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1.) Locate some extremely engaging, insightful causal writing--writing that explains the causes of a given phenomenon that currently exists (Phenomenon: Women are urged to wear their hair longer than men...Why? OR Phenomenon: 60% of Americans are lactose intolerant...Why? OR Gold exists...Why? OR Gold is valuable to us...Why? OR The Keystone XL Pipeline Project wants oil to flow through South Dakota...Why?). Link the writing you find and react, agreeing or disagreeing and critiquing the techniques employed by the composer.
2.) Summarize your goals with your causal essay.
3.) Select a sentence from your essay and explain its grammatical classification: simple, compound, complex, compound-complex, fragment. Examine your own grammatical classification variety.
3.) Select a sentence from your essay and explain its grammatical classification: simple, compound, complex, compound-complex, fragment. Examine your own grammatical classification variety.
Write 300+ total words for this blog task.
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The Connection between Makeup and Mental Health
There are many women who would not be caught dead with out applying their makeup in the morning before leaving the house. (compound) The Renfrew Center Foundation created a survey to explain why women might feel this way. The survey’s purpose was to “identify if there is a link between wearing makeup and a positive or negative body image” The RCF collected data from 1,292 women of 18 years and older. Forty-four percent of these women surveyed stated that they feel negative emotions with out their daily makeup on; while three percent felt more attractive when they went natural. Almost half of the women who feel negative emotions use the makeup because it makes them “feel better” or they also would cover up what they see as skin imperfections. Those women who are using makeup as more of a “mask” most likely start having other insecurities with their body, such as their weight—this could quickly lead to eating disorders. When these girls apply the makeup they might just be creating an illusion, for themselves and others, that they feel fine and everything will be alright because they “look good.”
I felt as though the Renfrew Center Foundation executed their survey very well. They are never just one sided on whether a woman should be wearing makeup or not. They explain what is happening in a girl’s brain every time they wear makeup or every time they chose not to. The RCF supports girls to wear makeup because applying it can add positive thoughts and confidence through out the day. However, they also support a day with out makeup so the woman can gain “real self confidence.” This may be hard to do for some but after awhile they will begin to feel more comfortable going natural on more of a daily basis. Makeup is the training wheals to self confidence. Once the training wheals are removed there is still hesitation to get on the bike, but when the bike is ridden everyday it becomes much easier to do and soon takes zero mind power to ride.
I would really hope someday that every woman will feel just as confident and powerful with out applying makeup before going into the public. As myself, also being a member of the female population, I know just how hard it can be to put down the makeup brush. This year is the year I have finally been able to leave with out makeup. I have noticed that when I do chose to not apply, I feel free and more like me. I really want every girl to feel this way because it is one of the best feelings to still feel beautiful with a “naked face.”
http://www.empowher.com/mental-health/content/connection-between-makeup-and-mental-health?page=0,0
Acne and Your Self-Esteem
Acne is a condition in which many of us struggle with, especially as hormone crazy adolescents. It is very unpredictable and always seems to occur at the most unfair times of our lives. How does acne affect us? Good question. Acne can affect people in many different ways. Some people may experience anxiety, depression, social withdrawal, low self-esteem, poor body image, or anger. Why does this happen? In the article I read, they talked about how acne affects our self-esteem. Why is it that these bumps on our face, back, or chest push us over the edge so much that we beat ourselves up about it? According to acne expert, Angela Palmer, acne can affect your entire life in very real ways. “A study published in the British Journal of Dermatology found that acne patients experienced social, psychological, and emotional ramifications at the same level of those with chronic health problems, such as epilepsy, diabetes, and arthritis.” Studies have shown that those with acne have a higher level of depression than that of the general public. According to the studies done, it does not matter the severity of the acne. Those with mild acne suffer from depression just as much as those with severe acne. Society places a lot of pressure on with magazines and fashion models plaguing us with what we think we should look like. The great emphasis on appearance that society shows forces some who experience acne to put themselves into a situation called social withdrawal. A woman may be so self-conscious of her acne that she will not pose in a family picture or call in sick to avoid work. Others have difficulty making eye contact and some people avoid social contact completely. If you struggle from acne to the point where you would like help, there is help out there. For example, you could go to a dermatologist to see if there could be any affordable treatments, or go to a psychological counselor to discuss your feelings. There is help for everyone out there; the hardest part is reaching out.
I strongly agree with this article. I know that I have had lots of hardships due to acne and luckily I have finally found a topical treatment that works for me with the help of a dermatologist. Finding the right treatment is hard and very frustrating because it takes 3-6 weeks to know if it is going to work. I am finally feeling comfortable in my own skin and it is an amazing feeling. I liked this article a lot because it acknowledged the problems that acne pose in real life situations, and also gave a list of ideas to help overcome your insecurities with acne. The article that I read included a large variety of sentence structures from simple to compound. For example of a simple sentence within the article: “Be honest with your doctor.” An example of a complex sentence throughout my reading: “Surprisingly, adults are more likely than their younger counterparts to feel that acne negatively affects their lives—regardless of how severe their acne is. In my summary of the article, I tried to use a great variety of sentences as well. One complex sentence that I wrote was, “According to the studies done, it does not matter the severity of the acne.” A simple sentence that I wrote was, “Acne can affect people in many different ways.” I also wrote a compound sentence, “There is help for everyone out there; the hardest part is reaching out.” I am very proud of my variety in sentence structure and I hope you all can view this blog post and identify the different sentence structures as well.
I hope to write a causal essay that will identify and explain the phenomenon of obesity in the United States. I would like to figure out what the driving force is behind going through a drive through rather than cooking a delicious home cooked meal. I hope to do this through the information that I research during this assignment.
http://acne.about.com/od/livingwithacne/a/effectsofacne.htm
http://news.nationalpost.com/2013/08/16/why-this-red-hot-tattoo-boom-is-bound-to-end-with-regret-again/
The essay that I chose to read was explaining why the current tattoo boom is going to end in regret again. One of her main points was that in 50 years, your skin isn’t going to be quite as pliable, clear, and nice. When you see this beautiful, taught, colorful tattoo, now it looks great but in 50 years when your skin is wrinkly and icky, its not going to look so hot. Another reason the tattoo industry is going to flop she says, is because the people that are doing it to look cool and hipster, don’t look cool and hipster anymore because a lot of people have tattoos now. Also, people tend to regret tattoos. Tattoo removers were twice as likely to be women, usually white, single and college educated, with an average age of 30, and motivated by social stigma, negative comments, and the fact the tattoo “no longer satisfied the need for uniqueness.” A lot of people will get a tattoo just to be different, well when you’re 30 and single and looking for a career, you don’t need that. So people regret them, and not going to get them as often. My goals for the casual writing assignment are really rather simple. I really just want to be able to explain why my phenomenon happens, which might be difficult as I have not yet selected a phenomenon. I want to be able to get my point across in a clear and well written essay. So in conclusion, my goals for the casual writing assignment are to get my point across and write clearly and decisively. “In certain groups of youth, tattooing clearly has passed its peak, but in others it is just gaining strength and interest.” This sentence is compound. I am also adding this last part to reach exactly 307 words.
https://myportal.bsd405.org/personal/nelsonk/Shared%20Documents/Honors%2010%20Assignment%20Resources/Behavior%20Research%20articles/aggression%20and%20violence/agression%20and%20violence/violent%20video%20games%20promote%20teen%20aggression.pdf
This article explains a phenomenon that currently exists in today's society, Violent Video Games: Promote Teen Aggression and Violence. A phenomenon is a fact or situation that is observed to exist or happen. In the article the author (Craig A. Anderson) states, “there is a significant relation between exposure to media violence and aggressive behavior.” I agree with his statement about media violence relating to aggressive behavior in the individuals who are exposed to that certain area. People who watch these types of aggressive-behavior shows tend to view the world as more violent. With that being said, they believe that this type of behavior is normal and appropriate. When it comes to conflict with another person they handle it with a hostile fashion. Youth learn new things by visual observation. Because of this, exposure to these types of shows is more influential to the young brain. I agree with this article because in many of the tragic events that involve youth killings it is later discovered that the perpetrator was an avid gamer. Which shows the link between violent video games and real life aggressive crimes.
My goals in my causal essay are to further prove the phenomenon I choose. I will do this by looking up factual information and citing them. Choosing my phenomenon about something that interests me will be crucial so I can add my own insight as well. I will discuss the major and minor causes of the phenomenon.
In my last essay I wrote this sentence: Class sizes are usually larger but the choice of classes is large as well. This is a profound compound sentence. Which contains two or more independent clauses. I have tried to use sentences that have grammatical classification variety in my essays. This class has taught me about different ways to start off my sentences and how to combine my sentence into a compound-complex sentence that flows better within the paragraph.
http://www.theguardian.com/science/2008/apr/29/genetics
The question is “what do we have to do to enjoy life just a little bit longer”?Why do humans have to die?
Why can’t we just live forever? This essay talks about what causes humans to die and why their bodies to fail them. It also gives tips on how to live longer. The goal is to live as long as possible right?
The reason we die is because mother nature does not need us anymore. We have our kids and hopefully stay alive long enough for them to have kids. Our life is basically as primal as other animals in the sense that we have kids and keep our species alive as long as we can.
One of the tips in the essay was to be successful. This comes easy for some and harder for others. Research shows how oscar-winning actors live an average of four years longer than non-oscar-winning actors in Hollywood. I agree with this because it seems logical. Having a successful career and a happy life is important for life length.
A comical writing technique is used for two of his tips. He said “be British or Japanese because they statistically live longer”. This is a useless tip because the other 97 percent of the world is a different nationality. The same writing technique is used when he says “choose your ancestors wisely”. If you have an aunt or a grandma that reaches 100 years old, chances are better that you will live to be that old. Again, one can not just “choose” their ancestors. His last tip is a phenomenon known as “eating healthy”. I say “phenomenon” because tons of people do it. Everyone should do it but not everyone cares about their health. We all, obviously, can eat healthy and increase our chances of life expectancy.
I agree with everything he says in his casual essay. He has some good statistics in there which makes it credible and also has a smooth flow to his writing.
Brandon West, Pd. 2
http://www.trtam.com/why-does-money-exist
I completely agree with this article; money was created out of necessity. It started out as basic means of trade, and developed into what we know it to be today: paper bills and metal coins. While I believe the article could have provided more examples and causes, I think the story that the author gave pulled the reader in and also provided clarity. Additionally, I feel that the article should have gone more into the creation of paper money, rather than stopping at the point of discussing precious metals. This would have provided more detail for the article. Providing specifics as to why money has become a necessary component for economies would have also caused improvement.
My goal for my causal essay is to discuss either the causes of depression with adolescents, or the causes behind good students becoming truant. I hope to provide well-defined causes, along with real life examples. I desire to also provide grammatical variations in my sentence formations, and to perfect my writing style. I wish not to have a dull essay, but one that is enticing and enjoyable for the reader. As with all of my essays, my ultimate goal is to better myself as a writer.
As I have not gone further than the planning stages for my own essay, I selected a sentence from the article to grammatically classify: “The simple answer is money exists to facilitate trade when basic barter isn’t practical.” This sentence would be classified as complex. “The simple answer is money exists to facilitate trade” is an independent clause, and “when basic barter isn’t practical” is a dependent clause. When an independent clause is paired with a dependent clause, a complex sentence is formed. Based upon my previous essays, I would say that I have decent sentence type variation. However, I could due to provide more diverse sentence beginnings, such as starting with gerunds or dependent clauses.
http://www.pbs.org/wgbh/pages/frontline/shows/assault/roots/overview.html
The Roots of Homophobia
After browsing PBS.org, I found this article named “Hating Gays: An Overview of Scientific Studies.” Gregory M. Herek takes a social issue and approaches the subject from different scientific standpoints. From a psychological view, he uses data recorded from Sigmund Freud to aid in his research. According to Freud, heterosexual-ism is based on biology, social views of the time period, and repression of the Oedipus Complex (psychological theory stating that a child is attracted to the same-sex parent). Oftentimes, however, the heterosexual will not successfully repress the complex completely. This results in a personal dissension due to homosexual emotions. To assuage this problem, some heterosexuals will try to “externalize [their] inner conflict” by becoming aggressive towards homosexuals. Taking a different approach, Herek also analyzes homophobia sociologically. Naming 9 sociological reasons why homophobes exist, four seemed to jump out at me.
1) The heterosexual does not have face-to-face contact with gays (according to a statistic, less than 25% of homophobes actually have met a gay person face-to-face).
2)The homophobic heterosexual is typically less educated than an accepting heterosexual.
3)The heterosexual is surrounded by either homophobes or an anti-gay community (such as the Midwest or Southern US).
4)The heterosexual is religious and follows strict, traditional values.
I think these four reasons are accurate. Because homophones typically do not have face-to-face contact, they do not completely understand what being gay means; a false belief of homosexuals are constructed. Secondly, an education expands the heterosexual’s knowledge of the world, thus giving them the tools to understand a homosexual’s viewpoint. Relating to Reason three, an undiverse, anti-gay atmosphere shapes its denizens minds. Being surrounded by a homophobic environment will not necessarily make you anti-gay, but there is a stronger chance of becoming one in comparison to a more diverse location. Finally, homophobes may be devout religion-followers, especially considering the area of the country where a large number of them are found. Historically, the first recorded hostility against homosexuals was in the Bible. Jews, Christians and Zoroastrians associated this minority with idolatry and heresy. I find this interesting because Herek seems to imply that religions condemned the homosexuals for their religions actions, not their homosexual actions.
Although I agree with most of Herek’s results, there were a few I did not believe were true. He argued that heterosexuals may be jealous of homosexuals because gay men do not have the “masculinity ideal” placed on them. As an openly gay male, I feel that I am placed under the masculinity Ideal, too. Sexual orientation does not excuse you from society’s views of what a man should be. While some straight males may believe that homosexuals are not placed under the ideal, I also do not think that it makes them jealous of gay people. Additionally, according to Freud’s theory, aggression towards homosexuals are created when heterosexuals cannot cope with their own sexual attraction to the same sex. This is false. Just because someone does not agree or is not particularly friendly towards gays does not mean they themselves are a homosexual.
My personal goal for my essay is to solidly tell about the causes of feminism with accuracy while also entertaining my audience; i hope my audience wants to watch my video essay again. By including raw, harsh emotions and light humor, I hope to make my video essay interesting to the crowd, drawing them in for every line Nicole and I say.
Since I could not fit the third point on the first blog comment, I am making a second one! Yay comp!
“It occurs in places like school and work.”
That sentence is taken from my video essay. It is classified as a simple sentence because it only contains one independent clause. The clause is made up of one noun and one verb. “It” is the subject (noun) and “occurs” is the main verb. (in places like school and work” is a prepositional phrase which does not alter the grammatical classification of this sentence.
Williams 3
http://www.medicalnewstoday.com/articles/185270.php
Why do women stay in abusive relationships?
Unfortunately, in this current day it is not uncommon to hear stories on the news about abusive relationships or even hear about it happening in one’s community. These victims –most commonly women – are classified as being abused when their abuser uses physical, emotional, or sexual abuse. Most people recognize that what the abuser is doing is wrong and unjust, but what confuses many is why the women stay.
According the article linked above, over half (54%) of the women who said their partner was abusive also stated that their partner was dependable. Furthermore, the article states that “Nearly three-quarters of the study cohort were poor, with a per capita family income of less than $300 (US) per month. Forty-five percent were currently HIV-positive.” This leads one to believe that, although unhappy, the women stay in the relationship that they are in because they feel that it is a necessary part of how to survive. In addition, most women in abused relationships saw the same type of family dynamic growing up so they might not even recognize that what their partner is doing is wrong.
