for many of the injuries that presume while one uses a Swiss Army Knife." I am proud of this sentence because I believe it displays an advanced writing style. I believe it suggests the idea that I am a confident writer and am experienced enough to create a sentence that does not begin with the subject. I believe it is also refreshing for a reader to experience different sentence styles, and will overall make them more interested in the work I am creating. I also appreciate this sentence for its overall simplistic message. Though a differing sentence structure, the sentence still only contains one subject and in length is fairly short. I hope that as I continue to write I will be able to incorporate more sentences that I am genuinely proud of, as I believe it boosts my confidence as the writer and makes the experience more enjoyable for the reader!
Ackerman 2
“Waking up daily at or around 7:30 A.M. just to get to that first class period on time can be hectic and sometimes it may just pass your mind to brush your teeth or you might have had to grab that brackish pick-me-up coffee for the day, which results in coffee breath.” I believe is the best sentence in my essay thus far. I think this is my best sentence because it really creates an image for the reader if they’re not in high school and experiencing this time. I think the beginning of my essay is a good place for this sentence because it creates a background for the contents of the essay. I would say this is my best sentence because it then creates a relationship between the reader and the writer and makes the essay as a whole more relatable. I think readers enjoy reading essays that have relatable portions because the feel intrigued and they understand what the writer is thinking while writing.
In my personal opinion, I think that the best sentence in my classification essay would have to be: “Watermelon, Pears, Strawberries, and Pineapple differ in their texture, taste, size, color, and appearance… Jocks, preppy girls, shy people, and nerds differ in their choices of Friday night activities, their priorities on Tuesday nights, their weekend plans, and the clubs or sports they participate in.” This sentence is a very well thought out sentence and lays down the basis of what you will read in my essay. It lets people picture in their mind fruits and then talks about activities that one could do and it will make you wonder how fruits and activities will be connected. It states each of my classifications and it shows how each of them different in what they do. It catches the reader's attention and gives them an idea of what they will be reading about in my essay.
Brown 2
At this point in my classification essay, I believe that my best sentence is “The Geese are less athletic than their starting counterparts, but it does not drive them to bitterness; instead, these teammates are the most fanatic cheerleaders a team can have.” I believe that this is my best sentence because it uses fun word choice and exemplifies what the subject of the sentence truly is. The use of the semicolon to link the two independent clauses is a strong decision and builds the character of the sentence more which makes the overall idea more exciting. The sentence structure is different than most my others so it stands out and makes the overall feel of the paragraph better. The ideas that I was hoping to push to the reader on how a Goose should be characterized is shown with interesting descriptions that can be easily linked to personality traits of the athletes.
I believe the best sentence is my essay at this point is, “The contrasting responses to a single scenario will articulate the attitudes of the Entitled, the Enthusiastic, and the Egotistical further.” By using high-level vocabulary I prove my reliability as an author and create something more interesting than a sentence with common words. This sentence leads into the topic of the paragraph well and introduces what will be analyzed in each group. I feel as though the reason for classification, the main idea of the essay, is well displayed here. Each group’s responses will be described, and this sentence introduces why responses are an influential determinant in classifying the staff. Drawing reader’s in and keeping their attention has to be a top priority when composing an essay. This sentence provokes readers to discover the importance of what has been described and allows them to imagine outcomes before reading on. A lot of techniques and thought went into this one sentence, in order to create a strong sentence structure. It is used as a simple way to introduce ideas, draw the reader’s attention, and show my reliability as an author.
Van Hulzen 2
My favorite and best sentence in my essay so far is this, “It seems as if a practical work tool has been transformed into a behemoth of a vehicle, even challenging the enormity of a monster truck.” This sentence describes how a truck owner could take what was to be a standard work truck, and modify it to look like a monster truck. This sentence uses a different form than most in my essay. Description and interesting vocabulary are some of its best features. The sentence creatively and correctly uses words to compare a pickup truck to a monster truck. “A practical work tool”, is one phrase used to describe the average truck on the road. This phrase contrasts greatly to the next, “a behemoth of a vehicle”. This contrast emphasizes the difference modifications can make to a truck. The comparison of a pickup to a monster truck also helps display the effect lifting a truck, making it easier for the reader to see why these trucks are classified as Means. Means are the bigger, more aggressive looking trucks, so this sentence helps summarize this classification.
Ellingson 7
So far in my essay, this sentence is my favorite. In the context of this sentence, I am talking about something as sweet as tea being closely related to a teammate: “Smooth going down, easily settling, and so many different brands and flavors, tea accommodates anyone with a sweet tooth.” I am proud of this sentence because I think it is a good metaphor and describes tea well. It makes the reader think about something as simple as tea or any other sweet refreshment and compare it to themselves or someone on their team. Whether that is in a sport, a band group, in the workforce, or just in life. My sentence starts with three phrases that describe one simple word. I also like this sentence because it shows that I can write a good sentence without starting with a subject. It is a unique way to compose of a sentence and I think that is a good value to have.
In my humble opinion, my best sentence is "Hummingbirds commonly nestle in the confines of a rack, surrounded by a plethora of lifting equipment ranging from dumbbells to medicine balls (imagine a lead-filled basketball)". While this sentence may not be the most complex or elegantly arranged sentence, it strikes me as my favorite sentence because of how well it composes an image. Upon reading the statement, I can practically watch the short film created that this sentence creates in just a few words. The fondness I have for this particular sentence is because of more than just its imagery. The voice and tone of this sentence reminds me of a narrator for a nature documentary, which I really enjoy. The sentence feels alive, but more than that, it just feels natural. I spent quite a while deciding on the right adjectives and nouns to use to compose this sentence; I am very fond of the word plethora being used here. To me, using words like this that many people know, but very rarely implement into their writing, provides the sentence with a vacuum-like tone, almost as if it is asking to be read once or twice to fully extract every bit of imagery that is included.
In my classification essay, I have many exceptional sentences. The most exceptional one in my eyes is in my introduction paragraph. The sentence says, “Our home, our stomping ground, our everything—planet Earth—offers life to 7.6 billion people.” I think this is my best, because I used “The Art of Styling Sentences” to construct it. It is a sentence with an introductory set of appositives. There is dash after a series of nouns, all of which rename another noun in the sentence. The series, “Our home, our stomping ground, our everything” renames the noun “planet Earth.” I think it is cool that I used a different sentence structure than I normally do. It would be very boring to use the same simple sentence structure in every essay. I am glad I learned how to write other kinds of sentences that make my essay sound more intelligent. I think using different styles to compose sentences is very fun.
TeKrony 7
One of my best sentences in my classification essay is “Adding extra information is key; you want to show everyone—especially the teacher—all the work you have put into this project in order to receive the best grade possible.” One reason why I think this is one of my top sentences is because there is a lot of variation in it. This is from The Art of Styling Sentences. This one uses dashes to enhance the sentence and make it more dramatic. For that reason, I added “especially the teacher” in between the dashes to indicate that was the goal of that student, which was important to know. I have multiple sentences that I used from The Art of Styling Sentences, and I really think it helped my essay, and my writing grow. I also liked how I incorporated a semicolon. I never usually use dashes or semicolons, so because I used them both in one sentence, is why I chose this sentence to be my best one.
Kocer 7
In my classification essay, I had many sentences that I could have considered my best. The sentence I chose was “Often times, the Snacker will come prepared with their own bag full of food; and although plenty of delectable grub awaits the consumer, they will not share.” I chose that sentence for various reasons. One reason is that my sentence starts with an introductory phrase, which helps add flow to it and connect it to the sentence before it. A second reason I chose the sentence is because it is a compound-complex sentence, which adds difficulty to the sentence. Another reason is I use descriptive language such as delectable grub instead of food and use the word consumer instead of reusing the word Snacker. All these reasons help make my sentence flow and sound better. Overall, those reasons that make my sentence good help add to the quality of my essay and make me a better writer.
Poncelet 5
My best sentence in my classification essay has to be this one, “The only animals that frolic in that yard are venomous snakes, hairy spiders, and scary bats that hang in the attic getting in and out from the shattered attic vent.” This is my best sentence in my opinion because I am using great grammar and comma usage listing animals that are in these neighbors yards. Also, I am using adjectives to describe these animals that I cleverly chose to be evil. The adjectives I chose those adjectives to fit the animals that made them scary and dangerous to show how these animals relate to these scary and dangerous neighbors. I chose these animals to be evil because of the neighbors that I was classifying in that paragraph. I am hoping to create many many more sentences that are just this good and better to enhance my essay to the very next level.
