2.) Find, read, and link some terrific persuasive writing you discover online. Discuss this piece of writing in 300+ words, analyzing its use of logos, ethos, and pathos--along with the C.H.E.S.S. strategies (Contradiction; Hypothetical Solutions/Situations; Evidence; Stories; Statistics). Which three specific sentences are most persuasive? How are they used with particularly effective strategy?
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Jorgenson 5
I find that it truly is interesting how easy it is to create a new spelling of a word based of phonetically pronunciation. My friends and I had a conversation about this talking about the misspelling of names. It would be easy to add all sorts of letters to most any name. There are 21 letters used in the English language that are silent. Not to mention all of the ones that make the sounds of different letters. We had fun spelling out each other’s names using all sorts of extra or odd letters. My favorite was taking the name Jessica, and spelling it Gescikah. Phonetically, it sounds the same.
I found this persuasive article on TeenInk.com. The author, Lauren, talks about “forbidding” students “from going to the fast food restaurant during school hours.” I don’t know where I stand on the topic. But she did a good job at showing why she is right.
http://teenink.com/hot_topics/health/article/223089/Persuasive-Essay-on-High-Schools-and-Fast-Food/
What I like about Lauren’s work is that she does a good job of bringing the reader into the situation; she describe exactly what it would be like to go out to eat for lunch. She doesn’t just throw out facts and statistic, but, rather, makes a story, scenario to relate all of her following information to. She talks about all of the problems with the issue that she has brought up. One thing I feel could have been better was to state opposing viewpoints and to discuss with the readers why they are wrong. She is trying to make something happen and disproving contrary information would make it stronger. She should have also not included the phrase “I believe” she should talk about the subject like she is an expert stating everything like it is fact. That is one thing, especially for me that is hard to do. It is hard to talk about a topic as an expert when you wouldn’t consider yourself to be one. That was what I found hardest about the current essay we are writing we couldn’t research and become experts, we were expected to be experts.
I felt her conclusion really brought home her point and was a strong persuading force to the readers. “…students should be forbidden from going to the fast food restaurant during school hours…I urge [you] to side with me because I know that you do not want to witness another generation of young America deal with obesity, and struggle through their schoolwork. The future of our nation needs to be healthy and well prepared to take on whatever challenges they may face, and a fast food restaurant will most certainly not help that cause.”
As the author, she makes the readers feel a connection to the issue. She urges them to believe the same as her. She talks about the travesty that the youthful generation would become if this was to be something that would continue.
Tingle 2
As I've grown up, I've learned to appreciate the English language more and more. I appreciate it, yet at the same time loathe it for the use of "silent letters" in our alphabet. For example, diaphragm, pronounced with a silent g. Confusing. However, I like to see the brighter side with this because this means we can create some ridiculous-looking words with this rule. Such as khubll, or "cool", but with a silent h and b. This is a beautiful word, created by myself, but can also be haunting for those who do not know how to spell, if this was actually in the dictionary.
http://www.americanrhetoric.com/speeches/mlkihaveadream.htm
I chose this link almost entirely because of my interest with Martin Luther King Jr. This is the transcript to his "I Have a Dream" speech, which is what I believe to be surprisingly persuasive. Many believe he is just stating the fact that blacks are not free, even though the Emancipation Proclamation was signed one hundred years previous to this! In this speech, he is convincing the white disbelievers that the blacks are NOT free and deserve equality, not just lawfully, but socially! Remarkable to say the least. He is known to be one of the most passionate speakers in American History, hence why he gained the hundreds of thousands of followers that he did. Not only that, but he is demanding total equality for all races, in an attempt to achieve equal moral values for all. He also can relate to his audience as he himself is a negro as well, so he is able to gain an emotional appeal for that matter.
Presler 7
"Blezkengwejet"
"Language" is indeed a beautiful and confusing phenomenon. Used poorly, language can offend, alienate, and dissuade. Used effectively, however, language can uplift, unite, and persuade. For an excellent example of the latter usage, visit http://www.ushistory.org/paine/crisis/c-01.htm
and read an excerpt of "The Crisis" by patriot and pamphleteer Thomas Paine. Published in December 1776 when the American Revolution seemed doomed to failure, "The Crisis" is a wholesale appeal to the American populace to stay the course and continue the fight for independence. Paine appeals LOGICALLY, ETHICALLY, and EMOTIONALLY to his audience in my three favorite sentences of the document: "The summer soldier and the sunshine patriot will, in this crisis, shrink from the service of their country; but he that stands by it now, deserves the love and thanks of man and woman. Tyranny, like hell, is not easily conquered; yet we have this consolation with us, that the harder the conflict, the more glorious the triumph. What we obtain too cheap, we esteem too lightly: it is dearness only that gives every thing its value." LOGICALLY, Paine points out that tyranny is not easily conquered, and that the hardest conflicts yield the most glorious triumphs. ETHICALLY, Paine exhorts Americans to defend the values dearest to them, yet he also glibly calls into question the patriotism of those proverbial "fair-weather friends" who support the revolution at its apex but cowardly slink away at the nadir of the war. EMOTIONALLY, Paine's ardor for the cause is evident; it is clear that he unequivocally supports America and earnestly wants his audience to do the same, expressing his love for those who have already proven loyal to the goal of independence.
As to C.H.E.S.S. strategies, Paine utilizes several of them brilliantly, though I doubt he had a handy acronym to help him with his composition. "The Crisis" relates evidence, stories, and statistics from the battlefield to show Americans that the war is not a complete failure. Paine shares an anecdote about Joan of Arc's heroics to buoy the spirits of his compatriots, and hints that, hypothetically, a "Jersey maid" could similarly "save her fair fellow sufferers." Finally, Thomas Paine captivates the reader with effective literary devices such as metaphors, alliteration, allusion, and hyperbole. For these reasons has Paine's persuasive work stood the test of time and garnered him status as one of the key contributors to America's independence.
Beldin 1
Growing up I never truly appreciated why, as children, we had to learn to spell. Phonetically, spelling isn't easy, many, including myself, I have learned to memorize spelling of words. I've taken Spanish for four years no, and have found spelling in Spanish words is much easier because all words sound as they are spelled. When creating a new word I really unleashed the beauty of the English language. "gniwh" or "new" was a word I created. Unlike Spanish, many English words have multiple sounds. The "i" in this word sounds like an "e." Also, the "g" and "h" are both silent therefor "new."
http://www.teenink.com/hot_topics/what_matters/article/439535/Persuasive-Essay-on-/
The author in this essay said at the beginning that she wasn't really interested in the topic but then as she wrote the essay, she persuaded herself to become passionate about the topic. Euthanasia is a very controversial topic, and she argues that it should be a persons write to die if they are bound to die because of a terminal disease anyway. The law says that this is illegal because of many written documents saying what a doctor can and cannot do. the part of the essay that was most compelling to me was when she talked about Sue Rodriguez. She was diagnosed with Lou Gehrig s disease and knew she was going to die. She asked courts for a long period of time to let her choose the time she dies, but was refused constantly. The author uses much passion when she says, "Every person in this country has rights: a right to speech, learn, love, live, so they should have a right to die as well." She tries to show everyone how truly awful it is to die a long excruciating death.
The author really utilizes the C.H.E.S.S method. She uses evidence and stories when relating this to Sue Rodriguez. She also contradicts herself by saying that it is completely a right to die, but then says that doctors laws find Euthanasia illegal. Although she lacks using statistics, she truly shoes that she wants to fight for this and help people dying suffer less.
Heidbrink 1
"ghorpsachss"
The word above simply spells "forks" using the gh in laugh, the orps in corps, the a in beauty, the ch in bronchitis,and the ss in sassy. English is a truly beautiful language. (Though confusing at times) Learning English is like learning a handful of languages all at once;you can find Latin in almost every word and many "English" words found inspiration from other languages. All of the different pronunciations from these languages makes it hard for some people to learn English. I can remember when I was a child, I always pronounced "corps" like "corpse" and "coup" like "coop". Perhaps most difficult for me was understanding the multiple meanings behind single words and the positive or negative connotations that went with them.
http://www.in-fisherman.com/2013/07/03/the-mille-lacs-lake-case/2/
The article I read denounced the Minnesota DNR for its reckless new harvest limits regarding smallmouth bass in Lake Mille Lacs. Particularly strong in this writing was its pathos, or passion. Matt Straw included multiple quotes from reputable and knowledgeable guides in the area who were concerned with the harvest limit's impact on their fishery and their business. Logos, or logic, in the essay included Straw pointing out the lack of conclusive evidence the DNR had on smallmouth hurting the walleye population. Straw also offered his own hypothesis on the situation and gave out other ways to solve the problem. Straw's use of ethos, or ethics, surrounded the industry that was based on the smallmouth fishing in the Mille Lacs area. He was concerned for businesses that could suffer from a drastic reduction in smallmouth population. As for CHESS, Straw contradicted the DNR's conclusion that smallmouth were destroying the walleye fishing by hypothesizing that the walleye were cannibalizing their own young and the tribes were over harvesting in the area. He offered up a plan to reduce the proposed limit from six fish to two or three,to see if the DNR's conlcusions were correct. Straw offered up evidence by sharing a story of a similar event that occurred in Wisconsin that eventually produced positive results by going with a smaller limit to promote fish growth. The Wisconsin lake also experienced a growth in tourism and their economy from the improved fishery. A hypothetical statistic that was persuasive to me was, “Do the math: 6 fish X 25 anglers X 20 launches X 3 trips = potential harvest of 9000 fish per day.” Even if it is potential, that is a ridiculous amount of kept fish that would quickly destroy a world class lake like Mille Lacs. Another persuasive quote was, " If there exists a universal sentiment among Minnesota’s angling luminaries on the subject, it is that the quality regs for smallmouths were highly successful, creating a world-class trophy fishery. Yet the DNR would seemingly prefer those angling giants not quibble over the many degrees between “poor fishing” and “decimation” for the smallmouth population in their misguided effort to protect walleyes." It is more than one sentence, but I think it sufficiently sums up the attitude of ther entire article by saying that a good fishery for one type of fish is being destroyed to slightly improve the fishing for another species. I also found this quote to be quite persuasive: "DNR Fisheries Chief Dirk Peterson admits, on the department’s website, the harvest of both smallmouths and northern pike will be increased without any real data proving those species have anything to do with the walleye problem: “The smallmouth bass and northern pike regulations are designed to protect smaller walleye until we have better information on what these predator species are eating.” Peterson adds that a “predator diet study” will follow." This quote exposes the fact that the new regulation laws were based on speculation rather than fact.
Dreyer 2
Within the English language there can arise many confusions when it comes to the pronunciation or spelling of specific words. Certain words can even be pronounced the same way. For example, one may say potato as po-TAY-to and another po-TAH-to. Either way, the meaning is still the same. This is why the English language is difficult to learn for those of another native tongue. The word I created is “toemeightoe” or tomato. By using the English word “toe” and creating the “a” with the “eigh” in neigh, I can transform a simple word into a more confusing version.
http://teenink.com/opinion/all/article/10545/The-Positive-And-Negative-Effects-Of-Images/
The persuasive article I read, entitled “The Positive and Negative Effects of Images” by Kim P, focuses on the effects advertising have on teenagers. Because the author was a female, I could really relate to her experiences that she shares. I can tell that Kim is very passionate about the topic. She describes her familiarities with specific advertisements and how they have made her feel afterwards. In the article, the author compares a Calvin-Klein ad to a People magazine ad for an Olympic track star. The Calvin-Klein ad depicts anorexic teenagers while stating "It doesn't matter who you are, just be." The author feels very unimpressed by this believes that these types of ads are having a negative effect on teenage girls because they insist having a model-like appearance is the key to success. The People magazine ad depicts a real life Olympic athlete, portraying that you can be yourself and not have to hide behind a shell. I trust the author’s knowledge and sincerity behind the topic as I have had similar experiences. In the article, Kim displays logos, ethos, and pathos, because she presents her opinions in a logical way with passion connecting to her audience’s connections and provides information that is reliable and trustworthy.
As for CHESS strategies, the author uses many of these in her persuasive article. In order to explore both the positive and negative sides of advertising, she contradicts two separate ads and explains the effects they have on the viewer. Hypothetically, the author explains possible questions and scenarios that could arise from each ad, specifically how they could be interpreted. By using real life ads, she provides evidence to support her opinion to persuade her audience. Adding a personal touch to a persuasive piece of writing can connect you to your audience and further help your cause to persuade the readers. The author explains how she felt immediately after each ad and how they affected her. Although Kim does not use any statistics in her article, I feel she does not need to, as her opinion is based on the effects of articles which is difficult to have stats on how individuals feel. The most persuasive sentences I believe are “"Wow, she is so accomplished" not "Gee, I wish I looked like her in a bikini." Even though it would be nice to look like those stereotypical models, they're just genetic freaks. What our society needs is more positive images. I don't want to hang the model industry, but how can we see clearly with all that make-up in our eyes; if you know what I mean.” These sentences really persuade me because she takes a real example and puts it into a perspective that makes me think and question advertising.
Lien 7
"Ghlouar"
The English language is extremely confusing and leaves many feeling dumbfounded, for those who do not know the language, such as foreigners. Many American's feel that languages such as Japanese, or Spanish are much more complicated then our own, but one would be surprised. With all the "silent letters" and spelling "rules" that must be used, to sound educated, our language is one of the most complicated. The word above simply spells flower. One would never know that, if they did not understand the ways of the English language.
Although I also have strong feelings toward this topic, I overall agree with the author. Ishika's persuasive blog against abortion is convincing and impressive. I feel she has done a tremendous job, especially considering she is only thirteen years old. Throughout her discussion she voices her thoughts on abortion including the many reasons she is against it. Logos, Ethos, Pathos, and C.H.E.S.S. are continuously recognizable during her argument. She presents great amounts of passion with her opening statement following with her supportive paragraphs. Logos is also evident when detailed statistics and citations are given to show her planning and organization that creates flow, and farther helps to support her argument. C.H.E.S.S. is very well executed in the 5th paragraph when Ishika purposefully tries to oppose herself and see from the other point of view. Doing this will aid in receiving a response from the opposing side. I feel her fist sentence is one of the most effective because it asks a personal question involving the reader's own life. In addition, "If it was for a selfish solution, you're sacrificing a life many other families would love to raise as their own." I feel this sentence is effective because she is pointing out how many other families would concider a baby a blessing instead of a buren. Also, the sentences with statistics placed in them are convincing because now instead of only using words to prove her point, she also has numbers and facts to back it up. Overall I feel that this article is well executed example of persuasion and is capable of accomplishing what it was intended to do.
Lien 7
http://youthvoices.net/discussion/persuasive-essay-abortion
Murtha 5
The past two weeks I have had the honor of helping young fourth graders in a variety of subjects. We have worked with math, science, reading, and their least favorite, spelling. I understand where they are coming from on their build up of hatred for spelling and grammar comes from because I use to be in the same boat and at times still am. Buried in a deep thought trying to type everything out on the computer before your mind wanders to new ideas and a miss spelled word with a squiggly line pops up. Now many times this has caused me to loose my train of thought because I have to change it right away. The English language has a funny way of replacing simple letters with more complex ones. “OPH!” Some may be puzzled by the unique creation of the common word of. The o starts the new word and the ph replaces the f sound at the end of the word.
http://www.presentationmagazine.com/example-persuasive-speech-global-warming-6769.htm
The title of the speech I have decided to disuses on the blog is called “Global Warming!” This topic is important to me because I don’t want to loose part of the lands that we cherish just because of the small actions that we can change in simple ways. In the beginning the author uses pathos by explaining we may loose monuments and other important building. The part that really makes you emotional is when he describes loosing homes, people, and lives due to our unintentional actions. The ethos of the speech can be found when the author is explaining the simple changes we can make to help our planet stay cool. He or she give us the options to walk, plant, and freeze to save the planet. Lastly, they explain that if everyone changed their habits in the simplest ways we could save the land and create a better environment on earth.
The author brings up valid points but does not really do a very good job of persuading me to change. The points don’t jump off the page and creating a feeling of immediate change like some persuasive speeches do. The fact that they bring up loosing homes and lives is the only aspect that I thought made me want to adjust my life style. “Monuments and great buildings, as well as homes and lives will be under water, including New York City.” “After all, it will be our next generation that will feel the effects.” This sentence kind of affected me as well because I am the next generation and my kids would be the next. I want them to grow up enjoying the same land and beauty that I have experience and seen in person and not just in pictures. The beaches of Florida create a beautiful sight as the waves crash on the white sand. Granted the beaches would be recreated but the memories would be washed always like the loose sand in a tumbling wave. “If everybody stuck to these rules, we would be doing a great thing by protecting the earth. “ With this sentence the author brings back that everyone has to change to create the planet we want and it can not just be a single person, town, or state. Together we need to create a better environment and planet.
Gacke 2
“Pinggzloti” is possibly the most contradictory and confusing language that exists in the world. To prove my point, I invented the word “Pinggzloti,” phonetically pronounced like the word “English”—the “p”, “g”, and “z” all playing the role of useless, silent letters, existing for the sole purpose of further complicating the English language. Though this persnickety language is often too frustrating for our desire, using it correctly and effectively can create powerful works of persuasion. To witness one of these impressive writings, visit http://www.nyu.edu/projects/sanger/secure/documents/speech_to_mothers_our_duty.html and read Margaret Sanger’s “To Mothers—Our Duty.”
An early nineteen hundreds social activist, Sanger attempts to convince her readers to help poverty-stricken mothers and their children. Logically, Sanger persuades with facts. She references a health report documenting the losses of children in New York City—“48,420 little infants under one year of age and 72,926 children under five, all in three years.” Anyone reading these shocking facts would agree that it is a “shameful slaughter” that innocent children have died due to lack of a healthy environment. Ethically, Sanger calls into question the character of well-off, prosperous women. Though they may label themselves as reformers, Sanger challenges whether or not they have done any good for the condition of society. By doing so, Sanger creates a willingness in her readers to prove her wrong and do something to help those in need. Emotionally, Sanger depicts a typical female factory worker. She forces readers to picture this harsh life in their heads: a young girl devoted to the monotonous factory life because that’s the only way she knows how to live, her face pale “and pinched with that hunting look of poverty.” Sanger cleverly uses these three types of persuasion throughout her writing in an attempt to stimulate her audience.
“Her child is undersized, underfed, weak, sickly and ofttimes deformed. It, too, has paid the price of birth; it has given its little strength with every heartbeat, that it may be born, and now it is here, cheated and swindled of its birthright. Women, women, arouse yourselves! If you are not so unfortunately placed, it is but a trick of circumstances.” I consider the preceding four sentences to be the most persuasive of Margaret Sanger’s essay, touching her readers’ hearts with her powerful words. Perfecting the C.H.E.S.S. strategy, she provides evidence through heart-rending stories and outrageous statistics. Near the end of her argument, she briefly and promptly states the main points she would like to make clear to her readers. Promoting equality between the sexes as well as protecting and educating mothers and children regardless of race, Margaret Sanger proved to be an outspoken advocate of her feminist ideas.
Brockey 1
Unfortunately for our beloved blog friends from all over the world, my word is no “Blezkengwejet” or “ghorpasachss.” Not even a “Ghlouar,” I simply have re-created the word say using Ce for my s sound as it sounds in celery, and et as my ay sound as it sounds in fillet; Ceet. Short and sweet as the saying goes. I do not fully appreciate our English language because it is much like living in a large city; you can almost never fully understand all aspects of English writing/speaking unless you are experience with the “same city” for an extended period of time. Professors/teachers and writers will further their education and remain “in the same city” for a number of extended years in comparison to someone that will travel the same route with a slight detour due to construction every once in a while.
http://stovermusic.com/Five_String_Banjo/why.htm
Written to Patrick Costello, the article I found immediately hits some emotional roots. When doing his morning routine of French toast and television he had his first epileptic seizure. Costello goes on to say that once he became conscience of his surroundings and what was occurring he still had to wait nearly a day before anyone had informed him on what had happened; however, he still had questions that had not been answered and was another scared, unsure teenager. His circumstances were obviously more severe than most teens but teens have all been unsure or insecure at some point in time and everyone has been (or will be) a teenager at one point in time. With one stone Costello covers logic and ethics with one sentence “People kept thanking me like what I was doing was some kind of a big deal and it took me a little while to realize that, to them, it was a big deal.” Behind this he finds purpose in being useless (as found out earlier in reading) and playing the banjo is logical because he cannot do much now that he has Epilepsy. Ethically playing the banjo is right for Costello to do because it not only makes him happy and feel achieved in life but makes others feel good and that is what I feel is his real reason for him to continue playing his revealing day in the hospital.
Unknowingly using 3 of 5 C.H.E.S.S. strategies Costello wrote well for a simple banjo player. As the majority of his article “Why I Play The Banjo” was a story he covered the stories portion easily, contradicting himself unintentionally occurs once where he goes into detail about not appreciating the Biker, yet the Biker was really the reason he had a chance to bring joy to himself and others by playing his banjo. Lastly Costello poses hypothetical theories about how no one can actually be perfect or complete training in playing the banjo. Playing banjo is more of a background to being merry with those around you and all you need is a simple riff that will allow you to sing a song and others should in fact join in and have a good time.
Larson 7
Pheaux (foe) I have a difficult time coming up with words like this but I believe that this one does work. The “ph” makes the f sound, and the “eaux” would make the o sound. This then would make the word foe.
http://teenink.com/opinion/social_issues_civics/article/300324/School-Bullying-and-its-Consequences/
I found this essay to be very persuasive. It is talking about bullying and the effects it has on people or students. The writer of this persuasive essay believes that school bullies should face more, severe consequences; such as community service, suspension, or even jail time. She believes that if the school was to give bullies a more harsh punishment, we would have less bullies throughout school. She also states that we need to be more aware of the signs of bullying. Teachers, kids, and the school administrators need to watch for these signs of bullying so that they can be reported right away, and not be left unattended. I think her most specific persuasive sentences were: We can help these bullied teens and children by recognizing the signs before they happen. You can possibly save someone from a life of heartache. If we give attackers major consequences then bullying will decrease in school. Throughout her essay about bullying she uses several examples, some very personal and some she has seen happen. The personal example that she gave, she tells us readers about a time when she was with her brother at school, her brother as she noted has ADHD and takes medication for it, and these kids came up to him and called him a “retard” and said that they were not going to hang out with him. As a big sister she tried to do the right thing, so she told the teachers and the principal and all they told the kids to do was to stay away from her brother, they were not punished at all for their actions. The author is very good about the way she wrote this persuasive essay. She gets your attention by giving statistics on the number of kids who commit suicide from being bullied. Then she gives you personal examples such as I said before. Finally, she tries to inform her readers on way to change rules in school to make bullying less common.