My idea for my causal essay is to evaluate why people bully and why they use the type of bullying that they do. For example, why would a teenage girl sit on Facebook and comment vial and nasty things on a fellow student’s photo rather than telling the girl in person what she thought? Also, why does she feel the need to do such a thing in the first place? My hypothesis is that it is because she needs have the feeling of power over another human being but is too cowardly to confront her victim face to face. However, my hypothesis is just that, a guess, therefore, I will be doing research and interviewing teachers, professors, and fellow students for their input.
In my last essay I had these sentences:
Compound-Complex:
On the surface of these activities, the two sports are very different, but by dissecting them one can see that they are actually quite similar in many attributes.
Compound:
Each marching band’s show has a motif that the members try to portray and perform to their utmost ability, and they are judged on this at competitions.
Complex:
When one looks at the rehearsal schedule of a competitive cheerleading team or a marching band, they might be surprised at the amount of time that a member of each of these must put in.
Simple:
This is not including performances, competitions, or any individual practice.
Chmela 3
http://www.wiredprof.com/100/sampleessays/causal/causal-analysis1.htm
This essay talks about the phenomenon of California becoming overpopulated. I enjoyed reading because of how it is broken down. The author did a great job starting with the least important and working his/her way up. They listed three main points: entertainment, weather, jobs. These are all great points and made me understand what I points I should think about with my essay. The author has great sentence variance, making it enjoyable to read. The author knows what they are talking about because they live in California and fight the overcrowded state everyday. I think it is interesting that they can talk about something so broad and make it so interesting and lucid. I agree with him/her completely because they make such valid points and make me feel persuaded into believing it even though I don't see the challenges they face
My goals for this essay are to come up with a topic I want to write about so that I can go into it deeply and really interpret its meaning. I would like to talk about why football has risen through the ranks and became America’s most popular sport beating others like baseball, basketball, and soccer. I believe this is a great topic for me because I understand all of these sports, have played them before. I am excited to get a reply back from a professor or coach depending on who I talk to. I will use the information greatly and can use all the help I can get in different sources to make everything flow.
My example sentence is a compound sentence. I chose it because I think it shows a great example and has two independent clauses with no dependent clauses linked by a conjunction. The pigskin football originated from the rugby ball but, it has its own characteristics. In the first half, football is the subject and originated is the verb, but in the second half it is the subject and has is the verb. I feel that my sentence variety is okay, but I know that it can be better.
http://healthysleep.med.harvard.edu/healthy/matters/benefits-of-sleep/why-do-we-sleep
My personal questions are why do we have to sleep? Why are we not able to stay awake for our whole lives saving approximately one fourth of our life from sleeping?
The article I have read explains four possible theories. The four theories of sleep are as follows; Inactivity Theory, Energy Conservation Theory, Restorative Theories, Brain Plasticity Theory. Sleep basically can be classified as the most needed activity in a day. We dedicate approximately eight hours a day towards sleeping. Why is sleep this important? The author of this essay compares sleep to eating and we all know that without eating life would not be existent for humans and other animals. As the author progresses through their essay one great sentence use the author uses is gerunds. Another point that the author succeeds in is the ability to back up statements made with facts. The author dedicated four main paragraphs to four theories of why we sleep. I believe that even though he did use factual information, he could have used way more information in his essay.
My plan, for my essay, will be to discuss why sleep is needed, how to be more efficient with sleeping hence sleep less, and why to sleep more or less. I also wish to discuss why humans need sleep. Along with that general plan I hope to use more sentence variety in this essay along with some of the styles of writing we have discussed in class.
Compared to an RPG such as Fallout, InFamous may never come as close to character development because for Fallout the user can customize their character to the point of looking like themselves or anyone they please. This line came from my comparison and contrast essay and I feel as if this sentence was well formulate and would enjoy emulating this type of sentence, complex, onto my next essay.
http://www.wiredprof.com/100/sampleessays/causal/causal-analysis1.htm
The author of this causal essay utilizes many different styles of presentation to extoll the facts about California’s growing population. To begin, he uses an appeal to human nature, to the fact that we, as humans, want to live in the most desirable climate that we can. He then explains that California has each one of the climates highly sought after by land developers and real estate agents. He then attributes California’s increasing population to the fact that the landscape in California is perfectly suited to a multitude of businesses, national companies, and consumers.
He next uses the abundance of outdoor physical activities and sports available to be taken part in and around California. He explains that not only are the activities an awesome extra for some, but also a necessity for others. He then uses an analogy to explain that activities draw people to California like a magnet.
The rest of the essay is used to explain and predict the short and long term effects of the population boost. The last page is his works cited.
In my essay, I hope to be able to learn more about daredevils and adrenaline junkies, and why they are evolutionarily backwards. With guidance from colleges professors, I believe that I can help to impart unknown information to my peers.
“Adrenaline Junkies are evolutionarily inversed.” will be one of my sentences. It is a simple sentence, with Adrenaline Junkies being the subject, 'are' making up the verb, and evolutionarily backwards, being the direct object. Because my sentence lacks a dependent clause, and only has one independent clause, it is a simple sentence.
http://www.bullyingstatistics.org/content/why-do-people-bully.html
Throughout all of history, some humans have always assumed more power than others. These individuals have led others, for better or for much worse. This is seen in present day governments surely, but can be seen in local schools alike. Bullying is a widespread problem in American schools, as I am sure it is found in foreign countries as well. I asked myself the same question many have also pondered, “Why do some people bully others”? BullyingStatistics does a great job of clearly stating why some feel the need to put down others. I shall critique a few of these points they have made.
First, the article talks about the bully. They are the source of the belittling actions. A great point they make and describe is that it is much easier to gain attention for doing negative things. Whether this be getting in trouble, or others laughing, a bully receives others attention. This could be a result of negligence at home.
Second, kids who were bullied at a young age, usually turn into bullies. They are so familiar with being hurt by others that they want to send that pain onto others. This is directly linked to the feeling of power held by a bully over their victims. They are in control of the other person’s feelings or physical well-being. BullyingStatistics relates causes of bullying to circumstances of the bully very well.
Third, the author of the article talks about the bullying as a result of actions by the victim. The victim could be annoying to the bully, or not up to the bully’s standard. The bullying could be a result of the way someone looks or acts. Bullying can even be related to a victim’s religion, culture, or skin color. This often times leaves the victim feeling worthless, opposite of the desired self confidence every kid strives for. The author looks at both viewpoints, all the while swaying the reader a bit against bullying.
Redheads are different from others, solely because their unique hair color. (Complex)
http://www.123helpme.com/view.asp?id=11954
Divorce has many complications and questions that come along with it, and it is not something that any family wants to go through. I personally know what having divorced parents is like, and I know that it is not the smoothest ride to be on. It is constantly a back and forth battle that it is gradually becoming easier to deal with, but it is still difficult at the same time. In the article I have chosen to read, the author states three main points they believe are the main causes for divorce. The first one is a change in a woman's or a wife's role. Back then, women did not work as they do now. The women back then would do house work, and stay home with their children while the husband obtained a job to earn the money to support the family. Those women really did not have an option to leave because they could not support or supply themselves. Now, women have jobs just like men. Sometimes women have higher paying jobs than their husbands do. Men and women have equal roles, and women can easily support themselves and become independent. The next reason for divorce is stress in modern living. Many married couples try their best to keep up with their expenses and try to not fall behind on payments. It is easy for some couples, but for most who are the middle class average couple it is a little more difficult. If payments are not or can not be made, stress and frustration between the marriage is almost a guarantee. Being laid off from a job is not something that helps struggling marriages either. As the unemployment rate rises so does the divorce rate. The last point that the author made is lack of communication. Couples where both of the spouses work a great quantity can get pretty hectic and busy. Sometimes they do not even have much time to see each other during the day, or let alone have a conversation. Even if there is a problem that has occurred in the relationship they either stay silent about it, or they just blatantly do not have time to talk about it. This can make a little problem turn to a bigger problem, and sometimes and even bigger consequence. Communication is definitely an important aspect to have in a relationship, and a lack of it can lead to divorce.
I do agree with some of the points that this author has made, but I do not think that these are the leading causes for divorce. Lack of communication and stress are definitely leading factors that lead to divorce, but I do not agree with the changing in women's roles idea. As a female, I of course want to be successful and independent, but I do not think I would push a man away just because I was very independent. Having someone there for you physically and emotionally is something that I believe is needed for anyone. You do not need to thrive off of a mans money, but you do not need to leave him in the dust because you are independent. You can have both independence and a man at the same time. I also believe that other main causes for divorce that the author left out are cheating, alcohol or drug abuse, abuse itself, or lack of attention. I hope to write an essay about this topic that will not only be attention grabbing, but to share information about divorce and to help anyone that wants to know more or help anyone that could be going through this themselves. As I said in the beginning, being a child of divorced parents is difficult. Divorce is not something I would want any couple or child to go through. Divorce to me should not be an option. If you choose to make a commitment to someone then stick to it.
From the last essay I wrote, I tried to have as much grammatical value as I possibly could. An example of a simple sentence would be: Parents and teenagers think so incredibly different. I tried to use both simple and more complex sentences in my essay to show variety.
http://gendersociety.wordpress.com/2013/09/13/why-scientists-think-there-are-more-women-in-biology-than-physics/
I have to agree with this study. This study talks about why there is so many more women in the life sciences than in the math sciences. I've always wondered that myself. Why are there so many more woman biologists than woman physicists? This article gives a very good view on why that may be. It mentions how woman may feel like being in biology helps people more than physics. This is a viewpoint that I hadn't really considered before. Most of the time, when you hear about the division between men and women in physics the main point that is brought up, always, is that women are persecuted against going into a more math related science. The article touches on that as well and even talks about how we can change this rift. I liked how it gave you multiple reasons for this phenomenon, since it gives me an example to go off of. They also reference the studies they used as well as their own studies. I also liked one of the comments mentioning that there are more women physicists than men in Italy. The comment allows for more questions, why is that? What's the difference? The one thing that bugs me about this study is that they don't give you very many hard facts, such as numbers. I'd also like to see a third possible reason this phenomenon is happening, as that is what we have to do for our causal essay.
In my causal essay I want to explore this topic more. I have always wanted to go into a science related career and have been faced with the dilemma of deciding which science I want to specialize in. I hope that by writing this causal essay I will not only be helping myself explore the realm of possibilities but also get closer to the explanation for why there are so little women in the math related sciences.
Recently, the amount of women scientist is growing, but, it is mostly in the life sciences. (Compound)
http://www.historylearningsite.co.uk/why_do_people_commit_crime.htm
This is an explanation for what pushes people to become criminals. There are many different viewpoints within this writing. One is the theories of a criminologist in the 1800s. He believed that criminals are born that way and can be identified through certain physical features, such as large ears or long arms. He also speculated that women were less likely to become criminals because they lack the intelligence and initiative to commit crime. Sigmund Freud, once seen as a kind of father of modern psychology (although modern psychologists consider both him and his work a joke), believed that criminals were created because they had an overwhelming sense of guilt. He argued that criminals commit crime because they have a constant feeling of guilt and want to be punished. Therefore, they commit crimes in order to receive the punishment. According to Freud, this constant sense of guilt comes from an overly developed superego. Modern psychologists feel that most criminals are criminals for one of two reasons: either they have no other way to provide for themselves (such as homeless people robbing a grocery store for food), or they are looking for a fast and easy way to make money. Modern psychologists believe that criminals are driven by anger more than anything else.
2) My goals with my causal essay are to outline some of the main reasons that domestic violence occurs.
3) "Domestic violence can affect not only the victim, but also all those around them." This is a complex sentence. My sentence variety is pretty good.
What makes a person really enjoy watching a horror movie? Why would anyone want to sit through the pain of watching a movie like that? Professionals like to call it the "horror paradox," which still leaves me puzzled. Most people like to experience pleasant emotions, and it would seem crazy to think that anyone would purposely watch a scary movie. Most people in favor of scary movies believe that this phenomenon is just an attempt at entertainment. Something to stray away from boredom, but who likes being scared? After I watch a scary movie, I find myself up at all hours of the night. Jumping at every creak the house makes, sleeping with the lights on, and watching meaningless movies. The thought of someone coming to kill me doesn't leave my mind until I wake up the next day. My dreams are filled with graphic images. Night terrors and waking up screaming has even happened before in fear for my life. In the world of psychology many have said that everyone's brains are wired differently. Scary movies can also cause different effects on numerous people. Some may start to develop violent tendencies due to the movies they have been watching. Psychologists have said that people tend to watch these scary movies because of the feelings that rush in when it is over. There is a physiological arousal that wakes you up and tells you that everything is over, and all that adrenaline is present. All of the emotions that were present during the movie, like hysteria and fear, linger. Those emotions are intensified when the movie ends and links hand in hand with the emotions you were feeling previously, all that adrenaline is rushed in from every emotion. There has and will continue the stereotype, that only men like scary movies, which when tested has been the truth. Statistically most men prefer scary movies over women. With the causal essay I plan to write, my goal is to explain all aspects of my topic. I want any reader to know why one who does something does what they do and vice versa.
My dreams are filled with graphic images. *This is a simple sentence I used within the blog task. Dreams being the noun, are filled is the verb, and with graphic images being a prep. phrase.
http://www.123helpme.com/view.asp?id=24700
Non-Traditional Sports: Gender Barriers
Gender barriers have always existed throughout culture. Throughout history, women have consistently had their roles in which they were expected to perform, as the same for men. As time has progressed, society has broke away from it’s provincial viewpoints and has modernized. Due to this occurrence, women taking on larger and more powerful roles has become more accepted, but there is still obstacles present regarding certain topics such as sports. The frequently asked question seems to be; what gender is appropriate to participate in a certain sport, and why do these traditional answers seem to be unalterable?
I agree with the article that I read. The author expressed their opinion that stated that it is a good thing to have strong willed people rooting to push the limits concerning what an acceptable sport for a male and female to partake in. The author helped explain this assessment by discussing females as bodybuilders and males as synchronized swimmers. These two sports may seem to be an extreme stretch for some people’s taste. Although, if given a wider look at the reasons given for men and women to not be allowed to intermix within these two sports, you will find that it is simply just a mind set, and that the physical ability of a person takes no part in enabling them to compete. In my essay I hope to use explanations and quotes from other pieces of writing that will help create further emphasis on the points I am trying to get across to the audience. I also like that the author gave opposing reasons so that the essay was not purely based on one opinion, but I hope to do this more than the sample paper did.
I try to write my essays with a variety of sentences in hopes to keep the reader’s attention. An example of this would include the simple sentence I wrote in my explanation above, “I agree with the article that I read.” I also used a compound-complex sentence such as the following; “ I also like that the author gave opposing reasons so that the essay was not purely based on one opinion, but I hope to do this more than the sample paper did.” Although, when looking through my previous writing, I feel I can create a better use of complex sentences.