Bickley Pd.5
The best sentence in my classification essay thus far states the following, “Punishment is their candy, so they are fueled and untouched by the inevitable consequences”. The context of this sentence is the attempt at describing the category of students fittingly named the Beasts. This is a compound sentence that depicts the reason behind these students’ behaviors and why they continue to act this way. In my opinion, this sentence helps the reader better understand who the Beasts are. I compare punishment to candy in the sense that it is sweet, but it can have negative side effects. However, in this case, the Beasts do not care what those consequences might be. Their inappropriate behavior is punished by the teachers, yet they find pleasure in being chastised. Also, this sentence uses the verbs “fueled” and “untouched”. I think these verbs are effective because they are some of the more uncommon verbs. Rarely do people use these verbs, so it enriches the effectiveness of them.
My favorite sentence that I have included within my essay is, “The most exemplary night starts with you getting ready in the most fashionable dress with excessive amounts of full-coverage foundation and sweet-smelling perfume; you are eager for your date’s arrival.” The reason why this sentence is my favorite that I have written so far is it uses a lot of adjectives to describe the most ideal night. In my first paragraph I wanted to put a picture into the reader's mind. This will allow my essay to be more relatable for the reader, knowing that a lot of girls have thought about this. I feel that this sentence, as long with others showcase this tactic I am using in my writing. I also like the use of the dash and the semicolon. This can be unique to see in writing at times and I feel like it adds interest in my writing. I hope to continue my writing in this way with sentences like this to add variety to my essay.
Bowar 5
My best sentence, in my opinion, is, "Every seat filled with perspiring students, some looking like they got no sleep and other totally prepared for the significant exam that awaits." This sentence is placed at the very beginning of my essay. As the second sentence, its purpose is to grab attention and hook the reader. This is my best sentence because it creates an image that draws the reader into my topic and hopefully the rest of my essay. This sentence uses many adjective to describe the scenario for the reader and allow them to picture themselves in the moment. Italicizing "the" adds emphasis the the degree of the test and the impact it may or may not have on a student. I believe the sentences that follow this one continue to use imagery and adjectives to draw the reader and create an inquiry about the groups of people. I hope that this sentence and others like it add to my essay and bring out the best in it.
Reading through my essay, I don’t think any of the sentences I used really stand out from the rest; however, I picked the first sentence of my conclusion paragraph to be my best one. The sentence I picked is, “Summer goes by so quickly; it is important for high school students to spend the little time they have doing what they want.”. This sentence is very important to my essay because of how it connects to the reader. Everyone can relate to the feeling of summer ending when it feels like it just started. Another thought this sentence may provoke is what the reader does every summer, and how they spend it. This sentence could also encourage them to change how they spend all their free time and make them realize what they are really passionate about and what they really enjoy doing. Overall this sentence seems to be the best in my essay because of how it gets the reader involved and thinking about the topic.
Oren 1
I think that the best sentence in my classification essay would have to be: "Music will outlast us all; at the end of time there will be those who withered away with eternity and the timeless pieces left behind by those that, in life, donned the title musician." I think that this is my strongest sentence. I really like the sentence structure, and I think that this is my longest sentence. I am also proud that I used a semicolon, which I wouldn't normally use, and I believe that I used it correctly on top of that! I believe that this is a great sentence to have at the beginning of my essay. I think that this will set up the expectations for what writing is going to come throughout my essay. I think that I could possibly spice up my sentence by switching around the sentence structure in order to make it seem a bit more refined.
In my essay, I am classifying the different types of people at concerts. I categorize them into the trash, flashy, bashy, and bashful. The Trashy being the people that are constantly drunk or showing far to much PDA. The flashy being the die-hard fans. The people that do not really want to be there are the bashy. Then finally the bashful, the bashful really want to be there and love the music, but are too shy to sing and dance. In my opinion, the best sentence in my essay is, "All four groups of people bring something to the table, but it seems the trashy always bring the most, not always in the best way." This is my very first sentence in my paragraph focused on the trashy, it is my transition sentence. I think it is my best sentence because it has a little bit of humor in it, so it kind of lightens the mood, and it also is completely true. I think it is a good way to pull the reader in and feel like they can relate because they too have seen these types of people at concerts.
DeWitt 1
The best sentence in my essay so far is, "Trustworthy, selfless, encouraging—Ceiling fans have been fans since day one and they will stay fans until the very end." I believe this is my best sentence because it is one I normally wouldn't include in anything I would write. I stepped out of my comfort zone and decided to add a new final exam item to spruce up my essay. I am very proud of how this sentence turned out and the flow that this sentence brings between the sentence before it and the sentence after it. This essay has had me striving to make my essays better and the final exam items are helping me to do that. The final exam items are showing me different sentence styles that I can use to make my sentences sound less boring and more refined. Overall, this sentence style makes me feel smarter and encourages me to write essays with the best techniques and improvements that I can.
I believe that my best sentence so far is "Either way you slice it, may your week be an extraordinary week filled with many opportunities." This is actually the last sentence of my essay. I believe that this is my best sentence because it has a good catch to it. My entire essay is dealing with pizza and how it relates to the days of the week. I thought it was really clever to say "either way you slice it" since we are talking about pizza. I think this is a great way to end my story. I also like how I used the word extraordinary. It is a great descriptive word to use in essays. I would advise others to add descriptive words in their essay. It is a great way to enhance it and it is a great way to make your essay more appealing to the readers.
Christensen 1
So far, I think that one of the best sentences in my essay is "Diverse, happy, and beautiful — this ending will leave you beaming and filled with joy." One of the reasons that I think that this is one of my best sentences so far is because it is very descriptive. This sentence gives the readers a chance to really visualize what a Sunny ending is. It also helps the reader have a clear picture in their head. Another reason that I think this sentence is the best is that it shows that I have the ability to use different types of sentences in my writing. Using more complicated types of sentences shows the readers that I am knowledgeable about the subject. This also shows that I am serious about my writing and it will help the readers to take my essay seriously. Overall, I believe that the sentence is my best sentence because it really shows that I am capable of writing in different ways and that I can really get the message and visualizations out to my audience.
Knutson 2
Out of all the sentences that I have written so far, there is one that stuck out to me and which I feel is my best sentence. The sentence entails, “Dawdlers are like little ducklings waddling around taking their time to cross the daring road”. In the simplest form, the Dawdlers can be defined by the word procrastination. Within this sentence, I am trying to explain the mindset of the Dawdler people. They realize that it could be dangerous if they procrastinated. But they still mosey around and take their time. The Dawdlers relate to ducks in which both of their actions can cause harm to themselves. Using the simile in this sentence helps to add more detail to the paragraph describing the Dawdler people. Although it may look like a simple smile, it makes a big difference. It helps to describe the Dawdler people more by giving the reader a different way to look at it. But overall it shows how the Dawdlers like to wait till the last possible minute to get their homework done even though it can end up hurting themselves. Just like the little ducklings like to wait till the last possible minute, when it seems most dangerous, to cross the dangerous road.
Popp 1
So far, I believe that the best sentence in my essay is "These intelligent and instinctual four-legged helpers can help a variety of those in need, from the blind to the deaf, the diabetic to the anxious, from those with PTSD to those who even struggle to cope with themselves." This line highlight the importance and diversity of service dogs from many different backgrounds. Humans love the loyalty and obedience that dogs provide, and service dogs are the epitome of obedience and service. In my essay, I compared service dogs to periods, which share an importance and function. You must stop for periods and respect their authority, much like a service dog doing its job. Everyone knows what to do when they encounter a period, but not many people feel comfortable around a service dog. My essay will hopefully help readers with this problem. This is the main reason for writing my essay.
Geringer 1
People are just like cupcakes; cupcakes may look sweet and tasty on the outside, but they could be dry and burnt on the inside. I believe that is my best sentence because you can tell by that sentence what my entire essay will be about. From one small sentence, you can learn so much. That’s the beauty of sentences. Just one simple sentence can open up your brain and make you realize so many things you didn’t know or realize before. Some of the most important documents in the world are made up of single sentences that don’t make any sense on their own, but together they make up our country. Even though the sentence I chose can stand on its own, there are many other sentences in my essay that wouldn’t make any sense on their own. Some sentences can tell a whole story, but others need other sentences to lean on.
Bunker 1
The best sentence I have written in my classification essay up to this point states, "The Curveball is the kid who smiles and gives their parents the sincerest hugs and kisses before they leave—but as soon as the parents step out the door, an invisible switch is flipped." This displays that I can write compound-complex sentences. I believe that this sentence demonstrates that I am a confident writer and know how to create other sentences besides simple. I think that this is sentence creates a vivid image of the kind of child I am trying to explain. I ended this sentence with a little bit of a cliffhanger. Creating a sentence with a cliffhanger at the end makes the reader excited to read further and become more engaged in my essay. Also, adding a dash to this sentence breaks it up and helps the sentence flow smoothly as you read it.