Baum 5
English is said to be one of the most difficult languages to learn. I could not agree more. The English language has many rules and guidelines you must follow. In my elementary years I applauded myself and my spelling abilities. I was soon introduced to the cruel world of silent letters. Suddenly, spelling became a challenge. "Cekneau," phonetically pronounced as snow. Oh the beauty of the English language.
http://www.teenink.com/opinion/social_issues_civics/article/543977/Drinking-and-driving/
This link brings you to a persuasive writing dealing with the dangers of drinking and driving. The author immediately draws me in using pathos due to the fact that I myself have had a family member involved in a drinking and driving accident. The author talks about his own brother was killed in a drinking and driving accident. "When teenagers or anyone decides to mix alcohol and a motor vehicle, tragedy is often an intersection away." This sentence stuck with me because it's a play on words. Literally it could mean an intersection away. You never know where the next accident will occur. The author is clearly credible due to the fact that he himself used to be heavily involved in drinking and driving. He knows the dangers and the consequences that come of it.
"It’s difficult not to drink when you’re a teen, you have pain, depression, want to fit in with the popular, that was my problem." This sentence also had an impact on me. High school and peer pressure go hand in hand. It is important we all resist. Why do people put those that drink and party on a pedestal? Especially, considering it is dangerous, and not to mention illegal at this age. "...just use your brain and think not your liver to drink." I thought this sentence was a clever way to end his writing. I love how it rhymes, it almost sticks in your head like a song would. It's a great reminder to refrain from drinking and driving.
Martinmaas 2
I have always been fascinated with the many different ways to spell a name. I recently took a visit to SDSU and toured the dorms there. On the doors of the rooms, there are names taped to the front to show who lives inside. I noticed a variety of spellings of common names on the outside of the doors including Aimee. Breyannah is the word/name I made up. It is taking my name but spelling it a different way.
http://teenink.com/opinion/social_issues_civics/article/131041/The-Unnecessary-Cruelty-of-Animal-Testing/
This link brings you to a persuasive writing on why not to test makeup on animals. A lot of people have their own opinions on whether or not we should test on animals. This article persuades the reader that animal testing is bad and that other alternatives can be used. However, the Food and Drug Administration does not require animal testing, and alternative testing methods are widely available and lead to more reliable results.” This quote stood out to me because it shows that testing on animals isn’t necessary or even that reliable. “It is estimated that 2 to 4 million animals, including cats, dogs, rodents, monkeys, and others, are tortured in laboratories each year in the United States.” This shows the reader a statistic that helps them visualize exactly how many animals are harmed when they are being tested. It continues to explain all the problems the tests have on the animals. They tests cause the animals to have damaged organs, become blind, or even become paralyzed. The scientists try to fix these problems but usually end up leaving the animal permanently paralyzed. “Scientists actually use deadly chemicals on purpose to see what effect it will have on the animal, causing extreme suffering for the subject and leaving it either disfigured or dead.” The final quote stood out to me because it shows how horrific the science experiments can be. I never knew that much about animal testing before but after reading this article I can see how serious the science experiments can be. I don’t agree with the scientists or that animal testing is ok.
Anderson 1
The English language is confusing yet very interesting. It’s confusing because there are so many different rules and ideas that we need to follow. These rules can change from word to word and mix up the letter and sound. It can be interesting and entertaining when you are able to comprehend the rules and the funny thing it entails. I came up with the word “kwreyce” or crazy, as it is normally appears. This is one of the interesting things you can do with the English language, its spelt totally different but said the same way.
http://teenink.com/opinion/drugs_alcohol_smoking/article/370979/Drinking-and-Driving/
This article on drinking and driving caught my attention because it is something I feel very strongly about. The author, Baylee, has a personal connection to drinking and driving and the effects it can have on a person. By telling the reader about the terrible accident her sister had been in, caused by a drunk driver and telling about effect it had on her, shows her knowledge and interest in this topic. The story she tells really gets your attention because there is so much emotion and shock into it. She makes it seem as if you were standing right there when the tragedy took place. This really brings out the emotional appeal to the article which displays pathos and ethos. The rest of the article shows the logos part in the writing. It has evidence and examples to make it appealing and interesting to the reader. Baylee does a great job in making her feelings very clear to the reader. She also gives suggestions on what you could do so you don’t end up in a situation that could cause a bad consequence or tragedy. In this writing she also displays examples from CHESS; she mostly focuses on the H, E, and S. She does this by giving hypotheticals, evidence, and stories to back up her thought about drinking and driving. I agree with Baylee in everything she says about trying to prevent drinking and driving, I also think she not only composed a persuasive paper but also an informational one as well.
Van Egdom 5
Language evokes images and emotions through simple scratches on a cave wall to powerful rhetoric spoken on the steps of the Lincoln Memorial. A word reflects the meaning, so when the word is spelled differently, the meaning is lost in translation. I took the word beautiful and twisted the appearance of the word to transform it into a word of hideousness. My version is “butteuhfull”. Buttes are ugly hunks of flat-topped rocks. Uh is when a speaker does not know what he or she is talking about, which can turn a beautiful speech into an awkward silence. Full reminds me of when I eat too much after Famous Daves and I feel miserable. So, I combined these three words to transform beautiful into butteuhfull.
http://www.theguardian.com/commentisfree/cif-green/2009/feb/27/population-control-climate-change
The above article makes you ponder the benefits of population control. The author, Colin Feltham, comments on Jonathan Porrit’s proposal of limiting humans to only two children per couple. He uses logos by thinking through the benefits of each and how it would end global warming. Two child laws have been frowned upon in China and failed in India. Feltham’s best use of logos can be seen in this sentence, “A flip side to these questions, however, is how many of us would rather not continue with our lives for one reason and another (terminal disease, paralysing disability, chronic mental illness, life imprisonment), but currently have no choice other than to suffer, or commit suicide in a furtive and messy way.” Feltham uses logic to reveal the reasoning behind euthanasia.
Feltham has ethos, because he uses a wide range of examples to make his points. One of his sentences brings up two classic examples that prove that Feltham knows his stuff, “Didn't Malthus get it wrong in the early 19th century and Paul Ehrlich in the 1960s?” He brings up Malthus, a biologist who wrote an article that explained human populations, exponential growth, and carrying capacity. Then he brings up Paul Ehrlich, who wrote The Population Bomb, which foretells of world starvation in the 1970’s and 1980’s. Feltham knows his subject and proves it with facts.
Feltham has great pathos, because he ropes people in by saying Porrit’s proposal is absurd, but he quickly flips it. Then he asks a line of rhetorical questions to make you think about this undeniable dilemma. After the questions, he backs off, but keeps you included. My favorite pathos sentence is “Why does such a discussion [overpopulation] always feel uncomfortable?” He has such a relevant point, because politicians do not want to confront this impending doom. A woman does not want to be told that she cannot have more kids. Feltham is blunt to the point of rudeness, but he does it to get his point across.
Feltham brilliantly employs C.H.E.S.S. He brings up the differing contradictions people have for this subject and different ways to go about limiting the population. He brings up hypotheticals by posing questions that ask how crowded the British would be willing to make England, when the population grows in the future. The evidence he utilizes ranges from historical figures from history to his logical reasoning to fix problems. He has thought everything through. Feltham brings up the story of Nadya Suleman who decided to have octuplets after she already had six children at home and no way to support them, which shows how ignorant people are about overpopulation. He uses the statistics of future population to drive home his point.
In conclusion, Feltham employs logos, pathos, ethos, and C.H.E.S.S. to debate population control and the effects on the environment. His logic is undeniable and he proves his experience through his examples; if you couple that with his passion, he makes a strong case for his argument. He adds in the C.H.E.S.S. strategies to create a compelling article about limiting population. I am passionate about this topic and implore you to read this article for an irresistible position on the world’s current population epidemic.
Swanson 1
If one were to learn a new language, many would say that the English language is one of the toughest to conquer. In creating my made up word, I looked at many different things that is just considered confusing why things are the way they are in the English language. The word I came up with is a recreation of my own name. "Xeybkn" is what I came up with. I used the x from xylophone, the ey from grey--though can be spelled gray--a silent b and k, and ending it normally with the n.
http://www.washingtontimes.com/news/2013/jul/28/redskins-have-realistic-super-bowl-expectations-af/?page=all
The provided above will bring you to a website that has great persuasive writing why my Washington Redskins have a legitimate shot to get to the Super Bowl. He uses a lot of passion by saying that the Redskins--who only got to the wild card round and lost to the Seattle Seahawks last year in the playoffs--saying that they can and perhaps may go all the way and win it all by raising the Lombardi Trophy in East Rutherford, NJ. The logos, or logic, is written in their as well. He uses logic in his writing by saying how they can get to the Super Bowl. With a team that didn't lose many people on both sides of the ball and more experience with our players, there is definitely a shot to get to the Super Bowl. Rich Campbell also uses ethos in his column in "The Washington Times". Rich has been with "The Washington Times" for quite some time and has been following the Redskins ever since he got there. With his experience he has the ethic in his work. With C.H.E.S.S., he uses Statistics from last season to help with his persuasion why the Redskins can get to the Super Bowl. He also uses stories from the previous season that persuades.
Ode 5
Fizyckall
The beauty of the English language can be described in many different ways. Confusing, annoying, and interesting are all reasonable ways to describe the English language. However, once you fully understand the English language you can use it to persuade, motivate, and unite people.
http://teenink.com/opinion/sports_hobbies/article/575099/Why-Wrestling-Should-be-an-Olympic-Sport/
In this persuasive writing the writer persuaded the reader on why wrestling should remain an Olympic sport. He used PATHOS by relating to young wrestlers. He related to them by reminiscing on when he was young and wanted to grow up to be a State Champion wrestler, National Champion wrestler, and Olympic Gold Medalist wrestler. I think this was a great way of using PATHOS because all young wrestlers can relate to his dream. When using LOGOS he relates to ancient times. He reminds the reader of the significance of wrestling in the Olympics. The writer described how the earliest Olympics revolved around wresting. Along with running and boxing, the ancient Olympic Games centered on wresting. Lastly ETHOS is put into thought in this essay. The writer uses ETHOS by thinking of how ludicrous it is to cut wrestling from the Olympics. He makes a great point because wrestling has been in the Olympic Games since its beginning. It has also been dated back thousands of years by cave drawings.
West 5
I have never really acknowledged the confusions that can occur with the English language. "Ceaciel" is the word I created. It is pronounced, seashell. When we first started talking about this confusion in the English language I immediately thought of a time in grade school when I was reading aloud to the class and I pronounced the word, "Plymouth", just the way it looks, instead of, "Plimouth", like it is pronounced. This really got me thinking about how exceptional the English language really is.
http://us.yhs4.search.yahoo.com/r/_ylt=A0oG7ocZ_DhS1VsAQ78PxQt.;_ylu=X3oDMTBybnZlZnRlBHNlYwNzcgRwb3MDMQRjb2xvA2FjMgR2dGlkAw--/SIG=13hnf2ijn/EXP=1379495065/**http%3a//essaytree.com/english-literature/why-america-should-choose-to-drill-for-oil-in-alaska/
This link informs you on why the United States should be drilling for oil in Alaska. The beginning of this writing performs flawless use of logos, ethos, and pathos. It directly states that America should choose to drill for oil in Alaska, gives important information as to why we should, and briefly gives a few opposing reasons which the author later discredits.
The use of logos is present throughout the essay. The author gives statistics that show how much oil the United States could extract--how long the U.S would be able to sustain itself with it--and gives a very convincing reasoning with statistics about how much of the natural habitat would be harmed, which is very little. The author successfully persuades me with his reasoning of why the United States should be drilling for oil in Alaska.
This writing definitely gives me the impression that the author knows what he is talking about and is creditable. It constantly gives statistics and cites other peoples’ works and findings.
This essay performs pathos to perfection. If there was any doubt that we should not be drilling for oil in Alaska before I read this document, there isn't now. The other gives perfect reasoning with diminishes any thought or reason to not be drilling for oil. It would only help the United States, and hardly at all harm the environment.
The author’s strategies of C.H.E.S.S. are performed throughout the document with many statistics, evidence, and contradictions as I explained earlier. The second, third, and fourth sentences are the most persuasive because it sounds affirmative--the author is saying "It is", not, "It might be." He is also giving reasons as to why the U.S. should drill for oil, and criticizing reasons for not, saying that they are preposterous. This essay persuades me in the fullest that the United States should drill for oil in Alaska.
Clark 1
The English language can have many misunderstandings when interpreting the written word. I came up with “foahn” to demonstrate another form of phone. The “ph” in phone when spoken sounds like the letter “f” and “oa” can be understood as a long “o”. The “h” is one of the twenty-one letters of the alphabet that can be pronounced silently, much like the “e” in phone. I came up with this word while I was staring at my phone trying to come up with a word. Many letters are put in English words that really aren’t necessary, almost rebellious.
http://www.mambaonline.com/2013/09/11/student-scientifically-proves-gay-marriage-is-wrong/
I found this article absurdly persuasive. Luiz DeBarros, the author, informs the reader on a student that claims to “scientifically prove” that same-sex marriage is wrong at the University of Lagos. He uses pathos by writing about an issue that is currently a “hot” topic. Amalaha claims that he is a scientist and that “God gave me the wisdom to use science as a scientist to prove gay marriage wrong,” which represents ethos. “We have seen that the female of a fowl is called hen and the male of a fowl is called a cock. We have never seen where a cock is having sex with a cock and we have never seen where a hen is having sex with another” and uses the magnet’s poles as a comparison between man (north pole) and woman (south pole). He “concludes” this by saying “means that man cannot attract another man because they are the same, and a woman should not attract a woman because they are the same. That is how I used physics to prove gay marriage wrong”. While it’s absurd to compare people to magnets, it is showing logos by trying to use fact. The author utilizes all of the C.H.E.S.S. strategies to convey to the reader.
“It’s debatable as to whether the embarrassing article is more damming of the standard of education at the University of Lagos or of the standard of journalism at This Day.” DeBarros creates a possible doubt within the reader by questioning the legitimacy of the story. “Amalaha claims that he’s the first person in the world to scientifically show that same-sex marriage is wrong…” This just adds more nonsense to the article so much so it made me chuckle. The whole concept on magnets was the most negatively persuasive argument in the whole article. Similar to people’s personalities, this argument could be used in a variety of ways to represent that “opposites attract.”
Stensrud 5
The English language, full of silent letters, can be quite perplexing as a writer. We are taught at a young age spelling of certain letters to allow for an easier time writing in the future. Although it causes great confusion and uncertainty, it can help create crazy words such as “Cheagh“ or Sheep.
http://teenink.com/opinion/drugs_alcohol_smoking/article/48104/Drinking-Age-Should-Be-Lowered/
Written by: Harold G., Wyoming, MI
The writer attempts to persuade his audience with the topic of lowering the drinking age. As a reader, the author portrays great persuasion and backs up his information with real life examples, and situations from other continents, and universities. Following the C.H.E.S.S. method, he talks about reckless drinking and driving, but backs up his contradiction with possible proof of a lowered alcohol abuse rate. He hypothetically speaks of kids who abuse the drinking age to be rebellious. Using evidence, he talks about teens being able to serve in the military, but they are unable to drink. He makes the story more personal and talks about Australians experiments with the drinking age and how it has reduced alcoholism in teens and adults. Although the author covers four pieces of C.H.E.S.S. he lacks statistical information to help back up his argument. He adds emotional appeal by talking about automobile accidents, the military, and other common situations teens are often facing. “Drinking age should be lowered, and I know that by lowering it we can drop the percentage of reckless teen alcohol abusers.” This sentence in the article is persuasive because the author backs up his own opinion, which also convinces the readers to rethink the drinking age. “Well, you are telling me that I can legally kill someone at the age of eighteen, while I sign up with the military and go to war but I can’t have a sip of alcohol.” He uses real life experiences to convince his readers that the drinking age should be lowered and that what he believes is correct. Throughout the whole essay the author does a great job of sticking to what he believes in and works hard to persuade his readers of a topic he believes is ethical.
Fritz 1
It has been said that American’s do not use the English language to it’s full potential. I can say I do not disagree. I personally feel as if there are so many things that I do not know or do not quite understand. Before this class I never thought about using the concept of “silent letters” to create new words. The new word I created was “fown” created from the root word phone. The ‘f’ replacing the ‘ph’ sound and the own replacing the ‘one’ sound.
http://www.teenink.com/hot_topics/health/article/257584/One-lo..
This link will bring you to an article titled “One love… One less” by Amy Elise. Within the article Elise talks about depression and how it can affect ones daily life. Not only does it affect teens but also many adults. The lack of awareness on mental illnesses is stressed. We as friends, siblings, and even children, need to watch for signs of love ones with the illness, because many times it goes unnoticed. Depression is a sore subject with many, but as Elise says, it needs to be brought into the light. Lives are lost everyday—save one, be the change in someone’s life. Be the change in your own life, learn the symptoms so you can be one less statistic! With having a cousin that committed suicide because of depression, this article hit home.
“By becoming one less teenager to have depression, we are one step closer to a goal of one love. One love for ourselves, for each other and for the world.” This sentence stuck out to me as persuasive because it shows you that not only can you help yourself, but everyone around you. Your up lifting mood can lift up all others around you. “As one teenager, you can be the cure to someone’s sadness.” A sentence full of power and purpose—all to save someone’s life.
Rohrbach 5
Mbuphikn:
I don’t like toast; I’d rather have a mbuphikn (muffin) for breakfast.
The above word is muffin. The “mb” is silent like in the word, lamb. The “ph” sounds like “f” in the word, phone. The “kn” just sounds like “n” in words like, knee or
know.
http://tbms.wpusd.k12.ca.us/subsites/Krystal-Arnold/documents/Persuasive%20Essay/Persuasive%20Essay%20Bullying%20Sample.pdf
In a persuasive piece about bullying, Mikayla pushes stricter punishment for those who abuse their classmates. She uses many of the qualities needed to compose an effective persuasive essay. Mikayla used a lot of ethos. She asks her audience to think back to their school days, and how it feels to be insulted, so that they might fully understand the hurt of today’s kids. She addresses logos, when she brings up suicide and the lasting emotional scars that many adults have to this day. Lastly she uses pathos, by giving logical suggestions for how we can deal with bullies. Along with this, she covers the five aspects of C.H.E.S.S. in her writing. Mikayla brings up contradiction, when she talks about punishment for bullies. In response people who say we’d have to throw half of the nation’s kids in prison, she states that the situations should be looked at in depth, and an appropriate punishment should be dealt. The hypothetical comes at the end when the author asks what might happen if a few bullies spent a night in prison and saw what their future might be. Her evidence is in the form of quotes, which she found from creditable cites such as: Scholastic Scope, and The Providence Journal. Mikayla included stories, in which a teen had been so ruthlessly harassed that the student took his or her own life. Unfortunately this essay lacked statistics, and it could have really benefitted from it. Out of the entire essay, the three most persuasive sentences were: “Many adults still get teary recalling their humiliating days at the hands of the class bully.” This sentence makes the adult audience remember the hard times they had as a kid, and reminds us of the lasting trauma of bullying. “Bullies are criminals; they terrorize and harass their victims, ripping apart their selfesteem and attacking their insecurities until the unthinkable happens; violence or even a tragic death.” It was very effective to compare bullies to criminals, and how they lead to many young deaths. Lastly, “The thing is, bullies understand what they are doing.” This particular sentence hits home. For anyone who has been bullied, it’s clear that the intent is to hurt you.
Pearce 1
With all of its silent letters and different ways to say letters and groups of letters, the English language can be very confusing but, when you look at these words and letters, they can be beautiful as well. For example, funny is spelled just like that. However, using phonetics, you can change it to “phuknne.” This is because ph makes a f sound, the u stays the same, the k is silent like in knot, the two n’s stay, and the e takes the place of the y as it makes the e sound that is needed.
http://www.teenink.com/opinion/sports_hobbies/article/280353/Why-people-should-play-footba
The article I read was titled Why people should play football with a sub-title of Everyone Should Play the Great Game of Football: A Persuasive Essay on Football by Tyler K. The reason that I chose this article is because it is about football and I am a huge football fan who has played about five years of football. The ethos in this article is that the author has a clear understanding about playing on a football team. While they don’t state that outright, you are able to tell from his writing that he has played football before and that he has clearly enjoyed his experience with the game. One way the the author uses pathos is by talking about the rewards of playing football. First of which is where he compares a football team to a family. He talks about the bonds that develop between teammates and that it leads to friendships not just on the field but also off the field. The second example of this is when he describes game days. He describes walking onto the field with thousands of fans “screaming and yelling” and feeling that you get when preparing to walk onto this field. The logos in this essay comes in the beginning where he says there is more to football than the “super star athletes and hard hitting” that most people think of. The things that he describes here are the behind the scenes things like the hard work. He starts this essay off well by using the technique as it gets the reader ready to read the essay and it starts convincing you right off the bat.
With the C.H.E.S.S strategies, the author opens up with a contradiction about there being more to football than most people think. A hypothetical in this article is where he talks about preparing to walk onto the field in front of thousands of people. There is much evidence in this essay where the author talks about the bonds that form between players and how the team is a family. There are no stories or statistics in this essay.
The three most persuasive sentences in the essay are: “Not only do they become friends on the field, but off the field as well.” “There is nothing better than preparing to walk onto the field in front of over 2,000 screaming and yelling fans knowing that you get the opportunity to see how you stack up against your opponent.” “Anyone who wants to be a part of something they can cherish forever, I definitely recommend playing the game of football.” I believe that these are the most persuasive sentences in this essay because they do a great job of describing his points and the word choice is very good as well.
Paul 2
The English language is mind blowing. The never ending confusion, exceptions, and the various ways to pronounce words make it a beautiful language. In contrast, these different rules can make English a hard language to learn. The word I made was “chabpe” or shop. I created this word by using the “ch” in chauffeur, the “a” in father, the silent “b” in debt, and the silent “e” in like. Understanding the English language allows us to take a simple word and transform it into a complex edition.
http://www.teenink.com/hot_topics/health/article/257584/One-lo..
The article I chose is “One Love… One Less,” by Amy Elise. From the begging this article stuck out to me because of the way she connected to her audience. The writer explains how depression affects more people than you think, and that it may not be always evident from the outside appearance. I could connect especially with this article after challenge day when I learned first-hand that people are hiding a lot more than I assumed. Amy Elise did an outstanding job persuading her readers to reach out and help others in need with her usage of logos, ethos, and pathos. Using these strategies confirmed her passion for the topic and informed them with liable information that could engage any crowd.
She enhanced her essay using C.H.E.S.S. to persuade us. She gave contradiction when she said, “As a whole, the human race disregards depression as a feeling that can be switched on and off” then follows it up by stating, “Unfortunately, this is not so, and the lack of awareness we have of it leads to some of the most destructive forms of behavior in society.” Here she brings up a point that most people believe, and then contradicts it with evidence—another C.H.E.S.S. strategy—saying they were incorrect. Another strategy she uses is statistics. “It is an illness that affects over 1.2 percent of the American population,” is only one of the many statistics she adds in her article to persuade. Overall this article influences the readers to do something about depression. You can help yourself by eating right and exercising more, or help someone else who seems to be having a bad day by simply saying “hi.”