Why do people lie?
http://www.blifaloo.com/info/lying-why.php
This essay brings different types of lies into perspective. Are all lies bad? Some people claim they lie to protect others. Would you rather be lied to or told the truth even if it hurt? In the long run, I think I'd rather know the truth. The author claims that there is diferent types of lying as well. I agree with this; however, it is not the little white lies most people think or talk about. The author actually puts a name and a purpose with these lies; them being for: self esteem, maintaining social contacts, and avoiding conflicts. He then breaks them all down and explains the lies deeper to you which I will not go into at this time. I believe there is a line between it’s bad to lie and your lieing will hurt others. The author uses the excuse as saying you are held up in traffic instead of telling your boss you over slept. In the long run this will not really hurt anyone and just helps to save face with your boss. Telling your wife you’re held up in traffic while your really just cheating on her is a completely different type of lie; the author does not touch on this topic.
Overall I agree with the author of this well written essay. I am intrigued by the idea of why people lie and may even write my essay on this. The author does a nice job with keeping his essay interesting by using an arrangement of sentences and punctuation. The author was able to use an ellipsis, both hyphen and dash, along with a colon. However his writing is very informal and a tad sloppy. This could be due to the type of audience he may be talking to as well. He does not want to drown them in his intelligence and defer them from reading his article.
2) My goal with my essay is to intrigue others to learn more about the topic I chose and inform them about my topic as well.
3) The sentence before (about my goal) was compound
http://www.studymode.com/essays/Do-Thin-Models-Warp-Girls'-Body-1542353.html
I 100 percent agree with this essay. This is essay is what a girl should read when feeling bad about themselves. No girl should ever think that in order to be pretty is to be skinny. It explains that models go through very hard times, as in, experiencing eating disorders and health problems. A quote from this essay says, “it is perfectly normal that girls want to look good, but it should not be their main focus.” This should be how everyone thinks but it is not. Even though people tell girls that it is okay not to look like that, everyone is beautiful, and nobody is the same; they still want to be like that. Girls want to present themselves well and that is okay, but you do not need to be a size 0 to feel that you look good! I feel like this essay uses a really good technique of making you feel good about yourself. This whole essay uses that technique and it works! To be pretty; be yourself!! Ex models even say that the models are getting littler, but what is the purpose to that? I think maybe if models were getting smaller people would notice that they are not healthy and maybe would not want to look like that. Also to counter that, some girls would think they have to be that small to look good. People have different ways of thinking and I just wish they would think that they do not have to be like that! Being healthy is a good thing, everyone should try to be healthy. Being healthy does not mean you weigh 90 pounds, it means that you work out and eat healthy; not starve yourself. I really like this essay because it can connect with so many people and it does a great job of showing that you do not need to look like a model to be pretty and healthy.
My goal in my essay is to make it better than my other ones. I really like my topic because crime really interests me. I hope to get emails back from professors to make my essay even better. I want to help people understand the reason behind crime and why people do it and to also help myself understand it. I hope to make this essay very interesting and use more of a sentence variety.
“Athleticism is a small component of becoming a standout athlete; for some sports come easily; regardless, in order to be a star, a player must work hard” I choose this sentence because it is a more hard sentence to write. It is a compound-complex sentence which includes, Because it has 2 independent clauses and 1 dependent clause! I hope to use more of this sentence structure because it makes sentences more fun to read and more interesting! Also I want to make my sentences more appealing and not just simple!
http://curiosity.discovery.com/question/why-people-fall-in-love
I agree with this article on “why do people fall in love?” completely. When people fall in love they feel no greater pleasure and joy than they have ever felt before. When people fall out of love, they experience no greater frustration and pain than ever before. Love basically just makes your emotions that you had endured before escalate to a greater degree. For many of us, when we find love, we think about the future. We think about getting married and growing a family with that person. Finding love gives us a means to an end. Love is much more than the sexual aspect; it’s also about the emotional connection you create with your significant other. The author of the article (Bambi Turner) explains that “Being in love and knowing we are loved in return helps us to reinforce and validate ourselves and our beliefs.” I agree with what she says because when we know we are loved, we understand that we are meant for something and that we are important to someone else. It helps us realize that we have a purpose in this world and that we are able to change someone else’s life. I think that Turner used really good technique in her article because she included other surveys and dependable words from other professors. Everyone can relate to her article because I feel that a majority of us have felt what she explained in her writing.
My goal in this essay is to help inform others on why we actually fall in love. I want people to be interested in my essay and be obligated to keep on reading. I want to work on becoming a better writer myself and improving on the vocabulary I use in my writing.
“Freshmen tend to worry way too much about how they look every single day at school, while seniors wear dressy raiment for maybe the first week; stressing far less about fashion choices throughout the rest of the year.”-- The sentence I chose from my comparison and contrast essay would be a compound-complex sentence. I chose this sentence because I think that it is a lot easier to read than a boring simple sentence. I’m going to try to incorporate more compound-complex sentences in my essays so I have more variety.
The question I thought to ask was "why are women pushed to a higher standard of beauty than men"
For my causal essay I am researching why women in America and other Westernized countries are held to a higher beauty standard that men are. I personally believe that this is very true from my experience, my mother’s experiences, as well as even some of my close friends experiences. The first reason I believe that this is true is found in one of the articles I have read about this topic, linked above. For girls, the ultimate compliment is “you look very pretty today”, where as boys do not receive compliments as often but those are, for the most part, aimed at their successes. Does this in fact pose the question that, for a woman, looking “pretty” is a success they can achieve? I personally do not think that it should be considered a success in itself. Also, within the article it states that being attractive helps people of both genders to move up in the working world. However, being an unattractive woman can hinder becoming a part of the workforce at all. The author should have included a percentage to prove this, however she wrote a small portion of her article stating that employers are more likely to hire an attractive woman. Another point that i found that furthers my opinion is all of the beauty treatments for women. In this article, the author points out that after puberty is a glorious time for a man, as they have filled out with fats and muscles, gotten taller, and grown hair upon their bodies. However for women, as they have filled out with fats and muscles, the only thing society pressures them to do is diet and lose that fat. As women get taller, they may not be the “right height”, too tall or too short, and are pressured to wear certain types of shoes. Finally as they grow hair, waxing almost the entirety of their body becomes a necessity. Though most sane men want a woman who has the child-bearing hips and larger breasts, the majority do not want the rest of what comes with female puberty, thus why there are multitudes of beauty treatments for waxing. My final point to why this article adds to my opinion is the terrible self-esteem that women report having. The statistics show that women almost all women have or will be upset with their bodies: 12% of women over 50 are satisfied with their physical features, 78% of teenage girls face criticism of their beauty on a daily basis, 72% of working age women think about their image everyday. Though, the one i find most sickening is that 51% of 9 and 10 year old girls surveyed said that they felt better about their appearance while they were on a diet. Most girls start puberty at 9 or 10 years, and need that weight gain to let that process function properly. What has happened in our culture is that we have pushed our beauty standard for women to the limit, and are pushing it more and more. What the result is going to be, will be a generation of girls who may be ambitious in sciences and math, but will hate themselves because their physical appearance is not “up to par”.
I really like that this article is formal and has surveys and facts that can be proven within it. However, some statements she makes are not elaborated on enough, and could have added more provable facts. Over all, I liked her flow throughout, and thought her transitions between points were very good.
My goal for my causal essay is to improve my writing and research skills, as well as go out of my comfort zone by writing about a controversial topic, as well as emailing a professor.
“The author should have included a percentage to prove this, however, she wrote a small portion of her article stating that employers are more likely to hire an attractive woman.” is a compound sentence with the linking word however between the two clauses. I need to work on my use of compound-complex sentences, as most of the sentences I have written are compound, complex, and (mostly) simple sentences.
Brendan Gayken: Blog Task 9-25
This is a simple sentence from my last essay. “The Republican Party aligns itself with this political philosophy.” This sentence is simple because it has on subject--Party--and one verb--aligns. “ … with this political philosophy …” is a prepositional phrase, “The …” is an article, “ … Republican …” acts as an adjective, while “ … itself …” serves as a direct object.
My goal for this causal essay assignment is to articulate the motives for homophobia and hatred towards other members of the LGBT community in the most holistic and engaging way possible. I want my audience to be intrigued by what they are reading instead of passively scanning through the reading process.
I chose to read an essay addressing the increased overpopulation of the state of California. The author does a proficient job of outlining the different aspects of why California has become such a crowded state. He cites that California's attractively comfortable climate is a major reason that so many people has chosen to reside there. He goes on to say that pretty much wherever you are in the state of California the weather is extremely desirable. Whether you are on the coast, in the mountains, down in the valleys, in rainy wine-manufacturing country, or anywhere in between, most residents will find a place that suits their tastes. The author does not stop there. He also speaks about California's variety of alluring entertainment opportunities as a result of California’s widespread cultural and environmental diversity. I really like how the author references many different means of entertainment and the ways that it plays a major role in the overpopulation of the state as a whole. The author also includes data and interesting information about California’s economy and job market--further making the state a captivating place to live. I hope to apply these interesting and useful facts into my own essay to both make it enjoyable and formative.
http://www.slate.com/articles/arts/culturebox/features/2014/the_humor_code/why_do_humans_laugh_the_evolutionary_biology_of_laughter.html
Why do humans laugh?
The author starts off by relaying some information about an incident that occurred in Tanzania. In a boarding school classroom, three girls started laughing uncontrollably until it spread to their classmates. Eventually, the school had to close for the day. The laughing “attacks” had lasted for up to a few hours in some cases. I like how he ties a story into his question that he wants to answer. The author then goes on to some information that was gathered through a study conducted by Robert Provine. Provine used tape recorders to document when people laugh, and what they are laughing at. He also had students document when they laughed through a log, if they wished to participate. Provine wanted to figure out the circumstances in which people laugh. I think this was a wonderful addition to the article, it allowed me to find out some interesting facts about laughing, such as how only 20% of the incidents were directed at something humorous. Once the author had this information about laughing, he asked an additional question as to why humans have evolved this peculiar habit. He goes on to say that there are two different laughs, one that is only produced to be polite and another that is more genuine. I like how the author substantiates this by saying there are different muscles involved in each action. He then goes on to say when laughter evolved, the genuine laughter being the first to evolve. He quotes researchers who believed laughing started off as a signal that things were currently okay, or safe. He then goes on to state how the other type of laughter emerged due to us wanting to take advantage of its effects. He then concludes by saying that laughter is more than just a response to humor. Overall, I think the writing was informative, however, I do not particularly like the tone of the article. It seems a little too laid back. For example, he tried joking around about a man Duchenne being a charming person. I do like how he tried to relate the article to people who are reading the article. Quite a few times during the article I was thinking to myself that I have done that before.
The goal with my causal essay will be to relay information about generosity and why humans are generous or benevolent. I hope to bring this information to light in a way that does not bring me across as being too laid back. The author of the article I read had this problem, and I hope I will not replicate it. I know I usually write as if I am speaking, hopefully I can break that habit. I also hope to reference researchers and other credible sources in order to bring validity to my essay. The author seemed to do this fairly well in the essay, it never seemed like a fact was protruding out of the flow of the essay. Everything seemed to tie in together fairly well.
“Are acts of generosity actually done for selfish causes?” This is a simple sentence.
This was the link for the essay I read.
http://www.wiredprof.com/100/sampleessays/causal/causal-analysis1.htm
Kuehn 2
Article: https://academichelp.net/samples/essays/cause-effect/teen-suicide.html
1. I agree with the information provided in this essay. The causes listed for teenage suicide include: divorced parents, a new family, single-parent households, depression, and unsuccessful love (which they generalize to include their entire life as unsuccessful). These are likely reasons for teenage suicide to occur. I like that they stated statistics to verify that there is research to prove there is a relationship between teenage suicide and the causes listed. Even if the cause and effect can not be proved this way, it is good to see that there is at least a correlation. Suicide kills more teenagers than any other way of death, except automobile accidents. There was also a study done to reinforce that many teens who commit suicide come from single-family homes. The author of this essay could use a stronger thesis statement. They left the introduction very vague without hinting at what the causes are that they believe cause teenage suicides.
2. In this causal essay, I hope to discuss an interesting topic that grabs the attention of readers. I want the causes I have in my essay to be realistic and plausible causes. I would like to help those who read my essay to better understand the topic it covers and to think about the topic and its causes in a new way. Hopefully, the reader will learn something from my essay and finish knowing more than they did before.
"Sometimes the stock market falls, and when this happens on a large scale, across all types of stocks, it is known as a stock market crash."
The sentence above (from my essay) is a complex sentence. ‘Sometimes’ is a leech, making ‘sometimes the stock market falls’ a dependent clause. ‘When this happens on a large scale, across all types of stocks’ is also a dependent clause, because ‘when’ is also a leech. ‘It is known as a stock market crash’ is the independent clause. The subject is ‘it’ and ‘is known’ is the verb.
House 2
http://www.jackiefrancois.com/blog/
The name of the article is “Is Pornography Cheating?” This article can be found on Jackie (Francois) Angel’s blog. Jackie is a Catholic speaker (one of my favorites) who travels across the country talking about chastity, modesty, authentic love, etc. No topic is too bold or shameful for her to talk about; her husband (Bobby Angel) and her will talk about anything and answer all questions; their goal is to inform. “Is Pornography Cheating?” was written by Bobby Angel discussing the effects of pornography on the way men in particular view love and women and the excuses they use. I absolutely love reading Jackie’s blog and this one is no different. I agree with the points that are brought up. I find it interesting that “girls can usually see this issue for what it is.” But that guys try to rationalize or make excuses to continue looking at porn; some not wanting to admit that what they are doing is wrong. “Pornography is cheating on your family, cheating on your spouse, and ultimately cheating on yourself.” Pornography has been proven to be as addictive as heroin- it is the newest drug. You just are not physically hurting your body but rather your mind. The author of the blog does a good job of informing the reader of his topic. He uses good sentence variety with a variety in his word choice but yet it still flows well together. I enjoy how the author draws from his own experiences to help teach lessons and make the whole situation more personable.
There are many articles similar to this written by other authors whom I greatly adore such as Jason and Crystalina Evert, Leah Darrow, and Matt Fradd. Enough people are discussing this topic that there is now a new movement against pornography called Fight the New Drug.
I plan to write a causal essay that informs people why certain people would aspire to be teachers but yet others absolutely despise that job. I hope to write an essay worthy of being attached to my Augustana application to help prove to them that I am the right person to be a teacher.
Some want to inspire students like a teacher did for them. This is a complex sentence from my essay entitled “The Love of Their Life: Why People Aspire to be Teachers”.
http://www.huffingtonpost.com/greg-perreault/why-do-we-love-video-game_b_4740425.html
I am an avid computer gamer. This may not mean I am talented, but it does mean that I enjoy computer usage enough for it to be my choice platform for interactive media. This article is about why people use video games, and presents these points fairly effectively. The writer seems to diverge from his set task of explaining why people like video games occasionally. A large portion of the first section of the article focuses on news in the video game industry and the demographics of video game users. Another flaw is the use of video games as examples of why people enjoy video games. It seems like a poor way to explain to someone, who might not have any knowledge of the information, why video games are great.
I hope to use my causal essay to inform the reader on whatever topic I choose. I hope to do this using an engaging thesis, strong points, and powerful sub points. I would also like to use block quotes correctly, as it seems like a difficult thing to start doing. I also hope to create my best work, which is why I have taken such a long time to determine what topic I want to write about. I want to ensure that I can use MLA formatting effectively, which means that I use MLA correctly. Finally, I want the reader to have a different view on the topic of my causal essay, after reading it.
“The resistance offered by the conventional Iraqi Army was minimal.” This sentence is simple. The sentence contains one independent clause, and no dependent clauses. When it comes to sentence structure in my essays, it varies. I will use shorter, simpler sentences to put across emotion or power, while using longer sentences to explain complex topics. The types of sentences vary too, as I often utilize more complex sentences to describe things, while using simple sentences for emphasis.