Olivier 1
Currently, my best sentence is, "Whether you are out on Lake Poinsett in South Dakota, or on the vast Lake Erie, you will need to know what type of fishing buddies to bring and how to classify them." This is my favorite sentence for many reasons, I enjoy including examples into my writing. For example, I added Lake Poinsett and Lake Erie as fishing lakes. I also like this sentence because it opens up my essay and gives my writing a purpose. Before this sentence, there was no purpose and I was writing with no guideline. My best sentence leads my writing into the classifications of all the types of fishermen. I describe their fishing styles, their mood, and why they are in the group that they are in. I am very proud of this sentence because I didn't use any guidelines and it shows the reader the main reason that I am writing my essay.
I would have to say that my best sentence in my essay so far is, “Fast, aggressive, and courageous -- these adjectives describe Lions, who are known as the “kings” of the roadway”. In my writing i tend to not be very good at mixing up my sentence structure. After a month in this class though it is getting better progressively. I am actually learning and understanding different types of sentences and their structure between term tuesdays and just Mr. C teaching. This sentence that I chose as my best I just added into my essay after the most recent term tuesday. The sentence has an introductory set of appositives to start off the sentence. I liked this because it switches the normal sentence structure around and really grabs the reader's attention right off the bat. It throw three descriptive adjectives for your subject, right at you. It grabs your attention way better than your normal noun verb repetitive structure. I really hope I can continue to add variety to my sentence structure to when I write.
At this point in my classification essay, I think that my best sentence happens to be my very first sentence. It states “would you like a cup of coffee?” I know that this sentence is very simple and that it does not have very many fancy words or big comparisons but without this sentence, my essay would not be where it is at right now. This sentence sets up what the entire rest of my essay will be about: Coffee. I could without-a-doubt find more complex sentences in my essay but I don’t think they would be considered the best because no amount of fancy words or grammatical phrases could start my essay any better. I also like how I start my essay with this because it is a question. Personally, I think starting a paper with a question is a great way to go about starting an essay because it pushes the reader to want to read more and gets them eager about reading.
2 Andresen
“You have the players who wear their socks to their knees, socks barely above their shin guards, untucked jerseys and tucked jerseys, pre-wrap or no pre-wrap, sock cleats or normal cleats, wrists taped or no tape at all, you get the point.” I truly believe that this is my best sentence at the point I am at with writing my essay. It is my best sentence based on the fact that it creates an image and is very descriptive. I think that anyone who reads it, whether they know soccer or not, can visually imagine some of it, if not all. Having a sentence that can do that is very powerful because it relates the essay to people and things and really connects the reader to the passage. I think the usage of all the commas and all the different descriptive words really bring the reader in but also creates a strong thought and a strong image.
Glen 2
The best sentence that I wrote in my essay is: “If the innovative, creative minds that are interconnected online did not exist, then the dark circles and sleep deprivation would not either.” This sentence includes a lot of imagery and humor for the audience to read. I think that it keeps the audience members enticed and interested to continue reading onward. This sentence is taken from the third paragraph in my essay. Since my essay is classifying different types of personalities with social media, it is comparing funny people with Twitter. At the beginning of my paragraph, I mention that Vine used to be the app that includes memes and hilarious six-second videos; however, the company deleted the app. Now, Twitter is the replacement and I wanted to include how social media can affect an individual. Therefore, I included a couple of side effects in a sentence, and I think that it is one of the most creative sentences throughout my essay.
Thompson 2
I believe that one of my best sentences is one that happens in my introduction. This sentence is "Only the players know the feelings of adrenaline and excitement and nervousness that happen during the warmups before a game. Even the fans watching the game do not see the shoving, elbowing--and sometimes pinching--that happens while sprinting to get to the ball." These sentences are the best because it relates to most people as they are competing and how they feel before a game, match, or event. People know the excitement of going into a championship game. In the second sentence, the dashes add and give emphasis to how physical playing soccer can be. The dashes also add a different pace while reading, so people are not just reading words but have characters and spaces in between. After this sentence I started my thesis, so I think that it gives a good preparation into the thesis and has foreshadowing for the attitudes of the classification types.
Barton 1
My personal favorite sentence in my essay would have to be, "In a world where seemingly everyone has built an online resume, showing off their hobbies, interests, and relationships, it is very easy to choose to look someone up without them knowing and peek into the very essence of their being rather than trying to get all of the same results through a taxing and only sometimes rewarding personal relationship." I think that this is my best sentence because it is the most complex of all of the sentences in my paper; however, it is not the complexity alone that makes it superior. Anyone can write a long sentence but to be able to make it cohesive and pertinent to the topic at hand can be a challenge in itself. I like how I used the term, "peek into the very essence of their being" because it makes the act of looking up someone on social media feel different than what people normally think of when they are the ones doing it. I think the sentence reveals a very real and common action but it demonstrates the act from a new and hopefully different perspective.
Reinschmidt 2
Do you often find yourself wishing that the “cool dad” was your dad, or that stud of an athlete is your brother, or the smartest girl in the class was your sister? I believe that this is my best sentence thus far in my classification essay. I think that it is a good start to my essay as it compares and classifies how this world is. We are constantly looking for the next best thing in order to replace or outdo what we already have. I think it helps us to visualize what we think and come to grasp that we all do this. We are all guilty of doing this at some point in our lives whether it is with our family, friends, or the newest gadget on the market; that is why I put it in my essay. It makes it relatable to everyone and is a strong start to my sentence that catches the reader’s attention and makes them think. As my essay goes on I hope that I can outdo this sentence and have many more sentences that are more descriptive, visual, and complex.
Kuehn 2
“Similar to a hermit crab in its’ shell, these are the neighbors that never leave their house.” I believe this is my best sentence for many reasons. First off this sentence really explains the comparison I am making for this person. The Hermit is like a hermit crab. It shows the relationship between the two. The Hermit person hides in their house, and the hermit crab hides in their shell. It also used a comma after a dependent clause that started the sentence. I like to start sentences with a dependent clause because I believe it adds flair. I use a dependent clause and an independent clause making it a complex sentence. In this situation, a complex sentence was a good choice, because it is around simple sentences in my essay. Overall I believe this is my best sentence because it explains my classification, and it is the right kind of sentence for the situation.
Huntimer 2
I believe my best sentence is: “ Delving further than the woodwinds, strings, brass, or the percussion, musicians create a recipe that bakes into the amazing orchestra that creates beautiful music to the concert goers”. I like the imagery it gives the reader. In that sentence, I imagine the different sections of instruments, the stage, the instruments, the performers, and the listeners. Also, I tried to use a unique way of comparing the individuals in the orchestra to cooking, to obtain more imagery. I also like how the sentence is worded and the different word choices I used. I could have said “the instruments” instead of listing the different sections, or not even include the cooking metaphor, however, I like the overall vibe of the sentence, and how it fits together. This sentence also sets up the thesis and relates to the theme of my essay about the types of people in the orchestra. I like writing sentences that have unique wording that makes it memorable and gives the overall essay a little dash of color.
“The repetitive nature, your inability to change anything, and the thought that you know the other driver is doing it on purpose as a gambit to annoy you, really makes them toxic.” Throughout my essay, this is my best-constructed sentence. In my opinion, it creates a really relatable imagine and something that a lot of people can agree with. The structure of the sentence flows well and I used good vocabulary words like “inability,” “toxic,” and “gambit.” These words allow for a better understanding of the sentence and add more style and technical application within. The way the sentence is structured with commas allowed me to add many ideas into the sentence. These ideas describe the situation very well and create a good image. Overall this sentence fits well in my essay because of its flow and word choice. Because of this, it is my best sentence so far.
My essay is about how taekwondo is similar to a recipe. All of the different parts of a typical taekwondo class are just like the steps to complete a recipe. My favorite sentence so far is, “[a]n instructor will easily be able to recognize a wrong move—for example, a side kick from a round kick—just as a grandma would know if the wrong spice was used in her signature pie.” I still have a lot to add to my essay, but I like how this sentence brings together a lot of aspects of my analogy. It mentions kicking and compares it to spices in a pie. This goes along with my analogy of each taekwondo move being like a different ingredient. I also like how this includes an appositive within a set of dashes. It brings emphasis to this particular sentence and makes it unique. Instructors and grandmas are also compared in this sentence, which is another comparison I make throughout my essay.