Hindbjorgen 1
While thinking about writing a word made up of the odd and silent sounding letters and letter combinations that are found in the English language, I immediately thought of the consonant “J.” People often pronounce my last name, Hindbjorgen, with a “j” sound in it making it very confusing, similar to many words that contain silent letters. The word I chose to create is “pheighjcke,” more commonly understood as the word “Fake.” The “Ph” creates an “F” sound. The “Eigh” creates and “A” sound. The “ck” creates the “K” sound. I added the silent “J” just to have a bit of fun.
http://www.artofmanliness.com/duties-of-american-citizenship-by-theodore-roosevelt/
In 1883, the twenty-sixth president of the United States, Theodore Roosevelt, gave a very famous and persuasive speech entitled “Duties of American Citizenship.” In this speech, Roosevelt is pressing the public to realize the importance of citizens being involved in government and doing their piece to help the country. His main point that to be a good man, a good father, or a good husband, you must be involved in some way, shape, or form with the government and politics. This speech is brimming with not only passion, but also polish and proof.
Roosevelt demonstrates ethos by engaging listeners or readers by showing how a man cannot be a good citizen if he is not a good husband or father, not faithful, or fearless. He goes on to say that being a good citizen is only achievable if one participates in politics at his own rate and capability, implying that one not involved in politics is not a good, moral person. By questioning one’s character he is persuading the audience to consider his point. Roosevelt uses logos by using many scenarios and examples to show his expertise in his knowledge of citizenship and politics, allowing the audience to be easily persuaded. Appealing to the emotions of the audience, Roosevelt demonstrates pathos. He tells stories of men doing selfless deeds for their country and reiterates points that he believes to be crucial. Of course, a speech heard live has different amounts of passion than a speech read because voice inflection cannot always be translated through the text.
When put into context of the C.H.E.S.S. Strategies, Roosevelt fills every category to the brim. He states the contradictions of citizens who may not want to be involved in politics or government. The speech almost fully consists of hypothetical situation after situation. He shows much evidence by displaying the successes of men in times past. Stories of how citizens are involved in politics are abundant, such as the story of the Battle of Bull Run and the reactions to it. His statistics moving and very persuasive. Roosevelt wrote a very persuasive essay.
My three favorite sentences Roosevelt used to persuade are:
“In a free republic the ideal citizen must be one willing and able to take arms for the defense of the flag, exactly as the ideal citizen must be the father of many healthy children.”
“You can no more have freedom without striving and suffering for it than you can win success as a banker or a lawyer without labor and effort, without self-denial in youth and the display of a ready and alert intelligence in middle age.”
“If freedom is worth having, if the right of self-government is a valuable right, then the one and the other must be retained exactly as our forefathers acquired them, by labor...”
These quotes are the most persuasive to me because they appeal to the reader emotionally, ethically, and statistically. Each sentence alone is enough to pull on heart strings, but together they are able to move a person. Being persuasive is being ability to change a mind, and I feel that these three sentences, along with the passion they exhibit, would change my mind if I were opposed.
Blue V 2
Ghaistboeuq Facebook
http://www.philadelphiaeagles.com/news/article-1/Players-React-To-Andy-Reids-Return/72923c56-7627-4b63-88fe-711de1c7790c
The article that I observed was one which discussed the return to Lincoln Financial Field that Andy Reid of the Kansas City Chiefs will have. The return is much anticipated as Reid was a Philadelphia, the location of Lincoln Financial Field, coach for 14 years and mentored nearly all of the team members as they developed into the athletes that they are. The logos, or literal appeal, is shown by having actual players comments and tweets in the article and having them tell you how they prepared for this game physically. The ethical pleasure, ethos, is one in which the fans get the excitement of another day, cheering on their favorite team, hoping for a victory. The pathos, emotional attraction, is one in which the players state that they always love to win, but seeing a close friend lose because of it will make it harder to drive down the field and score when they need to.
The desire to always crush the opponent is contradicted by the fact that the opponent is an old friend that helped you when you needed it, talked you through the tough times, and was always there for you. The hypothetical solution is that someone will win, and no matter whom it is, both sides will walk away improved by the experience. Evidence and stories are presented with direct quotes from players as they discussed how difficult it was to prepare and succeed. Reporting that the Chiefs began this year at 2-0, which is the same amount of wins as the previous complete year.
"I’m definitely going to stay in touch with him, probably for the rest of my life." “Some of the good things that I can say about him - he’s an excellent person. I think people don’t realize how good of a person that he was." "I hope the fans cheer him when he comes out and boos him when the game starts."
The first sentence shows how deep a connection some of the players have with Coach Reid, in particular, Michael Vick, who in his prison sentence was frequented by Andy Reid and Donovan Mcnabb, who is getting his jersey retired the same day the Reid returns to play the Eagles, and that really shows how large this game will be to some competitors. The second quote shows that even a person that is watched weekly on national television, and is under immense pressure daily, can be a great person and even when his opponents face him, they still recognize how genuinely kind he is. The final quote is one that shows how much of a mixed bag of emotions this game is as a former player for Reid says that he wants him to be booed, but only at the appropriate times.
Zahn 5
Coming from someone whose first language isn't English, I would have to agree with people when they say that English is one of those languages that is difficult to learn. There is an abundant amount of rules and guidelines you have to follow in order to write and read correctly. There is also an abundant amount of confusion when it comes to pronouncing and spelling words. Some words sound the same but are spelt differently. I created the word "phache" or fake. The "ph" would make the f sound while "ache" would make the "ake" making the word, fake.
http://teenink.com/opinion/all/article/10102/School-Uniforms/
The article I read is entitled, "School Uniforms" by Meredith G, which deals with, you guessed it, school uniforms and how she believes that it is a positive thing. Because the author was a female, I could relate to her thoughts that she shared. The article interested me because it was from a different point of view. Normally, girls are against uniforms, saying they can't express themselves through having to wear a uniform. Meredith takes the other side of it by saying that uniforms unite everyone together. She uses a lot of logos in her essay in order to compose an effective essay on why she believes that uniforms is a positive thing. Meredith also uses a little bit of pathos when she gives the example of how a person may be ridiculed because they cannot afford the "in" clothes. Giving this example is good because some people know how it feels to be ridiculed about their clothes. She also says that some may even go as far as stealing the right clothes in order to feel like they fit in, and again, someone out there may be in those shoes. In this essay Meredith also displays examples from CHESS; she mostly uses stories and examples to back up her thoughts about uniforms. Before reading this essay, I always thought of uniforms as something bad. I wouldn't want to go to a school with a uniform because I couldn't to my own person through the clothes I wore. After reading this essay, I am not totally opposed of uniforms. I agree with Meredith that uniforms is some what a symbol of unity. They demonstrate that we are more than our clothes. We may sometimes avoid that one person because of what they are wearing, but if we just take the time to get to know our peers, we wouldn't have to judge them by the way they dressed.
Arens 2
"Esafagus" or as many people know it as esophagus. Taking the "ph" and turning it into a "f" shows just how challenging the English language is. Changing the "o" to an "a" describes how many letters sound almost the same. Coming up with a new word was challenging until you think about how many letters can sound the same. Creating a new word didn't mean coming up with a new meaning only a different meaning to what you put into it.
http://www.ultimatehorsesite.com/savehorses/bronco.html
The person who wrote this article about how rodeo is not abuse to the bucking horses like many think. He actually put effort into investigating things for himself. He did not listen to all of the anti-abuse websites and put his own effort in to prove others wrong. This shows a strong ethos put into his writing. It shows his credibility to not just be a rodeo abuse bandwagon and instead someone who justifies the facts for himself. The way he uses logos is by a myth and fact area. He explains the myth and then tells the fact to the point so everyone can understand. To demonstrate pathos he makes the people feel sorry for the horse by explaining the myth in detail. Then he makes the reader feel better about the horse and its well being in the fact section.
This man uses the C.H.E.S.S. strategies throughout his entire piece. He contradicts himself by producing the myth and then the fact. He uses hypothetical situations that the anti-abuse people have came up with. These are also within the myth section. He has many pieces of evidence like pictures, more links, and some pieces from a few interviews he has given. He uses stories in some of the fact sections. Within some of them he puts you in the description. For example he states "You're in a tiny chute with a 1,200 pound animal. If that horse gets mad or upset-- you could be KILLED. Do you want to, even if you could, aggravate the horse? NO." This puts you into the answer and makes you think more about it. Finally he uses statistics by explaining a few things that are unclear to many non rodeo people. He explains how the flank strap is just sheep skin, he explains how much it costs to take care of them and also how much a lot of the bucking horses are worth.
1. They work less than 5 minutes a year. This sentence shows statistics. He bolds the words "less than 5 minutes a year" to help persuade people that the horses do not have a hard life.
2. When your horse is feeling really good, excited, with extra energy to burn, what does he do? Buck. This sentence and intentional fragment are very persuasive to me because of the fact that he is proving the myth wrong in one sentence. The myth is that bucking horses buck because they are unhappy and in pain. That one sentence and fragment prove that entire myth wrong. It uses the hypothetical situation to prove his point.
3.These horses are often worth $10,000-50,000 and it is in the best interest of the livestock contractor to make sure his horses are well-cared for. This sentence uses the statistical strategy to prove that the bucking horses are in fact treated well. If a person realizes how much a bucking horse is worth they will realize that they need to be taken the best care of. This sentence makes people think which I think is very persuasive.
Alex Ask, pd 5
"Phanbtashtik"
Ah, the english language is simply marvelously complicated isn't it? The word above, if you haven't figured it out yet is "Fantastic". I replaced "f" with a "ph", "c" with a "k", and threw in some silent consonants.
http://www.reddit.com/r/changemyview/comments/1de36w/cmvif_women_are_allowed_to_abort_a_child_then_men/
Whilst browsing Reddit today, I stumbled upon quite a thinker of a post. The post itself was found in "changemyview" subreddit. The persuasion is a push for male abortion rights. I know its an emotional subject, but I see the logic in his argument. He says if a women should be able to abort a fetus (her body, her right), then since it is the fathers child too shouldn't he have a choice to abort all rights to/from the child? The topic itself is emotional, I see logic in this argument, however I see a lack of credibility seeing as this is a forum.
As far as C.H.E.S.S goes the responders answer any contradictions by the very nature of it being a forum, they give the opposite arguments just to be fired back at by another Redditor. While stating their cases to combat the case above, hypothetical solutions are brought up like better birth control, or choosing sexual partners carefully. The stories are the most convincing. As a pro to the discussion of male abortion rights, a story was brought up of the "creepy I want to be with you forever girlfriend/boyfriend". The creepy boyfriend tries to impregnate a girl, while the creepy girlfriend tries to get pregnant. What they have in common: as a couple secretly become pregnant. What differs is the girlfriend has a way out through abortion if she is not ready for a child, whilst the male does not.
My favorite sentence in this argument is "Mandatory abortion isn't justifiable and neither is mandatory parenthood. It has a logic that I can't combat. On the flip side, an argument against male abortion rights, "There is going have to be some give somewhere. I think the best place to put it should be with the person carrying the child.". I see some logic here, but mostly I see empathy towards the mother and how difficult it is to have a baby. The final argument that I found was for male abortion rights, and had to deal with a male being raped. In a case of statutory rape on the females side, if she becomes pregnant, and keeps the baby, she may choose to sue for child support which is beyond wrong in my opinion. "Currently a women who rapes a man, e.g. statutory rape, can legally sue for child support." Overall, if anybody is reading this, I encourage you to actually copy and paste the link, and form an opinion of your own. (It's ok, Reddit isn't blocked by the school)
Quanbeck 5
There are many people who are quick to protest the complexity of the English language. Though there are numerous rules and confusing spellings, I enjoy the intricate nature of our language; we are able to craft beautiful sentences and we can use countless words. For instance, the world “zealous” has an unusual spelling, yet the word would be much blander if it was written as “zellus.” An original spelling I have created is “wreexuxhn,” or “reason.” An “X” can imitate a “Z” as it does in the word “xenophobia,” yet the letter can also wear a mask when placed in the word “faux.” One may argue that there is no rhyme or reason to English spellings, but we develop better memories when faced with complicated words at young ages.
http://www.writersdigest.com/online-editor/personal-writing-7-reasons-you-should-consider-publishing-personal-stories
I chose a persuasive article on a topic I am interested in with a viewpoint I shy from. The article, entitled "7 Reasons You Should Consider Publishing Personal Stories," explains how writers can reach new heights when stepping out of their comfort zones. You may blossom as a writer, but no one will notice your colorful uniqueness unless you rise above the weeds with something special. That “something special” is a personal memoir. I am not one to eagerly record embarrassing moments and share them for publication, but that’s exactly what Brian Klems suggests. He supports this claim by using several C.H.E.S.S. strategies. The article states the obvious opposition to writing personal memoirs: embarrassment. Klems also provides several examples of his students finding success in the publishing industry with their revealing memoirs. Though Klems does not blatantly give hypothetical situations, he does explain why you should write a personal memoir by giving seven convincing points. The article does not include statistics, either, but rather pushes the persuasion with more stories that convince readers to give the nonfiction writing a chance. Ethos, pathos, and logos are employed throughout this article, as well; writing personal stories is emotionally and logically reasonable because the process is therapeutic and the economics are sensible. The author has great credibility since he is the online editor of Writer’s Digest, a reliable magazine and website.
Another writer starts off the article by describing an interesting assignment. “I began my first feature journalism class in 1993 by asking my students to write a ‘humiliation essay,’ three pages revealing their most humiliating secret.” This sentence grabs the audience’s attention and is followed by two persuasive sentences: “I was so immediately blown away by all of the brave, beautiful, intimate essays they handed in—and, later, by how many of those wound up selling for publication—that it soon became my signature assignment. It’s tough to argue with results: Over the last 20 years, this assignment has led to more than 1,000 wise, well-crafted first bylines for my students.” This introduction, written by reference Susan Shapiro, is persuasive because it appeals to the reader in many ways. The excerpt begins by describing a revealing assignment with an undesirable prompt. From there, she turns something appalling into something amazing—an embarrassing memoir into a surprising success. Shapiro gives herself credibility by mentioning how many years she has taught and how much her students have accomplished. One of Klems’ sentences is particularly persuasive because it gives a specific example of the type of success that can come with a personal story. He writes, “A dynamite 1,500-word New York Times Modern Love piece on how hiking helped her recover from an assault helped my 22-year-old student Aspen Matis get seven agents and editors requesting her memoir.” The article uses many tools to persuade its audience, and I believe the intent was achieved.
Lusk 5
The English language is made up of 26 letters, but over a hundred sounds. Some letters can make multiple sounds depending on what letters they are placed by. Some may even lose their sound all together and just be in a word silently. This is what makes the English language so complex. The word I built is Cawlkkir. This simply says soccer. The c follows the same sounds as in the word cycle, the aw come from the word awesome, the l is silent like in the word calf, and the ir comes from the word first.
http://teenink.com/opinion/drugs_alcohol_smoking/article/48104/Drinking-Age-Should-Be-Lowered/
The article I read was about lowering the drinking age. Harold from Wyoming feels that if teens are going to consume alcohol and under age drink, then it should just be legal for them. He goes through several reasons for why this would have a positive impact. He does a good job of using statistics and backing up his opinions with facts. One area I think he could have done better in is looking at what people might say against it and stating why it would be wrong. I would have also liked if he would have given us some information about who he is. Is he a teenager? Is he an adult of a teenager? Did he violet the law and receive an underage and now he’s bitter about it? The audience is left clueless as to whom he is and what is motive is for writing about this topic. In order for him to fully engage his readers and have them understand what he was saying he needed to create more passion by perhaps
Kruse 7
I am quite willing to admit that I had a spot of trouble when trying to create a new version of an old word. My brain simply could not grasp why one would attempt to make a word that seems so misleading. However, English really is amusing. As I attempted to transform a word, I realized that the words we use everyday can be a challenge for many attempting to learn English, from five-year-olds to foreigners. My word is “ahf”. I took a simple word, “off”, and created it based on the “ah” sound that the “o” makes.
http://teenink.com/opinion/environment/article/358454/Why-You-Shouldnt-Eat-Meat/
To find a persuasive piece I first visited the Huffington Post. After diddling around for what I deemed too long, I visited the website I saw many of my peers had used. Teen Ink did not disappoint. I quickly found an article entitled “Why You Shouldn’t Eat Meat”. Janeyy (screen name) begins by stating that anyone can become a vegetarian with baby steps. This makes the topic instantly more appealing to readers because we know that we do not have to make a sudden lifestyle change, but can do so at our leisure and comfort level. She continues to persuade by telling her readers why it is healthier to be meat free. Most of the world seems to have a downright fascination with food, and many people concerned with health, so this topic really grasps attention. The only real complaints I have with her essay are the uses of the word “carnivore”, which should be substituted with “omnivore”, and how she seems to drift between persuading us to become either vegetarians or vegans, but settle for either near the end.
Miss Janeyy demonstrates logos, ethos, and pathos in her essay. She has researched her topic well, or has at least created the illusion that she has, which is highly logical. To persuade others, you must first have a thorough education of the topic. She plays off of ethos, or ethics, all throughout her essay by reminding us that eating meat kills animals that do not have the best lives to begin with. Our moral compasses are thrown off when discussing whose life is more valuable. Passion permeates Janeyy’s essay. She is obviously passionate about begin a vegan and saving animals. This is why she wrote the essay in the first place—to convince us that we should feel the same as her.
Janeyy has also made a fine job of using the C.H.E.S.S. strategies. To contradict, she uses phrases like, “contrary to popular belief”. A hypothetical solution is for meat eaters to try substitutes for meat. One of the pieces of evidence that she gives is that every vegetarian saves around one-hundred animals a year, and vegans save more. Statistics used include things like, “70% of all the grain we grow is fed to farm animals”. Instead, this grain could be used to help solve world hunger. There were really no personal stories included, but she still tells us how animals are being exploited for their products.
The first sentence I thought was particularly effective was “There are so many alternatives to meat that can help you if you ever transition from being a carnivore to becoming a vegetarian.” Although “carnivore” should probably be replaced with “omnivore”, this sentence is effective because it does not scare readers away from becoming vegetarians, but it lets readers know that the transition can be done smoothly. The second sentence I chose was, “If you care enough, you easily can too.” This sentence gets readers fired up because it implies that most people do not, in fact, “care enough”. Does this want to make you prove her wrong? The third and final sentence I chose was, “By becoming a vegetarian, you are making the world a better place for everyone- both animals and people alike.” There are few who do not want to leave the world a better place than what they came in to. The majority of humans want to make the world a better place for future generations, and Janeyy suggests that by taking one simple and replaceable food group out of your diet, you can change the world for the better.
Grage 2
The English language is very hard to understand as a whole. You can use letters to partake in words that don't make the same pronunciation as the letters are known to make. Therefore I have created the word "Xphunea" meaning "funny". I have created this word by using the silent "x" represented in the word xylophone, the "ph" used in the word phase, and the "ea" used in the word bead.
http://www.nytimes.com/2013/09/05/us/albuquerque-becomes-latest-focal-point-in-abortion-wars.html?pagewanted=all&_r=0
This article talks about a group of people in Albuquerque, Kansas trying to help end the abortion law. The abortion debate is important to me because I feel very strong towards abortion. This article talks about how they are trying to shut down the Southwestern Women's Options Clinic. They want to shut down this specific clinic because it is one of the few clinics that will accept women who are over six months pregnant. You can tell that the people in this article that are mentioned are very passionate to push through the abortion law, never giving up and reaching out to these women walking into this clinic. They are extremely ethical towards abortion because they are exceptionally religious people. For the morals that they were raised upon, they believe that it is morally wrong to allow abortion. The logic behind this is that they are killing innocent infants that deserve to live out their lives. There are tremendous amounts of arguments on to whether the baby is alive or not; it also depends on what religion you are and what you feel is right.
Contradiction is present in this article. The antiabortionists call the city of Albuquerque "America's Auschwitz". 'Many Jewish leaders here are still angry about the Holocaust comparisons and picketing of the museum... "This protest was misguided and offensive," said Randee B. Kaiser.' The closest thing that this article gets to about hypotheticals is hoping that this clinic will be suspended for 20 weeks. The evidence that they have is assumptions that the clinic is doing more abortions after the six month period than they were before. This article does not have any personal stories in it, the article just talks about the organization coming together to stop this clinic along with the help of some missionaries. They also do not have any statistics on why they decided to go there other than the fact that they heard of the "late-term abortion victims".
"Albuquerque has become the latest flash point in the abortion wars, with Operation Rescue, the militant group based in Kansas, calling it the “late-term abortion capital of the country.” This is because a private clinic, Southwestern Women’s Options, is one of only a few nationwide that offers abortions after the sixth month of pregnancy."..."Anti-abortion groups believe that this clinic is now performing more late-term procedures than any other in the country, though no data are available." These three sentences are very persuasive. They made me buy right into what they were selling, making be believe that what they were doing was right and just. They laid down some facts and evidence onto why they should be shut down.
Nitz 5
Those with pheighre skin need to be especially careful to apply sun block.
Using our contradictory English language, I created a new spelling for “fat”. The “f” sound from “ph”, “ai" from the “eigh”, and the “r” sound After learning some Norwegian and Spanish, where each letter is pronounced in a certain, distinct way all the time, I am grateful to have English as my native tongue. Learning English later in life would be much more difficult. Language is one of the most beautiful things we have on Earth, so we must fully comprehend and appreciate our own.
http://www.catholiceducation.org/articles/abortion/ab0102.html
This is an article written by Ericka Bachochi, a former feminist and pro-choice supporter, who is writing on her changed perspective; she is trying to convince the reader that abortion is wrong. We’re first informed of the logical reasons of her argument. Bachochi uses many statistics, and correctly cites the reputable (this is important) sources within her article. Many “Pro-choicers” in favor of abortion us the reasoning that it is vital for women’s well-being, but Bachochi contradicts this with her rational approach of proving that women who terminated pregnancies had higher rates of anxiety disorders, placenta previa, and breast cancer. In fact, Bachochi employs the use of contradictions throughout the entire column. Each section starts with a supposed infallible reason to endorse abortion, and then is followed by ample evidence contradictory to the aforementioned reason. She uses a hypothetical story in what I found to be three of the most persuasive sentences of the whole piece:
“So while “pro-choice” feminists hail abortion as the symbol of women’s sexual freedom and equality, the ordinary young woman may find no such liberation when she has sex with her date, thinking, as women are prone to do, that sex will bind the two emotionally. Instead, when he doesn’t share the depth of her feelings and then hands her $400 for the abortion when she becomes pregnant, it’s not only her heart that’s broken. She alone has to live with the possible short-term and long-term medical consequences of the abortion for the rest of her life; she is abortion’s second victim.”