I choose to read a short causal writing on procrastination because I tend to procrastinate on English homework. I wanted to learn why I procrastinate and possible ways to avoid procrastinating. The writing had a first person viewpoint and immediately caught my attention. A first person point of view only describes feelings from mostly one side and can be partially biased. Besides the viewpoint, the article contained examples of how a person might procrastinate, all of which made sense and were comparable to reality. I would chose to write in a third person point of view to avoid and chance of becoming biased. The author included information on how people procrastinated and with the examples of procrastination from a personal viewpoint and from a observational viewpoint. The essay tied these points together well and helped me better understand why both I and others procrastinate so easily. The essay also included tips on how to avoid procrastinating and ways to better improve your time management skills.
My personal essay is also an great example how to either spend your time really well or to thoroughly procrastinate your way through the essay. My essay sentence is, "Decisions are made every second of everyday and most of these decisions are given little thought." and this is an example of a compound sentence. It is a compound because it contains two independent clauses and no dependent clauses. My grammatical classification in my essay varies and switches sentence types repeatedly in my essay. I still believe that there are still quite a lot of changes needed on my essay and the grammatical classification will change constantly; for every essay is never complete, just due. The changes in my essay will still keep a variety of sentence types within the essay, but with better word flow.
http://www.studymode.com/essays/Why-People-Procrastinate-334228.html
http://www.empoweringparents.com/Self-Esteem-And-Anxiety-In-Teens.php
http://www.cnn.com/2014/07/03/living/puberty-ad-always-girls-confidence-parents/
http://www.brighthubeducation.com/teaching-methods-tips/3320-development-in-early-adolescence-puberty-and-low-self-esteem/
http://www.nytimes.com/1991/01/09/education/little-girls-lose-their-self-esteem-way-to-adolescence-study-finds.html
The ad that went viral, Always’ #LikeAGirl, really put a couple things into perspective for me. That girls really do lose a substantial amount of confidence and self worth after they hit puberty around the awkward middle school years. It also put into perspective that this is one of the first times that the world actually saw this and possibly thought about it a little bit, well hopefully. From studies conducted by multiple universities, the general conclusion was similar. (complex) Girls lose confidence after they hit puberty. Some of the studies concluded that it was because of a hormonal change, body change, and psychological change. Others looked at the differences between races and ethnicities, they discovered that black females tend to lose less self confidence because of the way they were raised. They decided that because those girls drew their self confidence from their families and community members not from the school system. They are surrounded by strong black women whom they admire which helps to keep their view on themselves in a more loving and self worth admiring type of way. Researchers also say that media (social media), boys, school, and physical changes are contributing factors to adolescent girls’ loss of self-esteem. Girls develop at different paces. Others will develop at a faster pace and then feel out of place compared to the other girls; there are also girls that develop slowly, and they feel like they are lacking in what is desired. The girls that tend to develop faster are usually pushed to mature faster, date earlier, and perform in events they wouldn’t have already. Contrariwise, the girls that develop slower feel like they are unwanted and less attractive. One other point that the researchers looked at was the comparison between boys and girls, the boys were always more confident because during puberty for them they get the deep voice and the muscles. They also saw that when girls have trouble in school or on a subject they will blame themselves; boys. on the otherhand, will blame the subject and say something similar to, “I won’t need to know it in the future anyways.”
In my essay, I hope to accomplish more than normal. Before I just wanted to finish, not be late, and have a decent use of vocabulary and grammar. This time I hope to change the views of everyone who reads my essay and bring a new perspective into their eyes as well. I want to also improve my vocabulary and correct use of grammar, like always, because that is what I feel I lack the most.
http://www.termpaperwarehouse.com/essay-on/Birth-Defects/72534
What leads to birth defects?
This article caught my attention very quickly. My Little brother was born with a congenital birth defect and survived. His condition is not the most severe because he was born with cleft palate. In this case the infant can have surgeries done to help reassemble their nasal and oral cavity. Knowing that these defects can cause complications and more stress to the parent creates a sympathetic feeling in my heart for moms. I agree with the statements that are presented in this essay. Some defects are due to the mothers own actions during pregnancy. An example is when a mom is drinking during her pregnancy. She is not taking proper care of her and her child. This will cause complications for her when she is giving birth and/or the child will be born with some form of disorder.
My biggest goal for my essay is for the reader to understand completely the topic of diabetes. Also I hope to achieve the highest standard of writing for my essay. This essay will help my writing techniques improve and help my variation of sentences expand. In my causal essay I expect the emphasis of how dangerous unhealthy eating is to the body. Diabetes should be stressed more in school. The children learning about diabetes will learn to adjust their diets to a healthier form. All of the information that will be presented in the essay will affect the reader but there is a huge message behind it. My final expectation for the essay is to keep the attention of the reader throughout the essay.
A sentence from my essay, “Most foods have extraordinary flavor and create a craving but is it healthy for you?”, is an example of a compound sentence. I have yet to start formatting and writing my essay.
http://www.kontrolmag.com/change-in-appearance-why-do-youth-do-it/
The writing I chose to read about was about how teens change their appearance a lot! It starts off by listing off some of the reasons why teens may change their appearance so much. Some of those reasons from range from boosting their self-confidence to making someone more popular. I like that they brought up both of the drastic sides of wanting to change your appearance. They talk about how it can also show individuality and how that connects to self-confidence. Things that they did good in this writing were show all of the different sides of why people might want to change their appearance. One thing I didn’t like about their writing was that they jumped around too much and it was hard to follow because they jumped from one topic to another so fast. They bring up the point that society plays a huge role in what people wear and look like and I agree with this statement completely. So many people try to change their appearance to look like a movie star or a model and not the way they really are supposed to look like. A statement I don’t agree with is that they say all teens perspective on life is the same. No two people have the same outlook on life because they have been raised and go through different things that shape their perspective to be their own.
My goals for my causal essay is to use more more sentence variety and not use all simple and compound sentences all the time. I want to be able to easily mix in some complex and compound-complex sentences. I also want to be able to create a near to perfect works cited page.
In my last essay I wrote this sentence: This gap has narrowed greatly over the years. This is an example of a simple sentence. That is the type of sentence that I do not want my entire Causal essay to be filled with. I want to try and more intricate and thought out sentences, so that it doesn’t sound like a five year old wrote my entire essay.
http://ideas.time.com/2013/12/16/its-a-mans-world-and-it-always-will-be/
I read an article titled “It’s a Man’s World, and It Always Will Be” about what causes the need for men in power, why women are starting to push feminism, and why feminism is starting to be a big trend. As I was reading it, I came across instances where I found myself nodding my head in agreement, or shaking my head in disgust. The title, for starters was the reason as to why it caught my eye. The next part that I found was interesting was the fact that the author connects the cause of using strong men as models in their lives to compare to, to be able see themselves as women, or even successful women. As a woman going into an engineering career, typically a male’s job, I do find myself comparing myself to boys on a daily standard, and I do see, especially academically, that boys are often handed opportunities and jobs; whereas I have to constantly be aware of what I must do to get there. Another line states that it is true, untaught, feminism that makes women see power as a standard to rise up to. On another note, the article states that feminists have always had to “attack” the common practices that make women more discriminated against. Here is the kicker: “But surely it was and is possible for a progressive reform movement to achieve that without stereotyping, belittling or demonizing men.” I am agreeing that feminists should not have to shut men down, but when the next sentence uses examples such as men inventing “labor-saving appliances” for women who are stuck at home so they have a reduced level of “daily drudgery”, I have a problem. Is this yet another “go wash the dishes” or “make me a sandwich” joke? It is a little difficult to see what side the author is on. The author then proceeds to (and rightfully so) disagree with a feminist book called “The End of Men” by Hanna Rosin, by calling it premature and wrong. Then, statements that men will always be needed to do all the dirty work like bulldozing and making skyscrapers flood back, and my anger starts to flare.Which side is the author on? But, to clear everything up, the main idea of the last paragraph is how men have always taken credit for all of the work women have done, and that it is time for women to be given credit. One thing that I appreciate about this article is that they include other links to information about concepts such as equal pay throughout the essay.
I want my essay to be interesting, intriguing, and insightful. I want to have strong facts and plenty of ideas.
In my comparison and contrast essay, I used the sentence “The one on the left is worn by the marchers on the field, and the one on the right is worn by the drum majors, or conductors, who lead them on the podium.” This is a compound complex sentence. I think that I have a pretty good variety in sentences, but I could use some help.
http://lawsagna.typepad.com/lawsagna/2010/03/7-barriers-to-active-listening-why-we-dont-listen-as-well-as-we-could.html
I completely agree with this writing about what causes us to not listen. I can relate to most of the reasons about why I do not listen most of the time. Todays generation of children have a problem with listening. I think with all the technological advances in society, children are focusing more on that than the real world. In her article, she listed seven reasons on the possibilities of why we do not listen. I think one of the big reasons on why we do not listen is we are thinking about our schedule and how we will plan our time which stresses us out. Most of the time, I ask “what” or “huh” because sometimes I am not paying attention but other times I think it is just my hearing going bad (sadly). If we listened to more of what everyone had to say, we would not have to ask so many questions, we would know what to do, and the world would run smoother. Just about every class period, the teacher will have to ask kids to listen but when they are done giving directions, the student still has questions the teacher already answered. This is a very frustrating event for teachers and it could all be solved if the students lsitened.
My goal of this essay is to either write about why we do not listen or why people still smoke given the dangers. I think the smoking topic would be an interesting topic because it always dumbfounds me. There are an endless amount of reasons whether it be the scientific reasons or the mental reasons.
Because the supply for these types of players is low, both futbol and football players are the highest paid sports positions. This is a complex sentence with the dependent clause in the beginning, futbol and football are double subjects, are is the linking verb, and positions is the direct object.
http://www.webmd.com/balance/features/why-we-cry-the-truth-about-tearing-up?page=1
1. This article is intriguing, questioning the causation of crying. I think the causal points are supported well, although the train of thought sometimes digresses, leaping into other related and interesting, but not entirely pertinent topics. The composer brought up several reasons for crying, centering on one topic—emotion. Whether from sadness, hurt, happiness, or frustration. However, traveling further through the essay opens up more vast ideas, such as how to avoid crying in inappropriate situations and the social ramifications of crying in public spaces. A diverting read, though for the sake of causal information, it was lacking. To keep in perspective, the feature was written to show both causes and effects of crying, not solely focused on the causation of the phenomenon.
2. With my causal essay, I hope to gain further insight into the intricacies of the human mind—namely, the male mind attempting to earn forgiveness through flowers. Truly, it isn't only men that employ the technique of gifting flowers to elicit comfort. However, the why is intriguing. Why do we place a value on a specific category of plants, above weeds, or ferns, or trees, as comforting? In my causal essay, I will explore this topic more thoroughly, hopefully in an eloquent, organized, and perhaps most important, timely manner.
3. “The sympathetic gift of a tree is met more with confusion and dismay than an arrangement of flowers.” (Simple) In my writing style, I tend to under-utilize the compound sentence. Most of my sentences are complex or compound-complex. Some are simple sentences, often intermixed with the longer sentences of the preceding varieties to variegate the reading style. However, for whatever reason, compound sentences do not flow easily from my fingertips. I have a fairly good grasp on fragments, though I am constantly hesitant to use them in formal writing; the practice feels unnatural and incorrect. I worry that the coagulation of my writing lacks connectivity and presents inadvertently pompous airs from a high vocabulary and convoluted sentence structure (avoiding the compound sentence.)
Population is a large part of the world. There are over seven billion of us here. Each and every one of us has preferences about what we wear, what we eat, and where we live. The causal writing example that drew my attention was “34 Million Sardines in a Can.” The weather is mentioned to be of great influence to those whom live within the California border. Though much “variety” exists, there is something for everyone; snow, waves, deserts, and trees. The main topic is overpopulation, which is also helped by the factor of entertainment. Much exists in California due to the vast amounts of media production on location instudios. Since the 1980’s of course, the Silicon Valley boom has influenced job creation by many times. One problem that coincides with a large job market is illegal immigration.
But of course, this essay, even if written in 2001 still proves a valid point. Anywhere there are jobs, problems and good outcomes will exist. I do have to admit, the points made are somewhat unbelievable to myself who has never heard any such like them. This may not say anything given I have only been alive for a short time compared to the history that California and other densely populated areas have had to grow from. Overall, the essay that interested me was clean, neatly punctuated, and had a very nice flow. The essay can be found here: http://www.wiredprof.com/100/sampleessays/causal/causal-analysis1.htm.
My essay of course would like to take aim from the one exhibited. This does not say mine will be as perfect but it can certainly “learn” techniques on how to be more fluid throughout. I do hope to come up with a topic that proves a point but also interests the reader a great deal, by hoping he or she may learn something. My goals are to prove a point, but still argue a widely accepted belief.
The following statement is from the beginning compilations of my personal causal essay, “A CPU must work like crazy to compute data, but not as hard as a brain.” After looking at my first paragraph, I still have more to go but there is a start to something great.
Ezra Voigt
Why Do We Procrastinate?
The article I read was particularly engaging because I would classify myself as a procrastinator. The article explained that around 30 percent of Americans are chronic procrastinators. There are many reasons for procrastination. One of the reasons talked about in this essay was time management. Many procrastinators put off doing a difficult task and instead put their time in different tasks with a more fun or desirable appeal to them. Another reason for procrastination talked about in this essay is the lack of self-discipline. When a challenging task confronts a person with low self-discipline procrastination tend to kick in. Some people simply are not motivated enough to complete the task. As time closes in pressure builds eventually leading to the completion of the task at the last possible minute. Researchers did a study where they put two groups of college students in a room to complete a jigsaw puzzle. The researchers told one group that that the jigsaw puzzle was a test of their cognitive abilities and they told the other group that the jigsaw puzzle was meaningless and just for fun. They told the students that they would have a brief amount of time to practice if they wish too before attempting the puzzle. The procrastinators in this study chose to play games on their phones instead of study. The procrastinators even did this when they were told that this was a test of their cognitive ability. Procrastination has detrimental effects to the procrastinator. Many procrastinator have a very high stress level and tend to be very anxious. Researchers suggest that these are the outcomes of procrastination. Overall I enjoyed this article and the author did a tremendous job on pulling together multiple sources to show the causes and effects of procrastination.
http://www.psychologicalscience.org/index.php/publications/observer/2013/april-13/why-wait-the-science-behind-procrastination.html
With my casual essay I hope to successfully pull together information and to create a clear and concise essay. I hope to explain why poverty creates crime and homelessness.
I have not yet gotten very far in my casual essay so I have selected a sentence from this article to classify. “There’s no single type of procrastinator, but several general impressions have emerged over years of research.” This is an example of a compound sentence. This sentence has two independent clauses joined by the word “but”.
http://www.webmd.com/brain/news/20110923/why-we-yawn
From our earliest age, we yawn. Yawning, has the generality of pointing to tiredness amongst a person. However, is this really why we yawn? Or does our body have another purpose to outstretch our jaws at random points throughout the day? It is also speculated that yawning is contagious. A visual action by somebody being contagious seems far more outrageous than the typical type of contagious that comes to mind, such as the flu. This theory, however, may not be as far fetched as it seems after research is done. This is why I decided to research why people yawn. Although there seems that there is no direct, definite answer to this question, one scholarly article makes a good hypothesis.