I believe that the best essay in my essay would have to be the sentence, "Almost as though a stick was thrown for a canine, the Dutiful Dogs will immediately run to wherever they left their drill charts, retrieve them, and run back to the director as soon as they possibly can." I chose this sentence because first of all, it is a compound-complex sentence, with "as though" acting as the subordination conjunction in the sentence. I also put the dependent clause before the independent clauses to change up my writing a little bit. I think that this is my favourite comparisons to animals in the entire essay as well. The sentence acts as a comparison for the Dogs and canines that most veteran band students will understand, but not someone new to the band. I have realised, however, that I need to add a little more variety to my essay in the forms of phrasing and wording. It will be something that I need to continue working on throughout the year.
"Regulars are the more avid fans of bowling; they find unending passion in the sport and hope to bowl for most of their lives." I believe this to be the best sentence in my classification essay. I believe this is my best because of the fact that I would consider myself a Regular under my system of classification and this is my true opinion of bowling. I have been bowling for over 5 years and I do really hope that I am able to bowl for the remainder of my life simply because I have that unending passion for the sport. Though I have not been bowling for my whole life, I have found immense enjoyment in it throughout the whole time that I have been doing it. I relate to the whole Regular classification within my system, but I relate mostly to the sentence that I pointed out to what I believe is the best because of my experience in the sport.
I think my best sentence I have in my classification essay thus far is “Whether you are taking a walk through a busy city or biking up and down a towering mountain, encountering the different types of car drivers will not be a rarity for you.” I think it is my best sentence because everyone who goes out of their house will see a car, whether it is driving or not. It links to the title since the classification is ramifying different types of drivers and you will see people driving every day. You will be affected by their actions when you are on the road or walking by the road, due to their personalities I explain in my essay. This sentence explains the frequency you will encounter drivers and where you will encounter them. It provides an area that is very common for most people to be and an area that less people are going to visit daily.
Cushing 2
“To have a heightened awareness on the first date is vital for any girl; knowing who you are with is vital for any relationship.” I chose this sentence as my best sentence because I used The Art of Styling Sentences guide in this sentence to try to enhance my essay and add variety. I used two topics from the guide, the same word repeated in parallel structure and an infinitive phrase beginning. The word Vital is repeated at the beginning of the sentence and at the end; both times it is used as an adjective. I also chose to start this sentence with an infinitive phase to change the way that my sentence began to differentiate it from the rest of my sentences. In my opinion, this is my best sentence because it has variety, a decent amount of grammar and it clear and to the point. I plan to go back and add more sentences like this in my essay.
Law 2
In my classification essay, I am comparing and classifying friends as different kinds of shoes. As of now, I am talking about the four different styles of shoes and how they relate to the types of friendships we encounter in our lives. The four categories include boots, heels, sneakers, and slides. My favorite sentence comes from the first body paragraph talking about the types of friends that act like the Boots in our closet. The sentence says, “Not only does this wonder of the world make every winter outfit look all the merrier but are very practical by keeping your piggies warm and protected from the murky weather.” This is my favorite sentence thus far in my paragraph because I believe it illustrates a vivid picture in the reader's mind. Not to mention that this sentence also includes one of our vocabulary words which was in the requirements. I’d give myself a pat on the back but I am not entirely sure if I used it correctly. I hope when continuing writing and revising my essay that I will be able to create even better sentences than this one.
Grode 2
The best sentence in my essay is “Without the accelerator, no drive takes place; nothing can happen; nothing can be done.” I like this sentence because, in context, it is not talking about the accelerator of a car at all, but the backs on a football team. When I say there is no drive, it has two meanings, the first is that the car won’t drive without the accelerator. The second is a drive on the football field. Obviously, a drive being an offensive possession. In context, the sentence really just says that without the running backs, you will not have a successful offensive possession and you will not be a powerful team. I like this sentence because it has multiple independent clauses in just one sentence. This makes the sentence a compound sentence. I like the use of semicolons in the sentence which really builds the sentence up and makes it a strong sentence to start the paragraph with.
The best sentence in my essay would have to be, "This is a common misconception with gamers; gamers can come in all different shapes and sizes, a gamer could even be sitting next to you right now." I believe that this is my best sentence because it is both an argument against the misleading idea that gamers are fat, broke, and living with their mothers and it opens up the reader to a whole new perspective on gamers. This sentence shows how much I have grown in my ability to write a clear and cohesive sentence. Before taking this class I wouldn't have even thought about using a semicolon and now I am using them whenever I can. This sentence is also one of the few compound-complex sentences in my essay so I also feel accomplished about that fact. Overall I just hope that in the future I will be able to write more inspiring and eye-catching essays in the near future of college life.
Kirkeby 2
I believe that the best sentence in my classification essay is, "People of all nationalities are able to come together through the common interest of athletics". This sentence gives the reader a taste of what is to come. This one sentence shows that in the essay I will be addressing both athletics of some sort, as well as people from around the world. This sentence stands out as an important building block for my thesis statement. When the reader begins to read, this sentence will linger in the back of the mind, allowing the reader to have a better sense of what is being said. This is not a complex sentence, it is rather simple and to the point. Doing this, the reader is not overwhelmed but will soon build up to more complicated sentences.
Talcott 2
My best sentence that I have written so far is, “After practices concludes, he grouses about how terrible the coach is and the Strobe Light complains that he does not know what he is doing.” I think this is my best sentence because it is very descriptive and uses great wording. Also, this is a great sentence for me because I usually write short sentences that get right to the point. In this sentence, I start out with a dependent phrase describing when the Strobe Light complains. This sentence is also a compound-complex sentence, which is different for me because I usually only use simple sentences. Another thing I am not very good at is adding good wording. In this sentence I used the words concludes and grouses. Last year I would have used ends instead of concludes and complains instead of grouses. Within this first most of senior year, I have discovered that I am better at composing essays than last year.
Ziegeldorf 2
My best sentence is "Every class has that kid," with "that" in italics. This sentence is my best because it is relatable and funny. My essay is about the different types of students in a classroom, and how these students study. In this sentence, I am talking about the try-hards of the class. The try-hards are the students that ask a bunch of questions and always go in on their own time and ask for help. As I say in my essay, "That" kid is often the student that reminds the teacher about the homework he or she forgot to collect. It's the student that is always several assignments ahead of everybody and spends most nights studying or doing homework. This is a good sentence because it grabs attention. It makes the readers want to know who it is you are going to talk about, and when they do, the readers should be able to relate.
Swift 2
I believe my most creatively efficient sentence in my classification essay right now is, "Sweet, easy, and everyone's delight, she is just like a Hershey's Bar." In the midst of copious details, alliterations, metaphors, and long sentences. This sentence breaks up the long-winded flow with something so simple. The words compliment each other to keep the flow of reading, but also give diversity to the composition. While keeping to the descriptions, this sentence gives the reader the main point of the paragraph in a straightforward manner. The imagery and general assumption connects the reader and let's put the comparison into perspective. At the same time, the sentence itself is reflecting what is being described: "sweet" and "easy". What I enjoy most about this sentence is that I didn't purposefully go back and insert this sentence it just flowed in my mind in the moment of writing, meaning there are most likely others like it that benefit the compositions flow to make it a more aesthetic read.
Sonju 2
I think that my best sentence is “Wonders—aptly named for the sparkle of wonder in their eyes when they enter a Starbucks—will stand and gawk at the menu with puzzled looks on their faces while the barista patiently waits for them to approach the register.” This sentence includes lots of imagery to give the reader a better picture of what a Wonder is truly like. Specifically, the word “gawk” creates a vivid image in my mind and my goal with this sentence is to create that same image for my readers. Instead of choosing a simpler word like “look” or “stare”, I chose a less commonly used word. Since this essay is about classifying things in a way that is logical to me, I want to make it seem logical to everyone; by adding many descriptive words in a sentence, it paints a better picture. This sentence also demonstrates my understanding of one of the final exam terms—dashes.
As I read through my classification essay, the best sentence in my opinion was, “The unnoticed but appreciated accents of notes working to better the quality of their piece, and the sharps working with the other accidentals to harmonize in an unexplainable way.” I decided this was my best sentence not only because of the complexity of it, but the use of descriptive and captivating word choice. When I wrote ‘unnoticed but appreciated accents’ it gave recognition to something that most people that are not musically inclined would notice. If we were to stop using accents in choral pieces the music would become redundant and boring without the dynamics and shapings of phrases. As I went on to recognize ‘the sharps working with other accidentals to harmonize in an unexplainable way’, this brought a light on another easily missed aspect of choral art. In the absence of the accidentals, there is no way someone wouldn’t notice. The piece would sound incomplete and there would be a heavy tone of dissonance. Without accidentals, the piece would go from a pleasant and well put together sound to a barnyard explosion of pure chaos. I believe that was my best sentence because of the descriptiveness and the complexity of the wording.