Emotionally, this excerpt compels us to re-evaluate just how “freeing” or how much of an “equalizer” abortion really is. Bachochi’s passion is obvious, and her words drip with emotion. She tells stories of herself in college, a feminist and therefore supportor of abortion, and of the process she encountered that transformed her thinking. In order to convince a reader ethically, Bachochi discusses the ramifications of abortions on women’s status in society, the motives behind 95% of terminations, the proposal that evidence suggesting harm to women’s health is denied or hidden, etc. Reading this article, I found a marvelous example of persuasive language.
Buse 2
The English language is often referred to as the hardest non-first language to learn because of all the quirky exceptions."Highfogn" is my word that has exceptions and excludes exceptions; I intended highfogn to read as hyphen.
http://teenink.com/hot_topics/what_matters/article/572335/Being-Homeless/
In "Being Homeless" the author uses logos in the article by comparing homeless people in Africa to homeless people in America by saying America is a overall richer country. Ethos is demonstrated in the way she did not enjoy how her father had to say no to the beggars but she knew it was best for her family. Pathos is slightly exhibited in the way she told a personal story of three groups asking her for money within two days. "Making a difference doesn't require you to give money to those on the street. Sometimes, it works just like it does with elderly people- listening to them, letting them tell you their story, chatting with them, or anything of the sort can make their day. It can give them hope, and it can give them the strength they need to carry on." The authors final paragraph shown above demonstrates a hypothetical solution to the hypothetical situation of what to do when a homeless person approaches you pleading for money. It also shows contradiction when the author says don't give them money, but rather talk to them. I feel this final paragraph was most persuasive because the majority of the article was a story and stating obvious facts; the final paragraph is effective because it persuade the reader to not simply hand over money but empower a homeless person by listening to their story and having a conversation with them. The author identifies with the reader's sympathy towards the homeless early in the essay when she tells a story of how she felt sorry when her father denied a homeless couple money. She may have thought of conversation as a replacement for money after the fact and now wants to share what she learned with others.
Dykstra 7
I find the complexity of the English language to be fascinating. For example, a word like "quite" can theoretically be spelled "kwytt;" the "k" makes a sound as in "kitten," the "w" as in "win," the "y" as in "why," and the "tt" as in "mitt." Phonetically, these two words sound the same.
I found an excellent example of persuasive writing to be a piece written by Jeff Greenfield, which discusses why he feels people should remember Martin Luther King Jr.'s "Dream" speech in a very different way. He admits that the speech itself was monumental, but rather than celebrating the speech itself, we should celebrate how far America has progressed from the tragic state of racism it was in when the speech was given. The author establishes pathos by discussing how he was there when the speech was given, and he remembers the poignant image of an old African American man weeping with happiness on that day. His providing of a story is one of the C.H.E.S.S. strategies. He establishes ethos by describing President Kennedy's lack of action on the subject of integration and racism until police dogs were turned on peaceful protesters shortly before King's speech. The author establishes logos by providing statistics, such as the lack of African Americans in important positions throughout America when King's speech was given, and how different things are now. This is also one of the C.H.E.S.S strategies. He provides a solution to the problem he suggests exists: Americans continue to honor King's words for their brilliance, but also take time to reflect on the state of the country when the speech was given. The author also provides evidence to prove the country's poor state in 1963. Out of the entire essay, I find these three sentences to be by far the most compelling:
"Yes, it was a memorable gathering: a protest that was celebratory, joyous, captured for me by an old black man sitting on a stoop, weeping with happiness as he proclaimed, over and over, 'All my life I’ve been waiting to see this day come to pass.' But to understand fully the nature of that day, and what has happened in the half-century since, you need to grasp just how embedded the legacy of racial injustice was on the day of that march — and on the days, months and years that followed. On the day King spoke, not a single African-American had ever sat on the Supreme Court, nor in the president’s Cabinet, nor (since the end of Reconstruction) in the United States Senate, nor as a chief executive of a Fortune 500 corporation, nor as a TV network news anchor, nor as the manager of a major league baseball, football or basketball team."
I believe that they are the most persuasive because the author manages to establish both pathos and ethos in a short period of time, and these stories and statistics combined pack a huge punch. Overall, I think this is an excellent persuasive piece of writing.
http://news.yahoo.com/if-only-all-we-had-to-do-was-%E2%80%98dream%E2%80%99-171312073.html
Bingen 7
For most people, learning the English language is a very complex and difficult yet rewarding task. Knowing how to use the language effectively gives everyone the incredible gift of communication with one another. However, along the way, certain rules can often trip learners up, such as silent letters and letters that take on different phonetics in different contexts. One example of a word that I came up with is gheauxknetecks. This word is pronounced phonetics. “Gh” takes on an “f” sound like in rough; “Eaux” takes on an “o” sound like in bordeaux; “Kn” takes on an “n” sound like in knox; “Ck” takes on a “k” sound like in lick and the rest of the letters take on their standard sounds.
http://www.postbulletin.com/sports/localsports/reducing-concussions-starts-with-practice/article_b76ba485-d37d-5e56-a586-a7e37fcff3eb.html
It is well known in the sports community and throughout all of society that participation in sports is one of the leading causes of concussions. Of all sports, football has the most contact and, therefore, the greatest risk for concussions. As a result of repeated hits to the head, many football players develop serious cranial diseases later in life. The article that I read effectively uses the statistic that ““those who receive a single concussion double their chances of contracting epilepsy within the first five years after receiving the concussion.” The article also discussed the prevention of such injuries by reducing contact in practices, using persuasive writing techniques very effectively in the process. Logically, players do not need to constantly bash each others’ skulls in to prepare for a game, especially not those who are members of their own team. Instead, players can focus on other aspects of the game like technique or conditioning, and leave the full contact for games. Contact drills in practice would be made on pads and dummies. The author also adds “by the time Friday night rolls around, they will be filled with so much energy, their overall performance will improve” due to the decreased contact during the week. Further making the case for a change in sports practices, the author tells the story of the concussions he received in sports, which mostly happened in practice. Additionally, the author gives examples of other ways to prevent concussions but uses evidence to show that none of his examples would be as effective as reducing contact in practice. Perhaps the most persuasive of his arguments, however, is the statement that “This idea comes from John Gagliardi, the former coach of the St. John's University football team who was at the helm for 64 years in Collegeville, Minn. During his career, he amassed the most wins in NCAA history (489) while never having a single practice where his team was allowed to hit each other.” This example of successful, real life implementation of contact-free practice serves to invaluably add to the persuasiveness of the article.
Ellis 2
It is odd one of the most common languages spoken internationally is also one of the hardest to learn. Personally, I am quite thankful my first language is English. With complicated pronunciations and changes in vowel sounds, it is difficult language to learn later in life. Because words have been taken from other languages, spellings can get a little strange. One of the strangest words is myrrh. Just thinking about this word I would spell it ‘murr’ because it rhymes with purr. I also find the rules of the English language complicated and too flexible. For instance the K-A combination at the beginning of my name is actually against English language rules. An online dictionary will actually correct you and give you choices with C-A. I think English is more funny than beautiful because I cannot spell my name “Kate,” but “Cayt” or “Keight” are perfectly proper spellings.
http://www.washingtonpost.com/opinions/school-attendance-gets-a-closer-look/2013/09/15/fd3b18fc-1b25-11e3-a628-7e6dde8f889d_story.html
After browsing for persuasive writing I found an article entitled School Attendence Gets A Closer Look about the importance of missing just a few days of school. This article I chose comes from the Washington Post and was written as the opinion of the entire editorial board. The attention grabber is a hypothetical situation. “Too many students, though, will finish the month with two or three absences and if that pattern continues, end up missing 10 percent of the school year.” That last part of the quote was underlined to highlight the shocking realty. This was meant as pathos to appeal to the readers emotionally. This way they will continue to read the article. The article proceeds to use ethics by informing us of how much work is going into a understanding absenteeism. “Forty national organizations have teamed with schools and community groups” is a statistic intended to guilt others into helping the cause. So many people care about absenteeism so you as a reader should as well. The article than continues to give more statistics and hypothetical situations to explain the necessity to act for the cause. The writer then presents a solution to absenteeism through a story. “New York City, where Mayor Michael Bloomberg created an interagency task force in 2010 to address these issues, is seen as a model of what’s possible.” The article continues with New York City’s method of concurring the problem and how simple and logical it is for the rest of the country to follow their example. The article ends with a final emotional appeal with a quote from a student with previous attendance issues. “Nobody ever seemed to care if I was hear or not before…” This is a final call to action.
Marais1
When I started kindergarten I had to learn a whole new language. It was difficult to remember all twenty six letters in the alphabet. And then twenty one of them can make different sounds also an abundant amount of rules and guidelines that we have to follow .With the English language there is an abundant amount of confusion when it comes to pronouncing and spelling words. So let's just say that the spelling tests were definitely not one of my finest moments in life. The phonetically word is "ghaiz" which means phase.
http://sailorcphotography.deviantart.com/art/Gay-Marriage-Persuasive-Speech-184204057
What I like about SailorCphotography work is that he does a good job of bringing the reader into the situation; he asked several rhetorical questions that make you think. He doesn’t just throw out facts and statistic, but, rather, adds some personal opinion about gay marriage. He believe that in order to have peace we need to be willing to except all types of people whether they are Gays, lesbians, bisexuals, transgendered, and transsexual. These people deserve to have the same rights as everyone else.
As for CHESS strategies, the author does a fantastic job on some if the strategies but is lacking in some of the other departments in his persuasive article. Personally, I believe he could of made his argument better by stating the opposing viewpoint. This would help him argue his point of view, and discuss with the readers why he personality believes we should allow gay married. However, his story of the guys killing the homosexual did give me some imagery that I could live without seeing, but this definitely helped his point of view. He does have statistics throughout his article that gives us a visual of what's going on and how many people are gay. The sentence " But if your friend was gay, would you hate them for it?" brings ethos in to the article. It is a personal connection you have with someone. This interreges you to read more into the article. By using statistic in the second paragraph" A heterosexual woman can get four or five marriages in her life, when two same-sex lovers can't even get one. How does this work?" lets you see how corrupt the system is in some places." Stupid expressions like: "OI FAG, GO CRY ON YOUR BOYFRIEND'S SHOULDER!" can emotionally disturb someone. A so-called joke such as: "Eww, look, there's the local lezzo." can tear someone to pieces. Are you going to be that self-centered, halfwit who bullies someone because of their sexuality?" This paragraph buts people in their shoes. How would you feel if this happened to you? These sentences intrigued me and persuade me because he takes a real example and puts it into a perspective that makes me more aware.
Long 5
Growing up we were all just put into the world and it was obvious we would all end up speaking the language we were brought into. English, I believe, is one of the most complicated and complex language there is. There are so many silent letters and different combinations for a word that makes it difficult for a foreign speaker to learn. Having the ability to be able to make your own word means that you understand thelanguage greatly, and may appreciate it more. Like the word 'pibcshure', there are many ridiculous looking words out in the English language. By adding a silent B and the 'sh' combination, it sounds the same, but with completely different spelling.
http://www.teenink.com/hot_topics/what_matters/article/463526/Texting-While-Driving-Needs-To-Come-To-A-Stop/
The link above will bring you to a persuasive article that deals with the dangers of texting while driving. I automatically was drawn in by pathos because texting and driving is one of the leading causes of deaths today. The author compares texting and driving to drinking and driving. "Not only are distracted drivers harming themselves, yet they are putting every other driver on the road in the same dangerous position without realizing it." This sentence drew me in. These days many people text while they are driving and don't think of the consequences that could happen. Although one may be putting his/her life at risk, he/she is also putting another person's life at risk.
"Multiple people feel that staying connected to the outside world is more important than focusing on the road ahead, although it isn’t." I thought this sentence was a great fit into the article. I toatlly agree, and many others would too, that nowadays people are so into the media world and trying to fit in. By tryng to stay within the life you are currently in and not looking into the future it can really play a toll on life. When somebody is texting while driving, they are in the present and not thinking about what could happen to them in the near future. They are totally zoned out by the technology right in front of their faces and not paying attention to the innocent people driving on the road who are just trying to get to their destination safely.
"While behind the wheel, drivers should never direct their attention to their cell phone and
should always keep their eyes on the road." This sentence fits well at the end because it sums up the whole article within one sentence. The one technology device almost everyone uses in the world today is their cellphone. Whether you think you're being careful or not, texting behind the wheel will never be okay.
Smith 5
When I was young, I always had a hard time understanding silent letters. Spelling and grammar were unquestionably the most challenging within my elementary years. To comprehend why some letters were silent and some not, puzzled me beyond belief. Ironically, as a young girl, I also had difficulty spelling my name (KAILYN). However it is pronounced (KAY-LIN). I always questioned my mother and asked why there is a silent “I” and “Y”. Strangely, she could never explain to me well enough for my understanding, other than hinting at the fact that she thought it was trendy and hip at the time. Therefore I created the word “Phamfolean” which translates to trampoline, and also containing many silent letters.
http://articles.latimes.com/2010/sep/27/opinion/la-oe-rodriguez-dream-20100927
The American dream: Is it slipping away? When I first came across this article I became very defensive. I thought that all Americans should have the right to live the fantasy of a suitable yet content lifestyle. After reading this essay, I questioned many of the author’s reasonings. I became curious about this man, so I decided to Google his name, what I found was shocking. Gregory Rodriguez happened to be a TV Host, a publisher for New York Times, an editor for The Wall Street Journal, Time, Newsweek, and many more. He was also shot by another man, for no apparent reason. After researching that news, I read the essay again, and this time I found myself commending him with the respect he disserved. Thus displaying ethos. Within this persuasion essay I noticed the use of pathos when the writer discussed the average American, their children, and also their children. He related his topic to a very broad audience, hence, conducting his essay in a personal and emotional way. The author used a comparison of the dream to glue in which holds us together. He used logos to persuade us that we should believe that we, as Americans, must notice our inner core more closely rather than worrying about the everyday problems and threats in which we all have. ABC News/Yahoo news poll described the “American Dream” to be- “if you work hard you’ll get ahead.” The population of who agree with that statement was only 43%. And sadly 4% said that there is no such thing as a dream that can promise hopeful things. Also, quoted from a CNN poll, over half of Americans believe that this dream is no longer “attainable.” But on the other hand Rodriquez writes that “nothing has snapped, at least not beyond repair.” As mentioned before, words from Rodriguez- “With the glue of the dream holding at 50%, it's nothing to cheer about. And if that number falls further, it could pose as great a menace as any outside enemy. Which should lead us to believe that we must restore our inner core rather than fret about external threats.” These last three sentences of his essay are obviously the most persuasive. Not only do these sentences help put the future and what it holds, into perspective, but it also brings up the past and what we should not dwell upon.
Holmes 2
English is a frustrating, yet fascinating language. We can create the simplest of words, as well as the most complex of words. I chose to create the word "phrick". This word really says frisk.
I found an excellent persuasive writing piece on teenink.com. This essay, written in first person, explains the authors sadness and frustration towards sexist men, as well as one man in particular trying to be the hero. The author uses ethos tremendously well in this persuasive writing. She appeals to the ethics of people by explaining sexist jokes that were being made towards her and other women. By saying "I was so upset I wanted to cry, but the steam gathering behind my eyes made tears impossible," the author appeals to our emotions. It helps the audience to understand the girl's frustration. The use of logos is very evident throughout. The authors appeals to logic by contending with the man attempting to help by saying that you should not give up just because you cannot win. In fact, she states that you should try even harder.
As for the c.h.e.s.s. strategies, the author does a great job of accomplishing these. She contradicts the men in this writing by defending her write to defend herself instead of just giving up. She discusses a possible scenario if she were to just give up and continue to let the men make sexist jokes by stating that "We were in history class. I thought i deserved to feel safe." As evidence for her claim, she discusses how by politely asking a boy to stop, she accomplished her goal, shunning the ideas of the "hero" that they will never stop. She doesn't include any stories or statistics.
The three sentences that stuck out to me were, "Now this boy had the nerve to tell me that my words didn't mean anything. This boy hurt me more than he realized. He tried to take away the only weapon I had to defend myself." These sentences are particularly effecting because of their realness. Not every person can use physicality to defend themselves. However, every person has words. Using words to defend instead of force is often times much more effective and far more powerful. The phrase "sticks and stones may break my bones, but words will never hurt me" is utter rubbish. Sticks and stones can and do break bones, but words hurt forever. This is something anyone and everyone can relate to.
"Schye" This spells out sky. I used scholar and bye. I looked at a simple persuasive essay at this link:
http://www.timeforkids.com/files/homework_helper/aplus_papers/PersuasiveSampler.pdf
Logically, the author says that there will always be a distraction at school. He also says that uniforms are not free. This was a short statement that went right to the point.
Ethically, the author says that uniforms interfere with self-expression.
With pathos, the author says that if schools want kids to be themselves then they should not all have to dress alike. This shows that he cares about whether or not the kids get to express themselves.
Contradiction: He says that kids will focus on clothes instead of schoolwork.
Hypothetical solutions/situations. He says that the families will feel pressure to buy expensive clothes which some families cannot afford. He says that this is why school uniforms are not necessary.
Evidence: He ways that there will always be distractions in the schools.
Stories: The author has none in this essay.
Statistics: The author has none in this essay.
I still believe it is a good essay because it is straight to the point and it states a clear side. It does not let anyone think differently and it states the facts very clearly and easily. In the conclusion paragraph, it makes amends for what the students want and what the principals want. It states a solution to the problem.
3 sentences: "Some parents and teachers think that letting kids wear what they want is a recipe for trouble." This is persuasive because it is stating what people think. "Kids should be encouraged and trusted to focus on their schoolwork, or they will never learn to be responsible." This sentence is moving because it is explaining why is it a acceptable thing to not have school uniforms. "Uniforms are not free." I feel that this message is powerful because no one knows how much money the parents make. This is a valid reason for a parent to stress out and therefore, it should not be required. This is a simple sentence that cuts straight to the point.
Kara Schroeder pd 2
“gaugtn” This word I made up is pronounced “ate” using the g in gnat, the au in gauge, the g in sign, and the n in solemn. The English langue is baffling and that is why I accept the fact I will not always understand it. Silent letters is one thing I have never really understood.
http://teenink.com/opinion/drugs_alcohol_smoking/article/575094/Puff-Of-Death/
In “Puff of Death” the author is trying to persuade his audience that smoking should be banned in entirety. By reading this article you can tell the author wants to show the audience how deadly smoking can be not only to the smoker but everyone whom they surround. Ethos is demonstrated by the way he starts off with the sad story about adults watching their sons and daughters die. The author goes on to explain that these families went bankrupt after all the treatment the smokers had to go through in order to live. Smoking is expensive and literally makes you ugly. Pathos is shown when the writer explains the different appearances you can attain after smoking; you get yellow teeth, wrinkly skin, and sickly yellow fingernails. The author adds in different statistics to prove that smoking will eventually lead to being either extremely unattractive, ghastly sick, or dead. He brings in personal experiences by saying smokers smoke outside and eventually we end up breathing in the toxic fumes. “Millions of people have died of lung cancer because of smoking.” Being very blunt and to the point, this sentence is one of the most persuasive in this essay. I think this is a very graphic fact. “First of all, cigarettes contain more than four thousand dangerous chemicals in it, and 69 are known to cause cancer!” After reading a sentence like this, it puzzles me how people can still suck on cancer sticks knowing that they are breathing in cancerous chemicals. “Smoking adds a terrible chemical called Dopamine into people´s brains that make them more addicted to smoking--so people should quit early before the situation grows too bad; or just not smoke entirely!” If people know before they try a cigarette that they are going to be addicted, I do not understand why people would go on and try it anyway. This opinionative article is and can be influential.
Holiway 7
Pheghr
This word is pronounced feather. The ph is used as in the word phone. E is used like in fetch. Enough gives us a similar th sound with gh. R is used by itself as in arggh (pirate jargon).
The following article is trying to convince us that pro-creation is wrong, and we should stick to adoption. http://bigthink.com/against-the-new-taboo/why-you-should-adopt-and-not-create-children. While I may not agree with the author, I believe this is a very compelling article. Most people want to have children to carry on our family name, maybe to make it a household name. As the author points out, “Legacy is written into our actions, not our blood.” Why should we bring children into the world, just because it is what we want? You must think about the good of that child first and foremost. Here the author targets both logos and pathos. They draw your attention to the logical side of biology, and passing on a “legacy”. Also, they provide us with pathos, questioning our wants. Toward the end of this article, the author addresses the contradicting side of this argument. He points out that the human population may become extinct by strictly adopting children, but at some point we will anyway. In the article, the author also pulls at your heart strings, by bringing to mind all of the children that are starving, cold, and slowly dying around the world, everyday. A way the author plans to solve this is through what he calls “pro-active adoption”. This solution means to actively pursue adoption, and plan to not have children from the beginning of any serious relationship. He wants you to know and decide now that you will not have children of your own; after all in order to be proactive you must plan. The author of this article picked a very controversial topic, which I believe is the easiest thing to write a persuasive essay/document about. If it is something you believe in, it comes through in your writing, as your personality shines through, ethos.
Kline, 5
1. The word tchawekoalludtqx can easily say “chocolate” if you really stop to think about it. The 'tch' in “witch” makes the 'ch' sound, and the 'awe' in “awesome” is the same sound as the first 'o' in “chocolate”. The 'c' really is pronounced more like the 'k' in “kit” and the 'oa' in “boat” makes the same sound as the second 'o' in “chocolate.” In many words such as “will” and “fall” there are two 'l's for no apparent reason. Therefore, the word “chocolate” might have a double 'l' as well. The 'a' in “chocolate” sounds more like the 'u' in the word “up” and the 't' could be changed to 'dt' as in the word “bundt.” As for the 'q' and the 'x', though, I feel that they are two highly under-appreciated letters of our alphabet and they need some more recognition. No one likes to feel unimportant, so I included them in my befuddled version of “chocolate” as well.
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http://teenink.com/opinion/entertainment_celebrities/article/74286/Miley-Cyrus/
Since her performance at the VMA's, it seems as though everyone is saying, “Miley Cyrus did this” and “Miley Cyrus did that”, and from what I have heard, the majority of people are horrified. This is perfectly understandable. To be honest, I was horrified as well. This article, however, changed my opinion slightly. Although it had many grammatical corrections that needed to be made, the author had a valid point and was rather convincing. She used Pathos for most of the first section, making the point that celebrities are human, too, and everyone makes mistakes from time to time. Then she used Logos and Ethos for almost the entire second half of the essay. She made a point to differentiate between the absurd rumors about the celebrity and what was most likely true. By arguing in Miley's favor, it made the author seem informed, logical, and rational about the situation. The three sentences I found most convinging were:
“Like I say everyone has to have someone to hate”
“For one thing she's a teenage girl, that's enough to deal with on its own.”