In this paper, the author (Daniel J. DeNoon), discusses the causes of yawning. This is a topic that has no clear and definite answer; however, he suggests that the reason we yawn is to cool down our brain. DeNoon uses research from Andrew C. Gallup, PhD, to explain the ideas and reasoning behind the belief of yawning to cool your brain. There are three basic reasonings behind this idea. First, when you yawn, the stretching of your neck muscles increase the blood flow to your neck, face, and head. Second, the large intake of breath while yawning forces downward flow of spinal fluid and blood from the brain. Lastly, cool air breathed into the mouth cools these fluids. This can all lead to the fact that people yawn more in a cooler environment than a warmer one, which Gallup finds to be true through research.
Being no expert on yawning, I do not know whether to directly agree or disagree with this. This theory of Gallup’s seems plausible by the reasoning he gives behind it. So with the aspects given, I can agree with that part that yawning could possibly be used in order to cool our brain through three basic reasonings. However, the article also discusses scientist who have not bought into Gallup’s theory and say that if yawning does in fact cool our brain, it does not do a very good job. It does not do a good job because the research points to more yawning in the colder air than the warmer (where it would really be needed). With this said, I can see where Gallup’s theory could be a good biological thought; however, I can also see the flaws that can come with it. Being that there is no definite answer to this quesiton, I am not sure on which part I agree or disagree with.
Throughout my essay, I hope to find various reasons as to why alcoholism exists and where it is more prevalent and where it is not. I don’t want to take a cliche step and discuss the Native American history of alcoholism or purely the addiction aspect. I plan to go further and find what about alcohol causes the addiction. Or how much alcohol will have to consumed how often for addiction to occur. I also would like to look at various ancestry and nationalities to link this to alcoholism.
“Alcoholism is a growing problem in America.” (simple sentence)
http://petskeepersguide.com/why-do-people-have-pets/
Why do people have pets? It is strange if you think about the details. As humans, we keep pets that are not our same species, are not able to speak with us, and depend on us for survival. According to the article, about 62% of American households keep a pet with the number growing every year. Before reading this causal article, I was not aware of the benefits pets produce. They lower blood pressure, are more likely to keep owners physically fit, bring social opportunities, relieve humans of stress and loneliness. Taking care of an animal gives you a sense of responsibility. If you have a pet you are more likely to get exercise by taking them for a walk. Bringing your dog to the dog park creates opportunities for the owner to meet new people by bonding over similar interests in pets. Studies in this essay show that owning a pet lower cholesterol and triglyceride levels. The author of this essay used research and facts to present their information about the increasing numbers of pet owners in America. That helped verify the fact that it is beneficial to own a pet. After reading this essay, I was more aware of the health and social benefits.
In my causal essay, I plan to try to answer the question “Why are blondes called dumb”? Being a natural blonde, I have been told I have “blonde moments” and there are the dumb blonde jokes. I have found a study from Stanford University proving that hair color has no effect on intelligence level.
“Being born blonde has its advantages and disadvantages, and there is one major concern; when one is called dumb.” This sentence is compound-complex. The part being born blonde has its advantages and disadvantages is an independent clause. It is connected by a coordinating conjunction. There is one major concern is an another independent clause. When one is called dumb is a dependent clause.
http://www.wiredprof.com/100/sampleessays/causal/causal-analysis1.htm
In this essay the author lists examples and explains why California is so overcrowded. The first thing I noticed when reading this essay was that the author uses first person a lot. The use of first person is taking away the true meaning of this essay by putting his own beliefs and bias into the essay. I really like how the author gives good concrete examples of why people live in California whether that be the weather to entertainment and more, he ties them together nicely. The author tries to use a blocked quote but also uses quotation marks and only has three lines of text. I really like how the author explains the long and short term effects of the issue, for me it help to understand the problem. Lastly the author gives examples of how overcrowding California could be fixed, which also helps me understand the severity of the problem.
The goals of my causal essay are to first inform the reader exactly what the problem is then to explain why the problem happens. I am thinking about using: Why do people commit crimes? but I need to do more research on the topic. I need to make sure that I find some interesting facts so that I can keep the readers interest while informing them a great deal. I also need to make sure that what I am writing about it completely true. Also in this essay I need to make sure that I use more sentence variety so that my essay doesn't become boring to the reader.
“Until there are no more humans to commit them, crimes will exist.” This sentence that I used in my essay is an example of a is an example of a complex sentence. Crime is the subject, will exist the is the verb and the dependent clause starts with until (which is a preposition).
http://www.wiredprof.com/100/sampleessays/causal/causal-analysis1.htm
In the casual essay I read the author was explaining why people were moving to California and its effects on the region; a major one being over population. Ergo the title of 34 Million Sardines in a Can. Since California is such an expansive region having mountains to ski or snowboard, sandy beaches for swimming, and wine valleys. Being along the coast and its geographical location gives it a much warmer weather skipping the brisk winters mostly all together. The entertainment in the region is also a big plus for anyone entering the state. Having an abundance of outdoor activities, amusement parks, sporting events, and many more industries including the motion pictures(Hollywood). The strong need for employees can be one major region for the overpopulation. California having the sixth largest economy in the world. Bringing illegal immigrants looking for jobs staying past there work visa having children making it easy to attain citizenship; one in four California residents being born outside the United States. With all these adding up to make California over populated. Leading to diminishing of quality of life in the state, less housing(raising pricing for homes closer to work), and the amount of cars making driving very congested increasing distance and commuting time. California has had an population increase by 13.6% since 1990. Which adds up to around 33,871,647 people and this census was done in 2001. I agree with the author about the long term effects this population growth could have on the state. It could have many bad effects on the environment of California along with the quality of life, needing more energy and resources. I like how the author gave many examples on why the state was being overpopulated. Then stated what would happen if it continued and what would be necessary to keep up with the population growth. The author could of had more cited work having more than one work backing up his essay.
My goals for the causal essay I will be writing are that i will have a good structure. Having valid examples and information being more factual than opinionated. Overall getting a hundred percent would be nice. Having more than one or two sources would be good so I don’t have a ridged essay.
It can also keep a human form freezing to death during winter. Simple Sentence Old Essay. Simple sentence because it contains a subject and a verb.
In my causal writing piece that I found, I read about the freshman fifteen. Is it a myth or is it true? In my paper it states different opinions from different people. Some believe it is and others do not. I personally do not believe the freshman fifteen is true. I think it is all psychological and all about the mind set.
The freshman fifteen is a belief that the college stress and lifestyle build up and pack on fifteen pounds your freshman year. (compound) One could gain fifteen pounds for various reasons being: stress, pizza, beer, lack of exercise, lack of sleep, lack of regular meals, lack of nutritious meals, lack of motivation, and lack of supervision. When you are a freshman, you are now on your own, you have no supervision or guidance and you are now allowed to do whatever you please. With that being said, you will eat whatever you please and drink whatever you want. You will stay up until any hour of the night. It seems very easy to gain fifteen pounds in just your first semester of college, but why do it? Why not prepare yourself for all the freedom and unknown and remember you will probably have access you a gym for little or no cost, you are available to a cafeteria where you can have regular meals, and you are supplied with a dorm and a bed to regulate your sleep and making sure you have enough sleep. If you enter college with the mindset that you are not going to drink beer and eat pizza every day and night and occasionally work out, then I believe you will succeed in dodging the freshman fifteen. If your mindset is nefarious, then you will be too. Believe in yourself and your capabilities. Understand your limits, and utilize your amenities.
http://college.usatoday.com/2011/10/20/the-freshman-15-fact-or-fiction/
http://www.webmd.com/diet/features/is-fat-the-new-normal
The article that I chose talks about why so many Americans have become overweight. The author believes that there is a psychological connection that overweight humans share with each other. If enough people become overweight, then it is considered acceptable. If people feel that being overweight even by a few pounds, then they will not feel self--conscious about what they look like. The other side of this data is proof that what other people think really does impact how we feel about ourselves. I found this article compelling because of my recent studies about Type II Diabetes in another class. It will only exacerbate the problem that my generation is faced with if we are not even self--conscious about our weight, much less our health. The article also gave me hope because it mentioned a recent study that shows a flat lining of the rate at which the American population becomes overweight.
The goal of my causal essay is to explain the connections that explain the creation of new music in Cultures. I want to focus mostly on American music because I understand it better than any other, however I also feel that it is important to provide examples from other cultures and places also. Since we will be attempting to have a college professor review our essays, I would like spend extra time trimming and perfecting this essay so that it is the best interpretation of how I am able to write and express my thoughts. Since the goal of writing essays is to not only teach us how to make a grammatically correct essay but also to make us think critically. Therefore, I will conduct research to improve my essay and learn more about this topic myself.
“But the real question is, where does the new, modern music come from and what factors influence the creation of said music?”
The sentence I chose is a compound sentence.
http://aneconomicsense.com/2013/03/06/the-impact-of-increasing-the-minimum-wage-on-unemployment-no-evidence-of-it/
The causal essay that I chose deals with a common debate going on in Washington and almost has been for the last century, minimum wage. The author starts of by talking about Barrack Obama's State of the Union speech in which he calls for a 24% increase of minimum wage. This would increase the current wage of $7.25 to $9.00. This is sounds great for workers, but it also sparks a argument that if we were to do that then big businesses would just lay more people off and leave more people unemployed. He defends President Obama by saying that according to history of the economics of the United States, there would be no change in unemployment if the minimum wage was increase. The best part about his essay is his use of facts and graphs to support his arguments. This is very important for all causal essays because they are diffidently more factual based than emotional based such as a persuasive essay. His graphs are also very easy to follow and they support what he says in the essay. One thing that he does not do that David Craig in The Saint Martin's Handbook did is the author does not point to his graphs in the essay and instead he puts them at the top of the essay and expects you to learn the information by yourself, without guiding you through it. Also he does not have a works cited, which is very scary because he has a lot of direct and specific facts in which he probably did not know of the top of his head.
The goals that I have in my essay are an interesting topic, good sentence flow and variety, and correct usage of information and facts. An interesting topic is very important because I wish to keep the reader focused and interested in the work I did. Hopefully through this they will learn something through the essay and become entertained as well. My second goal is good sentence flow and variety. I feel that I struggle with sentence variety and I only use simple sentences and not enough complex or compound-complex. Lastly, I wish to have great knowledge of the topic of my essay and be able to support it like the essay that I read. Hopefully I can make a graph to follow along to and cite my sources in a works cited as well.
One example of my overabundance of simple sentences from my essay is "The second World War also brought promising improvements for the lives of women." Even though it is nice to have simple sentences in your essay because sometimes they just flow the best, I believe I use them to much. My essay can start to sound choppy at some points because I am starting and stopping at some points.
http://www.livestrong.com/article/392358-reasons-why-people-eat-junk-food-over-healthy-food/
I read an article about why people choose to eat junk food over healthy food. I, for one, am not a big fan of junk food, but for many people, this is their primary food source. Why would a person choose to consume food that is linked to obesity, diabetes, high blood pressure, and other chronic health problems? This article states that the four main reasons are convenience, anxiety, lack of sleep, and addiction. I fully agree with all four of these reasons. Fast food is easy to find and it can be cooked within five minutes. Stress and anxiety have become major factors in today’s society. These factors often make people expend more energy, which in turn causes people to eat fatty, sugary foods. Today’s hectic schedules also cause lack of sleep to occur among millions of people around the world. According to the article, lack of sleep diminishes willpower, which causes people to make poor choices, such as eating unhealthy foods. I often find myself craving chocolate late at night when I am up doing homework simply because I am trying to stay awake. Lastly, fast food is addicting. Many studies have shown that binge eating unhealthy foods causes neurochemical changes in the brain that are similar to those often formed with a drug addiction.
One other element that I believe could have been incorporated in the article is that of peer pressure or even family pressure. For example, if one friend sees another friend indulging in a McDonald’s hamburger and fries, he or she may decide that the food smells great and want to go buy one for himself or herself. Thus perpetuates the cycle of unhealthy eating. Family pressures can also cause unhealthy eating. If the majority of the food that a family consumes is junk food, the child will grow up seeing that as their primary food. This can eventually lead to obesity and other chronic health conditions.
I liked the format of this article because it outlined each of the four main components with headings. This allowed the reader to know what the article was about without having to read the entire piece. The author also included statistics from studies done concerning unhealthy eating. The article was easy to read and it stayed on track well with the main topic. I think that the author could have included a concluding paragraph that summarized the article’s main ideas. I also think that a paragraph could have been added that goes into further detail about the health risks that come with eating junk food. Overall, I enjoyed reading this article and found it to be a very interesting topic.
While writing my essay, I hope to educate myself on my chosen topic. Once, I have concluded writing, I hope to also educate the reader. There are a variety of topics that I am trying to choose from, but once I have made my choice, I hope to thoroughly research the topic so that I can provide an accurate description and explanation. Also, I plan to correctly cite all the different works that I pull information from so that the authors of the books and articles are given rightful credit. Lastly, I hope to have a variety of sentence structures so the reader stays engaged while reading my essay.
“While performance is the ultimate goal for both orchestra pit and concert band, there are also differences between the performances of both groups.” This is a complex sentence because it contains both an independent and a dependent clause. My essays often contain more complex and compound sentences. I need to work on adding in more simple and compound-complex sentences to create variety in my essays.
http://www.uwimprint.ca/article/3459-the-trouble-with-stereotypes-why-boys
In The Trouble with Stereotypes: Why Boys Aren’t Allowed to Cry, the author discusses why stereotypes have such a negative effect on people, especially those that are mentally ill. Stereotyping causes one to question themselves; wonder if they have been wrong about who they are as a person. Combining information from his research with his personal experience, the author concludes that stereotyping males as “big and strong” is detaching men from their natural instinct to be protective, affectionate, and emotional. While reading this article, I acquired the knowledge of why men of the twenty-first century are often “too tough to show any emotion.” From a girl’s perspective--more specifically, my perspective--I admire any guy who does not fear showing emotion. I see a certain strength in him… one that makes him more manly than any “man” who refuses to show emotion. I say this within reason, of course. I do not mind a man who shows affection to his significant other, tears up after a loss of a big game, or sheds a few or multiple tears in memory of a loved one who has passed on. I understand that every single human being copes with the trials and tribulations of life in their own way and I do not decry anyone who lacks any amount of emotion. There is a time and place for extreme emotions, such as rage or extreme sadness. That being said, I believe no one should ever feel so alone or ashamed of their emotions that they suppress them until they explode, or worse, implode.
Although this author portrayed his point clearly, I believe he easily could have expanded on the topic, used more sources, and supported his conclusions with data from a survey performed. Using more opinions than facts or opinions of other notable people, caused his article to become more of a personal item than a professional item. While writing my causal essay, I hope to avoid too many personal opinions and include multiple opinions of notable people and facts to support their opinions. “Society praises ideals: perfect hair, perfect skin, perfect physique, perfect genetic combination,” is a sentence from my causal essay. The sentence type is that of a simple sentence despite the colon and list following it. Throughout my essay I will focus on having a great amount of variety in my sentence structure.
The essay I read for this assignment can be found here: http://grammar.about.com/od/classicessays/a/friendjohnson.htm
You should note before reading this essay that it was published 18 years before America became a country, so the language used is going to be a bit more...uh...colonial.