Johnson 7
I do not have an exact sentence that I can pick out as my best one because I haven’t finished my essay yet. However, I do believe I could maybe decide on one that I think is fairly good in my mind. The best sentence in my mind would be “Smoochers know that no matter how big or small, whatever they are asking for, they are always going to get what they want even if it takes going to extreme lengths of temper tantrums and yelling at mom or dad”, I think this is my best sentence because it is a very complex sentence with many different writing properties all in the one. I think that it is a compound-complex sentence which makes it very interesting. Also, the part in the middle where my two commas are which come after small and before they show that those few words could be taken out if I wanted to but they also add extra clarification which is great for my essay and helps enhance it. I feel, however, that as I progress further into my essay I will write even better sentences with even more writing styles involved in them.
Scherb 5
I believe my best sentence is “Knowing when an Elephant is in the room is by far the simplest to identify, just listen for a loud bang, screech, or the sound of heavy feet running around”. I think this is my best sentence because it starts with a participle. The sentence then continues to be very descriptive allowing the reader to truly picture the way an elephant acts in the classroom. It describes sounds the child themselves can make with their mouth or with their actions. The use of screech is auditory imagery and allows the reader to hear the image. All of the descriptive words add to the idea of the Elephant children that most audiences can relate to or understand. The sentence also from explaining that you can easily identify these children and then tells the reader how creating an all-encompassing statement. All the parts of this sentence work together to not only tie itself together but tie my essay together.
Harvison 5
"Crooks, cons, swindler, and other far worse vulgar names have all been given to carnival workers." This is, in my opinion, the best sentence in my essay not including the thesis. I credit my success to the online thesaurus. Instead of using common words that are overused and banal, I looked up synonyms that sounded unique and showed creativity. I wanted to compare a player to a carnival worker and needed to show how wicked and sly that they were, that's why I believe swindler and con was a good word choice, as well as expanding my belief of trickery by saying "other far worse vulgar names". I plan to use this method for the rest of my essay. In my opinion, the thesis is one of the most underused tools that we have at our disposal. Especially an online one, you just type in your word and it will give you dozens of other options that can spice up the writing.
Larson 5
My favorite sentence in my essay is not my favorite because it is clever. I chose this sentence because it was important to my mother and I. The sentence states, “Doctors may be the brains of operations, but, the Mitochondria do all the work that fulfills the patient's rehabilitation; thus, making the Mitochondria as closely powerful as the Nucleus”. I chose this sentence because my mother is an ER Nurse at Sanford. My mother never gets recognized as important just because she is a nurse and not a doctor. They are seen as this because they are not diagnosing and creating a plan of care. Creating this sentence and pairing the Nurses to Mitochondria shows that nurses are indeed just as important because they do all the work when it comes to the patients. I aspire to be a Nurse Practitioner. I would want my daily hard work to be recognized and not be put down. Tonya (my mother) was very appreciative that they were paired to Mitochondria because she was finally seen as important.
Laabs 5
I think that my best sentence for my classification Essay is, “If you ever come across a Noisemaker you need to do one of two things: turn your volume down or mute them.” It really conveys the theme of comparing gamers to animals. You usually talk about coming across something like an animal and having to respond to the situation a certain way. If you ever come across a brown bear you are supposed to either climb a tree or go in the fetal position and play dead. You come across something that is dangerous and you need to think through your actions. If you mess up with the bear you die, the Noisemaker; you go deaf. It really makes the reader feel like the Noisemaker is an animal that you have to have caution around. When dealing with animals you must use extreme caution because they aren't considered humans.
My favorite sentence in my essay thus far is, “Finesse, knowledge, and persistence — these are the traits of a winning tennis player.” By using an introductory set of appositives, the sentence has more spice and direction. I feel the sentence is very direct and puts emphasis on the three traits that will assure a victorious player. The uncommon structure of this sentence is refreshing when surrounded by typical sentences. By switching up the rhythm of the sentences it energizes the essay by rearranging the structure. I also use powerful, vivid words that will paint a picture in the mind of a reader. The point I am trying to make with this sentence is based on the first three adjectives. By placing them first it focuses on that point that I am trying to prove. I also include the word “winning”. The inclusion of that adjective puts direct purpose in the hands of the three adjectives and completes the sentence.
McKellep 5
While writing my classification essay, I have written several different types and forms of sentences. I think my favorite thus far is, “A sleek, ebony bottle of misty excellence awaits the use for the proper completion of an artist’s makeup look. Setting Spray congeals the canvas you just created into place for the remainder of the day. While engulfing the face with the fragrant haze, closing your eyes is imperative to ensure that all components of the look are touched.” The reason I like this part of my paragraph so much is that I really put a lot of effort into making sure I used more bold words then I normally do. I think that it is really out of my comfort zone which in the end will help me to become a better writer. It also includes different types of sentences from simple to complex which makes it more interesting to read. I will use these as precedents to the rest of my essay and continue to try and go out of my comfort zone
One of my favorite sentences in my essay, aside from my thesis is, “The Happy will always be the server that is bouncing around giving everyone refills on drinks, making sure the food is okay, or just starting up a conversation with a customer”. The reason I enjoy this sentence so much is because it’s organized, well worded and easy to read. I personally don’t enjoy reading sentences that use such large vocabulary that you can’t understand it without a dictionary, or short abrupt sentences that seem to start and stop in the blink of an eye. I also enjoy sentences with lists very much because they appear more organized and are easier to read. I would prefer to read a book full of sentences like this, instead of a book of fragments or complex run on sentences. These sentences are short yet sweet, easy to read and understand, and most importantly a grammatically correct sentence.
In my opinion, the best sentence in my classification essay is “But nobody is perfect, and even the most Poised person in the world has their flaws”. I think this sentence is a great example of a lesson that we can all learn. Although it can be quite banal, the phrase “Nobody’s Perfect” is actually really true. I think it can be easy to get caught up in our mistakes and blame ourselves for being imperfect. But as a child, we have often heard that nobody is perfect. In my essay, I explain how even the most Poised person in the world, someone who keeps their composure under the most difficult circumstance, is not perfect. They make just as many mistakes like everyone else. I compared a rose to being Poised because they have to deal with so much whether being celebrated or thrown into the trash from rejection. They always are sure that they will be the number one selling flower. Everyone has their flaws and nobody is perfect, but that is what makes us human.
I think that the best sentence that I have written in my classification essay is, “They see the pretty, clean set; the beautiful, big costumes; the polished, perfected singing; and the rehearsed, complex choreography.” I view this to be one of my best sentences because of how descriptive and specific it is. If you are in theater you can picture each one of these things. You have a specific memory tied to each. For me I have the memories of squeaky teeter-totters, transforming fairy godmothers, choruses singing as they walk on stage, and Jarin trying her best to teach actors how to dance. If you aren’t in theater this sentence still gives you a good idea of what goes on. You can start to make up shows in your head or imagine shows that you have seen. Whoever you are and whatever you do this sentence can make you imagine which it is why it is one of my best and favorite sentences.
Frantzen 5
In my opinion, all of my sentences in my classification essay are amazing. But, one that sticks out the most and makes my essay very special is one where I use the infamous semicolon. The sentence that I have chosen as the best states, "Watching their child is only one part of the equation; keeping them entertained is the other." This sentence may impact and make my essay 115% better. Sometimes people, including me, struggle with the use of the same word at the beginning of the sentence. I overuse the names of people, they and if at the beginning of sentences but this one is different. By using the semicolon I am able to start my sentence off different than all the others. Also, the semicolon allows me to change the pace and mood of the essay. When I write essays sometimes my sentences have the same rhythm and flow which makes my essay very boring. With the sentence, I switched up the essay and it makes my essay better. Thanks to the semicolon, this is the best sentence in my essay.
Wright 5
“The third genre on the Walmart radio is that of sweet classical music: the oldies but goodies. These type of customers are better known as the pharmacists best friend but also self-checkouts worst enemy.” I think that so far these two sentences together are my most favorite and also best lines. I feel they show my knowledge on the topic and also have very good literary uses like colons. The structure for the second sentence came from The Art of Styling Sentences. It helped me to use parallels in the sentence to stress what I was trying to say to the reader. I also feel these lines provide a light-hearted feel to the essay and are very relatable to the reader. They provide a good image to show exactly the type of customer I am classifying. Together these sentences have a good overall flow and help set the mood I am trying to convey to the reader, thus making them my best sentences.