“But do I want to imitate her bravery and passion for everything she does? Yes!”
These three sentences were used to drive the author's point in even further. They were strategically placed to leave you questioning and written to make you rethink your own opinion. After reading this essay, I still have to admit that Miley's performance at the VMA's was absolutely atrocious. However, the gutsy move did manage to get everyone talking about her, whether it be in the magazines, tabloids, online, or just in everyday conversation. The result of all this talk is that her career is booming and she is gaining more and more popularity every time someone speaks her name. If you really hate Miley Cyrus and you truly want to demolish her fame, then QUIT TALKING about her! Otherwise, she has succeeded.
Grothe 2
"Vuyohlin"
1.)I feel as if I should explain how I came up with this word, if that's what you would like to call it, since after reading through some of the other comments, I was confused as to what the word actually was. In my case, I chose the word Violin. The "uy" comes from "buy", and the "oh" simply coming from "oh".
2.)http://www.teenink.com/hot_topics/health/article/340731/Should-Euthanasia-Be-Legalized/
This particular piece of persuasive writing struck me as quite appealing. By a logical standpoint, they made it seem as though legalizing euthanasia was the obvious thing to do, and everybody should support it. This is, of course, the main point to any persuasive essay, so it's to be expected. Ethically, though, there is a very fine line. In the essay, the writer made it seem like the right thing to do, but I could easily see numerous people disagree with that. This particular writer made this quite personal in the very beginning. They had us imagine our own grandparents with a terrible illness/disease that made them suffer day in and day out. This leads us to believe that we should support euthanasia 100%.
CHESS was used very well in this essay. I could easily point out almost all the strategies within this one work. If anything, they only lacked in the statistics, because there were very few, if any.
The 3 sentences that were most persuasive to me were:
1. "Just like we have the freedom to express ourselves and practice, if any, religion that we choose, the same should go for death."
2. "Life support extends the lives of those who without machines would have died naturally so isn’t it better to perhaps donate that money to a foundation that aids in finding a cure for a disease rather than keeping a terminally ill patient alive on a machine?"
3. "It’s simple when someone is endlessly suffering, unable to move, feed themselves, and even breathe on their own that they should be entitled to euthanasia."
These are all used with effective strategy, because it shows evidence that it is a good idea to support euthanasia. I believe that this essay alone could change many people's minds about euthanasia, just because it is well put together.
“Gphuidk” is the word i made up to represent the confusion and beauty of the English language. It translates to “food”. I used a silent g at the front and a silent k at the end, the “ph” makes the “f” sound, the “ui” makes a “oo” sound (like in fruit), and the d remains the same. These words that we create certainly show the complexities of our language.
The piece of persuasive writing I read was an argumentative essay based on the article “Engineering Food for All” by Nina V. Fedoroff.
http://academichelp.net/samples/essays/argumentative/engineering-food-for-all.html
It argues that the use of genetic engineering in food is dangerous and does not positively contribute to food security in the world. I found this article interesting to read because I know people on either sides of the issue and this essay has some excellent points. The author uses logic to pursued the audience by using specific examples of how genetic engineering is harming the environment. She states facts on all of the arguments that are hard to refute, and is reasonable in her deductions. Ethically, this essay also persuades. It talks about the negative consequences on the environment and animals, as well as upsetting the natural biodiversity of crops. One of the large arguments for the other side of the issue is that it will help with world hunger. This essay addresses that issue and claims it is not valid, appealing to the audiences emotions. The death of animals such as butterflies, and negative effects on the food chain leave the readers feeling slightly uneasy and it effectively appeals to all of the categories.
Nina V. Fedoroff does an decent job in this article of applying the C.H.E.S.S. strategies. She directly explains many of the arguments for genetically modified food, even quoting some advocates, and then contradicts them with her own arguments. She discusses the hypothetical idea that the modification of food would only widen the gap between the rich and the poor, not narrow it, as well as other ideas. Evidence is provided in the form of facts from various books, and quotes from research done on this topic. Fedoroff does not tell stories as much as she discussed examples of the environmental problems occurring, but it is certainly effective in the same way. Finally, the author provides few statistics, but does quote and contradict a statistic from a proponent of genetic modification. The article may have been slightly more effective with more statistics for Fedoroff’s side, but it was effective nonetheless.
As a side note, I was very tempted during this assignment to use an article from Reddit.com, specifically from the subreddit “changemyview.” This subcategory is filled with debates and opinions. I find it extremely thought provoking and often find myself intrigued, angered, and convinced by the arguments for both sides of the issues. I decided not to use one for this specific assignment because I wanted a more formal essay, where as Reddit has a much more informal, discussion based format, but I highly recommend you check out “/r/changemyview” on Reddit if you enjoy debates and love thought provoking, persuasive arguments like I do!
McIlravy 2
I have recently had the opportunity to work with fourth grade students after school. With their puzzlement and mistakes, I help them correct misspelled words every single day. I now understand their level of frustration as I spend my time producing a word with the beauty and confusion of the English language. Though this language causes uncertainty, it can help create crazy words such as “phllhy” or fly. To me, this word is amazing and makes complete sense; but to others, it can be troubling because they don’t comprehend what they are reading.
http://jchick3414.edublogs.org/2012/09/20/hello-world/
This link will lead you to a persuasive blog on why you shouldn’t smoke. The author immediately draws me in using pathos due to the fact that I have had a family member who smoked. The author talks about how his uncle suffered but eventually stopped, as did my family member. The writer on this blog successfully used “CHESS” to get his reader’s attention. “I’ll stop tomorrow.” This is a sentence the author heard a lot. He contradicted the words of the smoker by saying that it actually never happens. When “tomorrow” comes the smokers continue on with their wicked habit. “I don’t think you should smoke because it is unhealthy, it is addicting and it affects the people around you.” The author is giving me the feeling that he doesn’t have sympathy for the smokers. He is concerned about the health and well being of the people around smokers. There is evidence that second hand smoke is just as harmful. They are in danger. “Have you ever seen the commercial where a shark bites a guys arm and the only thing the guy is thinking about is cigarettes?” Using a story shows that this is a powerful sentence because it makes you really think how something so horrible can become such a big part of somebody’s life. The author of this blog really did a great job on using chess. He contradicted the smokers and he used stories to persuade the reader to not smoke. So much can be said in such a small amount of writing. This writing used a blog with a couple paragraphs to tell his readers the effects of smoking and how hurtful it can be.
Peltier 1
Learning English as a child I know that I hated trying to figure out how to spell the words that never quite made sense. The English language has letters that are either silent or pronounced differently depending on context. My word is fottojraffie where the “f” replaces the “ph” and the “j” replaces “g”. While “ie” also has the same sound pronunciation as “y” in this context. Pronouncing fottojraffie may be seen in many ways, it really is photography.
Z., Bessie. "Student Athletes - “Model” Adolescents?" Teen Ink. N.p., n.d. Web. 18 Sept. 2013. .
I love the way that Bessie incorporates ethos, pathos, and logos; she also has used the C.H.E.S.S. making her point come across even more. Bessie is trying to prove that athletes are physically healthy but some end up emotionally or mentally wounded from the battles they partake in on the field or court. She accomplishing the ethos early on she starts with describing how she feels is an athlete acts. Using stats, she is able to prove that she knows what she is talking about and proves to the reader that she cares a great deal about the topic. Pathos comes in to play when she starts talking about how the athletes are being affected later in their life. Boys are usually more aggressive on the field or court this may later cause them to take their anger out on other sources. While boys aggression usually can pass from time on the field to being off the field, aggression in girls tends to stay on the field as they are usually worry about being skinny and beautiful. Constantly striving to become beautiful in their eyes, many female athletes develop eating disorders. Logos becomes a key player in the article as you read through and notice each piece of information was placed there strategically. By starting with the basic understanding of student athletes, she makes you have and emotional connection. Then breaks that connection and calls people into action on why things need to be changed. Placing these ideas in this order makes people want to changes the way that sports affect the players. Sports were created for entertainment and fun but not at the expense of a young athlete in the end.
After reading through the article, I was able to sort out where C.H.E.S.S. came in to her writing. First, she started by stating that female and male athletes are healthier body wise as they do not become obese, but then she goes on to discuss how being a athlete may not cause physical problems doesn’t mean that it can’t effect you emotionally. Then she was able to produce situations that occur with both male and female student athletes; describing why this is a major problem, and calling into action different strategies as to how to make it safer for the athletes. While saying, all these things would have been great for just making someone pay attention, the stats that were added and the stories that were told gave the article that much more depth and emotional connection. Evidence that was pulled in to the article were things such as the different types of things that would happen to student athletes such as, aggressive tendencies, and eating disorders.
Bessie did a great job in my opinion of making this article with ethos, logos, and pathos, while also incorporating C.H.E.S.S. as well. I hope in the long run I am able to write my essay this smoothly incorporating all of these techniques.
Mutschelknaus 2
"gheich"
Otherwise known as "fake", it is very intriguing how you can make a word that looks foreign, but sounds like an everyday English word. You pretty much have unlimited options when making words with the English language. Each letter when combined with others creates different sounds and words that look different, but sound that same as many words we are familiar too. On gheich, the gh combination makes a f sounds just like the gh in tough. The ei combination makes an a sounds like in eight. Finally, the ch combination makes an k sounds just like the ch in character.
http://well.blogs.nytimes.com/2009/11/18/phys-ed-why-exercise-makes-you-less-anxious/?_r=0
It is well known by the world that exercise can make a person healthier, but did you know it can make you less anxious as well? In this experiment, scientists at Princeton University ran an experiment with rats testing on how they react to being set in cold water after they exercised. Rats do not enjoy cold water, so they should react very negatively to this; however, rats that exercised before being put in the cold water were calm. Running had made their brain "forget" stress because they had just done something stressful. Being scientists, they are not English majors, so they did not use logos or pathos; they only used ethos when talking about their experiment. The scientists did not use any contradictions to strengthen their research, but rather they used evidence, situations, and other statistics used by other scientists to strengthen their research. Overall, it is hard to pick out sentences that are the most persuasive. You have to read the whole article to become persuaded on the topic. If you do not read the whole article, you would not become persuaded easily and would not believe in the scientists research. If I had to pick three, they would be: "The rats had created, through running, a brain that seemed biochemically, molecularly, calm"; " But rats that had run for several weeks before being stressed showed less serotonin activity and were less anxious and helpless despite the stress"; "They insouciantly explored." These three sentences used raw evidence gathered by the scientists to convey why exercise causes less stress. They do an excellent job of persuading the readers by explaining the rat's peculiar behavior after exercising compared to the rat's behavior when they did not exercise.
"Gnasho" is what I created to spell "Nacho". The persuasive article I chose to look at is here:
http://opinionator.blogs.nytimes.com/2012/03/16/no-surprise-meat-is-bad-for-you/?_r=0
Logically, the author argues with recent studies claiming that red meat is the problem of virtually all our health problems.
Ethically, the author makes several poignant statements about how our culture is trying to find a scapegoat for our incredible lack of physical well-being. The author makes the argument that it may be the chemicals in the meat, hormones in the meat, not eating enough vegetables and whole grains, or even just too much protein and not enough exercise.
Demonstrating Pathos is the sense of frustration in this authors writing that we ("white" America)cannot seem to take control of our actions or actually do our own research before just believing what one study says. This author does not contradict himself he simply does not know all the answers to the questions he is asking. Hypothetical solutions are him sating that if we could all eat less animal products and the animal products we did eat were organic, we would be fine. The author recognizes that this is impossible. Some evidence and statistics are the actual increase in the subjects’ risk of death from red meat-eating was maybe 1 percent a year. The author shares a story where his friend is optimistic about changing what we put into our meat and how the animals are raised. I believe this is a wonderful essay, even though it does not answer much of its own questions. I believe sometimes the best writing is that in which you are forced to think about the immensity of the problem.
The three sentences I chose were, "Secondly, industrially produced meat’s effect on our morbidity and mortality and the associated infamous health care costs are not the only problems with meat." This sentence shows nice wording and leads into the rest of the topic (that meat is not the only cause).
"But one more thing: This study, like others, assumes that “meat” means industrially produced meat." I like this sentence very much because it is slightly condescending towards the notion that what we are eating is "real".
"Finally, from a strictly dietary perspective, meat is not our biggest problem: junk food is." This sentence is effective because it gives an example of what the author believes the real problem is, and it is very persuasive. I encourage you to read this article, it is much more interesting than the work many of my classmates posted.
Gingles 7
khantakght - contact
silent 'h' as in 'Wrath of Khan.' 'k' as in kitty. silent 'gh' as in 'tough.'
http://eslbee.com/why_you_should_not_smoke.htm
This is a very simple yet effective example of persuasive writing. Obviously the topic chosen is indeed very controversial, which draws in the curiosity of the reader. The contradiction is why one shouldn’t smoke. The writer then maps out the essay with a thesis statement, “Some of them are that smoking affects your health, that you spend a lot of money on cigarettes, and that when you smoke you are not respecting people around you.” This makes the essay a much less painful read. At the beginning of each paragraph the author makes a statement to explain what the paragraph is going to be about. The writer’s hypothesis is that there is nothing good that can come from smoking cigarettes. They give three examples and explain them. The evidence in the second paragraph suggests that you will eventually not be able to control your lust for cigarettes; “there will be a day when you will feel the need of a cigarette.” The proof is that nicotine is a very addictive drug and everyone who has a developed habit of smoking has one because of the need for the drug. The writer could have made this persuasive essay better by adding some stories or statistics to develop their pathos. It helps bring the audience closer to the author by connecting on something personal. While this essay is effective for certain crowds, it may not satisfy a more advanced audience. By adding statistics, the writer could demonstrate expertise on the matter, therefore causing the reader to trust the message as more than just an opinion. Though short and simple, this essay will persuade some crowds to smoke less and become more aware of their body’s health. However if the author would have elaborated and added statistics, he may have persuaded a larger audience.
Wright 1
English is a funny language; that explains why we park our car on the driveway and drive our car on the parkway. ~Author Unknown
The English language is indeed difficult for one to comprehend; especially if not taught the rules and regulations at a young age. Last spring my oldest sibling, Liz, traveled across the world to finish her student teaching in a country called Aub Dhabi. This country is located in the Middle East across the Persian Gulf from Iran. One day while she was teaching, her teacher asked her a question. She said, "Ms. Wright do Americans say we ride in the bus or we ride on the bus?" As learners of the English language, it is our duty to abide with the rules, as well as know how to use them properly and accurately. Take the word tomato for example. Some amongst us pronounce to-MAH-toe and others, to-MA-toe. Either way, both of the words behold the same definition.
“Payj”
The word above phonetically pronounces my name, “Paige”. Clearly, there stands a massive difference. The p makes the regular ‘p’ sound. As for the ‘ay’, it acts as the ‘ai’. And lastly, the ‘j’ represents the ‘ge’. In the common form “Paige”, the i and e are silent. But because they are silent, does not mean the vowels are not essential to properly pronouncing the name. When taken out, the name reads, “Pag”. Using correct vowel sounds and knowing a variety of words with silent letters is critical to modern America.
http://teenink.com/hot_topics/health/article/215999/Check-Yes-I-Will-Save-A-Life/
Written by: Lindsay_Leigh, Cannon Falls, MN.
The writer attempts to convince her audience concerning the topic of organ donating. As I read, the article caught my attention almost instantly; considering I have a close relative who is in need of a transplant. The author backs her beliefs up by explaining the outrageous number of deaths due to hesitation in donating, and stating accurate statistics. She addresses logos, when estimating that 6,000 live donations happen every year; she backs this statement up by acknowledging the homepage of OrganDonor.Gov. As for the C.H.E.S.S., the author covers three of these elements in her writing. Lindsay contradicts the government's method of donating by simply offering the option to check “YES”, or “NO”. She rebutes by stating the government’s reasoning is proven irrelevant, and there should be no logical accuse not to donate. I would like to contradict her and tackle the aspect how healthy the donators’ organs truly are, and if the operation perhaps foreshadow health risks. Not just anybody can give up an organ. One must answer and go through several health evaluations before the actual donating can occur. What would happen if we did not check the patients’ health before he/ her donated? Consider a woman carrying a severe disease, but is not aware of the harmful damage and the affects on the rest of her body. Nevertheless, let us add a plot twist; this women whom suffers from this disease, is willing to give up her organs. The health physicals no longer exist, the woman is about the transfer her disease to another individual; almost handing the individual her pain and suffering herself. The writer also provides accurate statistics, by executing the estimated of deaths due to not receiving an organ in 2009- 8.37 out of every 1,000 people. Lindsay continues to provide solid and strong evidence-based government websites throughout her essay. Collectively, the essay consists of three most persuasive sentences were: “The article, “Organ & Tissue Donation- Survival Rates” from the New York Organ Donor Network, Inc. stated, “As of the end of 2005 there were 163,631 persons living with a functioning organ transplant in the United States.” “Death's ever persistent presence can be minimized with the aid of organ donation.” “I challenge you to let the unfortunate benefit from your misfortune; go save a life.” Do not save your heart for heaven, but save a heart so heaven has to wait.
Noah K. P.2
I created the word Phoekouss. This is the word focus converted to another form simply using the English language. The English language is a deceivingly complicated language, especially when considered by a native speaker. Many simple words are spelled like they sound. However, once you delve deeper into the language you find bits and pieces of other languages that make this language very difficult. Words like rendezvous and hors d’oeuvres are words that may be relatively easy to pronounce but prove to be some of the most complicated words to spell and read. This complexity makes English unique, beautiful and exciting to write, read and speak.
http://www.teenink.com/hot_topics/letters_to_the_editor/article/366010/AP-Classes-Worth-the-Sacrifice/
I found an interesting article supporting AP classes and their benefits. The author used the logical argument or logos and stated that taking AP classes can save you from having to take some classes in college. She then made an emotional appeal and said that taking advanced classes is not only good for college but is good for the pure enjoyment of learning and intellectually advancing one’s self. She also used pathos and made herself the expert on AP class enrolment by stating she is enrolled in three AP courses. She also employed man aspects of C.H.E..S.S. in her article. She contradicted herself and said that there are good reasons to not take an AP class, such as sports, extracurricular activities and greater amounts of downtime afterschool. She also made a hypothetical situation, that being the possibility of not getting credit for an AP course. She counters this by saying that classes should be taken, not for the test but for the knowledge that is gained. She gave examples of why she takes AP classes and in her words she says, “I didn’t take them for the credit; I took them for the pure enjoyment of intellectually advancing myself.” She also uses the personal story of not being able to hang out with her friends on the weekends as much as she would like. She, however, did not have any statistics in her article but four out of the five pieces of C.H.E.S.S. in one essay is quite impressive. The first sentence that I thought was particularly persuasive was this sentence, “They would rather participate in sports, and extracurricular activities, or would just rather not have all that stress and have downtime afterschool.” This sentence is effective because it gives likely reasons why one would not want to take an AP class. This strengthens her argument considerably. The second piece of the article I chose, even though it is not a complete sentence is, “To learn.” These two words effectively summarize her whole argument. The reason for taking AP classes is to gain knowledge and learn about the world around us. The third sentence I chose was, “Teaching to the test, is in my eyes, destroying the whole point of going to school.” This sentence is effective because it strengthens her argument that learning is the most important part of an AP course and school in general. The class should not be centered around the test because essential learning would be lost by only teaching what will be found on the test. Overall I think this was a very effective persuasive essay and I agree with her views completely. The experience of learning is one of the best rewards in the world and receiving college credit for this leaning is just icing on the cake.
Hall 5
“Phlaimb”
The English language is so diverse with rules and silent letters that it can be hard to understand at times. We have rules saying “p” makes the “pu” sound, yet when putting an “h” behind it, it creates an “f” sound. This is where I got the idea to recreate the word flame. I exchanged “f” for “ph”, thus mimicking the original sound. I put an “i” after the “a” to create the long, sharp “a” sound. Lastly I added a silent “b” to give it a little spunk. Recognizing and understanding the English language gives us the ability to take basic words and use phonics to change its spelling.
http://youthvoices.net/discussion/persuasive-essay-abortion
In this essay the author discusses her opinion on abortion while persuading people to converge to become anti-abortion (the view point as the author). Within this article she uses ethos, pathos, and logos perfectly. She begins with strong ethos topics showing the reader she is an expert in the topic. Her awareness of abortion displays her knowledge on this subject. This begins persuading readers because they can assume that she is a master in her field. Secondly she does a great job presenting pathos. She draws out the readers’ emotion by asking how they would feel if someone took away their ability to live. This question makes the reader think into their own life, making things much more personal and sentimental. Lastly she uses logos. In this paper she includes many facts showing how abortion cannot only harm the baby, but also the mother and our economy. A shocking fact that persuaded me towards her view was that “sixty-five percent of women who abort suffer symptoms of post-traumatic stress syndrome”. These facts can be used to stun the reader, leaving them leaning on your side.
Using the C.H.E.S.S. strategies, the author gives us hypothetical situations where most women resort to abortion. She goes on to back up her thesis by providing positive alternatives. She also displays the use of statistics. Within her article the reader will detect multiple data points where she references people who have preformed experiments and tests, which incline us to believe the shocking truths behind their statistics. All these uses of C.H.E.S.S. convince readers to see this topic from her side.
1. “Imagine not having any say in whether or not you want to have a life.” This sentence heavily persuades me to become anti-abortion for it reminds me of the wonderful lives never started because of abortion. It shows me how lucky I am to be here and how lucky any child is to be here.
2. “Abortion can also result into not being able to get pregnant in the future, many sickness’ and even death.” It trips my trigger knowing that ones selfish choice can cause them unintended harm and danger in the future. No one wants to hurt himself or herself, so why take the risk.
3. “Simple morality dictates that unless and until someone can prove the unborn human is not alive, we must give it the benefit of the doubt and assume it is (alive). And, thus, it should be entitled to life, liberty and the pursuit of happiness.” The reason this sentence caught my attention was because it incorporates a piece from the Declaration of Independence. These rights begin at conception, granting an unborn child these liberties.