In this essay, Samuel Johnson asks, “what causes a friendship to decay?” This is a question that has pertained to most of mankind since its beginnings, and it still does today. Johnson goes on to examine a few main factors that could cause two friends to end up parting. He states that a long separation between them, spending too much time together, opposition in interests, or suspicion can cause a friendship to end. I agree with all of these points. On separation, Johnson says that long separation is bad for friendship, but short intermission is not. In fact, he says it can help. I never understood how two people can do almost everything together and never be alone; to me, that seems like it would remove one’s sense of individuality and cause them to automatically conform to anything their friend does.
With techniques, I think Johnson does a really good job in getting his points across. His language, though it uses words that are obsolete in this day and age, is articulate and helps to serve the essay as a whole. The only real gripe I would have with this essay is that it doesn’t cite any sources. I don’t know if that sort of thing was required in 1758, but without sources, the whole essay could end up coming across to some as one man’s speculations instead of his research.
Overall, I enjoyed this essay. It explains well why friendship decays and what can be done to avoid it.
Oh crap, almost forgot.
2. I suppose my goals with my causal essay would be to explain the reason for my topic in a factual yet interesting manner. I want to explain why exactly soccer isn't as popular in America as other sports.
3. I'm more or less still in the research phase of this essay, so I don't have any sentences actually written down on the document yet. However, I want to use the sentence "Soccer is the most popular sport in the world." in there once. That is a simple sentence.
On variety, if you've read my other three essays, I try to vary as much as possible, both in sentence structure and in vocabulary. I will continue to do that in this essay.
http://web.cerritos.edu/jswanson/SitePages/E100/SampleCausal1.htm
In this essay, the writer describes a modern problem--teen pregnancy. The writer writes about how many of the girls that get pregnant as teenagers end up going about their pregnancies in dangerous ways due to the shunning and punishing of the pregnant teens. The majority of the states in the United States require parental consent for an abortion to take place. This law pushes girls to unsafely end their pregnancy, run away, or even attempt suicide. I agree that this a major problem in the United States. In order to prevent it, the youth must be educated. Changing the parental consent law will not completely fix the problem, the teens must learn about the risks, safety, and the laws involved in teen pregnancy. It is proven that most pregnant teenagers come from a poor family background. Many of these teens have been abused and their families are not supportive or or not able to be supportive because of financial issues. In the sample essay, the points were very concise and not expanded upon. To entice the reader, one must make the essay interesting by adding style to his or her writing. This essay is a very basic example. I really enjoyed, however, how the writer started by connecting the problem to his or her personal life. The writer described how he or she had watched a documentary on television that was addressing the problem. It helps the reader connect the writing to their own life by asking his or herself if he or she has seen something related to that or if he or she has noticed the problem before. My goals with my causal essay is to explain the vegetarianism phenomenon. I want to clearly point out the many reason why people become vegetarians. Sentence: “The percentage of vegetarians increases every year.” Simple
The question why do we feel the need to create and make things? Or how is it made? Looking at art over the years it has changed considerably. It started with cave drawings to illuminated texts, to impressionism and skip all the way to the present and it is abstract. Creating is something all humans are able to do. Some say that they are not that great at “art”. Their definition of art is small and does not encompass the whole term of art. Art is in sports, their movements have to be precise or they lose their advantage. Working with computers take a technical and creative mind. Anything people pursue can be considered art or creative. Creating images and other sources of communication have been around for as long as humans have been here. Before they created a universal language they used images they saw everyday. After the development of language they still used it because it was ingrained in their culture. Then there came the addition of color to the ancient peoples world and they could express even more. Color makes certain people feel different ways. The use of color in different paintings, drawings, and wall color will elicit different reactions. With these unconscious reaction to color the artist can achieve a better impact on the viewer of their piece. For example if the artists is for a social/ cultural change they might use yellow. It might look like a happy color but it makes the viewer angry after a while. This is what the artist is hoping for. To make someone just a passionate about the subject as they are. Another reason people might create a work of art. Is they are trying to explain the “unknown”. If someone paints a canvas with the stars,moon, and planets, people might talk about what they are trying to get across. If the artist in secret is listening they too can learn more about what they question. I tend to explore these reasons more in my essay.
Creating images and other sources of communication have been around for as long as humans have been here.
this is a gerund, and compound sentence.
http://psychcentral.com/blog/archives/2013/06/02/are-artists-crazy/
Artists and Mental Health
When people think about old artist, Van Gogh always comes to mind. He was the “crazy” one who cut off his ear and at a tube of cadmium yellow paint. What is so crazy about that! Alright so the guy was a little mentally unstable, but why do artists get labeled as crazy because of one person. The article I found talked about this problem. Lisa A. Miles had two ideas about artist, “Are they unbalanced by holding different values from the mainstream but also maintaining hope, projecting confidence in their abilities despite vast rejection?...Perhaps artists are amazingly strong individuals trying to weather a storm that defines their life almost as much as the urge for creativity, with poverty looming around every corner of artistic choice.” She has a point. If someone looks at a painting and they have no idea what it is then that artist will not make it. They have to make a name for themselves and then they can paint squiggles and call it art (I am looking at you Jackson Pollock!). Miles goes on to talk about how “valiant though the efforts for the original life might be, powerlessness in a money-equals-power society takes its toll. (complex)” That is a very true statement, artist who paint are not as important as they used to be and so it is easier to fall into depression.
As a fellow artist, I would agree with this article because I have seen artists work. They are very determined people who are willing to do whatever they can to do what they love. Being an artist is hard though. You see other artists who are getting so much attention and you start to feel inadequate to social standards. Really the only difference is the style in which artists work. Some have a more modern view on things and others have a classical view. This happens to me all the time. Last year I took the AP art class that was offered and with every critique I felt as a lesser artist because Bailey Quanbeck or Elli Atrem would go up, show their work, and it was gorgeous. I would go up and, to me, it would look like shoddy work. The only difference is that I have a different style. Being an artist is tough because everyone is judging your work, so in a way they are judging you. It is difficult, but in the end it is worth it.
With my causal essay, I hope to bring attention to the problem with declawing cats. I don’t believe that people realize that declawing a cat means taking part of their toes.
http://www.businessinsider.com/why-people-are-scared-of-clowns-2013-8?op=1
clowns are a frightening thought for many people. Some see them as the jolly makeup-covered goof-balls at circuses and parades, others, see them as terrifying demons. But, why? Why does the phenomenon that is the fear of clowns exist? It could be that anything in the world has the potential for someone to be afraid of it, but why clowns, specifically? What causes people to avoid circuses, parades, and fairs just to stay away from people in silly wigs, makeup, and costumes? The article I chose was titled “The History of Clowns and Why They’re so Darn Scary.” While I read this, I found that the article only offered the first part of the title. While the article did an excellent job of explaining and giving examples of the history of clowns, it did not flat out say why they are “so darn scary”, nor offer a sociological or psychological view of the fear of clowns. A work of literature should always have an engaging title, which this one does, but it should not have a content in the title if it will not be discussed in the reading. The author also incorporated many pictures throughout the essay. As I read along, I was able to have a visual as an example of what the other was saying, which I very much appreciated, even if said visual was exceptionally creepy clowns.
For this causal essay I hope to enlighten my readers. I also hope to learn a lot of information about the topic is choose to pursue. I hope that I can gain information and be able to teach my readers as well as share my views, ideas, and reasoning about the topic I choose.
“As children age, they will begin to glean the knowledge of what their future holds.” This is a compound sentence. I have a habit of using sentences with similar structure throughout my entire essay, especially compound sentences. This was a sentence from my comparison-contrast essay where I discussed children and adults. For my causal essay I hope to vary my sentence types more.
http://health.howstuffworks.com/mental-health/human-nature/perception/smell3.htm
The article I read was about smell. What interested me the most was why do certain things smell good to some people but horrible to others. It is very interesting that some smells are biologically hardwired to smell good. When one smells a new smell the brain often links that certain smell to a person, place, or event. This is why if someone likes an unusual smell it can linked to a memory. For example, I like the smell of fireworks. This could be because the smell of fireworks is associated with the fourth of July. Many candid memories and fun with family and friends makes my brain associate that smell with those memories. This article also
includes content on smelling advertisement. This is when companies take advantage of smell and memory link. Real estate agents often put fresh pies or cookies on the counter to make the house seem more homely or livable. It is often not a very strong or noticeable but it is still noticeable enough. Business have mastered this technique. For this reason I completely agree with the composer on this topic because it is relevant and backed by good reasoning. My goals for this causal essay will be to compose better than I ever have before. I feel as if my last essay was lacking in various topics such as creative writing so I wish to improve this. My main goal is to research this topic to the point that I become an expert in it. My essay is about why people are scared of the dark. Whether it is because of psychological issues, or past experiences. Science facts will also play a role in my essay because science is involved when understanding this fear.
“Music is also played very differently.” Although this is a simple sentence I have a habit of only using compound sentences. I would like to vary my sentences as much as possible to make my writing more enjoyable to read as well as to make it more professional.
http://www.wiredprof.com/100/sampleessays/causal/causal-analysis1.htm
Here in South Dakota, the winter weather is not always a magical winter wonderland; it can be nefarious, treacherous. ---Compound Complex
In the causal essay I chose, the author examines the effect that a dense population, such as California, has on traffic. I like how the author uses the simile comparing people to sardines in a can for their title--34 Million Sardines in a Can. The author also shows their research by giving the reader statistics on the population increase in order to show how overcrowded they are. In the next paragraph, the author then again shows us their impeccable research by showing us the causes for California’s population growth: the wide variety of climate (very mild climate or the snowy mountains), different forms of entertainment, a strong job market, and illegal immigrants. The author also does a good job of talking about the negative effect of the population growth. They explain that we, as a people, have to control our own population since our government will never pass a law to do so. It would contradict the Bill of Rights and our promised Life, Liberty, and Pursuit of Happiness. The only negative side to their essay is the lack of a conclusion paragraph. The conclusion paragraph is usually just to restate the points and wrap everything up, but it was not there. Even though I understood everything that they are saying and their points in the essay are very clear, a conclusion paragraph is still necessary. I still did enjoy this essay. I liked how they used plain english without much verbiage. It was very easy to understand and anyone would be able to read it and know exactly what they are talking about.
http://www.takingcharge.csh.umn.edu/enhance-your-wellbeing/security/rethinking-money/how-does-money-impact-wellbeing
Why has money become such a necessity?
In this article, the author talks about why money is valued so highly and how it shapes our world. Money has been around for decades. In the old days, money was mainly just coins. It was not abundant and people worked harder to achieve it. It has changed a lot over the years and shapes our world. Money has become a necessity that everybody acquires to survive. If you do not have money, you will not be successful. In the article I researched, the author says that money can't buy happiness. I do agree with this statement; however, I believe that being financially stable is a good thing. Life will be easier and less complicated if you have money. I disagree with the fact that you will not be happy if you do not have money. I have seen many people in my life that are not financially stable and they live comfortably. The amount of money in your bank account should not define you as a human being. You should not be considered less of a person if your wallet has fewer dollars in it. Some people value money less than others and take pride in family rather than the objects they buy. I find it hard to believe that a little piece of paper can impact the decisions that you make, where you live, and the places you travel. Money gives you many freedoms and choices. Most people would agree that living in the middle class is comfortable. A middle class family is described as a family that makes around 50,000 a year. The amount of things you buy and places you travel will depend on how much money you make.
In my causal essay I hope to entertain the reader as this article did to me. I want to educate the reader about why money is considered a major part in our world. I hope that this essay will be better than my previous ones because money really interests me. I want to write my sentences using different variety, such as using more compound-complex sentences. Using different types of sentences will improve my writing immensely. Money has become much more than just coins and dollar bills. This is an example of a simple sentence in my essay.
http://www.webmd.com/fitness-exercise/guide/the-top-6-exercise-excuses-and-how-to-beat-them?page=1
The article I read was about why people don’t exercise. This interests me greatly because I love exercising and wish to major in exercise science in school. The number one biggest excuse of why people don't exercise according to this site is that they don't have time. This is one of the most overused excuses I have ever heard because everyone has time in their day for a good half hour workout. It doesn't have to be a two hour crazy intense workout. Another reason people don't work out is because they claim they are to tired. This does not make sense because working out gives your body more energy. I have experienced this first hand. I have more energy on days when I get up earlier to workout then on days when I sleep in. The population also give the lame excuse of exercise being boring. This is a ridiculous statement because whoever says this is not looking too much into exercise at all. There are multiple ways of exercising you just have to find one that interests you the most. You could go bike riding, roller skating, and even for just a simple walk at night after work. There are also many different types of classes that you can take such as Zumba or even go swimming.
My goals with my causal essay are to find why so many people refuse to exercise and why the trend is decreasing why obesity is increasing. I wish to get input from several college professors as well as using my own research to determine why people wish to be unhealthy and appear unhealthy when they could look healthy. I want to give people motivation while reading this essay also and have them reevaluate themselves as why aren’t they exercising and being healthy. I want to change lifestyles.
My goals with my causal essay are to find why so many people refuse to exercise and why the trend is decreasing why obesity is increasing. (Compound Sentence)
http://www.123helpme.com/rearing-in-sociopathic-tendencies-view.asp?id=226590
This essay is about the tendencies of sociopathic people and how that might be caused by how they were raised when young children. The author describes sociopathic tendencies to be “ a result of nurture”, as due most psychology experts believe too. They remark that individuals of normal nature are disposed toward criminal activity if they were deprived of normal social experiences. I think that this assumption that all social deprived children will become sociopaths is not true. Some tendencies of sociopaths may have been lead to by their lack of experiences, but some tendencies could be psychological and possibly hereditary. I do agree that adoptive children pose a greater risk of having sociopathic and criminal ways, but with the nurture of their new parents will help lower the risk. Some techniques used by this author are the use of credited psychology experts and citing their quotes in their essay. Also they referenced many past influential psychologist like John Locke.
This allows their essay to be better credited. The subject is interesting because it shows the psychology side of how people turn into sociopaths by how they were raised. It draws attention to the nature vs nurture controversy.
The goals with my essay are to show the unbiased view on why Americans are fascinated with reality TV shows. Also I want to show the reader why they may or may not be fascinated with reality TV shows. This interests me and how people are enticed by how other peoples lives are more fascinating than theirs.
The fascination of reality shows can not only be seen in America, but also throughout the world. (complex)
My grammatical classification, i believe, is not too bad with variety. I think i use a lot of variety throughout my essay and try to excite the readers. I try not to use too many of one sentence structure.
https://academichelp.net/samples/essays/cause-effect/poverty.html
The causal essay that I read discussed the causes of poverty around the world. The author pointed out that not only is poverty in developing countries, but right here at home in the United States. According to a statistic from the essay, 46.5 million American citizens live in poverty. I liked how the author mentioned that statistic because it goes to show that you do not have to live in an unstable nation to be impoverished. The author mentions that poverty in countries like the United States and Great Britain are overlooked because citizens of those nations do not recognize the problem that is at home but rather at third world and developing countries. I completely agree with this because I am guilty of this myself and I do think that it is common among American citizens. Most American live very comfortable lives. Most have a roof over their head and enough food on the table to get a decent meal. I feel that because comfortable living is common (especially in our area), the problem is overlooked because we just assume that everyone is like us or similar to us. The author continues on and says that as “ the unemployment rates increase, so do the poverty rates”. I agree with this as well because obviously if people do not have jobs, they are not making any money, and if you are not making any money than you can not buy the items necessary to survive. Overall the author did a really nice job of addressing and explaining the issue of poverty. However, the author could have went into more depth of why poverty happens from more than just an economical standpoint.