My favorite sentence in my essay so far is “When a Rocky Road encounters a section to challenging to play, they tend to retreat to a sanctuary of music making, where practicing becomes their life until mastery of the passage is achieved.” I like this sentence so much because I think it paints a nice picture of something they would do. It puts you in a place where you imagine a person taking their instruments and hiding away just practicing again and again until they play it beautifully. I think that painting a picture is important and this sentence does that very well. I feel like this sentence is a sentence that flows very well with the things around it. It also helps to build what is going on in the essay overall. Part of the reason this paints a good picture is that it uses a lot of descriptive words to send a message. I think I need more sentences like this in my essay.
My favorite sentence in my essay so far is, “Punishments are not usually effective; they don’t care if they get in trouble”. This is my favorite sentence because it combines two separate sentences with a semicolon. This sentence makes my essay more interesting to read. I also think it adds emphasis to “they don’t care if they get in trouble”. So far, very few of my sentences are combined with a semicolon. Most of my sentences are very similar to each other. Therefore, this sentence is unique compared to my other sentences. It flows smoothly in the paragraph, yet it stands out in style. I plan on adding more sentences like this style in my essay. I also plan on making every sentence more unique, and not so similar to each other. My favorite sentence will probably change once I’m done editing my essay. But for now, this is my favorite sentence in my essay.
"While taking your seat, an overdressed fan grabs your attention: painted purple and yellow, horns coming out of his head, fully dressed in Vikings attire." This sentence is probably the best in my essay because of the good image it would hopefully bring to the reader's mind. I feel like I put a good description of a fan in the sentence. Also, I use different components to the sentence that I usually do not. I used a colon to put emphasis on the describing words and phrases, before this essay I do not believe I have correctly used a colon before. I also like that I brought a place to the sentence, putting the reader in a position to put themselves in the story. While I enjoy the descriptive words, the colon puts the sentence together nicely and makes this my best sentence.
"While taking your seat, an overdressed fan grabs your attention: painted purple and yellow, horns coming out of his head, fully dressed in Vikings attire." This sentence is probably the best in my essay because of the good image it would hopefully bring to the reader's mind. I feel like I put a good description of a fan in the sentence. Also, I use different components to the sentence that I usually do not. I used a colon to put emphasis on the describing words and phrases, before this essay I do not believe I have correctly used a colon before. I also like that I brought a place to the sentence, putting the reader in a position to put themselves in the story. While I enjoy the descriptive words, the colon puts the sentence together nicely and makes this my best sentence.
Campbell 5
In writing my classification essay I have written many good sentences with different forms and complexities. In this essay is allowed to think not only creatively but maturely in getting ready for college. My sentence is, "I thought long and hard into this and one of the main reasons I can think of is I think that people cheat, is because our school values grades more than students value learning". This is my best sentence or at least in my top. I think it's my best because that sentence makes the reader think for a bit. I totally value that sentence because it's my honest opinion on why many if not certain people cheat in school. This leads to so many points to go off of. This allows me to establish my opinion in my own way that could maybe persuade readers to think in some other point of view. What I mean by this sentence is that our school is too caught up in grades rather than really getting to the full capability of mastering everyone learning abilities.
My best sentence is all about imagery. “They may be the friend that drags you on the dance floor, so far out of your comfort zone you feel like she is asking you to jump off a cliff, or pushing you to ask the cute girl out you have been staring at all night.” Imagery is an important part of an essay. Telling a story helps move the essay along. My sentence helps give a face to the type of person that I am talking about. If you can not pick out a person that would fit the situation, it will help you better understand the type of person I am talking about. Pictures make the essay more fun. Not many people like to sit and read plain research papers. It is more fun to make the essay come alive will imagery. A fun essay means the teacher will enjoy reading it more and you will get a better grade.
With my essay thus far, the best sentence I have is, “ Traveling to NYC for the first time creates such a rush of emotions: excited, emotional, and overwhelmed.” I believe this is my favorite sentence because it uses a creative grammar choice. The colon is quite powerful and is a good way to put an independent and dependent clause together. It also is a pretty good introduction sentence to the paragraph. I want to draw in an audience towards my essay and have them, hopefully, enjoy reading it. Having this sentence in my essay can bring about explanations to describe NYC. Inserting the dependent clause at the end gives more of a spark to my sentence. This also gives some suspense and urges readers to continue reading to see why I put in colon. I could have made two sentences out of this complex sentence. Choosing to put it into one sentence shows intelligence and a unique style toward my essay.
Brummels 5
The sentence I chose from my essay is, “Attitudes change when they are with different people; home life is where they are truly themselves.” This sentence is at the beginning of my essay, in my introductory paragraph chose this sentence because it is very true, for everyone. Whether we are out with our friends, at school, out with family or at home, you act differently at each place. When you are out with a good group of friends, you are outgoing and loud. Although, when you are at home, you can be a little bit more yourself. At school, you are taught to be poised and polite. Same thing when you are out with your family, polite and respectful is how you should act. I think this is fitting for my classification essay because it shows the different sides of people. I hope that this sentence adds to my essay.
My best sentence, in my opinion is, “Tall, big, muscular kids—genetic lottery winners—will push around the shorter, lighter (or fatter) ones and then the bullies will be cruel and mean to the shy ones.” This sentence is placed in the beginning paragraph of my essay. I feel that this sentence is a very good description of the kids I am trying to describe. It also shows the point I am trying to get across about the size of the kids. I feel in this sentence I used great imagery and people will really be able to picture what they look like. Not only did I use descriptive words to describe the physical appearance of the children. I used descriptive words to also describe their different personalities. I believe that this sentence uses great imagery and ties my first paragraph together when doing this. I hope that others get the same idea from this sentence as I was trying to get across when writing it.
I think the best sentence in my essay so far is, “A simple way to identify a Fly cousin is by their disturbing and somewhat frightening laugh; a laugh that represents a house fly’s annoying and obnoxious continuous buzzing.” I believe this sentence is the best one in my essay because it uses interesting word choice to paint a picture in the reader’s head. I feel that this sentence has strong imagery because of the word choice. This draws the reader in because it makes it a more interesting essay for them to read. The use of a semicolon also makes the sentence flow better because it is a good way to link the two independent clauses together. I also think this sentence is a good metaphor between the laugh of one of your cousins and the buzzing sound of a house fly because it relates the two things together well.
The best sentence in my classification essay is “While being a child you learn from the people you spend your daily lives with which is your parents for most kids.” This sentence means that kids are somewhat mirrors. They will copy and do anything the parent says because that is what their instinct is in life. This sentence I feel is the best sentence in my essay because it explains a very good life lesson. Always watch what you are doing and saying at all times because you never know who you may be influencing. Always be extra careful around children because they are like little puppies, puppies learn tricks a lot easier than when they are full grown. In the children’s eyes everything you do and say they think it is okay to do. I know being a parent is hard enough but watching what you say and do doesn’t cost anything.
Olthoff: In writing this essay, I feel that I have written many good sentences with various levels of complexities. This essay has allowed me to think creatively and free in order to give the best classification of my topic. My best sentence is, “Staying away from the Talkers will allow for a much more enjoyable experience at the games because it will allow you to fully experience the roller coaster of emotions that come with athletics.” I believe that this is the best sentence in my essay because I feel that this is my most solid sentence structurally. I think that with this sentence, I do a very good job of attempting to convince the reader to avoid the Talkers of the student section by explaining how much more enjoyable their experience at games would be. I also think that this sentence does a good job of discouraging people from being talkers at games and encouraging them to be Cheerers.
Spencer 7
Each piece of music is carefully selected and delicately put into place as if it were a puzzle piece. This sentence I believe is the best just because of how it describes the process and the job of the music writer. It is true how each piece of music is carefully selected because if it was not the story of the show could not be told. If the next piece of music did not fit perfectly to the first, like a puzzle piece would, the audience would know that there was a gap in the music. I love how the sentence just “works” together, at least it seems that way to me. The real job of the music writer is hard because they also have to create an image in your mind using music, so just like a puzzle, it creates a picture in which all the pieces fit together.