Woessner 5
The English language is very difficult and unique in many ways. There are sometimes random double letters, and sometimes letters that make no sounds at all. “Ghokn” is the word that I came up with. Ghokn is the same as the word phone. The “gh” makes the f sound like in tough. The o is just an o. The “kn” at the end is the n sound like in knee. I find this very cool that we can make words from the sounds the letters make in other words.
http://ashburnrebecca.blogspot.com/2007/12/persuasive-essay-protect-people-from.html
In this persuasive essay, Rebecca is trying to convince us that cigarette smoking should be completely illegal for all ages. She appeals to our ethics by talking about all of the harmful chemicals that we are putting into our bodies every time we smoke, or even inhale second-hand smoke. She also connects ethics to us by telling us that the average pack-a-day smoker spends nearly $1,825 per year on cigarettes alone. Rebecca then relates to our emotions, talking about the likely-hood of contracting cancer if you are a smoker, and about the many other diseases you could get. She even talks about the risk you are taking that your family and friends could get these horrible diseases, just from being around you and receiving your secondhand smoke. Logically, she tells us that a huge percentage of deaths every year are caused by cigarette smoking diseases. As for CHESS, Rebecca contradicts what the tobacco companies are saying about their customers. The tobacco companies said “We don’t smoke this [expletive]. We reserve the right to smoke for the young, the poor, the black and the stupid.” This is calling their customers dumb and supporting racism. Rebecca said that hypothetically if tobacco was illegal, the annual death rate would decrease by at least 25,000 from secondhand smoke alone. She talks about the statistics and evidence by telling us that cigarettes contain over 4,000 chemicals, including glass, acetone, and formaldehyde. She then tells us that 125,000 of the 155,000 lung cancer deaths from 1997-2001 were caused by cigarette smoking. Rebecca did a very fine job at persuading her audience.
Williams pd. 2
While English is often times complicated, it is also a language that allows for creativity when dealing with the pronunciation of letters and the spelling of certain words. The English language is like a secret code with many different combinations correlating to different sounds and only the members of that group can decipher the code to find the true meaning. The word I created is “cuwaillbt” or quilt. “cu” as in “cut”. “wa” as in “water”. “bt” and in debt” the “b” acting as a silent letter.
http://www.lifenews.com/2012/05/17/why-do-more-people-choose-abortion-over-adoption/
While reading this essay, I began to think why any woman would even consider having an abortion. The author was able to present an argument which made it seem only logical and ethical for a mother to choose adoption for her unborn baby if she was unable to support it herself. Kristie Burton Brown, the author was able to accomplish this by “adopting” the usage of logos, ethos, pathos. She presented her opinion as being the only logical solution to an unwanted pregnancy. While questioning the horrid reality of abortion, she used factual information on the medical cost for adoption and the benefits for many couples suffering from infertility. She was able to point out that adoption is much more ethical than the murder of an unborn child by presenting the idea that getting an abortion is identical as killing a child that is five years old because a mother can take care of the child properly. Claiming that adoption is the only ethical solution to an unwanted pregnancy was easily noticed in Brown’s writing style. Abortion and adoption are very emotional subjects in themselves, but Brown is able to add more emotion to her argument when she beings talking about how the connection can grow between a child and a birth mother during an open adoption through visits and updates on the child’s growth. She is able to strike an emotion in readers because most people have a connection with their mother or a mother figure. While using logos, ethos, pathos, was evident in Brown’s writing, she also used many aspects of C.H.E.S.S.. She asks questions to those who may say abortion is the better choice which allows her to elaborate more on why her opinion is correct, using contradiction to better her argument. She gives many situations and solutions when talking about the preparation and delivery cost of having a child and how the adoptive parents pay almost all the bills. While she uses statistics of adoption rates, she also uses evidence and theories on why many more women are choosing abortion over adoption and why it’s wrong and foolish. At the bottom of her article, she also lists personal stories from many people including the famous country singer, Rodney Atkins, which helps appeal to the public because we tend to idolize and take interest in stories pertaining to the rich or famous. One sentence that is most effective is “In reality, adoption has nothing to do with giving up and everything to do with giving life – life instead of death.”. This sentence is highly effective because it takes something that most Americans correlate together and break the stereotypical saying that “giving up” a child is the same as adoption. Breaking this stereotype is important because as she says previously, “Giving up is equated with failure and bad decisions.”, causing some Americans to see a similarity between adoption and failure.
Smith2
Jenirosity is my word!! I am tutoring in a third grade classroom this year. It's very interesting to hear them read to me out loud. They know that they need to sound out all the letters to try to figure it out. The idea of silent letters is still fairly new to them, and so how they try to pronounce some words is very humorous! It's the same way for spelling words. They are taught to sound it out so, "C" and "K" are a common mix up!
http://eslbee.com/why_we_should_not_compare_ourselves_with_others.htm
I found this example of persuasive writing online, and it is about how we should not compare ourselves to others. I was a little intrigue by the essay. Who hasn't looked at someone else and wished they could change something about themselves? As I was reading the essay I enjoyed the fact that they did not focus on the sole idea of teen girls judging there physical appearance with others. Instead they took a rout to the goals side of things. They explained how you shouldn't compare yourself as the best at something; because then when you have made it to that point what will motivate you? When you have someone who is better than you-it drives you to better yourself. The second point in the essay is that if you think you are the best you may get arrogant. This may cause you to put others down intentionally or unintentionally. They used the the stories for their advantage in this essay. They had ways to back up their main ideas."... this can make you feel better than the others, and this feeling can turn into a horrible pride." This sentence give a great reason for not being boastful. It is also a very common thing around sports activities. Many people can relate to this. This sentence is also an example of the Hypothetical Solutions/Situations. The use of pathos in this writing is also very prominent. They are trying to convince the reader to be a better human being.
The english language is one of the most confusing, but fascinating languages out there. each letter seems to have endless ways to pronounce it and unlimited words it can fit into. One example is how we can pronounce "Ayeauxuh" the same way we pronounce "Iowa." "Aye" sounds like "I", "aux" sounds like "o", and "uh" sounds like "ah." An individual can take any word they like and change the spelling of it completely up until it is no longer recognizable by readers.
http://www.veteranstoday.com/2013/04/06/why-gun-control-is-bad-for-america/
I found an interesting essay on gun control and why those who support it are wrong. Logos is a way we can describe logic. It is the cold hard facts that are used to drive the points and give solid evidence about whatever it is you are trying to persuade somebody about. One sentance that focuses on logos is "Closer to home, Guatemala established gun control in 1964. From 1964 to 1981, 100,000 Mayans, unable to defend themselves against their ruthless dictatorship, were arrested and exterminated." This is logos because it uses dates in time, statistical numbers, and is ultimately a historical reference which backs up the authors main point. Ethos is the ethical branch of writing persuasively. Pathos is more along the lines of the emotional way of persuasion. This is an extremely effective tactic to use as it makes the reader feel more connected and involved to a certain side of the story. for example if you are persuading about tabacco use, and you know somebody personally who uses tobacco, the article is much more likely to have an effect on you. I found an example in my article that talked about the Sandy Hook Elementary School shooting that occured last december. This triggers a response in readers mind's because you immediately think of dead children, and that is rarely a happy thought. Another sentance says,"After the rise of the Nazi’s, Germany established their version of gun control in 1938 and from 1939 to 1945, 13 million Jews, gypsies, homosexuals, the mentally ill, and others, who were unable to defend themselves against the “Brown Shirts”, were arrested and exterminated." This is effective by the means that most everybody knows a little about the holocaust, or at least what it is. This gets the reader thinking about what may happen in the future with this topic and if the same thing could happen to them.
Brionna 2
1. Some will say that English is a confusing language there are not really set rules to spelling, phonetics or grammar. Almost every rule is followed by an exception. We could also interpret “dewoudenim” as a longer form of duodenum--a connecting segment between the stomach and small intestine. Most spelling deviations are taught in elementary, yet educated adults are not perfect spellers, as may be expected of them. Others will say that English is very unique in the manner of having a variety of spelling and phonetics. However you choose to consider it, the English language is indeed a hybrid of many languages and has its own challenges to master.
2. http://www.mnn.com/food/beverages/blogs/should-we-drink-coffee
Just recently I have discovered my enjoyment of coffee. I have heard a lot about coffee—good and bad—and was unsure whether to make it a regular habit to drink coffee or not. In Kim Harris’s writing she includes three important elements of persuasion: ethos, pathos and logos. One instance of ethos is how she establishes her coffee drinking habits are and that she lives in Portland, home of some of the country’s finest coffee. Despite stereotypes askew personas we are led to believe that she has been exposed to a plethora of coffee blends both bland and bombastic. Pathos, emotional appeal, presents itself through her explanation of how it can only supply temporary energy and cause greater problems later such as belaboring adrenal glands. Nobody would want to suffer a greater degree of exhaustion after the caffeine has overworked the body’s adrenal glands. Also found in the prompt are reasons not to drink coffee. “One 2008 study found that just one “dose” of caffeine could damage the heart of offspring for a “lifetime.”” This mighty statement connects to the audience, instilling fear and awe in them. It is a great example of pathos because humans are passionate for their young. The thought of poor health is alarming. The third element of persuasion in an essay is logos, or logical appeal. She does not bring out statistics, but authors and scientists are mentioned. “I have long admired and been influenced by Sally Fallon Morell’s work ("Nourishing Traditions" and "Wise Traditions Journal"), and she recommends that you stay away from all food and drink containing caffeine because of its stimulating and addictive qualities.” This statement acknowledges known people who can back up her statement that coffee’s temptation outweighs the benefits. Contradiction is present in this article: she says that “[drinking coffee] shows a significant decrease in risk of developing diabetes. But it is only if you drink four or more cups per day.” The most persuasive sentences are “Coffee should never be a substitute for good energy caused by good health,” it works together with “To get all the benefits that coffee has to offer, it seems you have to drink a lot of coffee.” These two points show me that coffee addictions are unhealthy; you shouldn't allow your body to become dependent on coffee to wake up every groggy morning. “I got such a huge energy boost from all the salads I was literally stuffing my face with all day, that I didn't even want to drink regular coffee as a treat.” She ends by saying that clean eating is just as energizing, this is an example of a personal story she mentioned how she tried the clean eating once.
The word I have concocted is sceknsoarchip, otherwise seen as censorship. The sc has been taken from words scene. While the n sound has the silent k such as knife. Ch can sometimes be transposed with Sh.
http://www.policymic.com/articles/40451/5-simple-reasons-we-should-not-intervene-in-syria
As a American I believe that further conflict with Syria will only escalate tensions with other areas of the Middle East. The above composition gives an excellent argument, and detailed reasoning why we should not intervene. Logos is the most prominent of the trio seen in the article. Statistics such as, "That may be because they know "humanitarian" intervention could very well just produce more mass casualties, as it did during the Iraq War, where over 100,000 died as a result of the U.S.-led invasion." show just how horrific, similar situation ended in tragedy. I believe this method of persuasion is the most effective, statistic do not lie. Along with statistics, appealing to the emotions is important as well. Pathos is demonstrated through statements such as, "Many of these issues are poorly understood by political leaders in the West. We'd do well to let them determine their own destinies." Why fight when you don't have to, is a common conception among many Americans. Without war everyone experiences jubilation. This is why the author argues that America has nothing to worry about with Syria. Emotionally humans dislike war and violence. The author displays his credibility with the use of Ethos. He establishes this by displaying how he is American, and keeps America's best interests in mind.
Complementary to logos, ethos, and pathos; C.H.E.S.S. was employed to augment his argument. Contradicting arguments to intervene in Syria is the basis of this composition. Without the contradiction the argument would not arise. Hypothetical situations are added to show possible worst case scenario. He explains that is we empower the rebels, they are just going to use this advantage to attack us in the future. He elaborates on how nearly none of the rebels support the Western powers. Evidence of what can happen is also intertwined throughout the webpage. We are reminded of a similar situation in Iraq that had terrifying consequences. This shows just how dangerous it can be to empower governments that despise you and everything you represent. Although he does not include stories of events in Syria, Statistics are strewn throughout the article. One such statistic, "Iran just sent 4,000 troops to Syria to aid President Assad." adds an emphasis on how we should not invade. Entangling ourselves in a conflict with Syria would only anger more countries, causing an extremely destructive war. In war, more is often sacrificed than that which can be gained.
Johnson 1
1.) The English language is very complex and like the inhabitants of America is a mix of many cultures and ideas. Many letters and combinations can create misleading and even some silent sounds. The word I created is “Xyibrugh” or, Zebra. The Xy is comparable to the Z sound in xylophone. The I sounds like an E like in that of -ing words. The Ugh shows the silent Gh sound that shows up fairly frequent in many words.
http://www.gravity7.com/articles_arguments.html
2.) This article is about the effect new technology has on our means of communication and ability to form genuine relationship. The author is explaining the topic so explicitly that it makes it hard for the reader to disagree. Delving into the effects lack of emotions through social media the author even explains its effect on space and time situational-ly. The author of this article uses logos, ethos, and pathos very well because they have a lot of evidence to back up their point. Also the sentences and paragraphs flow very well and make the article easy to read. The depth the author goes into the evils of technology show how passionate they are about showing people what they are doing wrong. Contradiction is evident in this article because the author takes the opposing sides and explains why their own view is more accurate than those against it. With each point supporting the author also gives situations; those simulating relationships affected by technology in the wrong ways and how to avoid those circumstances. The author uses many big words but the way he positions them makes it more easy to comprehend and agree. He is so explicative and thorough he delves into technology's effect on our perception of space and time. In this article new ideas about technology are introduced and while there aren't many statistics the depth of the article provides a lot of proof. "It extends our ability to access and connect, but limits our ability to communicate and bind." This sentence is persuasive to me because it points out what is normally thought of as a "pro" and sheds a new light to it that sparks more critical thinking. Another statement that I found very convincing was "Indeed, communications technologies are as much about time and temporality as they are about distance and space." this convinced me because it made so much sense. Before I never realized that technology alters the time and pace at which we communicate because something typed can be read much later than when it was sent. Something so factual makes so much sense that it proves difficult to disagree. The third sentence I found is "Technologies are rational by design, and in use, they rationalize human activity. Human communication and interaction, however, are neither rational nor designed." When thought about this makes perfect sense because in reality many irrational feelings and actions can happen without being thought through but with technology much of that risk is removed because there is an opportunity to think feelings through. This article explained the evils of technology more than it to a side to and opposition but I found it to be very persuasive because the author provided so many facts that seemed disagreeable.
Aging. As you age, you begin to appreciate growing up in the English language. With all of the exceptions involved in this language, it is extremely hard for outsiders to accurately learn English and to be accepted in the community. One example of this that I have come up with is the word “hdawebg”, phonetically, this word is pronounced the same as the word dog. The h at the beginning is silent just like the Spanish word hola that Americans now use frequently. The awe are pronounced just as they are in the word awesome and along with the h, the b is silent like in the English word numb. Even for people who have grown up with these exceptions, it is hard for them to decipher the word mentioned above, this makes the English language is both beautiful and confusing simultaneously.
Why Exercise is Wise
http://center.dordt.edu/266.543units/bodsquad/persuasive_article.html
Did you know that exercise offers rewards that are evident right away? Not only are these rewards physical, they are also enticing your brain to function at a higher level. One of the best forms of exercising is aerobic exercises. This type of exercise forces your muscles to use oxygen, overall making your heart grow stronger. By doing so, aerobic exercising teaches your blood to carry more oxygen than before through increasing the number of blood cells present. It is not necessary for you to be a certain age, weight, or height for this exercise to be efficient for you. You can either chose to join a team and play a physical sport, or you are also able to keep to yourself or a small group and go running, biking, or speed-walking.
Overall, this article does a great job on the use of C.H.E.S.S. and Aristotle’s terms of Logos, Ethos, and Pathos. The acronym of C.H.E.S.S. stands for contradiction, hypothetical solutions or situations, evidence, stories, and statistics. Almost right away, the author states a contradiction predicting what the reader may be thinking to himself and the author is able to fully answer the contradiction, strengthening his agreement with facts. According to this article, exercise can prevent some diseases that could occur later in life. This is considered a hypothetical solution because it states that exercise is the solution to curing diseases. The author begins the article by telling some typical stories of people being told that they need to exercise, he used these stories as an attention grabber. He could have strengthened his argument even more with the use of evidence and statistics but he chose not to include that information inside this short article. Along with C.H.E.S.S. the author was able to use Logos and Ethos and some Pathos. His logical approach was showing that exercise leads to a longer life which is what a majority of people are searching for. Not only are humans supposed to exercise, animals should too he mentions toward the top of the article and this is a very ethical approach. But as for an emotional approach, he does not have any very strong points.
“Well, exercise doesn't just offer rewards when you're older - it offers rewards that begin right at this moment, too. Exercise is beneficial to every part of your body, including your brain. But probably the best place to start is your heart.”
I feel that these three sentences are the most persuasive trio in this article. One of the particularly effective strategies that he chose to use was a sentence fragment. This is a deliberate fragment put in place to put more emphasis on what he feels is the most important of exercising, which is your heart.
McGee 5
English is described by many as the hardest language to learn. Saying and spelling a word is so difficult because of the many different rules in English. The word I created is pheybt or fight. Ph can be pronounced F like in the word phone. Ey sounds like I like in the word eye. Lastly the b is silent, and the t makes up for the ght. Confusing.
http://www.huffingtonpost.com/2013/08/27/distracted-driving_n_3820530.html
The Article I read was “Why It's So Hard To Crack Down On Distracted Driving.” The author starts with logos, she states that over 660,000 people in America text, update a status, or do something else on their phone while driving a car. She then states that in most states in America it is now illegal to text and drive, but it is hard for people to get a ticket for doing it. A police man can only ticket you if he personally sees you sending a text or updating a status because it is still legal to call. The ethos part of the argument is, she claims that the laws have to be stricter if texting and driving is really going to be put to a stop. She finishes off with a statement of pathos she states that over 10% of accidents in 2011 were caused by some sort of electronic device. She states that even if you don’t get caught don’t you want to save your own life. It is preventable—just think.
The author uses all of the elements of C.H.E.S.S. She contradicts by stating that texting is illegal and a person should refrain from doing so. She hypothetically gives the solution of just not texting and driving because you could save yourself from a ticket and from dying, but never physically says that. She gives evidence by stating that over 660,000 people use an electronic device while driving. Her statistic lies in the statistic that 10% of all car crashes in 2011 were caused by texting and driving.
“During any given daylight hour, there are 660,000 American drivers using gadgets at the wheel.” The first sentence of writing needs to draw a person in and make them interested in the topic. I chose this sentence as being important because it is the first sentence, and I really think it captures the reader’s attention and makes them aware.
“The fact that some people will keep texting even with a police car driving alongside them offers some idea of just how distracting mobile devices can be.” This quote stuck out to me because it really makes you think about how distracting a phone or other mobile devices can be.
"There's this transformation occurring, just like in the 80s when seat belts became mandatory." The reason this quote stuck out to me as being powerful is because it gives a person hope that texting and driving will become outlawed.
My word is phyj.
This word is pronounced like fig. The "ph" make a ffff sound, the "y" makes the "iii" sound and the "j" makes the "ggg" sound. The English language is constantly interchanging letter sounds such as the "j" sound with the "g" sound and the "c" sound with the "k" sound. Tons of different letter combinations are possible when creating a new word.
http://www.smh.com.au/digital-life/digital-life-news/why-you-should-deactivate-your-facebook-account-20130714-2py1a.html
I found this essay online. It gives prime examples as to why we should discontinue our harmful Facebook use. It gives a long list of examples that show the extreme harm on not only our progression in life, but our general mental health and psych. The article gave quite a few hypotheticals claiming what would happen if you used Facebook in a negative way. Such examples would include; not being offered a job, being declined for a college, and wasting your time so much with procrastination that you do not make the grades to get into a good college or obtain a worthwhile job. The article gives situations such as having a bad break-up. Facebook has a negative effect on this in two ways. One would be the depressing, sappy statuses that nobody wants to read. The other would be the constant creeping on your ex which would, in turn, make you even more depressed. It gives numerous accounts of evidence to back-up claims made. My personal favorite would be someone getting declined for a job because the employer checked their Facebook and figured they were a psychopath. The article also includes a couple instances of statistics. The one I believe is the strongest is that women spend 81 minutes a day on Facebook and men spend 64 minutes. This is time that would be much better spent else where!
One sentence I found particularly persuasive was; "In today's world, not having Facebook is akin to leprosy." This sentence is very strong and hard-hitting. It shows our general reliance on the website in order to ease into society's idea of a norm. We believe if we don't have Facebook that makes an outcast, and nobody wants to feel that way. A second sentence I found extremely powerful was; "Though it's much easier said than done, willpower comes in stages. I like this sentence because it can relate to all struggles and addictions we have in life. In order to overcome such a thing we need to take steps and plans; unless you're Charlie Sheen and can quit cold turkey. This sentence also displays the sick fact that Facebook is an addiction and just like every other addiction needs to be taken care of very delicately. It relates back to the theme of Facebook being something we don't need in our lives. A third sentence I enjoyed would be; "Without Facebook, your pictures, thoughts, work and ideas remain your own, inaccessible by potentially harmful intentions." What I really appreciate about this sentence is that it reminds us that Facebook isn't completely safe and cushy just because everyone uses it. There are a lot of potential dangers out there. People's information is being used in dangerous context and it's definitely something you need to be aware of and smart about.
Jackson 1
Polasky 5
“mbuhnckee” - monkey
Though I love the English language, I constantly become more aggravated after a new
concept in English class. Everyday I am always taught yet another rule, guideline, and
exception to remember and follow in my writing. If the person who concocted this language
was still alive today, I would smack him across the head and question, “Why is this so difficult
and confusing? What were you thinking?” With so many phonetics, homonyms, homographs,
and spellings intertwined, it is less than easy to hold English writing to a perfect standard. I
give kudos to any foreigner who attempts to know our language or speaks it fluently because I
can hardly do it myself!
http://www.teenink.com/nonfiction/sports/article/15172/Cheerleading-is-a-Sport/
Cheerleading is a sport, or so Renee, the author of this article, argues. This jumped out at me
when glancing through titles of other articles. I was already invested in the article because, as
a dancer, I’m also sensitive to when uneducated people claim dance is not a physical activity.
Renee is obviously a cheerleader and clearly passionate about the topic shown through her
frustration of defending her sport. “New York Times states that cheerleading is the fastest
growing girls’ sport, yet more than half of Americans do not think it is a sport.” She adds
plenty of elaborate and complicated examples to display the hard work and effort put into
cheerleading. Her writing was persuadingly defending what so many others have belittled as
“flirts in skirts. Much of what she writes shows everything C.H.E.S.S stands for. The article is
filled with multiple facts such as, “According to the National Center for Catastrophic Sports
Injury Research, cheerleading is the number-one cause of serious sports injuries to women”
to back up the intensity of the sport. I applaud her effort in trying to contradict the social
outlook on the sport. One question Renee raises reverberates in my mind as I, along with the
rest of her readers, seek for a definite answer, “So, why do so many Americans not think
cheerleading is a sport?”