My sample sentence: Fast food is quick and convenient. (simple)
Men are always urged and expected to buy their significant other a diamond ring when tieing the knot, but why? Why are women so attracted to diamonds?. Diamonds are made of everyday, ordinary carbon. Women love to show off their jewelry to other women, so what better way to show someone you’re better than them in a girls eyes, is to have a bigger rock on your ring finger. Diamonds are essentially worthless; it’s we the people who make them so expensive. If women stopped loving diamonds and everyone wanted rubies, the price of diamonds would plummet and the price of rubies would sky rocket. Jewelry is such a big part of many americans everyday apparel and the more you have or the shinier and bigger they are displays more wealth. Many women tend to wear numerous different types of jewelry at once. Whether it is necklaces, rings, bracelets, or even toe rings. We can’t help but wonder if, but do women love diamonds because of their high price and extensive time it takes to create one? I disagree with the statement that if you want to show someone that you truly love them, you should put a diamond on their finger. My goal is to convince women to stop falling in love with such a simple rock, because they are funding terrible diamond companies. I chose a simple sentence from my essay “ Peyton wasn’t without a team very long.” There is only one independent clause which makes it a simple sentence.
http://www.wiredprof.com/100/sampleessays/causal/causal-analysis1.htm
The essay I chose to read about is about the current population spike. This essay centers around the state of California specifically, but it also comments and relates California and its population to other states and areas in the United States. I think this essay was very well written, and I agree with the writer. The writer states how the current population spike is causing quite the inconvenience for traffic, housing, and even the lines in convenience stores. The writer also talks about some of the reasons people have been moving to California. He writes that California's weather, entertainment, availability of jobs, and proximity to the borders make it a well-sought after place to live.
I have a few goals for my causal essay. With my essay I hope to help educate my audience on my specific topic. I hope to be persuasive, and to clearly get my point across to my audience as well. I hope to have a good sentence variety in my essay and to have well made up sentences as well. I hope that my sentences are meaningful and are not seen as filler sentences as well.
"Punk is a music genre that can be broken down into about thirty devious sub genres and fusion sub genres." This is a sentence from my Comparison-Contrast essay. This is a simple sentence. It is easy to tell that it is a simple sentence because it is made up of only one independent clause. I have found in my essays that I do not have a lot of sentence variety, and I hope to fix that with my next essay.
http://www.wiredprof.com/100/sampleessays/causal/causal-analysis1.htm
The essay I chose to read about is about the current population spike. This essay centers around the state of California specifically, but it also comments and relates California and its population to other states and areas in the United States. I think this essay was very well written, and I agree with the writer. The writer states how the current population spike is causing quite the inconvenience for traffic, housing, and even the lines in convenience stores. The writer also talks about some of the reasons people have been moving to California. He writes that California's weather, entertainment, availability of jobs, and proximity to the borders make it a well-sought after place to live.
I have a few goals for my causal essay. With my essay I hope to help educate my audience on my specific topic. I hope to be persuasive, and to clearly get my point across to my audience as well. I hope to have a good sentence variety in my essay and to have well made up sentences as well. I hope that my sentences are meaningful and are not seen as filler sentences as well.
"Punk is a music genre that can be broken down into about thirty devious sub genres and fusion sub genres." This is a sentence from my Comparison-Contrast essay. This is a simple sentence. It is easy to tell that it is a simple sentence because it is made up of only one independent clause. I have found in my essays that I do not have a lot of sentence variety, and I hope to fix that with my next essay.
http://www.wiredprof.com/100/sampleessays/causal/causal-analysis1.htm
The essay I read was talking about the rapid population growth in California and how it is affecting the state. I agree with his statement because he had many examples to back-up his theory. The reason he gave for the rapid growth were lots of job openings, high rate of legal and illegal immigration, and most important of all; weather. He also stated the short and long term effects which really put me on his side. He said that the overpopulation was making wildlife endangered or even extinct, demanding more schools to be build, and has really downgraded the quality of living in the state. He said that they have to build sixteen classrooms every day for five years to keep up with the kids. The author was ranting about people immigrating and not returning to their home country when their visa expired. He saw this as a problem because they stay and try to have a kid which makes them eligible for citizenship. I really agree with the authors techniques because he first gives you the many ways that the topic is a growing problem and then has a lot of facts and examples to back everything up. The main goal that I have for my essay is to have everyone who reads it end up agreeing with me no matter what their viewpoint is. I want to work on my persuasion skills and have the ready really hooked when they read my essay.
“A impecunious person on the other hand is always looking for that extra dollar hidden in the rubble”. I took this sentence from my comparison-contrast essay and it is a simple sentence. When I examined the essay I realized that I had a lot of long sentences that were complex or compound complex. So I am going to try to improve my variety by having more simple sentences and shortening some of them.
https://academichelp.net/samples/essays/cause-effect/teen-suicide.html engaging essay
The work being presented was suicide within the teenage population. The author states that although a large amount of pressure put on teenagers is also places upon the adult population, teenagers have not yet fully developed their brains and therefore are not yet entirely capable of making rational decisions. According to statistics from CH health, suicide is the second biggest reason for teen deaths (the first being vehicle accidents). One of the most common issue present in suicidal children's lives are divorced households. What parents do not realize is that divorce puts much more pressure on their children than they could ever begin to realize. Another key factor is depression, if one is depressed, then they won’t think rationally nor positively about the future. The third most prevalent problem is due to unsuccessful love. When a break-up occurs, the teenager may see it as a monumental disaster, and therefore can often times tend to respond by blaming themselves and feeling worthless. Afterward, they can shut themselves out from the world and slowly slip deep into depression. From there, the bleak feelings eventually begin to seep in and mess with the adolescents mind. Finally, there is something that triggers the brain and tells it that the only way to rid the person of all the negative feeling the most efficiently is by ending their life. There are multiple other factors that can cause one to want to die. Whether it be situations around them or internal problems, suicide is a huge problem seen most often in teenagers.
In writing my causal essay, I hope to be able to learn more about claustrophobia and what could potentially cause it. I want to learn to inform myself about this phobia of which I possess. I would also ultimately wish to then enlighten any reader about the issue and further educate them.
Watching movies in a theater can be quite an invigorating experience. (Simple)
Katie Erickson
Why does one cheat on their significant other? Does it have something to do with their insecurities or are they just that low? Do they not care about the one they are supposed to care most about? Are they selfish? 30-40% of people believe that cheating is wrong but many of those people engage in this. Statistically speaking, men cheat more than women do. They have higher testosterone levels which is what controls sex drive. Therefor, causing them to cheat more often. I would have to agree with this statement. But, it does not mean that it doesn’t apply to women. Women still cheat just as men do. People will cheat on their significant other due to many different reasons. Maybe they aren’t satisfied in the relationship that they are in or maybe they do not feel that they are valued and loved by their lover. Dissatisfaction is one of the main causes of infidelity. Situations may also come up where one may be tempted by someone or something and it all spirals downwards from there. There intentions were not to cheat but they were pressured continuously until they popped. In my causal essay I hope to dig deep and find a multitude of research in order to get down to the bottom of why infidelity exists. Cheating can ruin a relationship and the mental stability of the person affected for well, forever. Thinking outside of the two involved in the relationship, the family of the couple will also suffer greatly, especially if the two were married. There is an attachment that would form between their in-laws and possible great relationships that get ruined besides the couples. I personally will never understand the reasons why people choose to cheat on their significant other and ruin a relationship that they once valued greatly. No good could possibly come from the act of cheating.
http://www.psychologytoday.com/blog/more-chemistry/201403/why-people-cheat
http://abcnews.go.com/2020/story?id=2442521&page=1
1) This article says that people stereotyping others is somewhat of a primordial thing. Just as some animals of a certain species attack others of the same species because they pose a threat directly, or to the population, people stereotype (or "attack") other people that are different from them. It's all subconscious. Harvard University's Implicit Association Test flashes images of different people (white, black, Asian, Hispanic, young, old, etc.), along with either positive or negative words, at speeds too high for cognitive recognition, and records the subconscious psychological response the brain makes.
It is certainly an intriguing concept, and although it does have credibility (regrettably) due to the reference of multiple psychological experiments that have shown results to support the theory, I would rather believe that it is NOT instinct to stereotype people because it's a "defense mechanism," simply because I like to believe that people are inherently good at heart, and it greatly disturbs me to hear that people have come to such conclusions about humankind.
2) I have no idea where I'm going with my essay--I don't even have a topic yet. However, I do hope that my essay will clearly explain whatever phenomenon I choose to write about.
http://www.slate.com/articles/life/food/2012/07/why_don_t_we_drink_other_animals_milk_the_dairy_of_camels_buffalo_pigs_sheep_and_goats_.2.html
I researched the topic of cow’s milk because I enjoy learning about history and found this to be an interesting topic. I would have to agree with the author of the article because he seems to know what he is talking about and has facts to back it up. I like the style of the writing; The author supports his claim with facts, makes his writing light-hearted and humorous, and informs the reader of an interesting topic.
With my article, I hope to learn more about the topic that I choose to research. I would then like to inform other students of my learnings in a way that they would like to read my essay.
“It should not be illegal.” This is classified as a simple sentence. I feel that I have a nice variety of sentence types within my writing.
Teenagers: Why Do They Rebel?
The essay that I have chosen for this blog task was explaining to parents why their teenagers may rebel. The author, Jeanie Lerche Davis, says that it is due to developmental changes in the brain and simply growing up. She also mentioned how teens now are pressured at an earlier age than those 20 years ago. In those times drinking, partying, and having arguments with parents did not occur until the adolescent was in their late teens. Now, younger teens are rebelling due to peer pressure. Because the brain is developing during adolescence, teens see things that they did not before. When you are a little kid, you idolize your parents. In your mind they are perfect human beings that never make mistakes. They are superhuman. However, when you get older, you start to see all the flaws in your parents. They are no longer perfect, and this causes you to be introduced to reality.
I agree with the author on this topic because, being an adolescent, it is what I am going through. When I was younger, adults never seemed to make mistakes. I honestly thought that when I got older that I would be perfect like the adults. I was very disappointed when I discovered that my parents made mistakes. I found myself no longer agreeing with them on every decision that they made. Sometimes this disagreement will lead to arguments. The author did a good job of connecting with her audience (parents). Her subject was relatable and her explanations were comforting. She also used a variety of statistics in order to get her point across. Using the statistics was an effective addition to her essay. It showed that not all teenagers will rebel by drinking, doing drugs, or taking part in illegal activities.
My causal essay is about why people choose not to wear seatbelts. My goals include making my audience aware of the danger of not wearing a seatbelt and giving them the push they need to buckle up. “There is a knock at the door.” This simple sentence is going to start my essay because it grabs the attention of the reader by forcing them to ask the question: Who’s at the door? Though I am not that far with my essay, I am planning on revising many of my sentences so that my essay has a variety of sentences to engage the reader.
http://www.sbnation.com/longform/2012/11/16/3650028/lionel-messi-european-soccer
The essay I chose to read was about why the world loves soccer, but America does not. For most of this essay the author explained why soccer is loved by so many people all around the world. Reading the essay, you could tell that the author was very passionate about soccer; the author, John Carlin calls soccer, “the greatest game.” Knowing that the author was so passionate about the game of soccer made me want to continue reading the article. In the article the author explains why soccer is so great, and he talks about some of the greatest soccer players ever in the world. If I were the author, I would add more reasons on why the world likes soccer more than America. Out of the entire essay, there are only three paragraphs explaining why the world’s love for soccer is greater than Americas, and one of those paragraphs includes the conclusion. One paragraph talks about how thirty percent of soccer games end in ties, and it says, “America is a country of losers and winners...Americans are less equipped to handle the concept of a tie than any other nation on Earth.” Predominantly I agree with this statement, because in America we do not like ties, and soccer is one of the few sports in America that can end in a tie. However I also disagree with this quote, because I believe America is equally equipped to handle the concept of a tie as any nation on Earth.
My goals for my phenomenon essay are to further prove or find faults in the phenomenon I chose. I will do this by researching reliable sources. Also, I hope to improve my sentence variation and my word choose. Choosing a phenomenon that I am interested in, will be the key to writing a great essay.
Since I am still brainstorming ideas for my causal essay, I choose a sentence from my comparison-contrast essay. Because they have to keep the other team from scoring, defenders are important. This sentence is a complex sentence, because it contains one independent clause and one dependent clause. This class has taught me how to use better sentence variation, and different ways to start sentences to entice the reader. I hope to continue to learn to use better grammatical classification variety.
http://kimolynyk.ca/Stephen%20King%20Essay.pdf
The piece of writing I chose was written about why people choose to watch horror movies. He said that the reason people go see them is because every human is the same and we all have a sick, twisted side to us. He says that all of us are the same as those locked in the crazy house but the majority of us just hide our insanity better. He says we go to horror movies to appease the twisted side of our minds. I do not necessarily agree to this but I did he brought up many interesting points and thought the essay was very fun to read. The composer could have elaborated on his opinions more in a few parts of the essay but over all I thought it was very well written.
The goal of my causal essay is to ,first of all, find a topic to write about. But once I accomplish that goal I hope to write an essay the one I found above. I want my essay to be about something others find interesting and want to keep reading about. I want my essay to have many details and I want it to be written well. I want to be able to inform the readers about something they might not have known before but inform them in a way that entertains them. I want to write an essay that provokes thought. But more than anything, I want a good grade on my essay!
Well, regrettably I have not started my essay as of today so I do not exactly have a sentence to grammatically classify at the moment. But when I do write my essay, I hope to have a variety of different sentences to make my essay flow better than having a bunch of simple sentence.
Alex Hillestad
http://www.directessays.com/viewpaper/89708.html
Divorce in America
The essay that I read talked about reasons for divorce in America. The main reason was focused on money. Money problems can cause an overwhelming amount of stress and stress can cause repercussions. These actions can be fights, abuse, and divorce as an end result. Money does not grow on trees and with inflation the dollar does not stretch as far as it use to. I have talked to parents who love children and asked why they do not have more children; their response, we can not afford it. That can lead to another problem. People are quick to put the blame on others and this leads to who makes more money. When fights start that line gets brought out. The finger points when people feel the need to defend themselves. People will take this to heart and the job will suffer. They will work longer days and getting home will be late. The house will become messy and the children will feel abandoned. It is just a domino effect. When women are the money-markers for the household it makes the men stressed as well. In society, it is perceived that the men should bring home the money and women are inferior. Men are less manly when they can not bring home the money. I would agree with this essay. Money is highly looked upon in society and with my personal experience shows that it can break a family apart.
This essay only had one main reason. I would have expanded on other ideas as well. It had strong reasons and could be related to.
In my causal essay I want to have people understand why people stay in abusive relationships. There can be personal reason but most people follow a pattern. Hopefully this helps others understand the situation of why people stay. With this information they can help the abused person get out and get help.
Being outed in a same-sex relationship can be a fear; staying together to protect themselves is a main goal for abused people. That sentence is a compound sentence. The two parts of this sentence are independent, that makes it a compound sentence. I need to work on my sentence variety for this essay.
I chose a causal essay about if reality television shows are harmful or not. I agree with the author on her opinion of reality shows; they may say they are a reality show, but they are still scripted. Not all shows are like this, but most are. The viewers watch it because it is entertaining to them. Reality television shows sometimes are just humiliating people and mocking contestants. I think this is completely wrong, but I always find myself watching these shows when I do watch television. They are the most entertaining shows, so it is hard not to. I enjoy the author’s use of words and the variety of lengths of their sentences. They have extremely well thought out transitions. Their introduction and conclusion connect nicely.