Outland 7
As of now, I believe my best sentence is, “They charted their course decades ago and believe they have reached the zenith of their potential.” This sentence is contained in the third paragraph of my classification essay, in which I discuss the “Senior Sailor” category of musician. Briefly, for your understanding, a Senior Sailor is an old musician who has, in a way, plateaued. I think my sentence encompasses almost all the different aspects of a Senior Sailor, while still managing to be relatively short in length. It’s a good example of a sentence that ‘says a lot without saying much,’ as the saying goes. First, it clarifies their extreme age with the emphasis on the word “decades;” their musical career has spanned a great length of time. Second, I use the word “zenith” to describe their abilities and “potential.” Finally, I carefully chose the word “believe” to describe how they feel about themselves and their progress. Even if they could further their skills and experience, they either “believe” that it is not possible, or they simply do not want to keep striving as they used to.
Eifert 7
My best sentence so far has been "Teenagers all go through the same stuff in high school, yet we all have different experiences." This is in my beginning paragraph of my essay. This sentence could not have more truth to it, and that is why I love it so much. Teens may live in the same tow, go to the same school, have the same curriculum, or even live in the same family, but they all still have different experiences in high school. This is because each individual interprets their surroundings, feelings, and thoughts differently. It also depends on what social groups they fall into, and their personality traits. Some teens will say high school was the best days of their lives, while others would the exact opposite. I believe that this sentence can be understood very well by everyone who is currently in high school, or has graduated. This statement is what some kids would love to make to their parents when they say high school for them was a breeze and that they miss those days, where you don't like high school at all and can't wait to be done.
"Through continuous hours of pouring rain and low temperatures, to the point where the lifeguards are in agony freezing in their swimsuits, the dedicated remain unscathed."(Nuss 2) This sentence is my best so far because it displays my intelligence and of course does not have the use of expletives. It has a ton of prep. phrases along with proper used of commas. Instead of creating a long run-on sentence, I chop it up nicely using comma so the reader can breath and understand these ideas or situations go hand in had with one another. If I were to create a shorter less creative sentence without any adjectives, the reader would feel like they were reading a boring report. I want them to be persuaded into believing in my categories so the more I indulge the reader the less detached they will feel. Leaving out detail result in weak supporting arguments/explanations. This sentences put into perspective how crazy cold it is while not having to create multiple sentence just to deliver one idea.
Risty 7
In the making of my essay, I believe my best sentence thus far is, "The whimsically impetuous mammals work together by communicating to direct, lead, and protect each other." This sentence is describing dolphins is my favorite sentence because it uses two very descriptive and visual adjectives that are very fitting for a dolphin's behavior and how it lives in its environment. I used three things that dolphins do such as, directing, leading, and protecting other dolphins to describe a volleyball team. A volleyball team. The strength of the three words that I used, gives the sentence a strong meaning but it also vague enough so that different readers can interpret how the dolphins or volleyball team go about these three words. Even though vagueness in an essay is not exactly favored, I think including it in sentences every now and then adds some fun to the reading. I like to see how other readers interpret things instead of reading something that is straightforward and to the point.
Keller 7
In my own, personal opinion I think that the best sentence I have written in my classification essay so far is, “Farms can be very frenetic with all of the animals trotting around and yowling around the clock.” I think this is my best sentence because it shows a major growth in my vocabulary. I used somewhat advanced vocabulary such as frenetic, trotting, and yowling. These two words build the credibility of my writing because I wrote them in the right way. I could have used crazy instead of frenetic, or running for trotting, but instead, I used better words to make my essay the finest it can be. I also think this sentence shows a higher level of writing. I think it shows a higher level in the fact that I used better vocabulary. A middle-schooler would not be expected to write sentences with that type of vocabulary. This is why I think this sentence is my best sentence. I know later on in my essay, and later on in my life, I will be writing extravagant sentences because of this class.
I believe that my best sentence is "They will try their best to make a typhoon when they only have a pea to throw." I have always read from fictional authors and envied the way they can put incredible images in your head. J.K. Rowling and Orson Scott Card have been my role models growing up. Reading "Harry Potter" has always been my favorite series because I could relive all of the years that Harry lives through in the novel. A large part of that is due to imagery and creativeness of the author. I hope to be close to her level sometime where my sentences will consistently plant a detailed scene or description in my reader's head. I have always been interested in fiction but never tried to create my own. Of course, I scheme and create in my head during the day and night, but have yet to put it to pen and paper. I hope this class will help me create more sentences like the one I chose.
My favorite and best sentence from my essay would have to be: “These are the individuals that go above and beyond to make sure that you—along with anyone else within a one hundred yard radius—know they are the most amazing, spectacular, skilled, fantastic performer on the field.” This sentence is referring to the Cocky type of Drum Corp International (DCI) performers. My goal was to make this as clear as possible to readers who may not know about DCI or what it entails, although I do believe that most people can relate to this sentence on a general, everyday level. I employed the use of dashes to emphasize the level of intensity and cockiness that ensues from this type of person. Along with the dashes, I was able to add a list of adjectives that someone very Cocky might use to describe themselves when talking about their role in this sport.
Betanzo 1
After reading the rough draft of my classification essay, I would say that my best sentence would have to be: "People all across America and other countries tune in every year to watch the Academy Awards, or simply known as the Oscars, to see if their favorite actors, actresses, directors, films, etc. have won a small-dainty-golden statue for the category they were nominated from." This has to be my best sentence, other than my thesis statement because it introduces the metaphor that I will be using throughout the entire essay. In my essay, I have decided to classify and compare co-workers at Target to Oscar categories. The first sentence of my essay perfectly indicates that I will be using Oscar categories as my metaphor. I also used two hyphens in my sentence to help and group a trio of adjectives together before I use the noun “statue.” I am not used to writing with hyphens, so I did it to add more flare to the sentence.
Quiroz 1
My classification essay is far from being polished but, I think a well written sentences is "It becomes frustrating when you are frantically taking and making orders simultaneously for the endless line of vehicles in the drive thru and when you look over you see an indolent 5’ 7’’ blondie hunched over the counter with her clear brown eyes glued to her phone." I think my sentence needs some assistance with punctuation... Although the punctuation needs some work I think it is a well written sentence because it is very descriptive and I think you could picture the girl I was trying to describe in your head. I tried looking for more expressive and vivid words such as indolent which is a more expressive word for lazy. Another simple example is the word vehicle instead of car or endless instead of long. I think when you change simple words like that it emphasizes your writing and it makes the reader know that you put effort into your work.
Eichelberg 5
From what I have written so far, the best sentences in my classification essay are “Because makeup can be universally appreciated, many people apply it themselves with varying intentions and degrees of success. Some wear makeup due to their own passion for the art, others because they feel it enhances their appearance.” These sentences really set up the topic of my essay and describe the variations that I used to differentiate between my classifications. I use these sentences in my introduction paragraph to set up the rest of my essay and catch the reader’s attention. My careful choice of words shows that I know a lot about the subject I am writing on and establishes me as a reliable and knowledgeable author. This sentence helps transition my introduction into the topics of my main body paragraphs by telling the various factors that I used to create my system of classification and how each category differs from the others.
The best sentence in my essay so far is, “Now, instead of a means of survival, this primordial concept has become more of a sport.” This is the second sentence in my essay. I really like how it flows really nicely. This sentence isn’t the longest or most elaborate, but it sets up what I'm going to talk about for most of my essay. Most of the rest of my writing supports this. It shows how hunters have evolved into more categories allowing me to now classify them into different categories. It shows how people don’t hunt for survival any more. Now they hunt for a good time and for the sport which is shown throughout my essay. It also has one of our vocab words. This takes care of one of the requirements and makes my essay sound more intelligent. I would like to have all my sentence sound as good and flow like this one.
Peyton 7
"The leader of the team has a lot of fire in them to make the team better much like a large firepit." This is my best sentence in my essay by far for multiple reasons. I'm comparing leaders on sports team to firepits. When I say a leader has a lot of fire in them I mean that they have a lot of drive, motivation, and determination. I am comparing them to a firepit because a firepit always has a big flame in it. If it does not have a big flame it is not very effective. Just like if a so-called leader has no fire no one will really listen to them and they will not be a true leader. If you are sitting by a firepit and the flame is small it will not warm you up at all. Just like if a leader had no fire they will not achieve what they want to with the team.
Erck 5
My favorite sentence in my essay is: "Imagine this: at a romantic movie at the local theatre—the characters are opening up, confessing their love to one another, about to kiss, and all of a sudden someone behind you blows their nose and begins sobbing, loudly. " This is my favorite sentence in my essay because of the immense out of imagery that I put into it. When you read a sentence like this, you can often put yourself exactly into that situation or easily imagine what that would be like. This allows the reader to connect with your sentence and essay, and to be able to indulge themselves inside of it. The dash in the sentence also draws more attention and lets the reader know that we're saying is important. Personally, I enjoy the use of the dash the most because I know that it always catches my attention, unlike paratheses, which always seem to draw away from sentences and from the importance of them. I also love writing sentences that contain a lot of imagery because they are much more interesting to read and learn about.