At first the task of coming up with a new word based on non-traditional sounds seemed a bit daunting. However, after giving it a bit of thought, I realized that the English language makes this task an easy one. The word I devised is “tioubt.” Sounded out properly, it should sound like “shout,” the “ti” making the “sh” sound as in “nation,” and the “oubt” making the “out” sound as in “doubt.”
http://www.bukisa.com/articles/61389_cell-phone-article-persuasive
As far as persuasive writing goes, I chose an article about a topic that is often hotly debated: cell phones. The article seeks to promote freedom of cell phone use in all places including the car. It begins by appealing to the readers’ emotion through safety, and presenting the risks associated with excessive cell phone use. At a glance it seems to be using fear to convince the reader to put down the phone. However, later on it brings up the logical point that in an emergency a cell may be the only thing that can save you, and thus the risk of using one, or others around you using one, are outweighed by the benefit during any accident that may occur. It also speaks to the dangers of excessive use and over communication. These can be distracting while doing important tasks and otherwise disrupt our lives. But yet again it appeals to the logic, stating that a cell is merely a tool, a product, sold by a company for personal use. What we do with that product is entirely our decision, and we need to think ethically and realize the consequences of such actions. Overall, the article speaks to the end of personal freedom, while at the same time emphasizing the importance of personal responsibility.
Henderson7
Coming up with a distorted word is something I have never had to do. Seemingly easy but turned to nightmare after five minutes of thinking. My name itself is distorted to a certain degree. Jordyn with a y rather than Jordan with an a. After pondering over possible ideas I came up with whorkn (horn) and phoud (food). My family has always chosen the weird distorted names. My brother's name is Brandyn, my mother's name is Teri, my first dog's name was tyke, my present day dog's name is Pele. Confusing and weird, adjectives that are commonly used to describe my family.
http://mrain25.edublogs.org/2012/09/20/hello-world/
The article I have chosen would be an article about the sport I love, soccer. In the article the composer writes about soccer and why it is the world's most popular sport. In it he describes a situation that all athletes have dreamed about but it a different setting. The writer describes himself taking a shot in the last seconds of the game. All basketball players have dreamed of the buzzer beater for the win. For baseball players, it is the home run in the bottom of the ninth inning. For football players it is the last play of the game and you score the game winning touchdown or kick the field goal. The passion used in the writing stuck out to me because I have been in the situation and he describes it in such detail to make the reader feel as if he/she is there. The writer definitely uses logos when he describes the play of soccer. His reasons are very defined and backed up by other information he states. The writer tells the sport how it is and how it is not favored in the United States like football (which is very true). In the beautiful writing, the writer states that most people call soccer boring but do not understand and if they did they would most likely find it interesting. The solution of thinking soccer is boring is to try to understand the beauty of the sport. The evidence used in this fine work of writing would be when the writer describes the soccer player in general. Any athlete needs as much practice as they can get. No athlete I know can step onto a field and play a sport they do not understand and be outstanding at it. This proves that soccer is no different and you must learn the sport and practice it to be a spectacular player. Throughout the composition there are no signs of stories being told or stats being stated. "Why isn’t soccer the best sport? It must be, because millions of people play it around the globe, and they must like it if they play it." To me this quote stood out the most. It states that millions of people play all over the world, making it the most popular sport. So why isn't it the best sport in the world. I have asked this question to my fellow classmates but I get the same response every time. "Soccer is gay."
Smith, 1
Language: A method used for communicating (in speaking or writing form) that is structured in a unique, beautiful way consisting of words organized into sentences. It is a pleasurable thing…until you are introduced with the secrets of the language that reside with silent letters and different pronunciation. Vowels sound different, depending on the word. Double continence can create a sound that is far from what it appears as. My creation to prove this theory is—Whenzaih. Wednesday already obtains a different spelling. But to make it more disorienting, I added the silent H, in the word “when”, a Z, performing as an “S”, and the soundless “IH”-making the “A” in day, a long vowel sound.
http://www.teenink.com/opinion/all/article/99822/What-is-Love-Anyway-A-Twilight-Persuasive-Essay/
This persuasive essay grabbed my attention when I first read the title; which is every writer’s goal. The essay is titled- Too Much Homework, Too Little Time. The persuasive disposition consults about students working on homework all night long, without thinking about the healthy aspect of life, such as the lack of hours of sleep due to working on homework all night long and the stress factor of receiving and accomplishing all before the due date. Although this may just be an excuse for teachers to give less homework, the writer points out vital factors of the having too much homework can do to a young student. Ethos, Pathos, and Logos are spread all throughout the persuasion on this essay. The author immediately opens the essay with logos; using descriptive words how research and critics support the idea that students are ‘carrying a load plus homework.’ Pathos are spread all over by showing emotion and elucidating that various students are imprisoned inside, operating on homework. Ethos is pronounced as she talks to the readers in relation to what critics have to say as they voice their opinion. The parts of C.H.E.S.S are revealed ubiquitously as well. It endows us readers with the Evidence that makes the credible and persuasive information become true. The stories are told for supplementary evidence and Statistics are to contradict others how an over-abundance of homework can cause physical and emotional stress. With the usage of the strategic acronym of C.H.E.S.S, it leads the readers into believing the author’s point of view. 1- “More homework means more stress.” Short and simple, but it is effective and powerful.
2-“…educators are trying to do more with less, which can result in an overabundance of schoolwork outside of school.” Proving a point, the author creates tension, stating that there is too much with little time.
3-“Some critics say there is no evidence to suggest that homework is helpful to student achievement; on the contrary, too much of it can overwhelm students and cause them to disengage.” Relating is a key factor while writing an influential paper, and in just this sentence alone, many students could engage and concur with the avowed statement.
"Hey! Toss me the purauwughch!"
"Billy! Get off that purauwughch!"
"Why would you break old man Jenkins' window with a purauwughch?"
The astounding English language we have and use is an enigma worthy of being a ploy of the Riddler in the next Batman movie. Without such a context like what is provided above, one would not hope to be able to unravel the conundrum that is called purauwughch.
So what is purauwughch? Why, it is none other than your friendly neighborhood rock. That's right! A rock! Can you not see it? The "p" is silent, like in pneumonia or pterodactyl. The "ur" makes the r-sound as in the ancient city of Ur, or a cat's purr. The "au" makes the "au" as in audacious. The "w" helps further that end like the "w" in awe. The "ugh" is quite silent like it is in thought, though, and throughout. Finally, the "ch" makes a "ck" type sound like it does in bronchus. Is your brain melting in confusion? Are your ears venting steam in anger? Of course not. Although you may feel it, you are not in a cartoon.
PART 2 (because apparently I had too many words)
http://www.bungie.net/7_Breaking-In---Annie-VanderMeer-Mitsoda/en/News/News?aid=11063
This article uses the Ethos, Logos, and Pathos to great effect. In regards to Ethos, the author and the interviewee are experts in their fields. They know what they’re talking about and they know how to make it sound like English and not Russian as it would seem to some people. The interviewee does this especially well as I and many others would have a clue what she would be talking about under normal circumstances, yet her ability to transform her vast knowledge in to easily usable and understandable information is an extraordinary use of ethos. The article writers use Logos with their multiple references to their past and what they currently are doing. They give helpful advice that would help anyone get into their occupation, and they again make this a very easily understandable and cohesive article for anyone who would happen to come across this. Pathos are used throughout the article by means of vibrant wording and colorful phrases that draw you in and intrigue you about what they are talking about or what they could mention next. They offer many sensational words and phrases to also lure you in.
The article also employs the use of C.H.E.S.S. quite effectively Although not all elements are used, or at least some aren’t used as much as others, when they are used, you don’t really notice unless you are looking for it like I am. C, or Contradictions aren’t used too terribly often. One I could find was when the interviewer was asking about the person’s prior education, the interviewee said she had taken all kinds of classes that seemingly had nothing to do with her career, yet she said that “all knowledge can be useful…even if one doesn’t end up utilizing it precisely how it might have been intended.”
A hypothetical used would be what the interviewee said about making games. She said that when you first start out, you will suck and you will fail. However, you should keep on trying and keep on pursuing what it is you desire, and with enough practice, patience and determination, you can succeed.
A section of evidence is the whole interview. She talked about how if you educate yourself, try and work hard, and consistently challenge yourself, you can achieve your goal. Sure it’s cliché, but it certainly worked for her. The article is evidence of her success. Her being interviewed is evidence that she started low and crawled her way up the ladder to where she is now.
Multiple stories were used in the article. The interviewee told stories of her past, her education, her past endeavors, her feats and achievements, experiences, etc. They are used to further the idea that if you can work hard enough at something, you can achieve it. “You want proof? Look at this woman and all she has done. She was like you once. Now she is not.”
Unfortunately, no one likes statistics, so they weren’t a part of this article (at least that I saw).
I’d say the most persuasive sentences are: “Seriously, get a solid Plan B.”, “MAKE GAMES.”, and ”Be tenacious. Be empathetic.” These three sentences are the culmination of the whole point of the interview. They are the pinnacle of all she had said. They are powerful and they say exactly what needs to be said concisely and precisely. Ethos, logos, and pathos are all evident and alive, and, since this is the climax of a document which practically breathed C.H.E.S.S., it can’t be too much of a stretch to say that these sentences are also the climax of the C.H.E.S.S. Bam.
Sternburg 1
My word is kneiqueead, or naked. “kn” for the “n” sound like in knife. “ei” for the “a” sound like inveigh. “que” for the “k” sound like in torque, and “ead” for the “ed” sound like in read.
http://www.cracked.com/blog/4-positive-trends-internet-doesnt-get-enough-credit-for/
In this Cracked article Soren Bowie tries to persuade the readers that the internet has the power to do some amazing things and it isn’t always recognized. He says that the four positive trends the internet doesn’t get enough credit for are that it makes knowledge cool, makes advertisements fun, makes people accountable for their crimes, and makes generosity the standard. The writing on Cracked is absolutely fantastic; I can really see that the authors’ have a deep understanding of passion, proof and polish especially in this article.
Throughout the article I really get the sense that the author truly believes that the internet benefits humanity more than it harms it. The way the author rights makes me think of him as some sort of enchanted elf begging me to come and see the magic that is the forest. The author emotionally appeals to me by giving me, the reader, credit for making the internet such a wonderful place. This is effective because the reader is more likely to agree with the author if the author is praising him. The passion of this article also makes me want to go out and see the glory of the internet myself. Bowie gives plenty of evidence in the article but the way he writes is exciting and makes me feel there are much more example I can explore for myself. Another way he appeals to my emotions is by reassuring me that the world is actually full of awesome people. In each of the ways the internet benefits society none of them could be possible without the existence of virtuous persons.
One of the reasons I like Cracked is because the articles are so smooth and concise. The author is a very skilled writer and so the flow, diction, and artistry are effective. There seems to be no grammatical errors of any kind since Cracked is a professional website. Also, the author simplifies everything by simply numbering each of his pieces of evidence. In each section I feel he does a great job of appealing to my logical side. I feel his arguments are well thought out and I feel that he took a very logical approach to the topic.
In this article Bowie gives plenty of evidence for each of his main points. To prove that the internet promotes knowledge he linked to educational videos on YouTube. In order to show that the internet improves advertisements he linked to a couple of very entertaining ads. He gave specific instances of the internet dealing justice to prove that the internet values law and order. To prove that the internet has made it easier to be a good person he cited instances of cats being found, organs donated, and fan funding. Throughout the article I get the impression that not only is he right but also that he knows what he is talking about.
Sternburg 1 Part 2
As far as C.H.E.S.S goes Bowie has every single one in his article. With each section he takes the time to acknowledge an opposing argument and refute it. He uses hypotheticals to illustrate the potential good the internet can do and excites the reader to new possibilities. Like I said earlier Bowie supports his point with a plethora of evidence including, examples, stories of success, and facts.
I think that Cracked’s strength lies in humor. The articles are still very informative but Cracked knows that the reader will take in the information better if he is in a jovial mood. Therefore I believe the three most effective sentences are, “You hunt for novelty, relentlessly, and when that novelty doesn't manifest as sloths cuddling with cats, it usually takes the form of information.”, “Granted, there are still the same stubborn people trying to create television commercials as pre-rolls or by tacking ads onto Facebook about how dentists want to kill a stay-at-home mother for unlocking the secret to whiter teeth or something”, and “Had someone told me 10 years ago that they were building a website that would allow strangers to ask the Internet at large for thousands of dollars to fund the creation of a god[darn] calendar of cats, I would have said it couldn't possibly work.” These are the most effective because they are the most funny.
Tellinghuisen 7
When you look at the history of the English language; there is no wonder why it is the most complicated language in the world, and yet it is the most interesting. Millennia of wars, conflicts, and power changes over time left the once pure English language dumped on by almost every European spoken language. Us English speakers can take pride in the diversity that exits our mouth whenever we speak; there is many common words today that can be traced to German, Latin, French, and even Dutch. This brings up a "phacenaischoln" (fascination)in not only the language itself, but the history of it, along with other languages and their origins. We have the "ph" as in Physics, the "cen" as in century, the "ai" as in air, "sch" as in schedule, and in "oln" the "l" is silent.
Although I found this essay on a forum, I still felt it was very well done and structured. http://www.gamespot.com/forums/topic/26361529 This fellow student writes his essay against the idea that violence in video games is not the cause of violent behavior in children.
When I came across this forum in my search, I honestly wasn't expecting much from it. However as I read this teenager's essay, I was very intrigued and impressed by his writing for being on a forum. Maybe it was just the comparison of the other writings on the forum that made it stand out so much, maybe I did really find a well written essay, or maybe it was the fact that he quoted studies that two different professors and doctors performed. Whatever it is, he developed a good Ethos that kept me convinced that he had a point and knew what he was talking about. Out of the three, Pathos was his weakest, he made the writing almost too professional and there is not much that links to the emotional side of the reader. There are some instances where the writer attempts to get an emotional response out of non-video game violence, but nothing more than that. Logos is where this essay shines in my opinion. He backs up all of his main points with highly logical reasons. There are no empty statements that beg rebuttal, but lines that make the reader believe what they are reading. As for C.H.E.S.S., he covers great evidence, tells relevant and enlightening stories, as well as hypothetical solutions that allow for a much better understanding, yet there is a lack of statistics. Like I said, the essay isn't perfect but I felt it was worthy of this blog. Finally I selected these three sentences as the most persuasive. "Regulations will not prevent children from playing the games they want to." "Friendships can sometimes be developed through playing video games and ultimately keeping them away from drug usage and violent activities." "The news is filled with stories of war and murder, and nearly every movie contains some forms of violence. Plus, these two media are different from games in a very important way because they involve real people, not computer-generated characters." All three of these sentences provide great reasons for his argument that assist to reveal his points in a logical view.
Lien5
I have never been a great speller—now I understand why. English is full of mixed-matched pronunciations of different letters. The letter “i” can be pronounced as a long sound such as “I” or have a short sound as in “fish.” It can also sound like an “e” as in the word “spaghetti” and when joined with an “a” the “i” becomes silent, “rain.” As you were growing up, learning phonics, we learned the difference between consonants and vowels; vowels are “a,e,i,o,u…and sometimes y” and consonants are everything else. Why is the “y” only a sometimes vowel? Well, we were also taught that every word has to have a vowel. If “y” wasn’t a vowel, the word “fly” would not be considered a word! This project just allows me to spell a real word correctly! Can you guess what “tieogp” is? No? Isn’t it obvious? It’s the word “sheep.” If you take the “ti” from “nation,” it creates the “sh” sound. In “people” the “eo” makes a long “e” sound. The “g” is just a representation of the multiple silent letters in the English language like the word “gnome.”
http://academichelp.net/samples/essays/persuasive/surveillance.html
This writing uses the contradiction method in the first couple of lines explaining what the argument is for surveillance cameras to be considered good. It says that it does seem to lower the crime rates on the street but they are then neglecting the comfort of the non-lawbreakers; they used a statistic in the last line of the second paragraph stating that 23% Americans claim their privacy is violated because of the use of security cameras. After saying the Americans feels violated they go on to use the idea of children being subjected to the use of surveillance their whole lives. This will then give children the idea that the government invading privacy is a norm. By making this statement it will pull at the emotions of a parent or anyone who works with kids. The sentence where it does mention the children growing up in such a way is probably the most persuasive line to me. Also the use of statistics made for that line to be persuasive. A sentence that made me reread it was when it brought the idea that security cameras tend to surface negative feelings perhaps tugged at me some emotionally because I have observed how people react to just one “negative Nancy” in a large group and it will bring the entire vibe down. One thing that I think they could have done to increase the power of their essay would have been to offer up a alternate answer to reducing street and organized crime.
I've never realized how hard the English language is until I've taken a foreign and had it explained to me. Being able to meet people from different countries speaking English and have to explain something to you also helps. I've learned to appreciate the English as I've gone through the years of schooling, but every year I learn more and more. I find the English language porphekt.
Perfect.
the or from Taylor sounds like an er. The ph from phone makes the f sound. K and c can make the same sounds in numerous of English words.
http://www.teenink.com/hot_topics/what_matters/article/144175/The-Greatest-Struggle-Vacation-VS-Education/
This piece spark an interest in me. Not only did I not know that there was talk about having a year round school year, but that most kids were not in favor with it. The title caught my interest right way. The greatest Struggle. It hits home. There is a great struggle between school and vacations. The author found a study from thirty high school student and thirty college student and all sixty of them said they enjoyed the school schedule as is. Urbs2013, the author brings up a conveying point. Having school all year long would, honestly, be awful. Having school year round would affect many children and adults. Many high school students and college students do indeed have a busy summer. Between working and having summer internships there is no time for school year round. Teacher also have stated their input. They would not mind having school one the weekend, but their vacation time is their time. No one else's.
C.H.E.S.S
Urbs2013 brings up a great contradiction. School is important and maybe having it year round like other countries would raise the percentage of doctors and other higher paying jobs that would help with the economy, but summer is a time for relaxation and to desress. His hypothetical events are that, yes school year round would help with our economic status but would possibly end up hurting our professional futures.
The first sentence of his essay is very compelling.
Oh, the misguided, overexcited hand of government falls once again, this time on the overworked, glassy-eyes American high school student, who trudges through the school year, waiting for the moment when the fetid, festering pile of standardized tests that will determine their future can be graded, leaving them two months to recuperate before the year begins once again.
I love this sentence because it completely captures the American high school student. It makes the essay seems like a personal essay to me.
In the third paragraph he states "....how would high school students participate in one of the most worthwhile, inspiring and educational experiences presently available to them: The summer internship."
I enjoy this one too, because I hope someday I'll be able to have a summer internship that will help decided my future.
The very last sentence, "They all scream "No!!""
I was screaming no, the entire time I read this article.
Onnen 2
The English language is a language that I believe we are constantly learning new things about. It is a challenge for people, especially someone who is just learning the language, to remember all the rules our language contains. What makes the English language even more of a challenge is when a single letter can have so many different pronunciations. My example of this is the word "giraffe". A different way to spell this word but have it sound the same would be "joraph". Looking at this word you would never expect it to be "giraffe", but when phonetically sounded out they are indeed the same word. There are many examples of "J" and "G" making the same sound, and very commonly "ph" makes the same sound as an "F". I believe all of the strange spellings of words and different sounds of our letters are the reasons people have such a difficult time learning and remembering the English language.
http://www.writecook.com/upload/Persuasive%20Essay%20-%20the%20Process.pdf
This is essay is persuading teachers and administration to embrace cell phones in school, and see them and a useful tool not just a distraction. I believe one persuasive sentence would be "Thus, having a cell phone is like having a guardian angel." This writer gives many examples to support this, such as a student needing to call their parents when they are sick or if they ever experience a dangerous situation while at school. The second sentence I think is very persuasive would be "...cell phones - especially smart phones - are a fabulous learning experience. The writer backs this statement up by giving examples when a phone could benefit student. For example, using the phone for a calculator, map finder, or even a calendar to keep track of assignments. The final sentence I found to be persuasive would be "They[students] will become more independent in their work and more motivated to learn." The writer believes that if administrators give students the responsibility of using their phones properly in school the students will become more independent learners.
The author of this essay uses almost all of the C.H.E.S.S. strategies. They provide contradictions such as the fact that students will text while a teacher is teaching a lesson or use the phone to cheat during a test. The author then provides solutions to these problems. Teachers would be able to take the phone if a student was caught texting, and during tests or quizzes all phones would be brought to the teachers desk to prevent cheating. The evidence they provide would be all the beneficial ways a cell phone, specifically a smart phone could benefit students learning environments and also motivate students more. Stories about a teacher who did allow students to use their phones while doing research during a group projects was used to also provide evidence to why cell phones should be allowed in school. The only strategy that was missing in this essay was the statistics section. I'm not sure what kind of statistics the writer could have provided. They may have been able to find information on schools that have incorporated cells phones into there classrooms and see what the success rate was for those schools. I think this essay does a good job at persuading administrators and teachers into considering allowing students to use their phones as a learning tool in school.
Pruett, pd. 7
Despite having many complaints and dislikes about the English language and grammatical and phonetical difficulties, Americans should be greatful they are born with that as their native tongue. The English language possesses rules upon rules that make mastering the language extremely difficult to any trying to comprehend it. "Ghreambsc" is challenging for English speakers to understand, let alone those trying to learn our language. It translates to the word "frames." This demonstrates the true obstructions one would meet when trying to truly speak the English language.
http://www.customwritings.com/blog/sample-essays/persuasive-essay-abortion.html
This article sums up one of the largest controversies our nation faces. The author implements many aspects of logos, ethos, and pathos, as well as C.H.E.S.S. The author's feelings on abortion stem from many different fields and aspects. He implements religious, moral, and psychological reasons as to why abortion should never be condoned or carried out. The first sentence I chose depicted the religious wrong doings of abortion and is actually a verse from the Bible, First, Genesis 1:27: “God created man in his own image.” This point of view expresses how aborting an unborn child, despite the intention that it is "better for them," is wrong in the eyes of God. Despite his dissaproval of abortion, he still implements views from the pro-choice side, a method in C.H.E.S.S. that helps readers see all sides of a situation. "Due to the belief that an unborn fetus is an equal human being, many oppose abortion on the grounds that it is a brutal and inhumane form of murder." The author chooses to discuss the methods of abortion that are performed in the United States. He continues on to describe the brutality of the methods, like the Suction Aspiration. This operation dismembers a fetus, placing into a jar easily recognizable body parts like arms, legs, and even heads. This stirs intense emotions of extreme sadness and anger into the minds of pro-life Americans. This method implements "Pathos," creating passion and emotion amongst readers. “They think of it, even though they don’t always describe it this way, as a loss of fatherhood.” This sentence is describing the way husbands, boyfriends, and deprived fathers often feel at the loss of their childhood, and what could have been in their life. This also brings in "Pathos," especially amongst fathers. The thought of not having your child is crushing, and would devastate most people were it to actually come true. Overall, I found this essay incredibly knowledgable and mature. Despite talking about one of the most emotion inspiring issues in our nation, the author treats the other side with respect and care. He does not misconstrue them, and takes care to point out their reasoning in a proffessional manner. I have discovered many new techniques on how to write about something I disagree with because of this essay.