My goals with my causal essay are to use a higher vocabulary, a better variety of sentences, and to concentrate on my transitions. This essay is a great way to learn how to expand on those categories because it shows great examples for all three of the things I want to improve on. I want to spend more time on editing this essay to make it better. My topic is why people stay in abusive relationships. I have always thought why someone would stay in this type of relationship and not just leave, but after reading and researching information on the reasons why, it has helped me grasp a better idea on why people do. My last goal is to really connect with my essay. When people read my essay, I want them to think that I put a lot of time and effort into my essay; I also want them to think that I was emotionally connected to it and that I really cared about the subject.
The sentence I chose from my essay is: What people do not understand is there are many reasons that are holding them back: pressure, reliance on the abusive partner, and conflicting emotions; understanding these reasons may help you help someone else out of an abusive relationship. This is an example of a complex-compound sentence. I think this sentence is a great start to one of my goals: variety in length of sentences.
Guthmiller 6
http://www.wiredprof.com/100/sampleessays/causal/causal-analysis1.htm
This essay that i found was about how California has become over populated and how this affects the state. I agree that California has had a surplus of people coming into the state, but I do not think there is much you can do to solve this. He picked his reasons that people flock to California like weather, activity, and jobs. These are reasons that many people can relate to when they think about where they want to live. He writes that if California continues to grow like it has been, it will become a strain on the state and the environment it encloses. I liked how he used a block quote to include an informative and a thought-provoking quote. I do not like how he uses words like “our” and “us.” I like his topic that he came up with. I also liked how he pulled in the reader in the introductory paragraph by asking the reader questions.
My goal for the causal essay is to stay factual and try to stay away from it being an opinion essay. I want to come up with an interesting and informative topic. When picking a topic I want to find something that will allow me to learn just as much as the reader might. I also hope to get good sources from both professors and other knowledgeable resources. I hope that I can flawlessly cite them. I hope by writing these essays, I am finding my voice and hopefully that will help me learn about who I am and who I want to be.
I found a sentence from my most recent essay in which I compared family life in the 1950’s to the family life of modern day. “Music has changed significantly since the 1950's as well.” I would classify this as a simple sentence.
Duncanson 2
1. America has been considered the land of untold opportunity by many people throughout history. That opportunity also includes an opportunity to a greater access to food than ever before. While hunger in America is still an issue, a more prevailing issue is the rise in obesity. Over the past 20 years, the rise in obesity has been astonishing. In 1990, not one state had an obesity rate higher than 14%. In 2010, 12 states had an obesity rate beyond 30%. This sharp increase in obesity has led some, like myself, to question why this increase has occurred. A popular belief is that Americans have more money now than ever and spend countless dollars on food. Rachel Berl argues in her article that having less money will put a person at a greater risk of becoming obese. I agree with Rachel. Healthy, organic food is very expensive and fatty, quick-to-make food is very inexpensive. This view is supported by the obesity rate of Mississippi. Mississippi, which is the poorest state in America, has the largest rate of obesity at 34.9% of it’s population obese. A person who is wealthier would be able to purchase healthier food and potentially purchase a gym membership as well.
2. In my causal essay, I wish to inform to people the reasons that the sport of golf is decreasing in popularity. I will provide multiple reasonings to support my claim. I also wish that I can learn even more on why golf is decreasing in popularity.
3. “The gentleman's game of the past is becoming the no-mans game of today.” This sentence that I have chosen is an example of a simple sentence. I was able to reach this conclusion because “game” is the subject, “is becoming” is the verb, and “game” works as a predicate nominative. My sentence variety is not very good at the moment, but I will improve it as I compose my essay.
http://health.usnews.com/health-news/articles/2012/08/16/why-were-so-fat-whats-behind-the-latest-obesity-rates
Eichelberg Period 2
This article was an approach to corruption in democracies through a historical standpoint. I thought it to be extremely compelling due to the fact that it threw a few curveballs. An example of this would be when the author mentioned that it might be reverse causal as well. That may be not only does democracy breed occasional corruption, but through the corruption comes a lack of voter trust therefore putting the wrong people in power. The author also points out that overall democracy does its intended job of preserving freedoms. The availability of information in a democracy makes corruption harder to keep hidden. The opposite is also argued in the case that that information allows for voters who want corruption to vote for someone they know will be open to bribes. The conclusion is drawn in the end that corruption and democracy go hand in hand and that neither really is the cause of the other.
My causal essay will be focused on what causes people to become psychopaths, is it nature or nurture. I plan to enlighten the reader of the phenomenon of psychopathy. It is absolutely fascinating that certain people in society are born without the empathy of a normal human. I hope to improve upon my sentence structure and look deeper into my writing habits to crack the bad and improve upon the good.
A sentence from my essay is “ To understand psychopathy, the differences between psychopaths and sociopaths must be understood.” This is a simple sentence. “ To understand psychopathy…” is an infinitive phrase, followed by the subject “differences.” After that is the prep phrase “between psychopaths and sociopaths” followed by the verb “must be understood.”
http://pvccenglish.files.wordpress.com/2010/10/studentcausemla2.pdf
While browsing the internet for different causal essays, I came across an intriguing causal essay about Elvis Presley. The whole question about this causal essay was How is Elvis Presley still impacting the world today if he has “left the building?” In other words, why is Elvis Presley still popular today even 20 years after his death? This causal essay explained the causes and effects very well. The essay stated that a couple reasons why Elvis Presley is still popular today is because of his spunky dance moves and evangelical voice. Presley was able to entice listeners with his beautiful voice and invent dance moves that are still widely known today. Another reason Elvis Presley is still famous today is partly due to his ex wife, Priscilla Presley. She provides fans with memorabilia and is helping keep the king alive. The biggest reason why Elvis Presley is still famous today is because of his genuine kindness and generosity. People look up to Presley because of his ability to help anybody and everybody. He gave a lot of people hope. I agree with all of these statements. I believe this causal essay does a great job of explaining the causes and effects of why Elvis Presley is still famous today. The writer of this writing set up this causal essay very nicely. I thought the formatting of the paragraphs were organized great. The author also did a great job of citing information and adding citations when referring to information. He had a clean and organized works cited page.
The goals with my causal essay are to really expand on the causes and effects of my topic. I really want to go deep into the root of my phenomenon and research the causes and effects of it. I also want to obtain in depth information like the Elvis Presley causal essay. Grammatically, I want to add different types of sentences not just simple sentences. Lastly, I want to have a flawless works cited page with the citations cited correctly throughout my causal essay.
Music is the shorthand of emotion. - simple sentence
Huizenga 6
https://academichelp.net/samples/academic-assignments/essays/cause-effect/reality-shows.html
In this causal essay the author discusses why people watch reality shows. He mentions that reality shows are fun to watch and then poses the question, “is there something else about watching reality shows than just having fun?”
His reasons for people watching reality shows boils down mainly to the fact that most of shows of this type focus on mocking contestants or judging them based on looks or skills. He goes on to mention that this is a tactic used to create a fan base, but simultaneously forming “a solid basis for discriminating behavior and a lack of tolerance.” I completely agree that shows present mocking to create entertainment value and that is why a lot of them are watched. While it can teach people to be more judgmental, for the most part the people watching these shows take the criticisms with a grain of salt, not taking the overly critical behavior to heart.
After this he leaves this original cause and starts to focus more on the effects of watching reality shows and only pointing out the negatives. This is because even though it is listed in a “cause and effect” section of this website, it doesn’t focus on the originally posed question of why people watch reality shows and instead focuses on whether watching these shows can be harmful.
The two effects in this essay are the previously mentioned “basis for discriminating behavior…” and a “distorted depiction of relationships between genders.” According to this essay TV relationships are less stable and more sexualized and are generally created as a ploy to increase those characters’ popularity. I agree that these shows’ depictions of relationships can be very perverted interpretations of a real relationship, but just like with the other point of this essay if a person comprehends that the show is created with the sole intent of retaining popularity, these interpretations should not translate to real life.
In my last essay I wrote: Pokémon, the older of the two, is also arguably the more popular. This is a simple sentence broken up with a phrase. I tend to write with a lot of long sentences and hope in the future to be able to utilize more simple sentences and fragments.
In this causal essay i have found, the author has a good use of organization. When I say this, I mean that he has many short paragraphs jumping from one point to the next. In the essay, he talks about why the population of California is getting bigger and one of those points is the weather is great. He writes a paragraph on that and then he moves to the next point. He also starts with question as a thesis statement saying why is California's population increasing. It makes the reader ponder and think a little bit on the topic. It allows the reader think of some of his or her own ideas first before the author states them. Based on their points that they state in their writing, they lead me to agree with what they say. This author did a good job of convincing me that population growth is bad. Though their transitions between paragraphs were a little choppy and I think they could improve on them to make them more fluent. Also the goals of my causal essay are to enlighten others with the knowledge of what gravity is. My essay is more statistical though than say another type of essay meaning it is more science based and just stating information in an interesting way. I hope that the information I have researched gives the reader delight when knowing a little more about the mechanisms of gravity and how its described. The sentence from my essay that I am classifying says, “One day this natural philosopher (a present day physicist and mathematician) was sitting under a tree and this great idea hit him--literally.” This sentence would be classified as Compound only because it uses a conjunction and two independent clauses. Even though it has parenthesis and also a dash, it stays compound and not complex because the parenthesis and dash do not create dependent phrase.
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The article I located and read was about dating in high school. It walked about why people date in high school and for what reasons. This article was against dating in high school and it gave multiple reason why this composer believed this. The biggest reason that most teenagers who date in high school date for selfish reasons. They date someone because they want to bring pleasure and happiness to their self. Some high schoolers date for increased popularity or to seem “cool” to other high schoolers. Some high schoolers use it as a mask to cover up other parts of their lives that they do not want other people to know about or notice. Maybe some do it so that they feel more secure and protected(this would obviously be aimed more at women than men). Another example of selfishness is when people date just for the physical benefits(sex) of dating. Usually these people eventually get tired of sex with whoever they are dating and merely move on like it is no big deal. These are all examples of dating in high school being for selfish reasons. A lot of the reason why high schoolers make these selfish decisions is because most high schoolers do not fully mature until after high school. Because of not being fully maturate in high school, lots of high schoolers make decisions they are forced to live with the rest of their life and if they could, they would want to go back in time and make a different decision. Bad decisions lead to consequences that most people do not realize affects the rest of their life in a usually harmful way. Not only is dating in high school selfish and unintelligent, but it is also expensive. Many males in high school end up spending all this money on dates, jewelry, and other things just to eventually break up with that individual. All that money you spent on the “one” is wasted and you end up regretting the fact that you spent all the money and wish that you could have it all back. Now to clarify, is every single relationship in high school wrong? No, are most? Yes.(this is a fragment) I would agree with what this composure wrote and in fact I might add a few more reason why dating in high school is usually inappropriate, such as missing your future partner and dating for “the ride” and having fun instead of dating someone for how the relationship will end(either getting married or breaking up).
http://fervr.net/teen-life/relationship-mythbusters-high-school-dating-part-one
http://www.slate.com/articles/business/moneybox/2010/11/freaks_geeks_and_economists.html
My goal with this casual essay to learn more and try to understand why terrorist do what they do. I am also going to try look at terrorism in less of a biased and harsh view point. Hopefully through this essay I will also learn on how to improve my citation technique.
I feel that I used quite a variety of sentences types in this blog post.
http://www.wiredprof.com/100/sampleessays/causal/causal-analysis1.htm
I agree with points in this essay on why California’s population is booming. Although I believe the writer took the safe way of explaining these ideas. Nothing in the essay seems to original or personally thought out. The author does not really dive into what makes California special compared to other places, resulting in it’s population. I also do not like how the author got off track with the immigration aspect and went on a little binge talking about families achieving citizenship. Another critique is how the author begins some of the paragraphs, such as, “Now that we have looked at reasons…” this type of writing is completely plain, bland and somewhat annoying. My final critique of this essay is how in the final paragraph the author randomly brings up the Chinese law regarding to families only being allowed a certain amount of children. While this kind of fits the idea of the essay, there was no leading into it and as I was reading it, it took me by surprise; although not in a good way. As for a compliment, I enjoyed the title and the introduction paragraph. Overall, this essay made valid points, but in my opinion they were not original, and often I believe the author had some sloppy writing.
In my causal essay I hope to interest my audience in my topic for starters. Then I hope to explain well on the reasons for the phenomenon. I hope my reasons for the phenomenon are easily understood, but not always obvious. Within the essay I strive to use decent writing, while not getting too eccentric, but not remaining too bland. I hope to find good sources that will contain interesting facts that will have close regard to my essay.
We as humans group together for the thoughts of comfort and protection. - Simple
http://thisibelieve.org/essay/93944/
As I was searching for a causal essay, I did not see any topics that interest me until I saw one about dogs. I am a dog owner myself so this essay was relevant to me. This essay explains why a dog is a”man’s best friend”, as the popular phrase goes. This author mainly focuses on the main difference of having a dog as a friend and having a human as a friend. I like the differences she points out and the differences are key points. She goes onto right that a dog has all the qualities we humans look for in a companion but yet lack the qualities we do not like. The essay explains dogs have characteristics such as being loyal and caring while they are not as offended or rude as humans can be. Dogs do not have to speak a word in disagreement if the owner is speaking out loud while a human could throw out a rebuttal to counteract your speech. I dislike the author’s use of personal speech. It is important to insert her own views as she is a dog owner but to base off a majority of the essay off of her feelings is not just. She also goes onto explain that dogs can brighten up your day if you are in a rut. Other animals or human beings could accomplish this too though. In my causal essay, I hope to provide statistics that can help relate the topic to the readers. I want the readers to understand the essay. I want my works cited page to be correct and organized. I want to get the main point of the essay across so it sticks to peoples’ minds and later in life they could explain the subject themselves to their friends or families.
It is mainly in there head. - Simple
When searching for a topic that intrigued me, I looked for something that would hit close to home. I had various ideas such as makeup ideals, or abortion thoughts. When I realized that I did not have uniquely passionate thoughts about either, I found a topic that made me think and look deeper into what I know. The topic I chose was self esteem and what causes it to be low or high. The piece of literature I decided to scrutinize is a book by Steven Furtick, Crash the Chatterbox. In this book he explains to us his previous struggle with self-esteem by saying, “I used to think that someone who struggled with the kinds of weaknesses I deal with daily was useless to God. I felt so often like I was drowning in internal dialogue….” As in many other personal cases, Furtick had been blaming himself for feeling useless, which, in turn, made him think that others saw him as less of a person. These all happened to be internal, yet they changed the way he thought outsiders viewed him.
I can agree with what he said, because many times people do not feel like they live up to what they, or society thinks they need to be. This causes a negative image of oneself and can make one feel like less of a person. Steven Furtick is a religious author, but I feel like the things he says can be applied to anyone, religious or not. He says that he feels that he can not live up to God, but everyone has someone they can apply it to. Whether it be a parent, friend, or coach, there is always someone who seems to be judging us and putting us down.
In my causal essay, I would like to dig deeper, and get to know the root of where this problem comes from. I realize that there are many causes, but am still curious as to see if one outweighs the other.
We can call these conclusions 'the Bottom Line'. This sentence was in my essay and is a simple sentence because it has only one independent clause. I have a lot of sentence variation throughout my paper.
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