The best sentence in my whole essay, besides my thesis statement, is: "A vast majority of the time, the video game does not live up to the idealistic view of what the players wanted the game to be". I really like the way I worded this sentence first of all. It flows really well in my opinion. Second of all, I feel it embodies the category in which I was speaking. I was speaking of Hyped games which get you excited but eventually end up being disappointing. In the paragraph, I was explaining how the game would seem great and how all the hype would be generated and I then turn around to tell the audience things don't turn out the way the consumer wants. It goes against the expectation of the audience like the game does to the people who want to play it. By doing this the people reading the essay feel the same way as people getting a game from the Hyped category.
I believe the best sentence I have in my classification essay so far is: “The barista world can be a very demanding environment one day, and the next a laid-back day.” This sentence is basically saying you must be prepared for a day that many customers decide to come to the coffee shop, or simply a day where no one decides to come. I worked on a Sunday at Scooters a few weeks ago, and recently I had to work another Sunday. The first Sunday I worked it was not busy at all, so when I worked the last Sunday, I was expecting no customers to come to Scooters. I was wrong! It was so busy we barely had time to think. Customers were flooding in left and right. So you should always be prepared and never assume what kind of a day it is going to be because you could very well be wrong. Always be prepared!
I would say my best sentences—not including my thesis statement—would be “These kinds of things give boys the idea that it is okay just to use a woman as an object, nothing more than a slave of some sort. It teaches young boys to be selfish, caring for only themselves and their needs rather than treating women like a real person.” In these sentences, I was explaining why the classes I chose exist. In order to do this, I had to explain todays unfair standards. I believe they are my best sentences because they are filled with things that I truly believe in. In these sentences you can hear my emotions, and how I feel disgusted about today’s standards. At least that’s what I hope people can feel from reading this. I also think that other people can feel and relate to the ideas and opinions that I am emulating. They use some persuasive methods in them, trying to guilt people (specifically males) into feeling bad about how they think of and treat women today.
Alyssa DeCurtins 7
The best sentence in my essay has not quite yet been written, but I do know the basis of what it will say. My essay is about the different types of voters in America. One of the classified categories is the Gargoyles, people who don't vote at all. In the paragraph describing this group, I am planning on explaining how one of the reasons people say they don't vote, is because the government does not listen. Proceeding this, paraphrased, is, in my opinion, the best sentence of my essay. "Voters say that they don't vote because the government doesn't listen, but why should the government listen when they don't vote." This sentence carries a lot of weight and has much truth to it. Citizens will complain all they want about how the government doesn't care or isn't listening, but the truth of it is why should they? If citizens won't do their part in society to better their own country, then why should they expect officials to care about non-voters' concerns. In my opinion, an eligible voter doesn't have the right to complain about something they had the power to influence. Had they voted for a candidate and aided in their winning, laws/ the government may be run in a slightly different way better suited for citizens. I heard this quote from Mr. Thomas Grode and it really hit home. I hope that this line has the same impact on other individuals to realize that it is important and their duty as a citizen to vote.
Rima 1-
I think that my best sentence in my classification essay besides my thesis statement is: Apparent or masked, clingy or distant, affable or querulous—all boyfriends can prosper into the love of your life. I really like the usage of introductory set of appositives. I believe that the use of the dash also brings professionalism into the sentence. This is also the use of a compound sentence. I think that compound sentences are important because they bring together independant ideas that stand better together than on their own. This sentence is saying that no matter what type of person (boyfriend) you are, you can still turn out to be the one that someone spends their life with. There are so many different types of people and my essay as a whole shows that everyone can find their love if they know what they are looking for. With the different independent clauses separated by commas, this also portrays that any combination of them can put together a good boyfriend.
I believe that my best sentence would be “Huge, hulking, and humble—the Gentle Giant is the Juggernaut’s more polite counterpart”. I believe that this is my best for a multitude of reasons. The first would be the use of alliteration multiple times. Huge, hulking, humble is an example as well as Gentle, Giant, Juggernaut. Another reason I believe it is my best sentence is because it shows that I am able to use a dash to modify my sentence and make it flow better. I could have easily said “The Gentle Giant is huge, hulking, and humble. It is the Juggernaut’s more polite counterpart”. The use of the dash and adjectives at the beginning of the sentence practically beg for the attention of the reader and really emphasize what the Gentle Giant is about. Therefore, I believe this is my best sentence because of the use of literary devices, the confidence it displays in my writing, and the use of the dash to modify the subject.
Rau 1
“However, potential is not merely an aspired story of reaching the top of the tree to claim the luscious, crimson apple.” This sentence, to me, has been a strongly inspired piece of advice that I’ve learned from the respected teachings of Hoover’s Martial Arts in Brandon—now called Circuit—. Mr. Green, the main instructor, must be credited for having come up with this metaphor in order to allow younger kids to understand the power of potential that everybody equally is gifted with. His story pertains to the simple, relatable imagery of reaching for an apple in a tall tree, acting as the obstacle in your way from reaching your goals. However, as you climb to obtain the apple, therefore claiming it, there’s always an even greater apple above your head, higher and higher up the tree. The purpose: to prove that satisfaction with your current conditions never exists. Personally, I believe this to be a wonderful lesson to always keep in mind in life, and I tend to stick to this idea of enjoying the journey ahead instead of its destination. The idea of potential in of itself is inspirational, and I like to incorporate this into my writing in order to spread this idea with others that wish to read what I have to say.
I believe that the best sentence in my classification essay thus far would have to be "Cheerleaders and other fans have no effect on the Sitters; they will remain unenthusiastic and uninterested throughout the entire game." I believe that this is my best sentence because of the way it reads. The flow of this sentence is smooth. That may be the case because of the semicolon that connects the two complete thoughts. I also feel like this sentence helps to add a bit of flair to the essay due to the use of the semicolon and also the use of slight alliteration with the words unenthusiastic and uninterested. The sentence also provides sufficient information about the particular type of fan. The sentence clearly shows how the fan remains uninterested throughout the course of the game. I hope that the readers of my essay will appreciate how great I believe this sentence to be. I surely hope that it will envoke the emotions that were intended when the sentence was written
7 Vogel
In my opinion, my best sentence is “Close your eyes, when listening to confetti music and all you will imagine is places like Hawaii or Barcelona with vivid colorful buildings that stand out against the horizon when the sun sets, turquoise seas with creamy white ripples in the waves, tan sand with the same texture as exfoliating soaps, smooth soft serve ice cream that melts just as it hits your tongue and all you will be hearing is the gentle crash of the waves beating to the rhythm of the drum line to the song; it seems like the perfect day.” I love this sentence, because it is so easy to picture it. All I imagine in this line is how it felt being in Hawaii with my family my freshman year. It was such an easy week for us. Walk around and do pretty much what we wanted, because there was no schedule. Easy and carefree who wouldn’t want to feel that way. I imagine this week of my life when ever I read this sentence and it brings me joy just hearing it. This is why “Close your eyes, when listening to confetti music and all you will imagine is places like Hawaii or Barcelona with vivid colorful buildings that stand out against the horizon when the sun sets, turquoise seas with creamy white ripples in the waves, tan sand with the same texture as exfoliating soaps, smooth soft serve ice cream that melts just as it hits your tongue and all you will be hearing is the gentle crash of the waves beating to the rhythm of the drum line to the song; it seems like the perfect day.” is my favorite sentence in my essay so far.
Poppenga 7
I believe that my best sentences in my essay would be:
“Romantic love is one of the most powerful emotions a person can have. Humans’ brains have been wired to go to extreme lengths to get affection and attention from others. Falling into love or lust gives the human brain a type of high that is comparable to a drug addiction. Focusing on their partner (prominence), yearning for their partner (exigency); feeling a “rush” of exhilaration when seeing their partner (intoxication/euphoria), as well as emotional dependency. As the relationship grows the partners are urgent to interact with each other more (tolerance). If a partner calls off the relationship, the other experiences common signs of drug withdrawal, such as anxiety, insomnia or hypersomnia, binge-eating or loss of appetite, loneliness and irritability. “
My topic for my classification was easy to understand in my mind, but trying to convey it to a reader that might not have the same mindset or thoughts as me was somewhat hard. I felt like I did a good job comparing the feelings of using drugs and falling in love.
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