Kramer 2
I often find myself sitting in my Spanish language class trying to soak in all the different rules included within the language as well as the complicated exceptions. Others also say that the English language is very difficult to fully understand, those who speak English as a primary language cannot even explain some of the rules we use. Learning a second form of communication has helped me to really appreciate the art of language. The word I have built is “Ufatek” which is derived from the English word “Euphotic.” The U comes from the Eu where the E is silent. In many other words, as well as Euphotic, the Ph could always be mistaken for an F. With varying stresses on vowels an O can be replaced with an A, as well as an E for an I. Also, C’s and K’s often produce the same sounds.
http://www.teenink.com/hot_topics/health/article/257584/One-lo..
The article I chose is “One Love…One Less,” by Amy Elise. Elise discusses depression in its many forms and effects throughout the world. This article really stuck out to me because the author made it really hit home by having the passion of a first hand experience behind it without making it too graphic. She used multiple statistics to support her want to make depression known. Depression effects teens, adults, males and females. There may not always be outward evidence of depression, which many have grown to see with the past couple of years. Especially at Brandon Valley with Challenge Day becoming a regular event and even the passing of close loved ones; we have all grown more aware of what is below the surface. Elise was amazing at persuading her readers to look beyond the cover and to reach other to others in need. This would be an effective essay in general, but with the use of logos, ethos, and pathos Elise made her essay outstanding.
“As a whole, the human race disregards depression as a feeling that can be switched on and off,” serves as a good ellipsis and contradiction. Her evidence against the previous contradiction is shown when she states, “the lack of awareness we have of it [depression] leads to some of the most destructive forms of behavior in society.” In addition to the other two quotes, a third persuasive statistic would be when she included, “it [depression] is an illness that affects over 1.2 percent of the American population.” With the inclusion of these three, Elise helps to evolve her essay with the C.H.E.S.S strategy. Elise took an average, influential essay, to an impacting and long lasting essay.
Antrim 5
Never have I liked English. Not only for its grammar but mostly the spelling irritated me. Understanding how a certain group of letters make a sound that sounds nothing like it’s spelled, has hardly made sense to me. An example of this is psychic. The letter psy somehow makes a s sound, and ch makes a k sound. I don’t know if I will ever understand the English language.
Geporde (jeopardy)
http://youthvoices.net/discussion/persuasive-essay-abortion
When in reading a persuasive essay on abortion, I noticed myself agreeing with the author most of the time. The author stated, “I believe abortion is wrong when committing it for a selfish reason.” I agree with this statement. Abortion is wrong, when, and only when, you are doing it for a selfish reason. The author pulled on your heart strings when they said that there are many parents waiting for a baby they can adopt (using the pathos method, and also using statistics). A way they used the logos method was when they used science and physic to explain how abortion can not only hurt the child but also the mother. Abortion can lead to post-traumatic stress syndrome after going though the procedure. Also the author states that abortion can lead to physical injuries such as: failure to become pregnant in the future, sicknesses, and even death. On the author’s contradiction, they said that if abortion was mad illegal, many women and teenagers would participate in illegal abortion. This would cause more chance of harm to a mother or child. Therefore making it illegal would possibly change nothing in how many women and teenagers are aborting fetuses. Some of the things the author says sticks out. In the beginning of the essay the author says “I believe abortion is wrong when committing if for a selfish reason.” For a selfish reason sticks out to me, because sometimes you may love the child but feel that if you keep the child they may not have the best life you want them to. I know adoption is a way to solve this problem, but knowing that I am adopted has affected me in my life in more ways than one. I noticed how he repeats the fact that abortion can mess with your mind and cause failure to get pregnant in the future. All in all I agree with the authors view.
Zell7
1) Phuinde
2) The persuasive article that I chose is pulling for the return of the Lyme disease vaccine.
http://www.nytimes.com/2013/09/19/opinion/bring-back-the-lyme-vaccine.html?_r=0&adxnnl=1&ref=opinion&adxnnlx=1379641623-FVi4LNe/jy+CrnZrvVB1uw
The author, Stanley Plotkin, recalls his son suffering from Lyme disease. His child, Alec, was walking his dog through the neighborhood before dropping unconscious and having to be rushed to the emergency room. While his condition was able to be treated with a pacemaker and some serious antibiotics, the disease can progress far enough to cause devastatingly permanent muscle and nerve damage to the body. So is there a vaccine for this monstrosity? Well, more than likely your dog already has it. The vaccine exists for humans, but was taken of the market years ago. This article is urging medical corporations and the Center for Disease Control to once again start mass producing the serum. This article does a great job wielding logos, pathos, and ethos against the reader. I think the strongest of the three in this passage is pathos. Right off the bat, the author makes a reference to his son having the condition. Not only that, he portrays Alec as innocently walking his dog. He also references to the disease affecting helpless gardeners and hikers. Plotkin touches briefly on ethos as well. Even though he is a major consultant for some pharmaceutical companies, he points out the fact that he is not set up for any gains through this vaccine making another debut. This displays to the reader that he desires to stop Lyme disease, not acquire personal riches. The author also uses logos, or logic, in this persuasive writing. He is very factual. Plotkin goes through some of the symptoms of the disease, and talks about the failure of the first launch of the vaccine. The C.H.E.S.S. strategies have been employed too. He mentions the argument against the vaccine, and makes valid points against said argument. While he doesn’t give a hypothetical, a true story is given instead. This is arguably more powerful. The author gives us the evidence for how the vaccination works and why we should bring it back. Some statistics are given, but mainly just the numbers each year of people that contract Lyme disease. The three most persuasive sentences are: “In August 2005 my son Alec, then 39 years old, collapsed into unconsciousness while walking his dog in the suburbs of Philadelphia, In fact, we used to have one, and are perfectly capable of producing another, if the public demand is high and we avoid the mistakes of the past,” and “Until then, Americans can vaccinate their dogs against Lyme disease, but have no such option for themselves.” The first sentence is a classic example of using pathos by describing a personal story to advocate for the vaccine. The second sentence used logos, saying that it is very possible to us now, and almost even calling us naïve for having not reproduced it. The last of the sentences was actually the last sentence in the article. This was again a great job of calling America out on the fact that we are childish to not produce this vaccine for a disease so common. Overall, this is an interesting article that was expertly written to persuade all readers.
Rykhus 1
Xylophone : eksiloefoan
Language is a very power, useful tool. When used it eloquently it can manipulate people into doing anything. However, English can be quite frustrating at times, Even as I write this I struggle with spelling on some words. Some people appreciate physical art for something more than it is, I don’t; I place beauty in the art of logic. And there is nothing logical about the way that English spells many of its words. It is pointless for all of us to try to increase our vocabulary if we have to learn different spellings for words we thought we could spell. This is wasted memory, and I believe we only have so much usable storage in our brains, so you tell me, do you want the correct spelling of superficial memorized or would you rather have fond childhood memories, for all we know it could be one or the other.
http://opinionator.blogs.nytimes.com/2013/05/13/is-the-n-r-a-un-american/?ref=secondamendment
“The more militant members of the N.R.A. and most of its leaders may be un-American.” Hell of a way to start off a persuasive article. This is by far one of the most powerful sentences; it provides excellent passion and poses a hypothetical and a contradiction in a simple sentence. It states that these Americans that fight for freedom may be un-American.
“A transfer of power is orderly when it is effected by procedural rules that are indifferent to the partisan, ideological affiliations of either the party exiting power or the party taking power.” This sentence exhibits very smooth sentence structure and talks of something all true Americans would hope for, it shows a situation and its resolution and is quite declarative.
“In 1990, Fred Romero, an N.R.A. field representative, put the case as clearly as possible: ‘The Second Amendment is not there to protect the interests of hunters, sport shooters and casual plinkers.’ Rather, the ‘Second Amendment is … literally a loaded gun in the hands of the people held to the heads of government.”’ Wow, what a graphic image. Although not a chess word the graphic, raw, descriptive language is quite powerful.
“One side will cry “tyranny”; the other will reply, “You guys are crazy.” And both will claim the title of true American. That’s where we are.” This Quote is the last of the article and really sums the entire article. It shows great passion in the way that people are divided; they are pointing fingers at each other and saying the other does not belong. The author also quotes a very well-known blog and quotes from Richard Nixon and the leaders of the N.R.A. This exhibits good evidence and logic to the argument. These quotes were dropped quotes but fit quite naturally with the flow if this writing. This also shows the polish of this work, it flows well; the transitions were great and had a swell mirror hook at the conclusion. This is a topic that interests me but I see it as a enjoyable read for any self-aware American.
Rykhus 1
Anna Fruehwirth
pd. 7
1) wrued (rude)
2)
https://my.barackobama.com/page/content/hisownwords
I chose to write on Barack Obama's "A More Perfect Union" speech when he was running for president in 2008. It was a long speech, and I admit I began to skim after a while, but I thought it had some compelling points and good examples of ethos, pathos, and logos.
He used pathos particularly well. The first example he uses is his own background, mentioning that his father was from Kenya, his mother was a white woman from Kansas, and he was raised with help from white grandparents. At the end of the essay, he tells the story of Ashley, a girl whose mother was diagnosed with cancer when she was nine, lost her job and health insurance, and was forced to file from bankruptcy. Ashley then convinced her mother that all she wanted to eat was mustard and relish sandwiches because that was the cheapest way to eat. There are other stories scattered about the speech, and they all help to make you connect emotionally to his words.
I would say his tone and the word choice used in his speech establish his credibility, or ethos. Reading through the speech, I got the impression that he was knowledgeable on his subject and worth respecting. Of course, this could come from his aids that edited the draft, or simply the fact that he is a politician and quite literally convinces people for a reason.
Since this response is getting extremely wordy, I will simply say that he uses all the strategies extremely well and move on to the three most convincing sentences. In this case, it is more like a paragraph. They are only persuasive within the context of the speech, but even by themselves they evoke an emotional response. They come from Ashley's story:
"And Ashley said that when she was nine years old, her mother got cancer. And because she had to miss days of work, she was let go and lost her health care. They had to file for bankruptcy, and that's when Ashley decided that she had to do something to help her mom. She knew that food was one of their most expensive costs, and so Ashley convinced her mother that what she really liked and really wanted to eat more than anything else was mustard and relish sandwiches. Because that was the cheapest way to eat."
I thought this was effective because I instantly felt sorry for her. I've never known what it's like to be in her position, nor would I ever want to. However, I thought it was astonishing that a nine-year-old would be so selfless to help her mother. I think it's sad that people are becoming so engrossed in their own insignificant problems that they neglect to see the struggles around them and lend a hand.
The word, or rather, words, I came up with make a name that should be familiar to most: “Phoerriscthe Ghumbp”, which translates to “Forrest Gump.” Because of English’s extensive vocabulary—including innumerable unnecessary synonyms—our language seems bogged down. For instance, in my last sentence I could have replaced “extensive” with commodious, comprehensive, or voluminous, to name only three. Our eclectic vocabulary makes mastering our language superbly difficult, which explains why there are so few writers with considerable command of our language.
I found a fine piece of writing on a website called “Cracked.” Cracked is a website filled with articles, usually humorous, concerning nearly any topic imaginable. What makes Cracked so intriguing, though, is the format of its articles: almost every piece on Cracked is in a list format.
The article I chose is at (http://www.cracked.com/blog/the-7-dumbest-things-students-do-when-cramming-exams/) and is titled “The 7 Dumbest Things Students Do When Cramming for Exams.” What drew me in to this article, ironically, is my upcoming Calculus II exam tomorrow. After finishing this blog task, I’m going to stay up later than I should attempting to comprehend what I need to know for tomorrow; this article seemed perfect, since I learned about what not to do while studying while doing required reading for Composition.
The author, Luke McKinney, displays logos, ethos, and pathos excellently. His writing is clear, biting, and hilarious. There isn’t a single ambiguous sentence—everything he says, he means to say, and vice versa. If confusion arises, the reader is to blame. Every claim McKinney makes, he backs up with substantial, indisputable facts. As for ethos, McKinney is undoubtedly an expert on what he writes about; though he writes columns for a rarely serious website, he holds three physics degrees. This means that, in his own words, he has “undergone more examinations than Moon rocks.” It isn’t an overstatement in saying that he knows what he is talking about. Last, McKinney’s writing is emotionally appealing because of his energetic, comical style. He does an excellent job of relating to his audience, often through using hypothetical situations that pertain to, surprisingly, nearly everyone.
Three sentences that are especially effective are as follows:
1. “Some students spend longer trying to reach the perfect setup than Buddhist Monks spend trying to reach Nirvana, and with less tangible results.”
2. “There is no way to say this without sounding patronizing: If you're preparing to do an exam, prepare by doing exams.”
3. “You get good at things by doing them as many times as possible.”
The first sentence is describing the “nest” a student creates before studying, that often is totally useless. The comparison is a much-appreciated bit of humor. The second and third sentences show an understanding of talent that is simple and often overlooked. Talent, to me, seems to be the ability to work really, really hard. Excellent students who seem to have natural talent at school are almost always the students who have spent the most time studying their material.
Knudtson 7
“Oracle”
The English language is very interesting. It has so many different semi-random rules that change the way a word is pronounced. For example, take Oracle, by the way the words dough, aura, and clothes are pronounced you can say this same word by spelling it Oughuracl. The ough from dough, the ura from aura, and the cl from clothes. Many Americans believe that the most difficult language to learn is Chinese, but this is only the case because we are native speakers of this language. If we were born elsewhere, English would probably prove most challenging.
http://www.studymode.com/essays/No-Abortion-Pro-Life-580430.html
In this wonderful persuasive writing essay, crayonz1234 states how Abortion is wrong. In this case (and basically all) I agree with him. This essay is very persuasive in the fact that all of it is passionate. For one to battle for the lives of other you need courage or instead you would back down and let others tramp over them. In this situation the unborn, yet living babies, are being murdered. In this writing crayonz1234 uses the comparison of Abortion to many other terrible crimes, “Murder, killing, manslaughter. If you see these words, it is mostly followed by the name of the killer, who they killed, how and the sentence they have received. Abortion is not printed on a newspaper or watched on television but in fact abortion is killing. An embryo or fetus is a living human that has not been able to live or speak for itself. They feel pain just as you or I do, who are we to take away life?.” This is very powerful start to a very powerfully persuasive essay. This topic is very sensitive to people as they both have strong points to back them up, though this essay proves through logic how Pro-Life is the way society should be. Some people may say that rape is a reason that an abortion should be legal, though in this essay it is stated that this pregnant woman did not wish to have a baby at this time and definitely not with the person who commited this crime. But who is this woman, to be able to kill her baby, why does her baby have to die for the crimes of the rapist? Crayonz1234 uses descriptive, pushing details that should stop this as it kills the unborn child, and possibly the mother of this child. With all of crayonz1234’s writing I could say that I learned about and was persuaded to a new level of Pro-Life!
It is amazing how much you can get away with in the English language. It is so simple to create things and coin terms that would normally be frowned upon. One such example is creating a word with phonetic disorder. some examples of this example are phatiun, gnowt, ghakn, geesous.
The reading I found to analyze is actually a discussion forum about the advantages of synth keyboards and computer programs that simulate these devices. I chose the format of a forum because only in a debate of personal interests does a persons true passion for a subject show. The first post reveals the problem. This person has a preference for real synths over computer programs because synthesizers in his opinion create a better sound. The writer reveals he has been in the music scene which is plenty of reason to see that this is coming from an ethical viewpoint through many advances in technology and believes that these improvements do not in reality enhance, as his inferiors would like to believe. He shows his passion for this by stating his loyalty to what the majority of people believe to be an outdated art. He also uses his logic of both sides to prove valid points about why one is better. Two arguments were made well against each other in this discussion. The defendant of real synths stated that the use of a tangible piece of equipment was more closely connected to the user’s intentions while a computer program would require excessive fiddling. As for the computer program’s defense, synthesizers are not able to create quite as many sounds as the software can since it can be updated often. In my opinion the discussion is resolved when it is stated that the advantages of both technologies can be utilized to create a sound that incorporates different factors.
Jackson 5
keeborde: Keyboard
I remember investing large amounts of time studying for spelling tests all the way up to freshman or sophomore year when they decided to take spelling out of the English curriculum, and always thought how it seemed like a waste of time because is on every device out there. Putting myself in at a view of a person that is learning English as a second language i could see how frustrating it would be to have so many words that sound the same but are spelled differently and having silent letters to deal with.
http://www.essayforum.com/writing-feedback-3/children-today-spend-too-much-time-watching-tv-anhtrung-28039/
This essay is on watching too much television. I like this essay because it has a lot of good points and chess strategies, however it does have a moderate amount of grammatical errors. The message is very clear in the thesis, and grabs your attention by asking multiple questions to make you think before continuing on into the body paragraphs to figure out the answers to them. There is good use of logos this essay as many of the key points are persuaded with logic of watching too much television makes you lazy and lazy makes you unhealthy. The writer also uses pathos when writing about her 5 year old niece who is left alone to watch T.V. and is most likely experiencing these nasty effects. The author uses the another point that staring at a screen for hours on end could cause some negative vision impairments. Her niece after nothing but T.V. to entertain her for months is now almost obligated to wear bulky glasses for the rest of her life to fix this imparity. The essay is summed up nicely has it tells what the reader should do in order to help themselves or others and shows some upsides to television if not overused and for the right reason. I feel this writer had a good understanding of how to use the C.H.E.S.S. tactics in writing as he or she had the hypothetical problems with t.v. at the beginning and gave a solution to them at the end, and he or she had evidence from her story with her niece that these problems are happening. The last three sentences of the essay are the most persuasive due to how the author sums up all his or her points nicely and gives the final solution to the problem.
Oddy 1
I decided to use my last name as an example of how the English language could be construed to make confusing looking words. "eauxdee" would be a rather confusing substitute for "Oddy" in most people's eyes. I find this interesting because, especially for Proper Nouns, people can use very creative spellings to create words.
I chose the article http://douthat.blogs.nytimes.com/2013/09/18/the-hero-of-breaking-bad/ I found this interesting article on a show that I find myself watching quite often, "Breaking Bad". I found this article rather interesting because of it's different perspective on the show and it's characters. The author of this piece of writing (Ross Douthat) does an excellent job of expressing all aspects require of a persuasive essay. He backs up his opinions, mainly about which characters in the show fit which roles, with reasonable examples and proof. Explanations of the author's views are rampant in his article, making his writing much more believable and understandable. He also appeals emotionally to the reader by reiterating very strong emotional events from the show and using them as his examples. "Breaking Bad", being the show at question, is very extreme and at most times appeals to the watchers emotionally due to this fact making it a rather easy subject to persuade about and making the potential readers rather easy to appeal to emotionally. Rather than picking three sentences, I picked 5 sentences that make up a paragraph, but a rather strong one in my opinion.
"Throughout the run of the show, we’ve waited for Walt’s sins to be brought home to him, and viewers have reasonably assumed that this would involve a death within the family that he’s convinced himself justifies all his crimes. They were right: He was undone by such a death. But the fact that the family member wasn’t his wife or one of his children but rather his fraternal antagonist highlights rather than diminishes Hank’s importance in the schematics of “Breaking Bad.” What undoes Walter White is more dramatically elemental, in a way, than even the death of his infant daughter would have been. His world collapses, inevitably and absolutely, when he kills the hero of his own story."
I chose this paragraph because it specifically talks about the viewers and appeals to them emotionally with Hank's death, explains the author's purpose of highlighting Hank as a major character in the show, and explains the effects of what happened to Hank. This paragraph was very well written in my opinion due to all of these aspects.
Klein1
Oh, what a "ceet"! Unfortunatly the english language has confused so many, making the word "ceet" actually the work "say". The 'ce' being the "s" sound, like in the word celery. While the "et" is the "ay" sound like in the word "fillet".
http://eslbee.com/why_women_should_not_have_an_abortion.htm
The persuasive writing I found online was created by a student on the topic of abortion and why women should choose to not have one. She does not discuss any possible contradictions to her point of view, but instead stresses the main point. She uses hypothetical situations by discussing the possibilities a woman might have and her reasoning behind having an abortion. The evidence she has for her topic is that she has done research and has considered possible reasons for a woman to abort her child. The writter chose not to place in any staistics but in place put various important reasons for defending her topic. The most persuasive sentences of her essay are as follows. "Women need to think about their unborn babies who are not responsible for this situation." "When a woman has an abortion, she will always think about the baby she might have had." "The truth is that women need to think about the consequences that can occur before having sexual relations." These sentences are the most persuasive because they are the most emotional and stinging of the entire essay. Those three points stress the issues that she believes there are with having an abortion. Her essay is very pulling and thought provoking to any reader.
AJ Garrow
I created the word “phootbaughll” from some silent letters with a little Greek twist in the “ph.” The English language is one of the hardest languages in the world. Our language has little parts of a lot of languages to shape its own.
http://www.studymode.com/essays/Persuasive-Essay-Paying-College-Athletes-126886.html
I chose this essay because I understand where this is coming from. The essay is very persuasive from the stand point of all athletes and statistical reasoning to back up as well. The writer mainly uses more of the logos appeal because of the easier reasoning of persuading the reader. I did not get to read the whole essay due to the registering process but I have read similar essays. In these essays you don’t feel a lot of emotional peal; unless, this is an essay written by former college athletes then it could be emotional because the player would know how it feels to be in the situation that he is in. The author sympathizes for the player not being able to be paid can be somewhat a part of pathos. The character of the author can sell it to you by his knowledge for sports which be a great tool for a writer because if you sound like you know what you are talking about then you will sound more credible to what you are talking about resulting in a better written paper/essay. This is why I have learned the hard way, to definitely write about stuff you somewhat know about or research hard on something you do not know much about. In my Dreams and Nightmares essay, I needed to research more on the topics because I believe I left certain things short because I did not know what to write about. The logos, ethos, pathos will indeed help the essay because it entices the reader into believing you and in time choose your side.
Schultz 5
The English language is confusing yet interesting. It is confusing because there are so many different rules and thoughts that we need to follow. These rules can change words and mix up the letters and sounds. It can be appealing and entertaining when you are able to comprehend the rules. I came up with the word “Chaylin” or my name Shealynn. This is one of the interesting things you can do with the English language, its spelt totally different but said the same way.
This link brings you to a persuasive writing dealing with the dangers of drinking and driving. The author immediately draws me in using pathos due to the fact that I myself have had a family member involved with drinking and driving. Baylee H. talks about her own sister being killed in a drinking and driving accident. You never know where the next accident will occur. The second author, Hanson, is clearly credible due to the fact that he himself used to be heavily involved in drinking and driving. He knows the dangers and the consequences that come of it.
"It’s difficult not to drink when you’re a teen, you have pain, depression, want to fit in with the popular, that was my problem." This sentence also had an impact on me. High school and peer pressure go hand in hand. It is important we all resist. Why do people put those that drink and party on a pedestal? Especially, considering it is dangerous, and not to mention illegal at this age. "...just use your brain and think not your liver to drink." I thought this sentence was a clever way to end his writing. I love how it rhymes, it almost sticks in your head like a song would. It's a great reminder to refrain from drinking and driving.
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